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Review of chapter "Vampires and Demons 101" from spacey
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go cordy!
Review By [spacey] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vampires and Demons 101" from WhiteWolf
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Like is so far. I think Cordy has staked (or shot with a crossbow) more than one vampire in high school or do you think most she only assist in staking those vampires.

Nice catch on the post-traumatic thing, but I think you've overdone it a little, but nevertheless it is still believable.

So Cordy isn't going to show up in uniform in front of the Scoobies. I want to see their reaction on how well Cordy wears it. Oh, you can make one of the Scoobies (Xander) give as a condition for their cooperation that Cordy has to wear her uniform in front of them at least once. *grin*

Keep on writing.

P.S. hope you didn't forget Riley. Although he isn't my favourite character, I think it would be poor writing to simple leave him out. If you don't want to write about him, you can simply still have him in 'debriefing'. And you have to explain why they hadn't made him the Scoobies' liaison. Main reason could be trust issues and him burning bridges with the military.
Comments from author:
As far as I can remember, Cordelia only dusted a one vampire single-handed before leaving Buffy and certainly never shot one with a crossbow.

Cordy might show up in uniform in front of the Scoobies, but only once. I'm not forgetting Riley, but he certainly isn't going to be the liaison, for both the reasons you mention. As far as the post-traumatic episode is concerned, I'm not sure it was overdone. People suffer far worse from single instances of trauma (train crashes etc), but each of the Scoobies (and half the student population of Sunnydale High) was surrounded by death and destruction for several years.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vampires and Demons 101" from DHX
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yes definetly enjoying this. can't wait for the next chapter
Review By [DHX] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vampires and Demons 101" from TurquoiseGirl
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Give 'em hell, Cordy! Ugh, Samantha Carter...so scientifically minded. Until your next update.
Review By [TurquoiseGirl] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from shawnie
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This truly is an excellent start and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Review By [shawnie] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from Wolflady
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Oh, this is going to be good! Write faster!
Review By [Wolflady] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from tosca
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Excellent start! Can't wait to see the meeting between the two groups (and Cordy kicking Anya's butt!)
Review By [tosca] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from TurquoiseGirl
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Go Cordelia! You totally have me psyched to read this. Great start!
Review By [TurquoiseGirl] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from amusewithaview
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Love, love, LOVE!

Military!Cordelia? AWESOME!
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from zafaran
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More, more, more, please. This has the potential to be a seriously interesting story, and I can't wait to find out what happens next. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Review By [zafaran] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from WingL
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Thank you for continuing to write about Cordelia in the Army. I look forward to more when ready. Thank you.
Review By [WingL] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from TaraLi
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Damn good start here! I can't wait to see what Cordy ends up having to do.I hope Cordy has the sense to tell them *NOT* to show up wearing uniforms to start with. Or maybe uniforms would be a good thing - to prove they're not coming in in a covert manner.
Comments from author:
I'm thinking uniforms for the first encounter, just to prove that they're in Sunnydale openly, with a move to plain clothes afterwards. Besides, Cordy in a uniform will give the Scoobies something to make fun of...
Review By [TaraLi] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from PATM
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I really did not expect such a quick and lengthy chapter developing a really cool idea. I was not disappointed either.
This is a very entertaining continuation starring a cast of characters and that includes the unknown guest stars.
Cordy always rocked my expectations in the series and she does it here too. I'm imagining her lean green and
mean parachuting assets with a gun. Awesome. I'm not forgetting the cover tilted rakishly over one
perfect eyebrow either.
Review By [PATM] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from CPTSkip
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Well done, sir! I thought your Cordy came across as quite believable and true to her canon character. I really, really look forward to seeing her being pointman for the recon mission. And her reconnection to the Scoobies is probably going to be epic! Lol! I hope Cordy wears her Class A uniform at some time as Xander's Helloween memories should let him recognize her jump wings and may just impress him enough to put him on her side of the military/Scooby wars. I look forward to reading much more of this unique crossover.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from (Moderator)Ava
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This is cute and shows definite potential, but there’s absolutely no way Cordelia would have been promoted to Sergeant. It stretched for me to think of her as a Corporal because she has had too little ‘time in grade’ to have had those promotions. She’d more the likely be a Private First Class and her promotion would have been to Specialist. Whether someone is an exceptional soldier or not they have to spend a certain amount of time in each grade.
Comments from author:
Thanks for this - I stretched writer's licence a tad on the rank thing. Basically, I just wanted to give the character a little authority within the greater military pantheon. There certainly won't be any more premature promotions in the story.
Review By [(Moderator)Ava] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
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