Caffeine-aided Willow babble. Heh. That was well done.
One small thing - could you add a location title to the new section when you switch locations in a new scene (or maybe a sentence or two to ID the new location)? It's sort of an abrupt transition when reading, without some indication that the location and characters are now different.
Comments from author:
Yep. I can do that. Sorry.
Review By [Kremer] • Date [24 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Great story. I look forward to seeing more of this. It should be nice reading about Stetler and Ecklie trying to figure out what's going on. And being given the runaround until their interference becomes annoying. I can the the IDC doing something about that then.
Review By [Althalus] • Date [24 Aug 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Yay!!!!! I love this so far! I love all your stuff, but this is gonna be awesome!!! I love that they told off Rick(yech!), he is such a scummy character! I love that Gunn is hitting on Stella, I still really think that a Don/Willow pairing would rock (I know, she's all "gay now" but she did date Oz!!). And ooh, I love that poor Andrew is still being harassed!!! LMAO
Review By [melissouza] • Date [24 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
COOL! A dash of all three CSIs! I'd love to see a bit (or more) of Stella/Gunn flirtation. In cannon I don't think I saw either character get to have relationships. I think work work work describes both of them very well. I also think that someone needs to protect Willow from coffee! Good chapter!
Review By [kayron] • Date [23 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Neat. Great summarizations of their various first entrances into their new offices/home-away-from-homes 'cause you not only presented the CSI teams, but pulled in/showed their...ummmm.."frenemies" I think the word is, for most of the teams.
Review By [Dreamweaver] • Date [23 Aug 09] • Not Rated