Review By [Blackett] • Date [21 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "the start of something good" from Sithspit
Review:
I never watched Charmed, but you manage to tell the tale to where it doesn't really matter, which is good. All the players are getting into place for whatever's coming, which is also good.
But you need a beta. Seriously, seriously need a beta. Your single largest flaw is incorrect word usage: "major" instead of "mayor", "close" instead of "clothes", "cloak" instead of "clock", and other grammar issues. While it hampers the story, luckily, it isn't killing it. Getting that beta will really make it so much smoother you'll have a winner.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [Sithspit] • Date [8 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "the start of something good" from CPTSkip
Review:
For some odd reason I never read your story until now. I am finding it delightful. OK, some of your spelling sucks, but the story is great. Lol! "Cloths" should be "clothes" for instance.
But I really like your characterizations of the Scoobies and the Halliwell clan. Plus, any story that brings back Tara gets oodles of bonus points from me. I'd personally would like to see more of Willow blending with her new family before they all meet the Scoobies.
I just hope you 'ship Faith and Buffy. Buffy never had a really sane relationship with any male on the show and there was always so much chemistry between the Chosen Two even when they were enemies.
I look forward to reading more of your story and thank you for the entertainment so far. If you plan on rehabilitating some villains, I'd love to see Cole come back and be forgiven for his evil deeds. Just saying. Lol!
Review of chapter "the start of something good" from kayron
Review:
The part about dinner can end there. They have years to catch up on, so they can continue getting to know each other at the club. I thought it was my imagination at first, but I am definitely geting the feeling that there is a potential Buffy/Faith pairing here. Interesting.
Review By [kayron] • Date [5 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "the start of something good" from Cmiller
Review:
*snicker* that was great and I can't wait for more.