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Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from RHatch
Merry Christmas to me!!!
Comments from author:
XD lol
Review By [RHatch] • Date [25 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from LucyH
Just wanted to say Merry Christmas first off! And I wanted to drop a line here and say that the chapter was great!

I love your sense of humor and how perfectly it flows for the characters but I also love your use of emotions. I was literally in tears at the end for Buffy burying Ford's ashes and for Xander & Willow while they shared their stories about Jesse and his place of resting with Buffy.
Comments from author:
Thank you! ^^

Glad I'm still doing things right. The moment at Jesse's grave was somewhat hard to write because I've never lost a friend the way the trio have, but I thought i did okay.
Review By [LucyH] • Date [25 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from frankocsic
Very nice chapter. Loved it. That bit with Jesse at the end was perfect. 'Study picnics' = LOL.
Review By [frankocsic] • Date [25 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from QueenCobra
Hahaha! Loved Xander's conversation with Yusuke. It had the 'aw, brother moment' and the 'haha brother fun'. :) "Telepathic cats rule, blue chickens drool" = awesome! I laughed when I read that line, and it's nice to see that Xander is using his spirit beast as ways of annoying Yusuke.

And Hiei spilling the beans after eavesdropping is hilarious! As is speculating Kurama's thought process after hearing the news of Xander's adventure in the hotel room. xD Naughty fox daydreaming!

The end of the chapter had me with the sniffles though. :( The talk about Jesse was just gah, tears!

Great seeing the hyena pack interacting with the Scooby pack, it's like they are becoming one. :D

Oh, and Xander and Angel showing their alpha-ness, or whatever it was that they were doing was funny. Poor clueless Angel, not knowing what is going on, which is not surprising since he's really only around for himself and Buffy.

Comments from author:
Glad you loved the humor and the brotherly moment. ^^

XD I had to have Kurama find out about the orgy somehow, and Hiei was only too happy to help. Kuwabara scolded him properly afterward...after laughing at our poor fox, he did choke on his tea after all.

I really needed the three of them to bond after Buffy staked Ford, because Xander has been in that position. If I made you sniffle that means I handled the emotions well.

We'll see more pack bonding through out the fic.

And the thing with Angel...wasn't really alpha-ness. I probably won't go into what it was about in this story, but some day all will be revealed. ^^
Review By [QueenCobra] • Date [25 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from Jaylynn
Love the update!
Review By [Jaylynn] • Date [25 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from kizunakat
Great chapter. I love Xander's spirit beast. Merry Christmas!
Review By [kizunakat] • Date [24 Dec 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bleak Fate" from silvergaurd
Love the new chapter. Can't wait to see more.
Review By [silvergaurd] • Date [24 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from QueenCobra
Was Kyle a little disappointed that he isn't Xander's mate? Either way, yay for hyena pack to make another entrance, cannot wait to see how they fit into Xander's life with the others. I wonder if Botan will gossip the news of the orgy to Yusuke and the others. Lol. That'd be hilarious to read, especially Kurama's reaction as he had a bit of a thing for Xander.
Comments from author:
Kyle might have been a little disappointed, and I think he'll continue to tease Xander off and on. He's a brat like that. ^^ You'll just have to wait and see what happens with the orgy information.
Review By [QueenCobra] • Date [19 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from DarkFaerieYumi
Nice....LMAO Go Xander. *snickers* This was....interesting. i wonder what would happen if Kurama would find out about this? LMAO! The blow up would be hilarious! But this was good. I loved HyenaXander. The Pack was my favorite episode.
Comments from author:
*nods* That ep had so much potential. Good thing us fans like to play in Joss' sandbox so much. lol And there won't be so much of a blow'll have to wait and see.

