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Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from CPTSkip
Review:
Lol! Great last line. I am even more impressed with you story with this update. I really, really find the PTB to be quite annoying. I can't wait to see where your story is going next. And who the others are that got activated. If the Honorverse was a totally non-magic dimensions before the PTB screwed up, I wonder how The Tester is going to feel about those morons screwing things up? Lol!
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.

The problem is, if I understand how the philosphy works correctly, the Tester sets the test, its up to the mortals to meet it. On the other hand, he supposedly does not set impossible tests.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [1 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SpinelessPunster
Review:
Awesome begining! I look forward to more story, please continue.

Good characterization, I look forward to seeing the Slayers enter the complexities of the Manty society. (and the shock of any poor Grayson conservatives (read: all of them) who encounter either magic or Slayers- and heart siezures from meeting Faith)

Btw, I just picture Faith meeting Beowulfers, a society that she can't stun with sex apppeal. The elder Harrington might even get her to revert to her inner Vulnerable girl for a bit! ...A near-century old brazen flirt with a small child could prove to Faith that she can have her chocolate, and still find comfort in a family.

Not to mention the opportunities interstellar society will give them all.

Captain Dawn Summers, linguistics & communications Guru, Pirate hunter, and fashion trendsetter.

Publish soon!
Comments from author:
Thanks for your review. Yeah, I can see Allison and Faith getting together, if I write that they do on Grayson there will be heart attacks a plenty. I never considered though how Allison and Faith could bound, thanks for the idea.
Review By [SpinelessPunster] • Date [10 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)DeacBlue
Review:
Excellent start.
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [(Current Donor)DeacBlue] • Date [3 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bill
Review:
Great start!
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [Bill] • Date [28 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Neverwillmini
Review:
Crossovers with Honor Harrington's verse is always a good thing!
Review By [Neverwillmini] • Date [24 Apr 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from theunixer
Review:
Just some things I thought up after my earlier review.

You have Buffy healing much faster than in canon. The injuries she got from falling off the bus would have taken at least a full day or so (as seen when fighting Adam when he killed Forest, her injuries took a couple of days [it went into the next week's episode] before they were gone).

This is fine. The best way to explain it is that when Willow Called the potential Slayers, Buffy (*and* Faith) got their own shares as well. This would be a near doubling of strength, speed, sensory enhancement, etc., as well as an even faster healing rate. In canon Buffy got progressively more enhanced as time went on which is explainable as her body acclimating to the Slayer essence. She and Faith would be able to handle a doubling of power due to the amount of time they have been Slayers. This would *not* be the mega enhancement offered to (and turned down by) Buffy by the Shadowmen, which would have rendered Buffy as feral as the First Slayer was.

You could have Dawn be a newly called Slayer as well. It wasn't shown in canon as such, but it can't be shown to have not been so either. Willow's spell to find a local potential (Amanda) went through Dawn before going through the front door. It doesn't have to be just because Dawn was in the way at the time, the spell found her and then went on to also find Amanda. Thus everyone thinking that Dawn wasn't a potential. Having her be one is logical since her body was created from Buffy's.

As for how many new Slayers were on the bus, please consider the First (as Caleb)'s line, "30 odd pimply faced girls who don't know the pointy end of a stake." Only 2 were shown to have been killed during 'The Final Battle of Sunnydale' (my personal name for it - feel free to use it if you want, the same goes to any other fic writers). The camera angle showing the bus as it stopped didn't really show any of the left side seats. This allows for many more new Slayers to have been on it, even near 30. You don't have to identify them if they aren't needed, but they are there if you do. Better to have so many than not enough.

Other reviewers' comments about Whistler's sympathy for Buffy: remember, he only showed it *after* she had left, indicating that it was genuine and not an act.

I'm glad you have a couple of chapters already written ahead. Long periods of time between updates usually mean I have to reread much of the story at times just to refresh my memory (and I am reading several dozen of them).
Comments from author:
I never have a problem with people coming up with new questions about my fic. They have more often than not brought up something that I either never considered, or their ideas are better than what I had planned. Feel free to email me if you have any specific questions. It gives me a good feeling that people are getting into my stories enough to talk about it.

I never really considered up powering Buffy, or if I do, it won't be by much. The lack of visible wounds had more to do with the fact that Buffy absorbed most of the damage with her arms and legs and they were covered by the ship suit she was wearing.

Dawn is not going to be a Slayer, watcher, magic user, linguist maybe.

I thought that the final list of who made it out of Sunnydale was under twenty. Remember, there could have been alot of deaths off screen, the two they showed, if I remember correctly were secondary characters. If I discover that there was more than twenty or there abouts I'll go back and change it.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [23 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SamDragon
Review:
Ribcage hat time is here.Please,with sugar on top,more.Love Honor.
Comments from author:
Sorry, no ribcage hat. There will be Whistler abuse though.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [21 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Wolflady
Review:
I don't like Whistler because (largely) he works for the supposedly good guys. Who use a balance demon? In a war? Balance in a war is never a good thing. The death toll automatically ups ten fold if not more. As for his seeming sympathetic, so did Hitler when he was taking over Germany. So did Jim Jones when he was setting up his church.
I always thought that the PTB wanted to keep the balance because they want to watch the fun of a eternal war. It has occured to me that in the Buffyverse, evil has already mostly won and the PTB just want to prolong the agony. The only divine aspect ever mentioned are crosses and holy water, but the bad guys have their own cursed items. Where are the angels or Champions of Light?
Comments from author:
I always had a problem with how the balance is presented in Buffy too, and I agree big time about where is the divine representation. That isn't all that unusual in Hollywood though. Any show that deals with the dark aspects of the supernatural, the light is conspicuously absent, or it's presented as not that much better than the dark. The only time I think I ever saw a real divine intervention was an episode of Friday the 13th the Series.

