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Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen: The Art of Survival" from immortalbliss
That was close at the end there. And I can totally understand her anger. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Yes, it was. Miriel's starting to come into her own - finally. lol!

Review By [immortalbliss] • Date [18 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen: False Façades" from immortalbliss
Poor Miriel.. Poor Bear-man.. Hope it gets better for her..
Comments from author:
This was a turning point in Miriel's life. Things will turn around for her from here on out.
Review By [immortalbliss] • Date [24 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen: False Façades" from evilredknight
I'm left with the opinion that this girl is an idiot.

Again and again she makes wrong choices.
Walking away from the house at the end? Total stupidity.
She's hurt, tired, and hungry, and passes up an opportunity to rest, heal, and frankly gather anything that could be of use?
Why did she not look for a root cellar? There had to be one. Would have been clean fruit and vegetables in there.
Why after finding the family did she not take her rescuer's body out there and lay it with them?
The cleansing fire would have served him just as much as them. She did not have to waste her time digging a grave.

And Buffy yelling that Slayer's don't kill men.
Which I have to tell you, never sat right even in canon.
Your telling me that in 10,000 years, thousands of humans haven't been killed by Slayer in simple self defense?
Up until 400 years ago at the earliest, you depended on your own sword arm to keep you safe.
Someone refusing to kill(bandits, raiders, foreign soldiers, robber barons, vikings, mongols, crusading armies, etc...) would NOT have survived very long. The very idea was modern day humanistic horse-crap that would have had NO place for 99.9% of human history. Someone threatened you and yours? You took a weapon and killed them. Because if you did not they killed you.
Now I get that Buffy is pretty shaky when it comes to history. But you'd think a little common sense would break through the modern preconceptions and values.

Yes Buffy. Slayer's kill humans. Lots and lots of humans. It's just the way the world worked for thousands of years. Get a clue.
Comments from author:
Well, I don’t think Miriel’s an idiot, but she is inexperienced, naive, and has up until recently lived a life of privilege and dependence. This chapter was meant to knock her back into reality, to show her the world that she had always envisioned in her mind doesn’t really exist. Life is cruel and so are some of the people that you may encounter.

After everything Miriel went through, she wanted out of the house, pronto. The house itself represented the torments she had endured, not to mention the reek of the dead was swiftly spreading throughout the place. At that point, she was basically in a zombie-like state, carrying out Buffy’s orders. Buffy’s concern was to get Miriel out of there as soon as possible. She knew the old hag had escaped and didn’t know if she was going for reinforcements or if those that were tracking Miriel would finally show up. Those possibilities were all too real so that’s why Buffy pushed her to leave.

Miriel didn’t view the burning of the bodies of those in the barn as a cleansing. She did it out of anger, in the heat of the moment. Burying Beorn did expend a lot of her energy, but, after what Buffy had said, she was in agreement, that he deserved a decent burial, considering he had saved her life and wreaked vengeance on her tormentors.

I’m in total agreement with you on Buffy’s stance on killing men. It’s absolute bullshit! I have a feeling that from here on out, she and Miriel will disagree on that issue quite a bit. I hope you keep reading. I think you’ll like the “new” Miriel better than the one that died in the house.

Thanks for reading and taking the time to vent, er, share your thoughts. LOL!
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [23 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen: False Façades" from kiwi
Love it! Keep up the awesome work. :D
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Review By [kiwi] • Date [23 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Deceptive Assumptions" from airythia
I really like how you did a different twist on the buffy/lotr crossover by having her appear in dreams to assist another slayer. It's refreshing. This story really sucks you in too. I really hope Miriel catches a break soon, but life never goes as planned I suppose.

Hoping for an update soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind words. I'm delighted to hear that you're enjoying my story. Once Miriel learns to overcome her shortcomings, I think she'll be alright. :-)

If all goes well, I should have the next chapter up some time next week.

Review By [airythia] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven: A Change of Scenery" from Dapsy
As always, amazing writing :D

I found it very fascinating how you brought Miriel to Buffy's world in.. I guess.. their mind ^_^. I would be happy to see more trips to Buffy's world, I really loved Miriel's reaction, and Buffy's frustration at times, to what she found there. I wonder, can Buffy potentially see or hear what is going in some way while Miriel is awake? Or could she potentially be able to do that? As far as I can tell the answer is, probably, no... but for whatever reason that question came to me.

It was very sad moment when Bregolas died, especially after they seemed to have found some stronger affection between them... now Miriel(and Buffy) will need to keep going and face whatever comes by their shared selves. I think that Miriel will learn some things from that experience, but I wonder exactly what will she learn... that is the question :D,

All the best,
your fan.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your feedback. Yes, the 'trip' happened in their minds, and there will be future visits to Buffy's world in upcoming chapters. Buffy knows everything that happens to Miriel as it happens. She's trapped within her - she sees and hears everything. The problem is that Miriel can't hear her until she falls into an altered state of consciousness, which is usually sleep. The key words are 'altered state of consciousness'. You'll understand more about that in future chapters (I hope).

As far as what Miriel learns from those visits, it's hard to say. Perhaps some will view her as a great seer, or, perhaps as a crazy loon. You'll see what I mean, as the story progresses.

