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In The twilight After Halloween

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Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
BWAH-HAHAHA!!! Sniff, twilight Xander is gonna be hilarious! Please wrie more!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [4 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from lillyb
Review:
I think this is brilliant and hope you update soon. PS. I'm Dyslexic and can say that regardless of any issues that causes one of my biggest problems has always been the empathy impaired. PPS I'm a special ed. English teacher now;)
Review By [lillyb] • Date [4 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from oldgirllost
Review:
Hope your writer's block breaks up into a million little pieces that float away so you can write more of this.
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [28 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from twlight
Review:
I have to wonder how Xander is going to control his thirst. I love Xander's gift it's rather cool. I am eagerly awaiting the sequel to this wonderful story.
Review By [twlight] • Date [13 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Mechconstrictor
Review:
Nice story. I hope to see more of it.
Review By [Mechconstrictor] • Date [1 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from oldgirllost
Review:
I hope to see the next installment of this soon as this is a truly new idea and very well done.

Thanks
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [2 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
WOOOT! I remember this on FF.net. But I forget I remember asking you if the books existed there or not but I don't remember your answer. Care to re enlighten me again?
Comments from author:
The books don't exist. Xander will be the first of his kind.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [11 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Bobboky
Review:
awesome
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [9 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from (Past Donor)severuswinchester
Review:
I enjoyed this chapter and liked the development of Xander's character. Are you writing a sequel?
Review By [(Past Donor)severuswinchester] • Date [9 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from darkgreyknight
Review:
Interesting take on twilight. I like it.
Review By [darkgreyknight] • Date [9 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Prometeus
Review:
I read your summary, noticed you failed grammar forever, and decided not to read your story on that basis. Seriously, the difference between 'does save' and 'does not save' is pretty damned large and getting it wrong can be _extremely_ off-putting.

If you're not going to put the minimal effort it takes to fix your grammar, how do I know you're going to put in the effort to write a decent plot, to keep the characters self-consistent, or to have the story make any sense?

Grammar mistakes that bad on something as visible as the summary means the story will rate less than 5, maybe even a 2 or 3. Being generous, I now give you my highest possible rating.

Lastly, if anyone has ever told you that technical skill doesn't matter so long as you're creative, they were lying.
Comments from author:
First off thanks for pointing that out.

Secondly I'm DYSLEXIC you jerk! So grammar mistakes have NOTHING to do with my ablilty to write good stories.

If you need some kind of proof, one of my stories has been nominated for CoA this year! So my writing can't be as bad as you are implying. Not mention that it would have been quarantined!

Huh? what's that about rating? So after slating the summary you must have read the story as you can't rate it without reading it first, if you have then book and cover comes to mind. I work hard on my stories and I don't have a beta because I'm an aspiring author and think that I have to learn to do it myself and not rely on someone else to it for me. This whole thing is for learning. So I REALLY do appreciate that people point these things out.

HOWEVER I've just looked at the summary. I don't say 'does save' and a quote myself :)

'Even not getting his costume from Ethan's saves Xander from chaos of Halloween or the changes that will affect his life forever. The strength and speed are cool, the thirst and eyes not so cool.'

Note the 'even not' at the start of the sentence. Putting 'does not save' would have become a double negative and a worse grammar mistake than you were complaining about. The worst thing I did was leave out a 'the' before chaos. Next time I suggest you carefully read things before you get on your high horse.

P.S I can think of many ways to say what you did without sounding like a pompous jerk. ;)
Review By [Prometeus] • Date [9 Oct 10] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from kayron
Review:
I guess that Xander is going to have to Find the Cullens and get some help with his control issues! He seems to be following Spike's pre-chip motto of lie...the humans are Happy Meals on legs!
Comments from author:
Sorry to say but Xander is on his own for this.

No Cullens the friendly neighbourhood vamps to help him out!
Review By [kayron] • Date [8 Oct 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RHatch
Review:
This is a really good premise, and I can't wait to see where it goes. :)
Review By [RHatch] • Date [8 Oct 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Bobboky
Review:
good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [6 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Darkstrider
Review:
An interesting start! I do like the Twilight series and would liek to see more crosses, especially with Xander, sadly all the ones I have come across so far are Slash, which I do not believe matches Xander's character at all! Don't go down that route! But please contine. It will be interesting seeing how everything develops! Will there be any Twilight characters making an appearance or is Xander the 'first' of his kind?
Comments from author:
Xander is the first of his kind, so no Twilight characters will show up.

Don't worry I'm not a slash writer.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Darkstrider] • Date [5 Oct 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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