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Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 6)" from Godogma
I enjoyed the chapter after my last review to give it another read, and sent my concerns onward in an email, I can see definite improvement in the further chapters away from the original point I had problems with.
Comments from author:
Hi Godogma--

Thanks for giving this fic another try; I very much appreciate your feedback. The Bruce-Xander dynamic is a tricky one to balance, given how dependent they are on each other at this point in their respective character arcs. Toning down Bruce too much, e.g., makes him a complete non-entity, while toning him up too much makes him into a caricature of himself, and a complete bully to boot. Anyway, this next chapter is the concluding one for this arc of Xander playing the squire to Bruce's knight; the arc that follows is Xander's version of the Gauntlet, his chance to prove his independence and worth as a player in his own right.

Thanks again for the review; I look forward to hearing what you think of where this goes next.

Review By [Godogma] • Date [1 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 6)" from LFW
This is an excellent example of a young Xander being matured by mentoring from Bruce.
Literally from chapter to chapter.
Good read
Hoping for more
Comments from author:
What a compliment! That's exactly what I'm going for. Now to flesh out the incorporeal Bruce, who's proving quite reticent about his own character growth...
Review By [LFW] • Date [30 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 6)" from Dusel
This is good, damn, lost a thought I had earlier...ah yeah! Have Bruce use Raven from the Teen Titans as an example, her lineage and where she was reaised. It will be good to get the point across.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the suggestion, and for leaving feedback in the first place. I'll definitely take it into account. Hope you enjoy the next chapter; I intend for this arc to end with a bang.
Review By [Dusel] • Date [30 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from kamal
actualy bruce won't have a problem with killing vampires both superman and batman have stated that there no killing rule doesn't apply to vampires
Comments from author:
Hi kamal--

Thanks for the feedback; sorry for the lateness of this reply. Bruce is using the morality of killing vampires as a teaching moment. He knows Xander still harbors quite a bit of guilt regarding killing vampire Jesse, and is trying to force him to think it through logically. I was hoping that having Bruce immediately kill a vampire after that conversation would signal to readers that he certainly has no qualms putting down anonymous souless vampires, but perhaps that didn't come through very well. Alas!

Thanks again for leaving a review; I hope you enjoy what's to come.
Review By [kamal] • Date [24 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from BeccaFran
This is great! What a wonderful idea for a crossover. I love the story so far and will be eagerly awaiting more. :)
Comments from author:
Next chapter won't be out until next week, but I have all sorts of evil plots and plans for it. I'm glad you're enjoying the piece so far; thanks for letting me know!
Review By [BeccaFran] • Date [19 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from RafMereC
Great chapter.
I love how you portrayed Kendra.
Comments from author:
Kendra is a bit tricky to pin down linguistically (o the horrible accent!), but I otherwise enjoy writing her. The show leaves so much open in regards to her character and background that one can really go to town creatively.

Glad you're enjoying things so far. Thanks for the review!
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [11 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from VillageOrchid
Enjoying some of the au moments caused by Xander's proactive actions and questions.
Comments from author:
[apologies for the late reply]

The AU moments will be more and more frequent as time goes on. We're still only two weeks out from Halloween (I know--very concentrated episode period! Xander's week in the hospital was absolutely crucial for laying a foundation character development-wise), but as you can see, tiny adjustments begin to have a huge snowball effect. I mean, just imagine what Spike will do when he hears on Tuesday that there's another Slayer in town...

Thanks as always for the review; I look forward to hearing what you think of the next installment.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [6 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from Dusel
Man, Xander's quiping almost made me smash my face into my desk, seriously...I know that Kendra is beautiful and naughty-dream inducing but Good God, get a grip Xander, I'd like my nose intact!

Other then that the last scene was good, the murder part. Now it being a Demon I don't have a lot of sympathy but this isn't mainstream DC where the only good demons are Blue and Red Devil. A lot of Buffy demons just come from different dimensions and not strait from Hell so the difference is there.
Comments from author:
[apologies for the late reply--offline stuff]

Xander does seem to inspire quite a bit of head-bashing on the part of those around him; Bruce in particular was having trouble restraining himself in this section.

As we'll see further into the fic, there's a lot more to the local demonic population than Buffy ever saw on the show. For example, the large subset of non-vampiric demons who can 'pass' as human: it takes someone with supernatural senses (like Kendra) to tell the difference. It's not something the Council likes to advertise, since it can 'confuse' Slayers about the boundary between demon and human, and make it easier for them to accidentally kill the wrong people.

But yes, you hit the demon part right on the head. Hope you enjoy where this subplot goes, and thanks for the review.
Review By [Dusel] • Date [6 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from Vilkath
Oh great the guilt trip from the bat over something Xander could not of stopped even if he wanted to. Of course in the world of perfect hindsight Bruce can nit pick at xander but I don't see him do anything either. It all boils down to the issue that came up a few chapters ago, that Bruce can tear apart Xanders emotions and use them against him and call it 'training' but if Xander even offends Bruce at all on calling out his weakness he gets the silent treatment or worse.

