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Review of chapter "Home And Other War Zones" from Grovtech
Review:
I really liked how you integrated Buffy and SG-1's stories. Nicely done.
Grover
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [14 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Home And Other War Zones" from StoicLast
Review:
Jawdroppingly good! I love how all the plot deviations flow seamlessly from one change. Thanks for writing this.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it - many thanks for the enthusiastic review.
Review By [StoicLast] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Encounters - Welcome and Unwelcome (Part Two)" from AlexanderMcpherson
Review:
Just realized (as with fics like this, I tend to keep a tab open on world.guns.ru... and the gun You say Frasier keeps at home is an M11? as in an Ingram or Cobray M11 which is basically a tiny boxy UZI? Aka pretty much the same weapon as what Jamie Lee Curtis dropped down the stairs in True Lies?

world.guns.ru/smg/usa/ingram-mac-m10-and-m11-e.html

Okay, just looked things up... it sort of makes sense if you meant the Swiss/german handgun SIG Sauer P228, which the US military refer to as the M11 (rather than the US-made SMG Ingram Mac M11) then yeah.

But while the AF' OSI does use the P228, the SGC seem to use the Beretta M9 as it's standard Side-arm.

Then again, if you did mean the SMG Ingram M11... that's one bad-ass Doc.
:D
Comments from author:
I meant the SiG - I don't see the doc brandishing a MAC-11, somehow. From what I've been able to glean, the M11 is issued not only to AFOSI, but also pilots, and Air Force intelligence agents and according to some sources (and to a limited extent) those officers with smaller hands who don't find an M9 comfortable. The SGC also seems to have a pretty eclectic mix of non-standard weapons - we've seen SG teams with P90s, G36Ks, and MP7s, none of which are USAF issue.

Admittedly, the idea of Fraiser brandishing a MAC-11 is quite amusing...

Thanks for the review
Review By [AlexanderMcpherson] • Date [7 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer Lite" from AlexanderMcpherson
Review:
Been re-reading this story last few days (slowly, only on ch.10 of FLPv1.) and I'm wondering if you have a little character list or chart showing who's who, in what, etc... sometimes once fics breach 70-80k with a revolving door kind of cast of guest characters, only a core and canon set stick in my mind... basically, I don't recall who was in Team Van Helsing, and all the different soldiers she's learning from, only the name of her CO is stuck in my head. And while I recognised the name of the girl she was friends with back at, wherever she was prior to operation VH, yeah, forgot it already.

Some authors put little details like that into the series description, but generally those are for stories too unwieldy for it and should have their own Wikia site ;)
Review By [AlexanderMcpherson] • Date [4 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sometimes You Get the Bear..." from DarthTenebrus
Review:
A ten for Buffy hearing the happy couple at the Delta Site...

"Whatever you say, Sam.  But just remember one little thing...  Quiet forest plus sensitive Slayer hearing?  Major Screamer,” Buffy smirked at a suddenly aghast and red-faced SG-1 XO.

HAAAA...HAHAHAhahaha.......Snerk...
Comments from author:
'Major Screamer' is so loud in mid-sex that my deaf grandmother could hear her, let alone a Slayer...

Thanks for the review
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [22 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Encounters - Welcome and Unwelcome (Part Three)" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Only got this far in FLP1, but I have to laugh once more at how this chaptee ended.

And I can imagine Faith's witty response; "If my body could never be found then men across the planet would declare a day of mourning!"

Snerk...
Comments from author:
You'll be glad to hear that I'm working on an FLP chapter and that'll be the next one I post.

Thanks for the review - glad you're enjoying it enough to read it all again!
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [21 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Home And Other War Zones" from HMaxMarius
Review:
Heya Cordyfan...

I came across the following back during the holidays... Yahoo just did a story on a different 'military cheerleader' and included a link to the other story...

Pretty sure you saw it... but just in case:

http://sports.yahoo.com/blogs/nfl-shutdown-corner/eagles-honor-former-cheerleader-turned-afghanistan-special-ops-143441405--nfl.html

Note the 'special ops' in the link... Even looks a little like The Cordy... ;)
Comments from author:
I didn't actually notice this - and the top picture, especially, looks just like her!

Thanks for this.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [30 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Operation Broomstick (Part Two)" from OutForAWalkBitkah
Review:
Emotional whiplash, much?

Whoa! I was cheering on Buffy when she went for the phone cord. I almost--no, I did--laugh my butt off when Travers was stuck on the 'Special Agent Summers' bit. Then Cordy shot Wesley's father? Did not see that coming. Glad to know that Cordy might not be writing Wesley off just yet, now that she more about him. To top it off, Travers got hit with a spell no one has heard of in...a long time, and there's reversing it. Dang it! You actually got me to feel sorry for the SOB. Then I'm justifiably grinning when the the rest of the Council goes through the Gate.

Great job!!!
Comments from author:
Seems like I achieved the desired effect here.

Travers, when it came down to it, was nothing more than a murderous librarian, running a corrupt gentleman's club. I couldn't think of a better end for him, so a protracted, agonising, magical end seemed appropriate. Wesley's father go what he deserved - not only for being a Council leader, but also stupid enough to take on armed SpecOps personnel. The Gate seemed the easiest way of disposing of the others. They'll have to work hard to survive - might not last very long...

