I'm enjoying your take on BtVS meets the Cullens - maybe it's because Dawn's calling Edward out on his broody, possessive nature. Whatever it is, nicely written! I'm looking forward to the next segment!
Review By [Rissah] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
I like the story so far and can't wait to see what happens next. I also like the whole Jacob/Dawn pairing. You also asked to have any Sam written as Same errors pointed out and here are 2 that I noticed:
-“Good job, Same.” Buffy said. “I missed the first time too.”
-“I'm amenable to that,” Sam said. “I don't know if I'll ever trust you Carlisle. Your presence in Forks has greatly altered and damaged my life,” Same said sadly.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Fixed!
Review By [KeiraFirestone] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Dawn and Jake? Very good match. Though, I can't wait to see what'll happen when Edward gets inte the mix and discovers what Bella's been up to... This is a great story, thank you for sharing it!
Comments from author:
Thanks. Yeah, I'm planning on eventual Dawn/Jake and Bella/Edward, but right now, Dawn, bella & Jake are the 3 Musketeers (who also hang out with Angela, 'cause she's cool), and Edward's being a great big doody-head. I'm really enjoying writing this fic, even though it's giving me a headache and interrupting my ability to pass college, lol.
Review By [Clandestine] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Not Rated
I wasn't sure what to think of this fic at first, but it's growing on me. I'm interested to see where you will take it. And I too want Jake for Christmas!
Comments from author:
My own space-heater, what every girl needs for Christmas. ;-) v Thanks for the comments! I hope I can keep growing on you (in a very non-fungal way).
Review By [GACTsevil] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Not Rated
This is such an excellent chapter. ^_^ The visions that Alice gets at the end of the chapters are a really cool way to end the chapter. Again I eagerly await the next installment of this wonderful story.
Review By [spring] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Four well written, nice sized chapters in 2 days. You are my kind of author. These are wonderful by the way. I'm very glad that you're open to the idea of bringing Spike back, and that you've set up a way for the two Twilight groups to possibly work together. I can't wait to see where you take this. And since Buffy has the contract with the Voulterri, will they still be a problem latter on?
Comments from author:
I am planning on having the Volturi show up, but I'm not exactly certain how. Aro doesn't want to publicly humiliate himself, so, if he discovers the Cullens are connected with Buffy.....I'm unsure of his course of action so far. I'm having a hard time writing Edward, so the progress may slow down soon--plus uni starts back up on Monday, and it's finals. Thank you for your kind words!
Review By [KaterinaLafey] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Not Rated
This is a wonderful chapter. I love what Dawn told Alice about the Votri, I can so see Buffy telling them that. I am eagerly awaiting the next installment of this wonderful story.
Review By [spring] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Clandestine
Review:
Great chapter :D
Review By [Clandestine] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Nice, smooth meeting with the Cullens. Guessing they don't want the wrath of the Council coming down on them. Or even just the wrath of Buffy if she's truly that strong. Almost wish the Volturi do try something, just to see what happens.
Comments from author:
You may get your wish, if you're patient, and I can come up with enough material for this whole story. I'd like to keep it going all the way through BReaking Dawn, but I need to figure out what's going to happen, and how the stories are going to change. Mainly, I haven't decided yet who's going to be with who, and who's going to imprint on who. But Edward is still somebody who overreacts way too much, so you should get a little Volturi. ;-)
Review By [mmooch] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
GACTsevil
