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Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from banditdoz
Review:
Really enjoying this fanfic thank you for writing ;D
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [5 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from LordSia
Review:
Looking good. You list too much - having the characters spill their life's story to one another immediately upon meeting is bad form. Otherwise... Promising. You probably ought to clear up the timeline though, the switching back and forth get confusing.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [25 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
I also hope to read more of this nice fic soon.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [15 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Dem Lovely Witches part 2" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
ahh a Poltergeist, curios how they will deal whit it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [15 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: Dem Lovely Witches part 1" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
ahh looks like Xander enjoyed his time in Sanfran....even if I thought at the start of the chapter
you wouldn't tell more about that *g*
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [13 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
ah great start and nice way to meet the Charmed ones *g*
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [13 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Vassago
Review:
Harry Potter, BtVS, Angel, Supernatural, Charmed, Resident Evil, Highlander, From Dusk till Dawn...yeah, some of these are incompatible, and that makes this a rather hard to believe crossover if you don't twist things around so much that there's barely anything recognizable left from the original series'.

You went with too many at once. BtVS/Angel, Supernatural, and Charmed magic is a lot more powerful than Harry Potter magic, and a lot different than it. Highlander doesn't have magic, from what I recall. Nor does Resident Evil.

I'm sure I can find more things wrong if I take the time to look closely and examine each setting.

This is also full of fanwankery to Xander to a very big extreme. Making vampires whimper in fear because of a look in his eye? What, is Xander now a demigod or something? Vampires are typically four times stronger and faster than humans, and all of the sudden these extremely strong creatures are deathly afraid of something 1/4 their strength and speed?

I can deal with fanwankery on normal levels, but this goes a bit too far for me. Especially when he's not done anything we've seen in this story to get such a reputation.
Review By [Vassago] • Date [29 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from AriaDeloncray
Review:
Awesome story! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Review By [AriaDeloncray] • Date [8 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
Wow. Go Prue.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [25 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from Wyeth
Review:
You made some great choices for which crossovers you will use. I believe this story will be one of my top ten reads this year. I will be recommending this as a top ten story for the year.
Review By [Wyeth] • Date [23 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from OdinMage
Review:
Two... well maybe three things...
1) Halfway through the chapter you randomly call Virginia "Christine".
2) Why do you italicize spoken text, you're already using quotes and they aren't thoughts?
3) Your addition of song lyrics to your chapters is lowering my interest in the story, I just skip over the entire section and that's annoying since you intersperse narrative with the lyrics.
Comments from author:
1. Err, no I didn't. But I did accidentally call Catherine Newcastle "Christine", that is now fixed.

2. I don't know where you came up with the rule that italics are only allowed to be used when projecting thoughts. The italics work as a way to highlight the dialogue from the rest of the text and personally, I've never liked the idea of projecting peoples thoughts separatelly when you can simply integrate them in your narrative.

3. That's just means you're lazy. Some people don't like lyrics in a story but that's just too bad. Doesn't mean I'm not going to use them. Lyrics can do alot to add to the mood of the story especially since I can't exactly create and play a soundtrack for the chapter. If that means I lose a few readers, well I can live with that as long as I get to keep writing the way I want to.
Review By [OdinMage] • Date [22 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from Rob
Review:
Good part. Nice to see a semi-happy ending.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I wanted to give a small uplift to the gloominess of the first few chapters :)
Review By [Rob] • Date [22 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Dem Lovely Witches part 3" from grd
Review:
Love how Xan's rep is even known in the spirit community.
Review By [grd] • Date [22 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Dem Lovely Witches part 2" from Gideon
Review:
Good work, you are certainly aiming high with your number of crossovers!
The episodic format should help you cover them though.
Comments from author:
Thank you. The idea of this story more or less follows the Supernatural-format. Xander moves from place to place while taking care of some supernatural problems and often bumbing into characters from other series. Some characters will have a much larger effect on the story than others. Sam and Dean will be doing their own thing for a while but Xander will eventually catch up to them, it's just that destiny keeps throwing a few curveballs and detours on his way.

I more or less have the entire storyline bagged down for this story all the way down to the end and I have plans for a sequel and an interlude-oneshot. I've also been toying with the idea of a prequel of sorts about the council trying to rebuild and how Xander became what he is now but I'm not sure if I will follow with that one as I have a plot bunny or two in mind that might work as their separate series.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [22 May 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Dem Lovely Witches part 2" from spk
Review:
I normally don't focus on Xander-centric stories but I was intrigued with the crossovers. Good job so far. I'm definitely intrigued. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [22 May 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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