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Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Telling the Team" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
Although Riley-bashing can be amusing, if approached correctly, I hope here he's "just" another victim of the NID/Walsh. Canon Riley is just too middle America/Captain America-ish to agree to something so evil. You really have to twist his character around to make him agree to everything this implies.

Not that I ever thought Buffy/Riley was a workable idea long term. But that was because they come from such different "cultures" (Iowa and California might as well be on different planets when depicted by Hollywood.).

(I can see him (Riley) having some grand, knight in shining armor, plan to rescue her from the evil NID/Walsh and have that turn into a farce of epic proportions involving SG-1 because she's (Buffy) out for NID blood when she finds out but he just wants to do some rescuing and claim his "reward" like all good knights.)
Comments from author:
You make a good point about Riley at this time in canon. I'm not so sure about him when he was the human slurpee, though. I'm rather tempted to make him the clueless grunt who doesn't question orders that clearly need to be questioned. That certainly was his character in season 4 until Buffy 'corrupted' him with her anarchist views.
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [31 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Telling the Team" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Glad to see more of this story. Don't know why you had to repost, though.
Comments from author:
Deleted the account it was originally under. Wasn't sure I wanted to have it on my name until I saw that people found out that I was the author anyway.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [31 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from deedo
Review:
Well, I really like it!! I'm looking forward to see what will hapen next! :)

Somehow I think it would be really cool if Rodney turns out to be the father. Just think about the hilarious freak out he's going to have and there'll probably lots of snarking between him and Buffy (it helps, that she's not really a dumb blonde) ^__^ Ohh, do you think slayers have the ATA gene?? *wanders off to ponder the possibilities*
Comments from author:
Ohh, tempting. We'll have to see when it comes time to decide who the daddy is. Definitely like the ATA gene thing though - even if they don't know about it yet. (this is pre-Atlantis)
Review By [deedo] • Date [30 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Of Mages and Lesbians" from CPTSkip
Review:
Your Willow is darn near perfect. I look forward to reading more of your story.
Comments from author:
Thanks. The Scooby/SG meeting should be interesting - especially if I want to avoid the cliches of meetings in other stories. Not that cliches are bad...after all, there's a reason people keep using them...and now *I'm* starting to sound like Willow. LOL.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Of Mages and Lesbians" from Gideon
Review:
Uh oh, sounds like Riley knows something Buffy doesn't know and has been told to keep his hands (and other parts) to himself. Or maybe he doesn't know and they just ordered him to be celibate and gave him a cover story. Depends how sympathetic we want Riley to be I guess. On a more positive note, Willow's hinting went better here than just dropping it on Buffy did in canon. Another example that secrets are bad, m'kay?
Comments from author:
I should have at least a couple more chapters before I have to decide whether Riley's a bad guy or just a patsy. And Willow...yeah, if you're going to drop a bombshell like that, I think you should probably ease into a little better than she did on the show.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Of Mages and Lesbians" from immortalsilence
Review:
whoopeee more chapters pretty please
Comments from author:
Hehehe, glad you're enjoying it.
Review By [immortalsilence] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Of Mages and Lesbians" from RevDorothyL
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Riley's unwillingness to get too physical with Buffy raises the nasty suspicion that he knows about Prof. Walsh's plan for Slayer progeny (in which case, I hope he gets his head handed to him by Buffy, the Scoobies, and/or the SGC).
Comments from author:
I haven't decided what to do with Riley just yet. Hoping Musie will figure it out soon.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Of Mages and Lesbians" from Genuka
Review:
You know you're evil right? More please!
Comments from author:
Of course I am. I couldn't be a fanfic writer if I weren't. Okay, so I probably could, but it wouldn't be as much fun for me.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [29 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from (Past Donor)shadowslayers
Review:
Sounds very promising, then again.... I rarely come across a story of yours i do not enjoy.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the very kind compliment.
Review By [(Past Donor)shadowslayers] • Date [28 Oct 10] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from Lotusja
Review:
Yeah Another Buffy pregnant stories.. Love It
Comments from author:
I just can't help myself, it seems.
Review By [Lotusja] • Date [28 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from YourDoomed
Review:
Ok, the dance of secret groups. Well since your writing in the period of the initiative and that the group was a branch of the NID, then your mix is going to be a little difficult but I love the plot so ok!

SG1 will come incognito in order to check on the situation and comes across their Blonde headed pregnant "Hok'tar killing a demon, vampire or etc. and they meet that way.

Or SG1 is fighting the initiative and Buffy is fighting Adam not realizing that she is pregnant and both groups witnessing each others awesomeness (lol) that is how they discover each other.

Or Buffy notices that SG1 is spying on her and has Willow hack the system to find out what is going on..confronts both the Initiative and SG1 in one go but things go nuts when Walsh's experiment goes nuts killing her and attacking all of them.. they go back to scooby headquarters where they do that whole little spell thing or whatever you want to do and Buffy goes kicking ass with her gang and SG1 backing her or insert your own plot device here.

Or SG1 goes and tells Buffy the news and she snaps and stomps out and goes to the Initiative and kicks Riley and all of their asses for trying to use her with SG1 as back up...then have a big group meeting where Buffy and Giles introduces SG1 to the Supernatural

Ok..those are just some ideas I hope that you can use them.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the suggestions. I'll let Musie ponder them for a bit.
Review By [YourDoomed] • Date [28 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from winddancer
Review:
OH YES! I want to open an extra large economy size can of whoop-ass and spread thickly over the entire NID!!!! Motivate girl!!!
Comments from author:
Be really nice if they could get Kinsey as well.
Review By [winddancer] • Date [27 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from Emeraldiceus
Review:
I think its good. I like it and wish for more.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Emeraldiceus] • Date [27 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from Harry
Review:
*Starts humming Ides of March* I think that some people, including Riley and a certain female Doctor, are going to be in SERIOUS hot water when Jack and the rest of the SG1 team get there. And if the Slayerettes know as well, I would NOT want to be in the Innatives shows. ESPECIALLY if Willow gets mad! If that happens, RUN! I do not want to be around should Dark Willow show up!
Comments from author:
OMG, you just gave me a great idea for dealing with Walsh and her minions! Just have to think about who can do it now.
Review By [Harry] • Date [27 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Experiment" from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
George wanting to slamming his head onto his desk, would imply frustration. I would have thought that anger would be more fitting, so thinking about slamming his fist would be more suitable.
I imagine that his face was flushed because of the anger he was feeling.
Comments from author:
Good point. Maybe all the brain damage from his previous headdesks has confused him so he uses it as a reaction to any bad news now. George can be quite intimidating when he's mad...I mean, spitting nails mad, not just irritated 'cause Jack did something stupid mad. Should be fun to think of what he'll do to Walsh and her minions.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [27 Oct 10] • Not Rated
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