Sorry to read you are not continuing. I can understand somewhat how the plot would proceed may be more and more difficult. You have always written a complete Xander character, even with the memories. Well done.
Review By [jcon] • Date [17 Feb 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Soldiers" from deusexsububi
Review:
I can respect your decision to discontinue this, and can easily see how you could easily be lead down an insano SUPER-Xander path. Truth be told, there are a lot of bad examples of that genre, but there are some very good ones. I think you should have more confidence in yourself, play with it anyway, you did a decent treatment in this and in Echoes. I plan on reading the rest of your works and I'll get back to you, but good job regardless.
Review By [deusexsububi] • Date [10 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Thank you for this amazing story. And thank you for explaining why you didn't continue this story. I see the problem with an overpowered Xander and I can see why you didn't continue it as it would just make anything unreasonable.
Review By [Klyk] • Date [2 Jan 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
1) I love this series (especially the first story, although this one is entertaining and well written too). You're the first person I've seen who has thought about/shown what having Magneto's memories would do, as opposed to just the affects of his powers. This way is much more interesting.
2) I understand running out of ideas for a story, and don't want to pressure you to write more (although obviously I'd love it if you did, or I wouldn't even be mentioning it), but the easiest way to avoid overpowered Xander would be to have him only able to access Magneto's powers when he is angry to the point of a true killing rage. (Which would make the first chapter of this most recent story even more interesting, because at least half of what he said to Spike would be bluff.)
A great interlude. I can see where you are coming from with Xander being too powerful. We can see it already with him throwing his weight around and intimidating Spike. A full power Magneto would be able to annihilate a Gould Mothership with a thought or two and that is no fun. Xander trying to hide his abilities from the SGC would be a fun trip though. For the record I did think Spike gave up too easily here. He should at least have knocked Tony out to show them he is still his own Boss. Maybe offer to leave his victims alive when he drinks from them, instead of eating bagged. Because I don't think Spike is *that * smart, even with his own self preservation at stake. You could also power Xander down a bit to fit better in this universe. He is still young physically and could take some time to grow into his powers even though he has the memories of them at their greatest extent. that does conflict with the ending of the previous story somewhat but you could say that he is not able (nor does he wish to) exhibit such prodigious power unless under great stress or anger. Limit his field of effect to 20m perhaps, or to only one or two objects at once or to metal only his bodyweight or less or make him extremely reluctant to use his power because it reminds him of Buffy and how he couldn't save her. There are some things which you could do to keep the story interesting. I fully accept that I may find this story more interesting than you do at the present time however and I look forward to what you write next, whatever it may be.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Hey there. Wanted to say I really did enjoy the continuation of Echos here. I know the trouble of starting something and then not necessarily wanting to continue as it won't go the way you would find more interesting to yourself. I think there are ways to progress that could in fact tie in well and allow you to not just one and done this.
My thought would be to have the meeting be with the BPRD and Hellboy. Now the setting time would be the first movie with Xander replacing the John Myers character and adding a wholly different angle by being the battle weary soul whose past can relate to the battle within Hellboy on a very real level. Both are aspiring to there better selves with events outside their control placing them on paths of destruction for the world at large. Hellboy's innocence versus Xander's memories would make for a solid counterbalance between them. Also by placing this in the realm of the mystical it would put Xander at a disadvantage and maybe not as powerful as those he deals with that can effect the very nature of reality. Also playing Xander off as trying to avoid regular use of his abilities as he fears becoming too easy with using them (same arguement in some Wizard/magic stories) and loosing touch with himself within Eric's memories. Parallels also exist in the seperation from love with Xander mourning Buffy and Hellboy missing Liz. The interaction between Xander and "Father" as well as with Abe would be worth doing it alone in my mind. You have a certain flair for the intellectual aspects and those interactions would be facinating to see what they would discuss and where you would take things.
You could drag Spike along with him or intro some other character, but it is not necessary as the journey is Xander's and thus the focus on him. Food for thought. Hope this inspires, but if not do appreciate your work and am enjoying your current efforts. Best of luck. Later.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [12 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
im sorry to hear that you are ending this series, it was a damn story, as was proven by the fact that the last one won 5 different awards. if you feel he is too powerful to fit in in btvs, ncis, or sg1, then why dont you create a story where he gets sucked into the marvel universe, where he would not be too powerful? also, i have no problems with super xander stories, lol.
Review By [KingDarius] • Date [11 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Well I had an idea you could do for a sequel for echoes of the fallen. Why not give him a job at stargate during the ori arc? I mean those priors are mega powerful so he wont seem like GOD!xander
I actually tend to like super!Xander fics so I'm sorry you won't go there, but I understand your reasoning. And I for one am not in the least bit sorry you decided to write this, it's brilliant even without a following :) Great work, seriously.
Review By [Ansku] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
This is great but I totally understand that you can't get a good feel for where it goes next. As powerful as he is none of the villains of the Stargate world be able to be any sort of challenge. Even the Ancients might be taken aback by him and he might be just a little ticked at them for their neutral attitude and I can't see him wanting to Ascend because that would mean he probably wouldn't be with Buffy.
But if you come up with some way for this to continue in a few months or years I'd be happy to read it, or anything else you produce. You've proven you can write good stories and great Xander.
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Not Rated
I think your description of Xander was one of the best I have ever read:
"...Harris is one of those you watch out for. The ones like him… They’re the Julius Caesars, the Alexander the Greats, the Genghis Khans, and the Attila the Huns. The ones not afraid to take that step into the darkness to do what needs to be done... ...They’re the ones that have the strength to forge empires..."
Brilliant
This fic actually works fairly well as a standalone also.
Review By [sistercity] • Date [28 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Aw. You're one of the few people out there I'd trust to write a Super!Xander fic that wasn't awful. Oh well, it was fantastic while it lasted. Can't wait to see what you'll write next. :)
Review By [Ramenth] • Date [27 Oct 10] • Not Rated