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Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from kaleecat
Review:
Thrilled to see more of this story. If anyone at sgc can get their head around demons existing it's Daniel, now Jack is a completely different matter. And why do I feel like willful willow is going to try something?
Comments from author:
*innocent look* Willow and Buffy ignore Giles and willfully go their own way? *snickers* Yep Daniel is having a challenge trying to wrap his mind around the idea of demons and other things that go bump in the night, but he's open minded enough to accept it if enough proof is offered. So we'll see what happens next, if the muses cooperate.
Review By [kaleecat] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
I kept trying to figure whether or not to add more to it, but since the muse is stuck, that's what you folks got. Glad you liked it though.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from LadyVirgo
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Willow going behind Giles back to try and heal Xander. Anya going to Sunnydale to stop her. While all of this is going on Daniel finds out about Justice Demons and Xander makes his wish and wakes up. I hope this helps wake up your muse and great story.
Comments from author:
Hmmm well Anya is still in Sunnyhell, since according to canon she went to Prom with Xander.... Yep Daniel is learning more about the weird stuff, since Hallie is trying to fill him in without overstepping the limits D'Hoffryn laid down. Hmmmm yep I could see Willow trying that or something more foolish, got to see what happens as the muses are very quiet, then again they pop up when you least expect them. Glad you like it so far.
Review By [LadyVirgo] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from AlecMcDowell
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Ah, Hallie really is a wild card to what can happen with Xander now... he could end up wishing himself only healed or he could accidently change it so he was always with Daniel! Looking forward to where you go next, hope you can update soon
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from ora
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So glad you revisited this. An exciting cliffhanger indeed.
Comments from author:
Yep, I just couldn't get any further on this chapter, so I figured I'll post what I have and see if the muses respond to feedback . Have to admit it's taken a few surprise twists on me so far.
Review By [ora] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from kayron
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Daniel is highly intelligent, but he has an open mind. He is not hardwired to be science minded like Sam. This is why he was even able to conceptualize aliens bringing the pyramids to ancient Egypt. If he is presented with the proper information, like the book, he is able to at least give an idea a chance. He isn't the type of person who would fall into the SunnyDale Syndrome mindset. If he can accept Hallie, he should be able to handle finding out about Xander's life. I hope that Xander can form his wish correctly. I would hate to see the First or the PTB use a loophole to ruin things or kill Xander.
Comments from author:
Good point with The First and also the Pains that Be . Not sure if it will be Xander or someone else who makes the wish first.... after all Hallie is dropping some clues for Daniel....gotta see if he picks up on what he's offered.

Hmmmm wonder what my Jack muse will make of it all
Review By [kayron] • Date [25 Jun 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from oldgirllost
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Good story---
I don't know why anyone would want to transfer Xander to L.A. County General. I was taken there after a car accident in 1989. The ER is a great place for a doctor to get gunshot wound experience. In fact I heard that the military likes to send their Medical people there to get experience in gun wounds. The gurneys were packed so close that they had to be moved for the doctors to get to the patients (it was a Sunday night) there were a lot of patients and most were gunshot wounds. The medical care in the ER and ICU was excellent, but the facility is old, crowded and cuts cost by cutting back on cleaning staff. Maybe your Diagnosis Murder people work out of there I don't watch the show. In real life send him to UCLA which is also a first class teaching facility and is less likely to give the feeling that a creepy secondary infection is a whisper away.

Good story

More please
Comments from author:
I'm working on another chapter at the moment, amongst many other projects. The sole reason for the transfer to LA County General is a secondary cross with Diagnosis Murder which is set in that location.
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [18 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)severuswinchester
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I really like the beginning of this story and the idea of Daniel being Xander's father. I am looking forward to reading what you've added to it and am quite glad that you continued it after the first chapter.
Review By [(Past Donor)severuswinchester] • Date [15 May 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
Doc Sloan! I loves Doc Sloan!
Comments from author:
*grins* Well LA is fairly close to Sunnydale and the obvious place to send a seriously injured/hurt Xander for medical care as Sunnydale General obviously isn't about to provide proper care . Plus I do love Diagnosis Murder, and Steve/Jesse so it's a perfect way to expand the fic... I do have a few other fics that cross Buffy with Diagnosis Murder but they're no where near complete enough to share yet, or even beta-read.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [4 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from katfairy
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I've been reading this one for a while, and while I am enjoying it, there is one aspect about it that bugs me- Daniel, who grew up getting bounced from foster family to foster family, is going to just tear Xander away from all of his friends without waiting to see what he wants? It would have been just as easy to have the military take over the hospital or at least Xander's care until the proper authorities could deal with the issues. Instead, he's doing to Xander exactly what he hated being done to him.
Comments from author:
That's a good point, but keep in mind Xander's in a coma so Daniel's foremost concern is to get his son the best care possible. Yes he's technically yanking Xander away, but he's still in a coma at the moment.

Now from LA to Sunnydale it's a relatively close distance and the girls and Giles can still check up on him.

Plus with the crime stats of Sunnydale, well would you want to be in a coma in a hospital there?

But yeah, there will be some interesting issues for Daniel, Jack and Xander to overcome. I have a few vague ideas there yet, but since Xander is still underage as someone else mentioned about he's very much Daniel's responsibility. Plus I can't see Hammond moving in to take things over in the Sunnydale.... just yet. Later on, yes. For now, there's not enough to justify such an action. He's waiting and watching . Plus Jack is going to be plotting and getting info from other sources to add to the pile and 'encourage' Hammond to act.
Review By [katfairy] • Date [3 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Thanks for continuing.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [3 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Need more details on Xander's age. 18 is an adult when it comes to adoptions/fostering, although young adults can elect to stay in the system until they are 21. Web sites do not have "gh" in them as they have to do with location and not vision. You are is You're, not Your.
Enjoying the story problem and character voices overall.
Comments from author:
Right now, Xander is still under 18. Graduating High School doesn't mean you are automatically age 18, you could be a few months away which I'm saying Xander is. So Danny is technically going to be the legal guardian/parent.

As for the rest, I'm going to double check as I did have a beta reader go over it and didn't check a second time, which I should have.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [3 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from purrfus
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Nice flow and detail. Can't wait to see which side pounces first.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [3 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from silvergaurd
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great new chapter. Can't wait to see more.
Review By [silvergaurd] • Date [3 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from lothlorien
Review:
i like it. can't wait till xander wakes up. please post the next chapter soon
Comments from author:
I've only got the vaguest outlines to the next chapter done, but I'll try and push it along. I figure a few more chapters then a leap forward in time for when Xander wakes up. Plus just a very evil side thought for readers *smirks* Think about how much Daniel and especially Jack 'love' groups like NID.... and since the Initiative is going to be cropping up shortly....*smirks*
Review By [lothlorien] • Date [3 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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