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Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Little Girls Kick Ass" from namegoeshere
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I am loving this story so far. The toaster oven comment made me laugh at the randomness of it.

As for parings I hope you have Dawn with one of the Elves. I think an elf would not mind Dawn being the key and she will accept herself.

As for Xander I am not too sure. Unless he is gay there really isn't much choices.

Love to see more soon!!! Thank you for a good read do far!~~~ Namegoeshere~~~~
Review By [namegoeshere] • Date [4 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Name Game" from LeaFairy
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Ooooh, they meet Strider and the Dunedain! So awesome! Totally not who I suspected, but they're even better! Brilliant! I also love how you have them not understanding each other, makes it much more interesting and complicated with Dawn and Xander trying to learn the new languages to communicate with everyone.

I think you asked last chapter for ideas, and I was thinking that Eowyn would be a pretty good match for Xander, also I never read them together before so... Just a thought. *shrugs* And as for a pairing for Dawn, well I really like her with basically anybody... well except for the Hobbits or the Dwarfs, cause that would be weird. *shudders* lol.

Anywho, amazing chapter... I'm definitely anxious to read more!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [4 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Name Game" from saturnssailor
Review:
Good story, but the end of chapter two was a bit confusing. And a quick question, Dawn is 12 and Xander's 18, right?
Comments from author:
Xander is 17, I did the math and he and Dawn should be about five years apart age wise in the Canon Verse and I didn't want to change that. You'll have to be a bit more specific on what you find confusing, if you don't tell me what the problem is I can't fix it after all. Thx so much for reading!
Review By [saturnssailor] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Name Game" from chickaboo
Review:
Yet another fantastic update. You really threw me for a loop there for a bit with "The Creepers" at first I thought maybe elves but then you added in that bit about facial hair and it took me a bit to figure out who they could be. I must say that I was pleasantly surprised at who it turned out to be. And hey, if they need to train, I'm gonna have to say they are so in the good kind of luck. lol I can't wait for more!
Review By [chickaboo] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Name Game" from Waverly
Review:
Awesome job. I like Strider's introduction and the fact that everyone doesn't just happen to speak English. And Xander's protectiveness is just adorable.
Review By [Waverly] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Swing of Things" from Waverly
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Excellent, I'm loving this! Xander/Dawn pairing would be wonderful. Please update again soon!
Review By [Waverly] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Swing of Things" from chickaboo
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I'm loving this so far! You've captured the "brother"/"sister" relationship that Dawn and Xander have beautifully. I can't wait for more!!
Review By [chickaboo] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Swing of Things" from Lize
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Yay, are they elves? Cause if they were orcs I think they would've attacked right away. Good job but I hate cliffhangers! Grr...but I like the story so I look forward to the meeting.
Review By [Lize] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Swing of Things" from blueyes
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Well written. The story drew me quickly. It flows really well. I look forward to the next chapter.
Review By [blueyes] • Date [2 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Swing of Things" from Keshkreature
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I like it! I'm looking forward to seeing how Dawn and Xander end up. Hopefully not riddled with holes :)
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [2 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Swing of Things" from LeaFairy
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Great second chapter! I loved it! And I definitely can't wait to see who or what found Dawn and Xander in the woods... Hopefully it's some of the 'good guys'.

I look forward to reading more... Thanks so much for updating!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [2 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Waking Up" from jadeypops
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great start cant wait to read more. the only problem i have with it and probably becasue im an emotional wreck 2day but i really hate stories where buffy or one of the scoobies have died....always makes me blubber like a baby lol.
keep up the good work and update soon :)
Review By [jadeypops] • Date [2 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Waking Up" from Lize
Review:
Cool cool, looking forward to more.
Review By [Lize] • Date [2 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Waking Up" from Waverly
Review:
I like it. The de-aging was a little weird, but a very intriguing start nonetheless. I think a Dawn/Xander pairing would be awesome!
Review By [Waverly] • Date [2 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Waking Up" from saturnssailor
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I like your story, but I don't get why dawn would want to get rid of the key for Danny. Maybe get rid of the key, but i think she would be mad at him for divorcing her and locking her in a mental institution. I can't wait to see where you go with this.
Comments from author:
She IS mad at him for divorcing her and locking her up in a mental institution. She doesn't want to get the Key out FOR Danny but BECAUSE OF Danny. She's never liked the Key, after all it did distress her dying mother, put the people she loved in danger, kill her sister, and make her into a target for every demon on the planet but having it ruin her "Normal Life" was the last straw. Plus now that her husband is gone and she's been fired for being crazy she's got loads of free time to cater to my whims! Is this really that unclear? If so I'll put in a better explanation in later chapters. Thx, for the Review!
Review By [saturnssailor] • Date [1 Feb 10] • Not Rated
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