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Review of chapter "Ford" from DrDamage
Review:
In the next to last section of your story, you switch from past tense to present. It's a little jarring (and easy to do, as I know from my own efforts at storytelling)
Review By [DrDamage] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Ford" from HMaxMarius
Review:
LOL! Now that's an angle I'd never considered for the Ford situation... =D

btw, you shift from past tense to present tense about halfway through. Unfortunately, present tense doesn't really work well in third person mode and was a bit of a distraction to the actual story.
Comments from author:
I'll check it over. I do try to keep a watch out for that.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comes in threes" from Genuka
Review:
Oh no! The Stupid 18th birthday thing. I can't spell or pronounce it..*scowl*
Review By [Genuka] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comes in threes" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Why am I hearing the Jaws Soundtrack in the background while I read this?
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [25 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comes in threes" from Gideon
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That was pretty much a best case super understanding mother - daughter conversation there. I can sympathise with Joyce about putting her own daughter first but I can't see Xander looking forward to that conversation! It might give him another chance to practice his persuasive ability with women though :) Not like that! I meant so Joyce doesn't kill him... not that that seems likely from her thoughts so far.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Nov 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comes in threes" from Valandar
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Ah... so Ford enters the picture. Now THIS will be awkward...
Review By [Valandar] • Date [14 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunday" from borgrabbit
Review:
Not a clue to who IPL is. HP Lovecraft's sister? Maybe she stole Cthulu's pet?
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [20 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunday" from Gideon
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I don't know what IPL could stand for either but it sounds important! I don't have any comment on Giles' phone call because you didn't tell us who it was from :(
Review By [Gideon] • Date [12 Oct 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sunday" from DesitaniaF
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IPL?
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [11 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunday Morning" from VillageOrchid
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And very good hint that maybe the other clothes Willow wore originally belonged to Joyce.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Evening Activities" from VillageOrchid
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Oh, major continuity changes continue with "named" characters being the victims. I thought that Angel was a gonner beyond his memory. It seemed to imply that Spike's deamon had replaced his, perhaps.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Resolve" from VillageOrchid
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We rarely see an POV of in character resolve from Xander other than via catch phrase about looking out or protecting "his girls" - so it is interesting to see this. Anyone who could master carpentry and construction in such a short time, has the ability to apply themselves... not just dream about it. So I see this as another case of reverse extrapolation (going backward in the character's history from what is established later). Done well.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family Reunion" from VillageOrchid
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Well obviously she's trying to bring Spike back, but will Angel's form change as well?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunday Morning" from DrDamage
Review:
Oh dear! I can just see the expression on buffys face [BEG]
Review By [DrDamage] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sunday Morning" from Gideon
Review:
It may be something Buffy *should* tell her mother but probably not something her mother *wants* to hear. Especially any details! Although maybe she would be more understanding than expected if "Hot Red" turns out be someone who turned her love of art into a career :) Like Buffy's mother!
Good to see they are all moving forward in their various ways. Cordelia and Xander seem to be making useful plans and starting the work needed to bring them to fruition.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [18 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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