Once again, I thank you for your continued support. I greatly appreciate it.
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [2 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: Conspiracies Unfold" from immortalbliss
Oh no.. And he stopped at "Hal".. What if Buffy thinks its Haldir? Oh no..
Comments from author:
That's always a possibility... ;-)
Review By [immortalbliss] • Date [11 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine: Acceptance" from Dapsy
If I could give you 2nd recommendations I would.

Great update :D
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Thank you very much! :-)
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Ultimatum" from Dapsy
Thank you for this awesome chapter!!!

And the ending of it... all types of horrors I can imagine for Miriel(thank god she has Buffy to talk to, at least while she sleeps), I do not know where you come up with ideas and if you can keep the suspense going... but that was a masterwork.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind words. I still have a lot of twists and turns planned. Hope you continue to enjoy the read.
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [11 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Ultimatum" from Millaros
Just asking: Will Buffy appear more frequently in the future or will she continue to stay in Miriel's dream as a well, shall we say, backseat-er?

Other than that, I think that you have done a bloody brilliant job on the story! (pardon me for swearing)
Comments from author:
Buffy will appear more in some chapters, but not all. I guess you can say she's in the backseat, although I prefer to say that she's riding shotgun. ;-) She'll continue to come to Miriel only in dreams, but those experiences will greatly affect Miriel when she's awake... and I believe the same can be said for Buffy when she finally comes out of her catatonic state.

Thanks for the feedback. And you don't have to apologize for swearing (is bloody a swear word?) - I write much worse than that. LOL!
Review By [Millaros] • Date [11 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: And so it Begins" from Dapsy
Great story... :D

For a bit I was a bit confused, in first chapter, as to what exactly happened with Buffy but last chapter really clears that up. For a moment I thought, for example, that Buffy was incarnated/preincarnated? Miriel just forgot her Buffy life... as if somehow Buffy memories was a second set of Miriel's memories ((Just like memories of Buffy of life with Dawn, and without her)) which she recollected/forgot... or something like that :D

Really love Mirliel and Buffy in this story... and loved when Miriel responded “If that is your heart’s desire, then knock yourself out" to Bregolas' question if he could keep her hair. I think that was a fantastic moment... and am looking forward to seeing how interactions between Miriel and Buffy will affect Miriel's actions in a "waking" world.

There are so many things Buffy can show/do/teach(not only fighting, but other modern things) Miriel... not to mention how much fun they can have in the dreams between them too. And could Buffy possibly jump between dreams? or maybe even have Mieriel link through her with Bregolas in the dreams too...? Or... nm, could be going forever thinking of things.

Anyhow, all I really wanted to say that I really like what you got here and will be waiting with impatience for more :D ^_^...
Comments from author:
You've just made my day, Dapsy, with not only this review but also my first recommendation! Woo hoo!

Hmm, I wouldn't totally rule out your initial thoughts on what's happening between Buffy and Miriel. There's pretty much only two possibilities to what is happening... or maybe, it's a combination of both. *whistles innocently*

Eventually, Buffy will see that she can manipulate Miriel's dreams and will show her things in the 'modern' world. But, there will be no Bregolas or anyone else allowed in their dreams. They consider that time to be private and only for themselves.

Glad to hear that you're enjoying the story and I hope you like what's to come. Much thanks for your review and recommendation!
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [14 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Soul Sisters" from kiwi
buffy and miriel meet. well done on that part. :D
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Review By [kiwi] • Date [8 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Breaking Point" from VillageOrchid
A lot going on in this chapter. Stylistically a scene break can be done with a paragraph. With so many short paragraphs in this story either a chapter break or a scene break symbol with extra spaces between major beats would have helped with the flow. I had to restart reading bits of the story a few times and stopped at one point before returning. On re-starting I would suggest that you put either a scene break or a chapter break before this sentence:
Sometime around eleven thirty, she noticed that her father had returned

Meanwhile I can guess a rape but not sure from her language if there is even something beyond that going on.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Secrets and Lies" from VillageOrchid
Good plot and characterization. The narrative style in the first half of the chapter was needlessly archaic and did not add to the clarify or enjoyment of the story, and kind of got me bored. Good stuff over all. Thanks for continuing.
Comments from author:
You know, my beta said the same thing. He can tell every time when I re-read Tolkien, 'cause it affects my writing, as it did with the first half of this chapter. *sigh* Sorry about that. The last thing I want to do is bore you. LOL! I'll pay closer attention to that in future chapters.

Glad to hear that you appear to be liking the story. And I do appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Breaking Point" from Horizon
A promising story - I look forward to Buffy being... well, Buffy again, and to meeting the rest of our lovely cast. Likin' the long chapters. However, quick critique, you overuse the word 'deem', which you might want to be aware of.
Comments from author:
The Buffy you know and love will pop up in the next chapter, I promise. And you're right about my overuse of the word 'deem'. Damn. I didn't notice until you pointed it out. Grr! I'll pay closer attention to that in future chapters.

Thanks for the feedback.
Review By [Horizon] • Date [23 Nov 10] • Not Rated
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