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Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from AndreaMaine
Review:
read everything up to Chapter 15 so far. I will finish it sometime, but for now I will take a break. It has some word use and word form errors here and there, but over all the story is a good read. My advice is to be careful in the uses of here, hear, know, no, to, too, their, there, and they're. These words trip up many writers. Just keep an eye on their correct usages and that should improve your work. Also I saw a couple of places where you used suite for suit. A suite is either a software package, a grouping of rooms, or a specialized hardware set up. A suit is a set of clothing meant for formal wear, dress, or dress casual wear. Continue writing the story and take time to look over what you've written. Keep a dictionary and thesaurus handy. They help in trying to find the right word to use.
Comments from author:
You guys are my beta readers. I know I have to clean up the story because I have a many little errors.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [10 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 52" from Morgomir
Review:
Sorry for the late review (exams). Great chapters. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Morgomir.

Sorry I haven't been able to get back to you sooner, but real life has intruded.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [18 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 51" from IcemanII
Review:
Very, very interesting, great story so far. I really enjoy this fic, it's a lot of fun. Keep up the good work, hope to see more!

Only thing that seems strange is: {You’ll be awaken at 0600 hours for breakfast..., and lights out at 1000 hours,” Morgan told them. “Guards.”} that is only 6:00am to 10:00am, 10:00pm is 2200 hours. You could be using your own thing but they used the 0000-2400 hours Clock in Star Trek from what I remember.
Review By [IcemanII] • Date [21 May 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 51" from Dragonelf
Review:
The story looks pretty nice so far.

By the way, you might want to change the cargo holes into cargo holds.

::Gives the plot bunny a slice of Strawberry Chocolate Pie::

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Neither fire nor wind,
birth nor death can
erase our good deeds.
- Buddha
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Comments from author:
Thanks for correction and I'm glad you like my story.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [20 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 51" from CageFire
Review:
Wow, I just noticed how long this story is. And it's felt like the majority of it was just dealing with section 31 and criticizing the starfleet training. I'm wondering what'll happen in the future.
Comments from author:
The reason I concentrated on Section 31 is something I read in one of the books and the Federation found out about them and let everyone know.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [17 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from buffalo
Review:
Just started reading this, and am loving it. Can't beleave I missed it untill now. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review buffalo.
Review By [buffalo] • Date [14 May 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 49" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Morgomir.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [6 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 49" from mendal
Review:
The only reason the borg came as a surprise was due to the complete stupidity of both starfleet and the El-Aurian's.
Comments from author:
You're right. You may me wonder why the El-Aurian's never told anyone about the Borg.
Review By [mendal] • Date [3 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Another nice addition.

Gunboat diplomacy worked for Kirk.

James
Comments from author:
Yes it did and it does for the AGF and their allies.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [20 Apr 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 11" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
That all seemed to easy.

I am hoping that the AGF isn't going to be a Mary Sue.

James
Comments from author:
The Asgards defeated the Ori with their beam weapon and I struck to cannon in that regard.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [18 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Gabe seems sweet in Brook.

James
Comments from author:
I see you like General Gabriel and he's a hard man.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [18 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Nice buildup. I still don't think this is going to be a cake-walk.

James
Comments from author:
Keep reading James.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [18 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
So, they can shield their minds. Very interesting.

James
Comments from author:
It's the technology embedded in all soldiers.

Thanks for the review James.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [18 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Energy signatures are hard to hide...

James
Comments from author:
I know.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [17 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Knew Janeway was in for some Skullduggery.
James
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review James.
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [17 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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