T_T my laptop died so my updates may be a little slower until I can get it fixed. However all my story stuff is safe, didn't lose anything. >>; I had just backed everything up and rebooted when it decided it wanted to die. Stupid laptop...I miss it. lol

Anyway, glad you liked it. Really happy this chapter was so well recieved. I was worried about posting something with sex in it. ^^;
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [8 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from RyenSelenityCaliburn
Wow! That was a great chapter! I loved it! Looking forward to more.. and the pack outing.. :)
Review By [RyenSelenityCaliburn] • Date [3 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from silvergaurd
Love the new chapter. Can't wait to see more. Would love to see a spike/xan/kurama relationship.
Comments from author:
Glad to hear it. Hmm...that never even occurred to me. Interesting, but probably won't happen in this series.
Review By [silvergaurd] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from Scorpio
Very nice. I enjoy how you are integrating a lot of little sub-plots all into one cohesive whole. Can't wait to see how the hyenas react to vamp hunting with the scoobies. I can't wait to see how the scoobies react to Xander's real heritage. Lots of loveliness packed into this story. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Glad you like all my many plots and plans (sometimes it's hard to keep them straight, I'm always rechecking my notes @_@;). The hyenas get a little vamp hunting in with Xander in the next chapter. ^^ Thanks for the review!
Review By [Scorpio] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from lordamnesia
This series is great! The concept of it all is fantastic, it doesn't op Xander, but it does add on what should have happened from the show. Frankly, the story just gets better the farther into it you get, especially this last chapter as the smut scene was well done and tastefull. The other 4 from the hyena incident needed to be taken care of, and I'm kind of dissapointed that they aren't involved in all the stories where the possesion plays a big part. Keep up the fantastic work!
Comments from author:
Yay! Glad you like what I'm doing.

I don't usually do smut scenes (they make me a little nervous cause they're so easy to mess up) and I did my best to keep it...I'd say in character, but we only see the pack in that one episode so we never really get a grasp on what the Feral Four are like. We understand that Kyle is their leader, Heidi has an attitude but is playful, Rhonda is a little more serene, kinda like a calmer predator. And we get zilch from Tor. *grumbles* Stingy Joss. But yeah, I wanted smut and an orgy, but not full on intercourse. ^^; I didn't want Xander's all the way first time to be an orgy.

I hope I continue to write this fantastic-ness of which you speak. XD It's a pretty fun pastime.
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from RHatch
great chapter.... cant wait till the girls find out about Xander's demon heritage. :)
Comments from author:
Buffy and Willow probably won't find out about that big secret till either the end of this fic, or more likely the beginning of the next fic. It will probably be a decent blow up in your face kind of moment though.
Review By [RHatch] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Laughing Dogs" from LucyH
Awesome chapter!

I have to say your are one of my favorite authors overall but you are, hands down, my favorite author when it comes to reinterpreting the series. I have NEVER seen anyone revisit the Pack and make you wonder, and then confirm, that they were just as affected by the Hyena remnants as Xander was.

I thought it was rather cool that Xander was able to track down the pack and then reaffirm he is alpha and is there to help them. Even remorseful he never thought to check up on them before then. Hehe - and a part of me thinks it works out well that the orgy happened for Xander because he got to experience both sexes to see how fun either could be; help let him know he really is gay or a boy-happy bi. Also... I like he got more of a choice in this then in the canon where Faith sort of threw him down and kicked him out cherry popping.

I thought it was cute that Buffy got to be called the co-alpha and that the girls handled everything really well when he, and Giles, talked about neutral demons and the pack coming by to hunt vampires with them. And they got to meet Marshall who I still say is adorable!
Comments from author:
*hugs* This made my day hun! *preens* I've never been anyone's fave author before of anything (that I know of anyway lol) that I've written. XD

There were lots of reasons for this chapter. 1) I wanted to do something that strays so far from cannon that it would make a few heads spin. 2) I wanted something completely of my own creation. Something that will really come in handy, not just in future chapters of this fic, but in future stories. 3) I needed more Xander growth, his ability to lead is completely overshadowed by Buffy in the series (except in a few cases). The boy has so much potential that was just wasted, and I think Buffy and Xander make good co-alphas so that they can keep one another in check. ^^ 4) The more people patroling the hellmouth the better.

Silly Xander never thought about the other kids because he thought the shadow in him was mostly due to his demonic heritage, though that plays a big part and helps him stay more in control. And I wanted Xander to get a little experience in, and he probably will get even more later on (probably not in this fic though). He's gonna take it slow, musn't pop all those cherries at once. ^^;

My fave part is probably Willow asking about the orgy and Buffy being all 'Willow!' And Giles cleaning his glasses. XD

Thanks for the review as always. ^^ And I'm glad your so fond of Marshal.
Review By [LucyH] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Not Rated
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