You do a good job writing alternate Buffies (Buffi?). This chapter continues to blend her and the Master (still mostly her on the outside, but then some of that's situational, as she's decided acting like Buffy is best until she decides if it's acting) quite well just as your Dragon Half does a more cheerful cheerleader type who's still recognizably Buffy. The half-serious joking feels like it's close to dialogue Buffy would have but the reader's knowledge paints it in a different light than the characters see it.
Of course, the thing lacking from last chapter's explanations that occurred to me since my review was why she'd regenerate without growing a whole new face after her fall, but that covered later. Now I wonder what happened to Spike... If he's not dead he does have a nice manacle-equipped area downstairs where he held Buffy and Drusilla and the irony probably appeals. Well, here's hoping to find out soon.
Review By [ForSpite] • Date [7 Mar 10] • Not Rated
This is a totally awesome fic. And I did NOT expect the Master to pop up like that in the Buffy. Also... poor Spike. Can't seem to catch a break with tech.
Review By [Biigoh] • Date [27 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
well, other than Spike, everybody's happy now! yay...... other than some maybe-future world rule-age, I'm not seeing a downside here. Of course Anya will turn out to be the Doctor in disguise, already working to thwart this evil plot. But hey....
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Evil, but still somehow Californian? You helped get the Master on my mind. I ended up using him in a story recently. I'm trying to remix it for a crossover with Buffy-verse so I can post it here.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Oh, I was so looking forward to this update! You're portraying Buffy/Master's lunacy just right. That is, one forgets that's she's insane because she seems so rational, albeit in an expediently self-centred way, and then suddenly something happens like for example Dawn slapping her. And Buffy/Master's really twi-minded there, she's genuinely concerned for Dawn and also extremely vengeful. Kind of scary. I eagerly await the next instalment.
Review By [RebeccaAshling] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Personally hoping for some Master!Buffy/Doctor action, because that would be incredible.
Clearly Dawn's being glad it wasn't her that was dead has stirred something in Master!Buffy that has just strengthened the relationship. Perhaps a sensation of kinship? And I loved Buffy's complicated rant regarding how the Master became Buffy in the first place. Very cleverly done. Plus Spike... Oh, that's going to make things interesting. Particularly when one considers the fact that Spike was in love with Dru - a hypnotising psychopath... And Buffy... Well, the drums might be 'gone', but if the tapping's anything to go by, by no means are they or the madness forgotten.
I can't wait to see what else you do with this story. Keep up the great work.
Comments from author:
I wish I'd thought of the finger-tapping when I was finishing Chapter 4...I'll probably rewrite to add it in at some point.
What I tried to convey here is that the Master could easily understand Dawn's being glad it wasn't her, but could never have comprehended why she'd be all torn up about it. Trying to understand that was what flipped Master!Buffy over into Buffy mode. For the time being. But as you saw, the Master is never far from the surface...
Review By [Tanydwr] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "That Explains A Lot" from Nomma
Review:
I would almost guess that thing was a primitive Laser Screwdriver (Who'd have a sonic?). Of course, it could just be an energy weapon, but that's what sprang to mind.
Comments from author:
It's basically a ranged wireless taser, made from an old TV remote. She only had a few hours to whip it up, after all.
Let her get her hands on a lab, some quality parts and a day or so...watch out.
Review By [Nomma] • Date [8 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]