Great new chapter, thanks.

Thanks! I am working on more. Shouldn't be too long for an update.

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Well done ... An interesting twist with the Potter/Snape relationship. Too bad you couldn't have Snape "screw up" a little with regard to the memory charms .. LOL! Anyway, I look forward to reading more.

Thanks! I am glad you like it. As for Snape and his memory charms...you'll see what happens soon.

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Dumbles is a bastard!
I like how Snape is working around him though.

More please!

I have never liked Dumbles.

But I am glad you are liking it. Ch. 2 is about 1/2 done, so I should have it soon.

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Nice, very nice! 'all these wizarding advancements and they'd never heard of the telephone?' ROFLMAO! I have often thought myself that it's a little bizarre that they continue to use birds as a primary source of communication when even carrier pigeons went out of style some time ago, lol.

I really like this Snape, he can still act like the ass we all know and love, but we all know better now. Will the distant, future, slash pairing be Snarry?

I love Snape. Moreover, I love writing snarky bastards. I am happy you are liking the story so far. I have gotten a good feedback and it has inspired some more writing I have 1500 words so far for ch. 2.
I also have one scene in Kallisti written as well. I am feeling oh so productive.

Ok, I love Snarry, which is why it is still a far flung possibility for Kallisti. (It would take some creativity, let me tell you) But for this, I am unsure...Snape mentor/father figure/lover fics are very difficult to write without getting flamed. I am not closing the door on it, but some other possibilites are Harry/Alive!Cedric, H/Draco, H/L. Malfoy, H/Voldieshorts. (Never say that I don't aim high.) Possible alternatives- Harry with with the twins(both), or Bill or Charlie.

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Interesting so far, but Dumbles is far too obvious... although... it is the wizarding world. They miss most everything.

"although... it is the wizarding world. They miss most everything."

That is pretty much the real premise of the story. I have a little bit of satire going on. It is sort of like, what sort of havoc could a person with common sense cause?

In my story? a lot.

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Wow, this is really good. I like how you mix Harry's adultish perspective (realizing he has power because of his scar and the power in money) with his childlike hope (trusting the Hat and telling his dormmates). I can't wait to read more, though are you still going to have Ron and Hermione befriend Harry? I think Ron would stick to stereotype and ignore him, but Hermione is pretty bright, plus I just like her. I can't wait to read and watch Harry mature (is he going to be a White Hat or more Grey?)

RHR

First let me say thanks.

I have to admit that I based Harry's perspective on what my perspective was at that age. I began my first novel when I was 12, and when I go back to read it, it is often interesting to see just how worldly I was back then. I think people forget just how smart pre-teens are.

Ron and Hermione are maybes. I honestly have no plans other than where I want it to end. I will probably just write whatever comes into my head on any given day and go with. What is the point of writing fanfiction if you can't just play with it?

Harry is going to be very gray, I don't believe in purely good or evil people.

The hat conversation was informative and entertaining to read. Hufflepuff Harry. Underutilized and underestimated. The dorm sequence was fun. I'm looking forward to getting to know more about these characters.

I have always disliked Dumbledore, and enjoy stories that bring out the worst of him. I particularly enjoy stories were he is intelligently manipulative and or self center versus merely obsessed with his own vision of reality.

How many mind-wipes or changes can take place before the brain starts to turn to mush?

That said the only piece that doesn't fit as well is his "they used the floo". He has dealt with enough muggle born students to know they don't have them. I realize he can't claim that they do have one because its easily checked, so the auror's response is on target. Its not a biggie but it does standout from the rest of the story.

The floo question could have been handled better, but I think I can go in and fix it pretty easily when I go update. I will say that I will take some far flung liberties with this fic. This fic I am writing just for fun when I need a break from my other fics which are very detailed and are as close as possible to their original canons. A third of the time needed to write a chapter in the neverwhere verse is dedicated to research. This HP fic needed 10 minutes of research for the names of Harry's dorm mates, and for the description of the Hufflepuff dorms and then I was set.

I like evil!Dumbledore, and powerful harry fics. I am glad you feel the same.

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I have lost count on how many times I have said this now but here it is again:
Once again you show me the reason why you are my #1 favorite fanfic author.

Please keep the chapters for this one coming because this site really lack good
Dark!Harry slash fics.

Oh my goodness, I am complimented beyond belief. I have gotten a lot of good feedback from this story so far, so it will be continued. I will probably try alternating chapters with Kallisti. I have gotten to a point at work where I have a bit more time for writing. I love my Dark Harry slash as well.

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Well, I like this a lot so far. Try to avoid the man-boy love thing, and I'll go along with the slash.

No, the slash is far far away. I just wanted to let people know up front that that is what it will be later on.

I am glad you like it, I will try to get up another chapter soon.

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Very interesting!

Thanks!

Very interesting start with a lot of possibilities. Some of the events are a bit rushed (i.e., the boys in the dorm) & lack a little detail so that it reads a bit like "this happens, then this happens" and the flavor of the characters & Harry's emotions get a bit lost. I would expect a bit more trepidation, that it would be a bit more difficult to tell the truth especially since no one has ever believed him before--he really knows nothing about the wizarding world so the idea of memories being modified should freak him out. As it is, while I get what he is doing, I don't 'feel' it. Hmmm, maybe because you wanted it in one chapter?

Don't get me wrong, I'm looking forward to seeing where this might go next. I also like the idea of a Hufflepuff Harry, I don't think I've read him in that House. You know, one of the things I never got about HP is that Harry never tries to find out more about the wizarding world, never asks about "orientation" materials or classes. (yes, i know this gives fanfic a great opportunity but really JKR took the keep Harry dumb thing too far).

You raise good points. And it was rushed deliberately. I will be honest and say that I have read so many different takes on the first trip to diagon alley and the sorting that I can't stand them. There will be a much greater breakdown of things from now on.

I debated on which house to put Harry in, then I went with the most useful. Hufflepuffs seem so underestimated--I can do so much with them. As for how JKR handled how Harry entered the world...there were so many unanswered questions and there was just a general lack of common sense on everyone's part. I think I just want to write a story where someone has the brains to ask questions and get results.

Thanks for your review, I enjoy long reviews greatly. You will have to keep me posted abount what you think. Feedback like this helps me develop my writing.

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Great writing on an engaging story, that I almost didn't read because of the slash warning.

well, the slash, if there is much of it, is very far away. I just put things like that up front because I know people will get mad later if I happen to add it in without warning. The truth is, I can't write het in the HP fandom at all, so I was just up front about it. I promise to give warning if a scene gets mushy later on.

But I am glad you like the story so far.

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Go, Severus! I like stories where Severus is a good guy. Thank you. Well done. I can't wait to find out what happens next. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm

I love Severus, I want my own. I will try to keep on track. Between all of my stories, I have written around 8,000 words in the past week...here's to hoping I can keep it up.

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