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Review of chapter "5" from DarkFaerieYumi
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I don't know...This is so cool I loves it mucho. More soon please.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [21 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from Dragonwolftiger
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I say give her (the girlfriend) the choice. After all Xander wouldn't like it if someone *cough* Buffy *cough* took his choices away from him, would he? Great story please continue.
Review By [Dragonwolftiger] • Date [20 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from TJG
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I do not know the game, but having wrote that:

On the girlfriend route, Xander is likely to be too busy to get involved in a relationship of that sort for maybe a decade. He might keep his options open, though he is not likely to get to the sex phase and probably argue that he will not have sex before marriage or equal level of commitment (though a big part is to make sure the would be girlfriend can handle his life and not freak out). If he is immortal, then a big criteria is for the would-be girlfriend to also be immortal or very long lived. If he needs to satisfy sexual urges, then he could make a meat doll since he is thinking of making a body for the Tokra anyhow.

While they might not know it, it probably would be better for Joyce to keep the symbiote as it would keep her from dieing later.

For education, he could probably focus on biotechnology, biology, medicine, food and waste processing, and cryptozoology. He could found a biotech/medical company. Some "simple" profitable products could involve altering cheap related plants and animals to very costly and rare cousins like converting common mussels into producing high quality pearls as high speeds or maybe abalone (if he can make sure the stigma of "franken foods" can't be detected on them or be used against him in the future). Having something that can generate high quality silk and other fibers could be another source of revenue. Maybe combining the right type of plants could result in a watermelon-like plant that can grow in high-salt environments (like either a desert or next to an ocean or sea) that puts most of its energy into making watermelon-like fruits that is primarily filled with potable water and maybe some nutrients though not to sports-drink levels. Some products would actually welcome biotechnology being used, like the attempt to make a true "blue rose".

Xander could get ideas from comics, games, and cartoons for biological items and equipment. Some may require some adaptation from what he currently has or can get access to.

On the crytozoology aspect, Xander could keep an eye out for supernatural creatures and their remains that he could access or steal. Like unicorns or their horns, or phoenix and other creatures like dragons. There are also the idea of magical plants and fruits too (like the various forms of immortality like ambrosia). He might even try to track down the remains of extinct plants and animals to see if he can (with some experimentation) bring them back into existence possibly by altering any existing distantly related plants or animals. Some of the animal and plant remains might be gotten from the trade in magic related goods, if presumably some version of the Magic Box is in operation at this point or maybe through Willy's or his contacts. Though getting these things could be expensive. Maybe Xander can do some business gathering parts and remains of enemies for sale on the magic market.
Review By [TJG] • Date [19 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from sunamee
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Great update. I like what you are doing since Xander doesn't have access to a hatchery yet. I hope Xander gets a girlfriend that is turned into a Hybrid. Maybe Joyce or Cordelia. Since Egeria is a queen and Cordelia is Queen C.

I look forward to the next update either way.
Review By [sunamee] • Date [19 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from valdimarian
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Just for the kookyness, I think someone should have gone as a protoss, or maybe just find someone who could fill in the roll. I dunno, the idea of a half human half zerg dating a half human half protoss is just amusing to me.
Review By [valdimarian] • Date [18 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from yog
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The question should be "Should he have a girlfriend at all?" And I would say no. Why? Because he is to busy, because good romance is hard to write, especially in not very long chapters, because there is no one really suitable. If you are certain to give him one, than I'd suggest to start her as human, than change her. To save her live maybe. It could be Kendra's clone. Loki could have made more than one.
Review By [yog] • Date [18 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from Morgomir
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Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [18 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from Dusel
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Not bad. I'm on the opinion that it would have been fun if Egeria stayed in Joyce for the foreseeable future but it's your choice. Hmmm...I don't think you're dramatizing Kendra's return enough, you're jumping from one scene to the other directly, no build up, no other information or anything. This is a good story with a good plot so I'm reading it and making some stuff like the emotional responses of the charters in my head but I hope you understood what I meant - the story is somewhat bare.

On the other thing about Xander...does he even have a reproductive organ? The Zerg breed through Hatcheries with larva's evolving into a multitude of beasts, now Xander is basically an Infected Human but are all the needed organs there? And if he DOES have a GF he definitely needs to Zerg her. HELLO new dominant species.
Review By [Dusel] • Date [18 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from thsunami
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I would say human first later hybrid, i would go for a rather unique pariing either buffy or willow that stays faithful to him rather then faith, anya or cordilia that are the faves.

If not your liking then perhaps a crossover paring that of the charmed ones, perhaps keeping alive the sister that died by regiving her life as a hybrid after they dated a bit.
Review By [thsunami] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4" from vabbielove
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Xander seems over-powered. Whistler could show up on behalf of the Powers That Be and place limiters on Xander to diminish his ability to infect and alter living creatures, as well as reduce his ability to take on the traits of creatures absorbed. The problem with Balance is that you protect both the Good and the Evil for the sake of maintaining the status quo, and the Zerg could purge Earth of demonkind if Xander decided to stop holding back.
Review By [vabbielove] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from CrystalBlaze
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On the Xander dilemmas:

He should grow a mindless but usefully equipped body, one that can handle the stresses of the Hellmouth.. then let Egeria take it.

If he's polite enough about it, this might get him a girlfriend in the process.

But he needs to hurry, before Buffy the Never-Wrong-When-She's-Wrong tries amateur phlebotomy.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from ChiVayne
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I agree with the others who indicated that a hybrid girlfriend for Xander makes more sense.
Review By [ChiVayne] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from Zoroz
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good chapter. and as for the girlfriend thing in the authors notes....i vote for a harem :) then you can have all of the above in choice hehe
Review By [Zoroz] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5" from TimeTwist
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Good story so far. Don't know much about Starcraft, or the Zerg, but I have seen the concept used before in other science fiction stories, so I get the idea. I just hope you don't turn Xander into too much of a Super Xander. As for girlfriend, human, alien, or anything can be useful. In fact you can even have him take a few years, and come of with many options for non-human or enhanced human such as Drusilla either ensouled, saned up, or still just as bad and nuts but just unable to harm Xander. Nina Ash the werewolf that Angel saved, Illyria, Gwen Raiden the lady with electrical powers, one of the Jaffa women that shows up later in Stargate, one of the Tok'ra say Anise/Freya. Then of course there's still Anya/Anyanka. The possibilities are endless.
Review By [TimeTwist] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5" from Auden
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I think Ampata would have been the perfect girlfriend for Xander in this story. Perhaps he could have whipped her up some living armor to sate her need for life energy? If nothing else they could bond over being a bit different. Perhaps he could come up with a way to revive her?
Review By [Auden] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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