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Review of chapter "17" from (Recent Donor)zima
Review:
Great story, was really in to starcraft when the game first came out.
Going to be fun to see what happens when Xander leaves earth to explore space
Review By [(Recent Donor)zima] • Date [13 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from ladiciusevol
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I have really enjoyed reading this story, and I can hardly wait till the next update. By the way is there any progression in regards to the next chapter?
Review By [ladiciusevol] • Date [25 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "17" from Hanzo
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♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story.♥
Review By [Hanzo] • Date [15 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from skynetgol
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this is a cool story and hope to read more soon!!!
Review By [skynetgol] • Date [6 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from stargatefan
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I really like this story so far. This is my first exposure to Starcraft but I'm a major Stargate fan and have written many fanfics about it before. You have a serious talent for writing. You blend the two stories well and write without too much angst or drama, a style I enjoy reading very much. I'm curious if at some point you plan to have Xander paired romantically with any female characters. Sam would be a great partner for him or perhaps Amy/Egeria. This is a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [stargatefan] • Date [4 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from Teucrian
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Interesting reading. You could definitely throw in some interesting crises now that you've got the Asgard messing with Zerg genes.
Review By [Teucrian] • Date [3 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "17" from FemXanderForever
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I really enjoy this, since the only real Starcraft/BtVS Xovers I've seen were really crappy ones where Xander lives forever and becomes a Marine or something.

On a lighter note, though, I do have a question. With the whole absorbing thing, and the manipulating his desires to rampage and all, as well as the armour, I think, given that it has been proven possible, thanks to Kerrigan, that the bloodlust could be staved off completely, that the process of cutting off the desire to fight, kill, and assimilate is basically destroyed, it stands to reason that the same sort of Semi-Cerebrate could be maintained, or even grown into his body, which would also help to control his virus spreading enough to almost allow him regular contact with anyone.

So, I say keep up the good work, and update soon,
FemXanderForever.
Review By [FemXanderForever] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from weirdbutgifted
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Really glad you changed this chapter from the original version - it dropped the story for me from 'must read' to 'maybe on a rainy day'. Much better - I would have found it exceptionally hard to identify with Xander at all positively after the original.
Review By [weirdbutgifted] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from Gideon
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Great story! I also read the original version of this Zerg!Xander story but I think I like this one better. The biohazard virus is a nice touch and fits well with the existence and purpose of the Zerg. It also provides a bit more of a challenge to Xander, which I think is a good thing.
You have quite a few strands of story going here and it is interesting to see Maybourne get closer to them and the Stargate team finding little clues here and there also. If only Maybourne wasn't such an evil bastard. It looks like he would be smart enough to make a useful ally. Unlike Maggie Walsh. It seems like Xander and Egeria will be offplanet by the time anyone catches up with them though. I hope Amy will be pleased with the head start that Xander has made when she finds out about it.
I have noticed a few errors in word choice or spelling so a beta reader might be useful for you. The scene jumps can also be a little disorientating where it is difficult to know how much time has passed. I would be happy to help with beta reading if you like.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [27 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from Godogma
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Well, I read it and it was far higher quality writing than the first iteration of the fic it also has little to no character growth beyond new abilities and also has depressingly little character interaction. It also shouldn't be listed as Xander centered because frankly there is very little from Xander's point of view in the story. Its focused on Xander's changes but the story is mostly from others' points of view.

Everyone treats Xander as a welcome if not trusted ally and he has no friends or at least no interaction and conversation with his friends. You're using enemies to drive the plot forward and frankly its tiresome and there isn't anything to keep me coming back to read further because the character might as well be an OC with the name Xander tacked on; it retains so little of Xander's core personality or traits that he's nearly unrecognizable to start with.

If there is a flavor its that you're trying to minimize "Xander's" effect on the world of Buffy beyond using him to kill big stuff for which we see no fight scenes and also with no one for him to interact with on a more personal level and I don't mean romantically I mean period there is so little character interaction as for it to be said there is none at all and that is just not pleasant to read.

I don't expect you to change it or even expand your modus operandi to include solutions to the problems I have with the fic so I'm going to part ways here, hopefully someone can enjoy your fic, I for one cannot.
Review By [Godogma] • Date [24 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "17" from Darkstrider
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Not too bad. Still, so far this chapter there has been little forward momentum in the plot and you need to keep it up in order to retain interest!
Look forward to more Xander goodness, but I wouldn't mind being able to see some light at the end of the tunnel for him so he's not eternally alone!
Review By [Darkstrider] • Date [24 Mar 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from Sdarian
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This is pretty neat. The only real problem I have with this is the virus aspect of it. If there was such a fast spreading virus that all zerg breath out, there would be no real need for them to attack anything. Just develop some cloaked zerglings and have them sneak into all the major cities on a targeted planet then wait while breathing heavily until the population is converted or nuked out of existence trying to stop the plague.

But whatever, this story was based around that idea, so I'll just have to live with it. Looking forward to reading more. Keep up the good work!
Review By [Sdarian] • Date [23 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "17" from LordSia
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The Asgard... Are about to intentionally infect themselves with Zerg HEV?
Well, fuck. There goes the galaxy.
On the other hand, it might also give Xander complete control over the Asgard. Hm, well... No! Bad thoughts!
Review By [LordSia] • Date [23 Mar 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17" from CageFire
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Well, I honestly can't say I'm disappointed, as I made no secret of what I thought of the subject matter in the other version of this chapter. I do like this version better.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [23 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "17" from Bobboky
Review:
much better
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [23 Mar 11] • Not Rated
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