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Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from AonGealach
Review:
I love this story and I want you to post more and soon! I want to read more Xander in the next chapter if you please.
Comments from author:
Glad you like it. Yes, next chapter will centre around Xander again.
Review By [AonGealach] • Date [24 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from eriktheviking
Review:
A great intelligent Jack.
Comments from author:
We've always know that he acts dumber than he is. Now that he's one of the few people on earth that knows this stuff he's forced to explain it, event hough he'd prefer to play the idiot. Something I wanted to accentuate with the plasma explanation.
Glad you like it.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [23 May 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Bobboky
Review:
very good
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Glad you like it.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [22 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Evilsandman
Review:
Your Guardian kinda reminds me of the Star Wars holocron. Their guardians or gatekeepers were copies of past jedi and sith. Maybe you can use Charles Kowalski as a gatekeeper?
Comments from author:
Interesting idea. It could lead interesting places. Thanks for the review.
Review By [Evilsandman] • Date [22 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Outcaste
Review:
Glad to see this story progressing again.
Comments from author:
Its always progressing... Just not always as fast as I'd like. But as a college student time is rarely my friend.
Review By [Outcaste] • Date [22 May 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from myrddyn
Review:
i love this story! i just wish that you'd update it more often!
when the time comes for the episode frozen will either jack or xander end up either saving or consuming aiyana? if they do will they get her abilities or can they find a way to both cure her and get her memories or technology? plus on the fifth race (which should be happening soon will o'neil be getting to keep those memories? or will he find a way to upload them to guardian?
Comments from author:
I'm sorry. While I do work a lot on it I'm a slow typist and I am a fulltime college student. So time is rarely on my side.
While I won't say anything about Aiyana I do have to remind you that her memories were severely damaged so I wouldn't think she'd be a good source of information for technology. :-(
As for the fifth race, exploring in general has been moved back slightly. Mostly because of the knowledge they poses from Apophis would obviously make them more interested in some addresses first, while leaving the addresses they know nothing about for a little later. As for how they'll handle it when it finally happens I've already got it planned out.
Review By [myrddyn] • Date [22 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from CageFire
Review:
Great new chapter, I'm really happy to see a new chapter of this fic. :) I don't think you've updated in quite a while, so I hope it won't be too long before the next chapter. Keep up the excellent work, and I'll be keeping an eye on my inbox for new chapters. :)
Comments from author:
Its been since the eleventh of February since I updated the chapters. But I did edit all the previous chapters which added 20 pages of text in Word. I'm a fulltime college student so time is never on my side. Though I do have a few chapters of the next chapter typed up, its far from ready.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [22 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from ovid
Review:
It's great to see an update, I love this fic.

I have no comments regarding the ship or the base/AI. At least you have a handy pyramid and production base going. It also helps that the Tauri don't have to worry about taking the ship to earth and dealing with that resulting can of worms.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Glad you like it.
Agreed. While they could bring it to earth, the question becomes, where would they hide a 292 meter high gold coloured pyramid? They'd either have to put it on another planet in the solar system or on the dark side of the moon. In either case it would be harder to get people and equipment to the ship than when it stays on Abydos.
Review By [ovid] • Date [22 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from deamon
Review:
with jack O'neill's sense of humor you shoulda named it jarvis or jeeves lol.
Comments from author:
While I did think about it, it's been done to death. I'm also considering that he's not up to date on comic references. If asked he'd probably know thanks to Xander but that doesn't mean it'd be his first choice.
Thanks for the review. Glad you like it.
Review By [deamon] • Date [22 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
Chapter 11

ohha Walsh? that's badddd news......

Chapter 12

ahh that energy source sounds nice.

Chapter 13

ahh I wonder what will happen here with T's son and good the ZPM seems to work.


Chapter 14

ahh Aphopis truly gone....nice meal for Jack
good they found a way to work on and use some of the memories.
Comments from author:
Glad you like it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [4 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
Chapter Six

ahh nice the Troll has left the building *g* and Giles gets his job? rofl.....


Chapter Seven

ahh nice of Joyce to invite X and his mom for Xmas diner

Chapter Eight

nicely handled the things with eggs and Ted as new Liberian? rofl.
ok the Judge is gone as well, and Angel got his happy and now Angelus is in the chair.

Chapter Nine

ahh nice X took care of Angelus.....
good way to handle the swim team and Acathla


Chapter 10

uha first day with his day and already chaos rulez *g*
Comments from author:
Glad you like it.
I'm currently doing editing of the first 15 chapters (mostly sentence tags because many readers are having trouble following the story.)
I've also written half of the next two chapters.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [4 May 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Genuka
Review:
evilevilevilevil..... more please!
Comments from author:
I'm only as evil as you imagine me to be... Well maybe a little more than that...
Review By [Genuka] • Date [6 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from FireWolfe
Review:
Great update. Wish it were longer :)
Lisa
Comments from author:
Glad you like it. So do I.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [10 Feb 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Narf
Review:
A fine update, Keep up the good work thanks and bye.
Comments from author:
Glad you like it.
Review By [Narf] • Date [9 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from HolyKnight
Review:
it doesn't needs to be a large outbreak to turn into a FUBAR.....only what said outbreak, its on a location of importance for the US, what somehow, can be covered up on some level.....Could imagine the NID doing their experiments, for "better security" on an isolated Island-based US base, outside the country like Diego Garcia on the Pacific? there are around 1000-1500 people betwen Civs and the crew there on the island...and a LOT of military stuff....ideal to cause a crisis that would force the SGC to send Jack and Xander in order to take down the outbreak, while the Navy and the Air Force its enforcing a blockade ring around the island....imagine Hope, Idaho, but with the `people having military-grade weaponry and training.....
Comments from author:
I'll think about it. But, I'm not making any promises. I do like the idea.
Review By [HolyKnight] • Date [8 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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