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Review of chapter "The Assignment" from TurquoiseGirl
Review:
Go Cordelia! You totally have me psyched to read this. Great start!
Review By [TurquoiseGirl] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from amusewithaview
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Love, love, LOVE!

Military!Cordelia? AWESOME!
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from zafaran
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More, more, more, please. This has the potential to be a seriously interesting story, and I can't wait to find out what happens next. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Review By [zafaran] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from WingL
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Thank you for continuing to write about Cordelia in the Army. I look forward to more when ready. Thank you.
Review By [WingL] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from TaraLi
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Damn good start here! I can't wait to see what Cordy ends up having to do.I hope Cordy has the sense to tell them *NOT* to show up wearing uniforms to start with. Or maybe uniforms would be a good thing - to prove they're not coming in in a covert manner.
Comments from author:
I'm thinking uniforms for the first encounter, just to prove that they're in Sunnydale openly, with a move to plain clothes afterwards. Besides, Cordy in a uniform will give the Scoobies something to make fun of...
Review By [TaraLi] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from PATM
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I really did not expect such a quick and lengthy chapter developing a really cool idea. I was not disappointed either.
This is a very entertaining continuation starring a cast of characters and that includes the unknown guest stars.
Cordy always rocked my expectations in the series and she does it here too. I'm imagining her lean green and
mean parachuting assets with a gun. Awesome. I'm not forgetting the cover tilted rakishly over one
perfect eyebrow either.
Review By [PATM] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from CPTSkip
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Well done, sir! I thought your Cordy came across as quite believable and true to her canon character. I really, really look forward to seeing her being pointman for the recon mission. And her reconnection to the Scoobies is probably going to be epic! Lol! I hope Cordy wears her Class A uniform at some time as Xander's Helloween memories should let him recognize her jump wings and may just impress him enough to put him on her side of the military/Scooby wars. I look forward to reading much more of this unique crossover.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from (Moderator)Ava
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This is cute and shows definite potential, but there’s absolutely no way Cordelia would have been promoted to Sergeant. It stretched for me to think of her as a Corporal because she has had too little ‘time in grade’ to have had those promotions. She’d more the likely be a Private First Class and her promotion would have been to Specialist. Whether someone is an exceptional soldier or not they have to spend a certain amount of time in each grade.
Comments from author:
Thanks for this - I stretched writer's licence a tad on the rank thing. Basically, I just wanted to give the character a little authority within the greater military pantheon. There certainly won't be any more premature promotions in the story.
Review By [(Moderator)Ava] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from Unseentraveler
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Wow great work so far I can't wait to see where you go from here :-)
Review By [Unseentraveler] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from RocksandGlass
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This is good so far, well written and a very interesting and, as far as I know, unique take on Cordy after Sunnydale. Looking forward to more.
Review By [RocksandGlass] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from (Recent Donor)ElessarNett
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Excellent, I applaud your characterization of Cordelia and the concept of the story. As long as you don't do any (or, at least, too much) scooby-bashing, I can't wait for your continuing story.
Comments from author:
No "scooby-bashing" just for the sake of it - I like the BtVS characters too much. There might be some full and frank discussion of Buffy's character from Cordelia's POV, but the Slayer will certainly give as good as she gets. Remember, the two groups will have to work together. 40% casualties amongst the original Initiative commandos (with full training in the demon threat) means that even elite units would be in considerable danger down in the caves.
Review By [(Recent Donor)ElessarNett] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from SarahLou
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Brilliant! Great story, especially Cordy's little rant! Can't wait to see the scoobies reaction to her being in the military, should be good!

Sarah x
Review By [SarahLou] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from Greywizard
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Glad to see that you're continuing this, and you've made a great start with this chapter!

Really looking forward to seeing the interaction between a noticeably irritated Scooby Gang and the SOCOM investigating group, led by the inestimable Cordelia Chase.

I think that she and Jack are going to get along famously, once she gets used to his Xander-like humor, and I really can't wait to see and hear the Gang critiquing Cordy's new wardrobe once the investigators show up in town. ;-)

And I can't wait to hear the Cordy-Anya snark-fest once the two of them meet. ;-)
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from SFBKludge
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*Ding*Ding*

In this corner she's short (glare) uhm Vertically challenged Buffy Summers!!!

In the other corner wearing khaki is the drop dead gorgeous Queen C!!!

Oh boy I can't wait. (rubs hands together.)

One thing that could be brought up about the promotion that could give Cordy problems in the future. You actually flagged it yourself. She is VERY good looking. But getting out of boot and all the way to Sgt. in a year is very unusual. Some might think that she'd traded *favors* for promotion. With her reason being highly classified Cordy will have a big potential albatross hanging from her neck for the rest of her career.

This could be used to pressure her into staying (probably what you intend already) with SOCOM. Where her experience and dedication will outweigh the funny aspects of her rapid rise in the ranks. Something else Jack will probably point out to her like he gave her the out even though it wasn't really brought to her attention during the briefing.
Comments from author:
Cordelia might return to her unit for a while, just to gain experience, but in future it's likely she'll be engaged in covert activities - perhaps on attachment to SG-1, maybe helping rescue Riley Finn's (yet-to-be-formed) demon hunting group from trouble. I haven't decided which (if either) yet, but special operations are definitely Cordy's future.
Review By [SFBKludge] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Assignment" from batzulger
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Airborne all the way Sergeant Chase!
So Cordy was with 313th MI huh? I was in B Co 1/325 as a plain old grunt.

Great so far, looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [batzulger] • Date [30 Jul 09] • Not Rated
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