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Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from lilsis
I don't see how you've made Xander too powerfull. If you look at the original Magneto, Xander is WAY under-powered.

That said I really liked the first story and still like this story, if you're not going to finish it could you put it up for adoption?
Review By [lilsis] • Date [10 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from mishaptaketwo
This just begs for more and it was completely evil leaving it with no idea of his possibly classified job interview. Please tell me that there will be more...I am willing to beg?
Review By [mishaptaketwo] • Date [30 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from rocky
I know you aren't continuing this but if you did, you could easily put in into SGC, the wormhole things was a good foreshadowing. I could see his intelligence becoming an asset there. I could also see Willow working to bring Buffy back but only if she checked and found she was in some kind of pergetory hell dimension that felt like heaven but wasn't known to Willow.

I could also see Xander getting a call from NCIS while the interview was ending. I do wonder if he could control Naqahdah and if so how that might give the Tok'ra and Goa'uld the ebbijeebies.

I think the fic and the last one are really good story line and seem to be leading into a great plot with lots of humor and action, not to mention drama.
If only you'd continue it...
Review By [rocky] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from lilsis
I'd like to comment on you thinking that Xander is too powerful. If you read some of the first X-men comics you'll find that the power level that you have Xander at is actually lower then Magneto's was.
Review By [lilsis] • Date [18 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from Gideon
Another thing you could try is to say that Xander overstrained himself when he did in Glory and 'burned out' whatever remained of his X gene, thus removing Magneto's power again, or at least toning it down to a reasonable level. After all Magneto lost his powers a couple of times in the comics, at least temporarily :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [7 Jul 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from KyrissDraconis
Wow... this was really good. I am sorry you feel you can't continue it though. Major tease!

Oh well. Just keep writing other stories that are fascinating!
Review By [KyrissDraconis] • Date [28 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from TealThanatos
I can understand you not wanting to write this further, it's a bit of a hard sell to make a story without combat and still have challenges.
Review By [TealThanatos] • Date [13 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from Grymstalker
I can understand not continuing the story. When a character gets that powerful there really isn't any challenge for them without going overboard. Have you considered a rewrite of the first story and not give him the power just the memories and stick closer to the time line of the series. With just the knowledge as put forth in the story he would be able to be a creditable threat, he doesn't need the extra power to be scary.
Review By [Grymstalker] • Date [3 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from (Recent Donor)jcon
Sorry to read you are not continuing. I can understand somewhat how the plot would proceed may be more and more difficult.
You have always written a complete Xander character, even with the memories. Well done.
Review By [(Recent Donor)jcon] • Date [17 Feb 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from deusexsububi
I can respect your decision to discontinue this, and can easily see how you could easily be lead down an insano SUPER-Xander path. Truth be told, there are a lot of bad examples of that genre, but there are some very good ones. I think you should have more confidence in yourself, play with it anyway, you did a decent treatment in this and in Echoes. I plan on reading the rest of your works and I'll get back to you, but good job regardless.
Review By [deusexsububi] • Date [10 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from Klyk
Thank you for this amazing story.
And thank you for explaining why you didn't continue this story.
I see the problem with an overpowered Xander and I can see why you didn't continue it as it would just make anything unreasonable.
Review By [Klyk] • Date [2 Jan 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from Cam
1) I love this series (especially the first story, although this one is entertaining and well written too). You're the first person I've seen who has thought about/shown what having Magneto's memories would do, as opposed to just the affects of his powers. This way is much more interesting.

2) I understand running out of ideas for a story, and don't want to pressure you to write more (although obviously I'd love it if you did, or I wouldn't even be mentioning it), but the easiest way to avoid overpowered Xander would be to have him only able to access Magneto's powers when he is angry to the point of a true killing rage. (Which would make the first chapter of this most recent story even more interesting, because at least half of what he said to Spike would be bluff.)

Thanks for listening (reading, whatever)
Review By [Cam] • Date [18 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from Gideon
A great interlude. I can see where you are coming from with Xander being too powerful. We can see it already with him throwing his weight around and intimidating Spike. A full power Magneto would be able to annihilate a Gould Mothership with a thought or two and that is no fun. Xander trying to hide his abilities from the SGC would be a fun trip though.
For the record I did think Spike gave up too easily here. He should at least have knocked Tony out to show them he is still his own Boss. Maybe offer to leave his victims alive when he drinks from them, instead of eating bagged. Because I don't think Spike is *that * smart, even with his own self preservation at stake.
You could also power Xander down a bit to fit better in this universe. He is still young physically and could take some time to grow into his powers even though he has the memories of them at their greatest extent. that does conflict with the ending of the previous story somewhat but you could say that he is not able (nor does he wish to) exhibit such prodigious power unless under great stress or anger. Limit his field of effect to 20m perhaps, or to only one or two objects at once or to metal only his bodyweight or less or make him extremely reluctant to use his power because it reminds him of Buffy and how he couldn't save her. There are some things which you could do to keep the story interesting.
I fully accept that I may find this story more interesting than you do at the present time however and I look forward to what you write next, whatever it may be.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from Obsidian
Good chapter. sorry to see it disconintued. I know how it can be.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [21 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from missinglink
Hey there. Wanted to say I really did enjoy the continuation of Echos here. I know the trouble of starting something and then not necessarily wanting to continue as it won't go the way you would find more interesting to yourself. I think there are ways to progress that could in fact tie in well and allow you to not just one and done this.

My thought would be to have the meeting be with the BPRD and Hellboy. Now the setting time would be the first movie with Xander replacing the John Myers character and adding a wholly different angle by being the battle weary soul whose past can relate to the battle within Hellboy on a very real level. Both are aspiring to there better selves with events outside their control placing them on paths of destruction for the world at large. Hellboy's innocence versus Xander's memories would make for a solid counterbalance between them. Also by placing this in the realm of the mystical it would put Xander at a disadvantage and maybe not as powerful as those he deals with that can effect the very nature of reality. Also playing Xander off as trying to avoid regular use of his abilities as he fears becoming too easy with using them (same arguement in some Wizard/magic stories) and loosing touch with himself within Eric's memories. Parallels also exist in the seperation from love with Xander mourning Buffy and Hellboy missing Liz. The interaction between Xander and "Father" as well as with Abe would be worth doing it alone in my mind. You have a certain flair for the intellectual aspects and those interactions would be facinating to see what they would discuss and where you would take things.

You could drag Spike along with him or intro some other character, but it is not necessary as the journey is Xander's and thus the focus on him. Food for thought. Hope this inspires, but if not do appreciate your work and am enjoying your current efforts. Best of luck. Later.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [12 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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