Nice chapter! Your characterization of Dawn and Daniel is pretty well done, as is the babble-speak conversation between Willow and Dawn, because as you know, nothing beats a good dose of Willowbabble.

Awaiting more with bated breath.

Interesting start and very well written.

There are a couple of errors in Ch. 2: "The new Council wielded more overt powerful" should say "The new Council wielded more overt power" and also you refer to a "USP" port - should be USB port.

Oops. Missed those, huh ... now corrected. Thanks for the heads-up.

You've got me hooked! Great start, and unique as well. It's nice to read something that throws a new twist into the mix. I look forward to reading more!

Weelllll,...how about a combination of the two? From that passage/inscription, it sounds like at some point your two worlds crossed paths. Goaul'd came to earth and was beaten back by a Slayer-led army. I wonder if they asked one or two of the more "friendlier to Terrans" Tokra, what kind of info they have noted down from that time.

Hmmm, actually come to think of it, I wonder if they either put up some kind of "Quarrentine" or "Stay out of here" sign in the spacial area, or just plain forgot about it. If the Goaul'd of that time left with the usual "I will be back" speech, the guy (and/or the soldiers with that particular Goaul'd) apparently HAVEN'T been back yet. (At least they hadn't until the Stargate had got dug up the SGC started.)

Nice start...can't wait to see where you take it!

Very good start! I'm exited to see what happens next. I like your characterizations of Dawn and Daniel; very believable. I am eagerly awaiting an update!
Laters!
Mellusene ^_^

Wonderful!! I'm a huge fan of Dawn/Daniel stories, whether it's as a romantic pairing, as friends only, or even as family. I just love the two of them... and I absolutely adored this. Can't wait for more!!

Very nice start

Superb.

Awesome! Definitely looking forward to reading more :)

Not bad! It certainly has a hook to it. I can't wait to find out what happens the NEXT Tuesday! lol

Excellent work.

Great beginning! I can't wait to read more of this. There's sure to be more trouble to come :D

Promising start. I like the bonding and then distrust spawned by the attack. Hope to read more soon.

I love how you started the story out and I can't wait to see what happens next. Good luck with the story.

Ok now this sound interesting.