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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from duckman
Review:
Sooo Cool. Nice to see a very good 40k cross-over. I can't wait to see more
By the way Holyknight all Librarians have blue Armour to indicate that they are the battle psykers of the Space Marines
Review By [duckman] • Date [17 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from HolyKnight
Review:
Odd.....a Librarian......but with a Thunder Hammer and Terminator Armour.........an item granted more than often to Daemon hunting squads......add, that the colour on his armour labels him likely as a member of the Ultramarines Chapter.......
Comments from author:
I think all the hints are there, but then I am writing it :). You will find out more if my power ever gets back on. Thanks for the review!
Review By [HolyKnight] • Date [16 Oct 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wraiths
Review:
great start please continue when you can. A Space Marine librarian is cool but I was hoping for Imperial Guard or maybe a Tech-Marine with Xander's construction job in the series. But whatever you choose great job so far.
Thank You
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading! When he wakes up I think everyone will be surprised :)
Review By [wraiths] • Date [16 Oct 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from FallenDruid
Review:
I would note that the writing on the seals should be a form of Latin, from what I remember.

But other than that...this seems interesting, though potentially...short. Do, continue please.
Comments from author:
Yea, Latin that has been bastardized by 40,000 years, which is why Giles would not recognize it at first glance. But thank you for the review and the comment.
Review By [FallenDruid] • Date [15 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Ferrian
Review:
Overall nice story, I'm curious where you will take it.

From the description I guess he is a Space Marine, most likely a Librarian of the Dark Angels chapter because of the, for Librarians, typical blue armor and the green robe in the chapter color of the DA. And their loyalty fits pretty well for Xander.

Although a part of me was hoping that he would be Ciaphas Cain, HERO OF THE IMPERIUM!!(!) ;P
Comments from author:
Ahh, well you will just have to wait and see! I am still working on the broader plot, these first few chapters are more to get the characters and their relationships established.
Review By [Ferrian] • Date [15 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RafMereC
Review:
Space Marine. Nice.

Raf.
Comments from author:
Hmmm, maybe, maybe.
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [15 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
A great, well written, set-up that leaves me wanting more.
Comments from author:
Many thanks! No school today so I am going to be crankin on the next chapter.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Oct 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nemogbr
Review:
Trying again...lol

Did Xander go as an Inquisitor to Librarian?

Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Ahh, you will just have to wait and see!
Review By [nemogbr] • Date [15 Oct 09] • Not Rated
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