Thanks for the review.
Review By [OutForAWalkBitkah] • Date [14 Sep 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Home And Other War Zones" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
What a wonderful story! I love the concept of Cordy as a Slayer even the "lite" version. I really like her as a member of the Special Forces so cool!
Thanks for a great story!

Tom.
Comments from author:
Cordy is seriously underused in fan-fiction and I've only seen a handful of stories where she was a Slayer (plus only one other where she was in the armed forces). Glad you enjoyed the story and hope you like the sequels.

Thanks for the enthusiastic review. :-)
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [22 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plots and Plans" from AlexanderMcpherson
Review:
It wasn't actually stated when Dr Lam started, so as a member of staff but not all that high up, it kind of makes sense at this stage.

as for the civilian or military - with the daddy issues, she wouldn't be in the military, although you might want to in future chapters, if you haven't already, make a point that she joined the SGC because Doc Frasier recruited her. its not just the best spec ops or physicists they're always after ;)
Comments from author:
At some point in the story, I mention that Lam's a civilian. A few reviewers have suggested that she's in the military but, in addition to the points you make, unlike Fraiser we never saw her addressing a superior officer as 'sir' or wearing a uniform, so I always thought she was a civilian employee.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [AlexanderMcpherson] • Date [20 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Home And Other War Zones" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Great story. I agree that this is a good place to break off the story and start new ones.

James
Comments from author:
It was getting a little unweildy by the end and the Somalia raid seemed as good a place as any to start another volume. Hope you enjoy the sequels (Key to the Stars and Fate's Little Plaything are set within the same timeframe, so can be tackled in any order).

Thanks for the kind review.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Operation Broomstick (Part Two)" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Ok, went back to TOBII and in Chapter 65. The Dead an author by the name HallowGreen posted a conglomeration of crossovers that mentioned the HGC, so I did a search on it. I found a few references, but being ADHD, I missed the little detail of the author's name being HallowGreen. I found your series and am falling in love with it. I hope that you are either still writing it or have at least finished it.

James
Comments from author:
Don't worry - I'm still writing, albeit somewhat slowly due to work commitments. It's sometimes just a matter of a few paragraphs here and there when I have the time. I have absolutely no intentions of abandoning it (on the contrary, I've already began to think about sequels).

Fate's Little Plaything (Volume One) has two concurrent sequels which are currently in progress: Fate's Little Plaything (Volume One) (what else?); and Key to the Stars. There's also a look ahead, with a story called Tanika's Trials. Hope you enjoy the rest and thanks for the kind reviews.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [21 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Operation Broomstick (Part Two)" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Ok, found this series from your posting on Tails of the Barman II.

Must say that I like your take on things. Loving what you did with the Council. Don't see The First taking this newer Council as easy.

Still looking forward to how you are going to deal with Glory.

BTW, did I forget to mention that you ARE EVIL!!! Having Cordy dating Ben!

James
Comments from author:
Ummm - I've never posted on Tales of the Barman. Do you mean tyhe Ragnarok series?

The First might never appear, since the cirumstances of the canon series might not be replicated here.

I'm afraid Glory won't be dealt with until the end of the sequel to this one (Fate's Little Plaything Volume 2) - and in her true form, she's a much tougher proposition than in the series...

Cordy may or may not ultimately date Ben - I'll leave that for you to find out. ;-)

Thanks for the review
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [19 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Home And Other War Zones" from RedCalypso
Review:
Before Hammond could respond, a well-formed and accurately-aimed snowball caught him right in the mouth, swiftly followed by several others around his head and shoulders. His eldest granddaughter certainly had a killer instinct, the General decided, spluttering on a mouthful of snow. Then a giggling Kayla opened fire, too.

Hmm, killer instinct...and killer aim...I find myself wondering if this is just a throwaway line or a hint of a future Potential...
Comments from author:
You know, I never thought about that... Maybe that could be an idea much further down the line.

Thanks for the review and the idea.
Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [6 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Busy Doing Nada" from RedCalypso
Review:
I'm going back and re-reading the whole story (have to do something waiting for the next chapter) and I found this little nugget.

“If Cordelia isn’t on a Hellmouth – or not on this one, anyhow – when a Slayer next dies, it’s likely that her remaining powers will be activated. Every Potential in the world is further infused with the Slayer essence when a Chosen One is killed, though only one will be Called. It almost certainly won’t be Cordelia – amongst other things, her age militates against this – but that brief pulse of power may be enough to complete the process. At the same time, it is unlikely that she will ever have the ability to pass on the Slayer line.

I'm really not sure how a new line can do anything BUT pass through her, if she gets the full package. It would be kind of interesting to have two Slayer lines, though I certainly don't want Cordy to die...at least not permanently...
Comments from author:
There may actually be two lines on Earth right now (three if you count Cordy). Saedria has the Varrini line - but it's a debatable point whether or not her death would summon a Slayer on Earth, or amongst her own people. After all, Faith's brief death after she was poisoned by the Council sufficed to call Amyra.

I'm hoping to finish a new chapter soon, either from FLP or Key - depends which way the muse is running.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [4 Oct 12] • Not Rated
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