As far as Champions go, thats Buffy and Angel and their groups job I think.
Review By [Wolflady] • Date [21 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
I really, really hope you go on with this. First story in a long time I've felt like tracking!

Great work, keep it up.

DaveT.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.

I'm planning on continueing this. So hopefully your tracking will not be in vain.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [21 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LostSpartan
Review:
Hmmm - this one could go a long way (about 500 light years if I remember the Weberverse properly :p ).

There are all sorts of things I could comment on, but most of your reviewers have already done that, so I'll just say "Good job so far - PLEASE keep it going" (there are many fics here that start out good, or even wonderful, then never realise their full potential...)

And just a quick "my opinion" on Whistler - Buffy doesn't really hate HIM, per se, just the messages he delivers (good sign that your bosses may be evil (or at least uncaring) - they never talk to you themselves). As for the ribcage, I wouldn't worry too much - to paraphrase Oz: "They may not look it, but they can really look after themselves"

(OK, so he was talking about rabbits, but the sentiment still applies...)
Comments from author:
Buffy is not going to be ripping any ribs out. However there will be some Whistler abuse in the next chapter.

I agree, there seems to be something about Honor Harrington fics that either see them not finished, or they seem to be finished short of a satisfactory conclusion. Hopefully the curse will not strike me.

Thanks for the reveiw.
Review By [LostSpartan] • Date [21 Apr 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from mousemt
Review:
Fun beginning. I liked the interaction with Samantha. Hope to see more soon.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.
Review By [mousemt] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from tactless
Review:
An interesting beginning. I'm looking forward to more.

As much of a pain as I know would be, I do hope this will be an ensemble piece and not be concentrated on only one, or two of the Scoobies
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.

Have no fear, everyone is going to be doing something.
Review By [tactless] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Speakertocustomers
Review:
Good start, looks interesting, although Whistler as an agent of exposition is perhaps too much of a cliché. However there's a misused word in the summary - you have 'where' instead of 'were' - and if it had been by anyone other than you that might have stopped me from reading the story. You are a superb natural storyteller but your word usage can be shaky sometimes.

Re the 2002 for 2003 thing that Marcus pointed out - you say you've fixed it but I'm still seeing it as 2002.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.

I promise I did go and fix it. Then I went back and fixed it again, I don't know what I didn't do last time.

I checked and it is now fixed. Thanks for pointing out the were-where thing in the summery. I'll fix that before I log off tonight.

Thanks for the compliment on my storytelling. You made my night.
Review By [(Current Donor)Speakertocustomers] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from theunixer
Review:
I can only say: yes, Yes, YES!

Thank you for writing an Honor Harrington crossover fic. As an earlier reviewer stated, there are so few of them and almost all have been abandoned in the middle.

I like how you are giving a lot of background information in the story (as in canon HH).

I'm glad you had at least 20 of the new Slayers on the bus (although it should have been 25 or more, plus the Scoobies and still have empty seats, I checked a school bus on capacity - am I obsessed? ... Nahhh) since only 2 were killed inside the Hellmouth, the rest getting away. In "The Mirror Never Lies" Greywizard had only 6 new Slayers on it (so he could keep track of the characters, says he), very upsetting.

Unlike most of the reviewers here, I don't think too badly of Whistler. True, he comes across as a low quality type but in canon he was actually sympathetic to Buffy's plight about Angel, even though that came out after she had left Giles' apartment and despite what the PTB had him telling her ("You're all you've got.").

Please, please have the Honorverse be in an Alternate Reality than the one Buffy, et al. came from, rather than a future of Buffy's (as in "Honor's Slayer"). Personally, I think it would just be better that way. A whole Universe whose inhabitants are ignorant of majick because it was never discovered and there are no vampires and demons in it. Of course, that means coming up with a tricky reason for them to be sent there/then. The First acting up again?


Now for the quibble: why did you have them come from 2002 and not canon's 2003? An error or is it part of the plot, to be revealed later?


Anyway, you've made an excellent start. I hope you have several chapters written ahead and don't keep us in suspense too long by updating few and far between.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review the unixer.

Have no fear, this is an alt universe, not the future Buffy one. I'll be explaining the set up for the universe in the next chapter.

I always thought there was under 20 Slayers on the last buss out of Sunnydale, if there were more on it I can go back and change the numbers as except for Buffy the rest haven't really been explained.

I never really got the annimosity that Whistler seems to generate. I mean I got Riley and Kennedy, but I never expected the outpouring of wishes of mayhem against him that I got with the reviews. Kinda reminds me of the trial of Captian Sternn from Heavy Metal: the Movie. I have two chapters of this finished, but I'm going to be posting the next chapter of Witchfinder next week.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PATM
Review:
Whistler?! Rip it's lungs out. Interesting Honor'verse pairing here.
Buffy, school bus, Witches versus spaceships, Military and Monarchy.
How is the physiognomy going to fare here far in the future? And
there is a California too.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Hopefully I'll manage to merge the two worlds.
Review By [PATM] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Not Rated
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