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Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from LordCorwin
Glad to see an update.... A bit of filler, but overall - after re-reading everything -- EXCELLENT!
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Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [27 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from JediKnight
Very nice job on the story so far, a few type-o in a few of the chapters. I hope to read more soon.
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Do my best.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from burmafrdnow

Ok that is out of the way.

I would like to suggest that you have had Faith a little too quiet so far; hope to have her start being more herself soon.

As regards training for Buffy and Faith- that is tricky. So much of what a Slayer does is instinctual and the training would have to be carefully sculpted NOT to interfere; when you are putting instincts up against training things can get messy.

Now as regards leadership there are courses that would be good; but then again they are leading Slayers and that bunch is going to be different then anything anyone in the Honorverse have ever run into.

So assuming that the training courses will work as advertized is not a good thing
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True, and there will be some glitches, on the other hand, we are talking about training backed up by something like three thousand years of military history...

I have plans for Faith, but remember she got her head handed to her while she was in charge, Faith always struck me as someone who uses brashness to hide insecurity, so getting her to accept what happened is not going to be an easy thing.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [18 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Lictre
I was amazed by the concept of a Honor-verse/Buffy fic, and quite enjoyed getting up to date with it, but I have noticed one possible error in the characterization of Honor. She has essentially a photographic memory, which is likely due to the various levels of genetic engineering that had occurred in her family history. With a minimum of effort, were there quotes or references to witchcraft in the Grayson religious works, either the primary books, or the more scholarly books, which she apparently studied with the intention of meeting her responsibilities to the utmost possible extent, she would be able to bring them to memory and quote them, including citing which books and sections they were from.
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My thought on the matter is that the Church of Humanity Unchanged was found long after witchcraft and the supernatural was discounted as being real, hence there probably wasn't anything in the mainline books of the religion. I know that she was diligent in learning her peoples religion, but I doubt she has read everything ever written, which was the point of the statement.
Review By [Lictre] • Date [14 Nov 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Netchka
Wow! Love the story. Does this mean that Vi is getting a Treecat? Cool. Can't wait for the next chapters.
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Yep, she did. Thanks for the review.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [20 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from skychan
It's unfortunate that these chapters have all been so very short. I would like to have seen more at a time. I think that its absolutely grand that your getting the sunydale crew 'attacked' by treecats. Lucky Willow.

But all in all it just is a bit too short and I'm still a little worried about the matter of scale for this story. I do love the Honor Harrington setting though, keep it up.
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I'll do my best, I tend to keep chapters around two thousand words plus or minus 10 percent. I'm not planning on having the Scoobies adopted en mass, I'll be cherry picking who gets adopted. It was Vi, not Willow who was adopted.
Review By [skychan] • Date [24 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from liadenfan
First, I want to thank you for coming back to this story. I believe I've read all the BtVS/Honorverse stories available on "TtH" and yours has been the most enjoyable so far.

Still, I have to correct a couple of errors you've made. In Chapter 2, you have Earl Whitehaven telling Buffy that there are "probably tens of thousands" of human settled worlds. However, during Honor's & Mike's baseball discussion in the first chapter of "War of Honor," Mike states there are only about 1700 human inhabited worlds. Also, in Chapter 8, you have Mercedes Brigham thinking about asking COL Sandra Gibson for advice regarding the Slayers' leadership problems. If you are thinking of the officer who commanded one of Tomas' companies on the second FEARLESS during "The Honor of the Queen," her name is Susan Hibson. She also appeared in "Honor Among Enemies" and had a cameo as the limping sword bearer during Honor's funeral procession in "Echoes of Honor."

I'm not sure where you're going with the "Champion" position, since the only individual designated as such in BtVS/AtS is Angel, if I remember correctly. I'm also not sure why you've picked as old an individual as ADM Givens to be a slayer. Other than to throw a monkey wrench into the Manty's command structure by having her be relieved as Chief of ONI (2nd Space Lord). Same with Tom Caparelli as 1st Space Lord. However, based on what you've written so far, I am very interested in the plot you're laying out.

If I might make a few suggestions as to who future slayers might or might not be, limit your use of close relatives of ruling/prominent families (i.e., no Wintons, Mayhews, Ramirezes, Andermans or Detweilers). I'm assuming ADM Givens is the Manticoran Slayer, so how about Chief Harkness' wife as the Gryphonian Slayer. I feel sure, since the care and feeding of junior officers is one of the jobs of senior NCO's, that Sergeant Major Iris Harkness (nee Babcock), RMMC could easily handle both small unit tactics and leadership training. My only other slayer suggestion is that the one from Montana be a member of the Montanan SDF CO's family (though her first name need not be Echo).

I am also looking forward to the scene where the Masadan Slayer is identified and picked up. Visions of a company or two of Royal Marines in powered battle armor making a combat assault to escort her off planet come to mind. In addition, I'm curious as to the gender of both the Masadan & Greyson Champions.

Finally, please base Slayer Training on Sphinx and give each Slayer a Companion. Again, thanks for the update and I look forward to more Buffy & Co. adventures in the Honorverse.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, and thanks for correcting me on Susan Hibson, which would explain why I couldn't find Sandra Gibson when I went through the various Honor Sites trying to confirm her name, I will be going back and correcting it.

As far as the number of worlds out there, according to the one Honerverse site I checked there are over two thousand worlds in the Solarian Confederation itself, so while I agree White Haven was probably exaggerating the number of worlds, he was giving an absolute worst case.

As far as future slayers and champions, I had this same conversation with another reviewer right when I was starting the story, people, in my opinion read fanfiction because they like the characters from a movie, book or TV show, so while it certainly won't be every Honorverse character that will be chosen for an upgrade, there will be a number of them, there will also be a number of OC's that will be introduced.

Thanks for the input, I hope you enjoy where I take the story.
Review By [liadenfan] • Date [24 Sep 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from BrownFinderth
I really like the premise in this story!!!
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Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [23 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from LordCorwin
WHOOT!!!! An update!!!! .... Thank you for posting again and please keep it coming..... :)
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Do my best
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [23 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Traveler
Thank you for the new chapter to this story. I am glad to see it continue and will be watching for more of this
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Review By [Traveler] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from ScorpioP
I'm glad this story is live again. I look forward to future chapters.
I will say I was surprised -- I thought a treecat would be selected.
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Not just yet, but I do have plans that way.
Review By [ScorpioP] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from war
that will be useful having someone in the Forestry Service as a Champion.

Hope Faith and Buffy take up the offer of officer training they definitely need it. If Buffy has questions about Grayson hope they think to ask Mercedes or better yet Honor.

Just to sure Vi was the red head who got adopted?

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
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Yep it was Vi.

Buffy and Faith and all the Slayers will definatly be learning some stuff from the Manticorians, as they will be learning from the Scoobies.
Review By [war] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from deathgeonous
Huh, interesting fic. So why have I never read this before. For shame. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
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Thanks for the review.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from burmafrdnow
Strange people would expect Honor to be Sphinx's champion when she was already considered Grayson's Champion; even if that was not mystical.

Please continue this; the only other current HH story has disolved into nothing but a so called relationship fic.
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I've started the next chapter and I am having some problems with a scene between Buffy, Faith and Mercedes Brigham. The story will be continued as soon as I figure out how I want to do this.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [10 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from BrownFinderth
I do hope a lot that JoeB is able to come back to continue writing this fascinating story!!! I am a big fan of the Honor universe and think the combination of her and Buffy is tremendous!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [5 Mar 12] • Not Rated
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