For some reason I missed this when you originally posted it.
Just a quick review before reading the rest of it.
Poor Buffy, off to the North Country (I grew up on the edges of Fort Drum, before the 10th Mountain moved in (and occasionally visit family up there (in the summer if I can help it), and it gets cold up there in the winter. Frozen slayer... brr...)
Good so far. Has that realistic feel to it I wished my fics had.
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Oh I spent time at Drum...in the winter...as light infantry...
Fast paced, official sounding details and very interesting. Off to read the next in series.
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Glad you liked it! I have been moving cross-country for the last couple of months so my writing output has suffered. Hopefully I'll be back up to speed soon.
Wow, what an ending... five stars for the story all the way from start to finish. If you ever write a sequel to this I hope it will be something with similar pacing and mood... Cheers!!!
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [5 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Would a soldier answer a radio call with his unit number and not a more useful code? I guess it simplifies the story flow. Ch 11: Was it the Taliban Commander that asked Buffy what she was? She could have capitalized on that and not make it more a western peculiarity. Slayers being called are not always non Muslim. Yes it would open the story to more chapters and divergent paths and directions. That is alright for this story to stay focused and keep the energy moving to a crescendo, which you attained. So also is the final word and very cool future possibilities. Buffy in the CIA with Covert Affairs crossover (or separate story) in the future. More Grunt work in the future would be awesome too. I hope this review made more sense than it does to me right now. Good Job.
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It would have screwed up the pacing is the answer to both of those. I wanted the frantic feeling as a horde was sweeping in.
You gave me a bit of a scare when you reveiled what the cross was. I love the keep, and I was actually excited when the Tomb came out. I've rarely been that disappointed in a book. I loved the character of Repairman Jim, but that was just about the last thing I enjoyed about.
You, however did a good job and I really enjoyed the work.
I hope you might be enticed into more with your incarnation of Buffy, but if you don't want to mess with success I kind of understand.
Thanks for sharing.
Review By [JoeB] • Date [4 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
While I don't really see Buffy *ever* choosing the military, even for ROTC (hey, student loans are *easy* to get), you did a fantastic job.
As to the future: SERIES! *Please* Each story could be one operation involving Buffy in the Army (as a Leutenant at first, of course, all would be after she graduates and is doing her required time in the Army) and the Supernatural. Some could have Faith as a guest star.
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Have you ever seen what the tuition at Northwestern is? Loans may be easy to get, but paying them off sucks.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [4 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]