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Review of chapter "Stomp the Yard" from VillageOrchid
Review:
That's cool. I just don't know if other characters being brought in are from various cartoons, something else or original. Good reference to "that guy in the south" - because as you have it, the first has split its "gift" between two avatars. Perhaps since there are two slayers, or more potentials to kill in the south. However, I don't know who Daria Faith knows in DC, and thought at first you meant Washington state.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [30 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stomp the Yard" from CrystalBlaze
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Wonderful, indeed.

One does have to wonder why anyone would empower Tommy Sherman, aside from being able to puppeteer the little P@!(% by stroking his biggest erogonous zone (his ego).

Then again, that is one thing Faith and Daria lyne alike are utterly incapable of, so maybe that was the point.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [30 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stomp the Yard" from Dmitri
Review:
This is one of those nights when nothing goes right, eh?
Comments from author:
Well, not quite nothing . . .
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [29 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stomp the Yard" from unicornzvi
Review:
Very nice chapter, I liked the fight scene except for one thing - if you have a choice to take a blow on the forehead straight on, where the scull is thickest and where the shock will impast against the direction the human skeleton is best suited to receiving shocks, or on the temple where the skull is thinnest and any shock will be transferred directly into the brain and related tissue pick the forehead.

The Unicorn
Comments from author:
I will change the wording of the chapter.

And I'd like to thank you and the previous reviewer for pointing out my mistake.

Rob
Review By [unicornzvi] • Date [29 May 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stomp the Yard" from TheMaskedLurker
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In the meantime, Sherman had reacted faster than Daria had hoped. He rolled over, took the mailbox, and flung it at her head. Daria didn’t have time enough to dodge completely, though it clipped her in the temple instead of bouncing off her forehead, the way he’d probably hoped.

Still, that meant it only hurt like a son of a bitch, instead of a motherfucker. It also knocked her backwards, though she managed to keep her feet.
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--'{@

I thought your temple
Would hurt more than your forehead
When your head gets hit.

-[ Human forehead is part of the dome that forms the human skull. It is reinforced. You can do headbutts with your forehead.

Meanwhile, the temple is basically a hole at the side of the skull. It is a weak point. A blow to the temple can knock you out with one hit.

So I think it's worse to be hit near your temple than it is to be hit on your forehead. Your forehead might bleed more when hit, but you get dazed and confused when your temples gets hit. ]-
Comments from author:
True, but the key word is "clipped." Sherman was trying to knock her unconscious; instead, it skipped off the side of her head. It didn't impact the temple directly.

Still, I will change the wording. And thank you and the succeeding reviewer for pointing out my error.
Review By [TheMaskedLurker] • Date [29 May 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stomp the Yard" from MarcusRowland
Review:
It must be annoying the First to have to make do with such an idiot.
Comments from author:
You work with who's available, and Tommy Sherman was pretty evil already. This wasn't exactly part of Tommy Sherman's plan, to have Daria drive off like that, but he's learned something.

He's not quite Kevin Thompson.

Rob
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [29 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three J's" from AllenPitt
Review:
Where Daria starts her career in politics... with a glowing letter of recommendation from Mayor Wilkins....
Those 'bringers aren't very tough but eventually there are a lot of them. I was impressed by Caleb's willingness to use explosives, too. Presumably this guy will be even better at using modern stuff....
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [27 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three J's" from mymatedave
Review:
Found this series after not reading it for years, really liked the new stories.
Review By [mymatedave] • Date [26 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three J's" from Dmitri
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The 3 Js make their appearance? Neat! Too bad Quinn isn't around to appreciate them (then again it's too bad that Quinn isn't around, period).
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [26 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three J's" from (Recent Donor)ElessarNett
Review:
I keep forgetting to review this. I love the new story, and am glad you've decided to come back to this universe, as much as I desire continuation of certain other stories (no pressure on those by the way - I know you can only write what your muse allows you). Anyway, I just wanted to say I'm enjoying this, and awaiting the next installment of this, or any of your other stories, with bated breath.

Again, thank you for sharing the products of your wonderful imagination.
Review By [(Recent Donor)ElessarNett] • Date [25 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pizza Run" from Frardowin
Review:
Thank you, I now have another one of your stories to watch like a hawk for updates.

This series is full of awesome.
Review By [Frardowin] • Date [25 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pizza Run" from MarcusRowland
Review:
Three? They are so out of their depth. Ten might make Faith sweat a little...
Comments from author:
This is part of Tommy Sherman's vague plan. He was an arrogant, sleazy jerk, but he didn't seem to be a Kevin-level moron. He's trying to figure out what he's dealing with.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [25 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Two I's" from Caira
Review:
Tommy Sherman's still alive in this universe? Damn. Next fic awards I see with a "best dystopia" category, you're nominated.
Comments from author:
Yeah, he wasn't there when the goalpost fell because Daria hadn't been there to provoke and be provoked. The timing was off.

On the other hand, Ms. Li's dead, so maybe it's not a complete dystopia.
Review By [Caira] • Date [25 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pizza Run" from randomspaces
Review:
Great start, I only just recieved my copy of Daria, so this story has been holding the fort. Can't wait for more.

Dave
Review By [randomspaces] • Date [25 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pizza Run" from Ben
Review:
Without the loophole created by Buffy's death and resurrection, the First Evil will have to expend even more of its resources for rather less of a gain, and with risks of major (as in centuries lasting) setbacks to its plans even larger. Unless it can arrange circumstances to force Daria/Faith and/or Jane into a major Nice Job Breaking It Hero moment, it would be acting almost completely out of character, considering that it was so risk averse that it made Stalin look like Fredrick the Great.

Also, I think Tommy Sherman is/was possibly the worst descision the First could make for a proxy. Since Principal Li was drained by Glory, the next best candidates are Terry Barry Barlowe (Better as a client of Wolfram and Hart, to be sure, but still much better than Tommy Sherman), Claude and Romanica, Dr. Shar, Janet Barch (as a misandrist supply-side to Caleb) or even Bing and/or the Spatula Man.
Comments from author:
The First is kind of off balance at the moment It had long-term plans that were thrown off by the sudden appearance of Daria/Faith Morgendorffer. It is not out for simple revenge, though. Its new long-term projections say that killing Daria/Faith is a good idea.

As for the candidates: I wanted someone who was leaning towards being a genuine villain, and who was in or near Lawndale. Terry Perry Barlowe's main motivation appeared to be money and self-image, and he and the Amaz0n modeling agency people aren't anywhere near Lawndale, anyway. The DJs were clueless, not evil; Barch and Caleb would have killed each other, and Caleb's out there as well. Never thought of Dr. Shar.
Review By [Ben] • Date [24 May 10] • Not Rated
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