Given how poorly Batman really did durring his life at ever solving anything, arresting the same criminals over and over again is hardly an acomplishment. You would think Bruce would try to train Xander to be BETTER than he was, not just a half hearted copy. That he is still trying to impart human morality onto demon slaying is a bad sign, then again he is the man who would constantly capture mass murders alive and never question how they constantly got right back out of jail a few weeks/months later.
Comments from author:
In Bruce's mind, Xander could at least have called out, or made a motion to go help. He's criticizing Xander for the hesitation. Willy calls people those whom Kendra and Xander split into 'human' and 'demon'; it's the sort of subtlety Bruce picks up on. The demons at the bar are obviously sapient, and at least one of them showed concern for Willy's well-being. Bruce's conclusion: there may be more to the demonic populations than the Watcher's Council would like to have the Slayer believe. He expects more of Xander re: making his own independent judgment on these matters; he doesn't want Xander to blindly follow others' opinions.

Frankly, right now Bruce is more concerned with dealing with the Watcher's Council than with killing demons. The Council has control over an army of young women highly skilled at martial arts (n.b. 'squads of former Potentials') in addition to the 'metahuman' Slayer; it has money galore; and there appears to be little accountability to those it is supposed to protect and serve. All these are recipes for human corruption. He can make Xander an incredible martial artist, but that's for naught if Xander just becomes yet another tool in the Council's arsenal or a subject of their experiments. Demons threaten Xander's bodily survival, the Council threatens his integrity & independence, his soul if you will, and his friends.

Thanks as always for the review and your detailed comments; I look forward to hearing what you think about how this subplot develops. The primary focus of the next installment, however, is the Order of Teraka.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [6 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from eriktheviking
A well written and fun introduction to Kendra, thanks.
Comments from author:
My pleasure! Glad you enjoyed.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [6 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from CrystalBlaze
Kendra has a lot to learn. So does Xander, mostly on who and how far to trust and follow.
Comments from author:
Most certainly. Willy goes with 'people', Kendra & Xander with 'demon' vs. 'human'. Kendra's presence raises important questions about bias and prejudice in regards to how people look vs who they are. Whether that manifests in comments about 'exotic' and 'brown' or 'almost human' and 'monster', these are things Xander will have to sort out if he wants to live with himself as a decent human being. Bruce won't let him get away with ignorance.

This is also a big introduction to the Watcher's Council vs. Scoobies dynamic. Let's just say we don't have to wait for a Cruciamentum for that conflict to come to a head.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [6 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)" from norgco
Cool, except for the last bit.

Letting demons kill each other is murder?

Ah, the Scoobies were, at this point in the series, working on the principle that demons had a right to die in whatever way was most convenient to the Slayer (or Xander etc). Demons were vermin to be exterminated, full stop, finish, THE END. Allowing any doubt or hesitation was suicide, demons being physically superior to humans and preying on them for food.

Even later with 'good demons' being introduced, the basic principle was, as Colonel Trautman put it in Rambo, "When in doubt, kill." Actually they killed unless they had a good ID on the particular demon as not threatening. Anything else endangered the entire human race.

Or did I miss something?
Comments from author:
Willy went with 'people' where Xander & Kendra split 'humans' and 'demons.' There's more to the demonic community than Buffy sees; for one thing, there's that whole subset of the population that can 'pass' as human. It takes someone with supernatural senses to tell the difference.

Bruce is the new element. He wants Xander to think, not automatically condemn. And his instinct is to prevent harm to the innocent. That need for a 'good ID' is driving him batty, to use a terrible pun--information is power, and Bruce is in a world where he doesn't have a Batcave with supercomputers full of categorized info on every single type of being ever heard of.

Thanks for the detailed review.
Review By [norgco] • Date [6 Nov 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 4)" from Morgomir
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you! This next one is almost done.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [31 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 4)" from Wolflady
A lot of the pro-Xander stories super-charge Xander. I'm glad you aren't doing that. I'm also glad you aren't magically making all of Xander problems disappear. Xander was/is my favorite character in the show. A Xander-the-hero who is still Xander is a nice change.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback--I'm glad you're enjoying this so far.
Review By [Wolflady] • Date [11 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Knight and Squire (Pt. 4)" from Hecatonchires
That dinner conversation just changed the genre to horror
Comments from author:
Xander's parents have making each other miserable down to an art form. I knew what I was going for, and even I was surprised at how vicious they got. It was excruciating for both Bruce and Xander to sit through (though for different reasons).

Thanks for the review; I always appreciate the feedback.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [10 Oct 10] • Not Rated
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