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Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 2" from CageFire
Review:
Wow, it's been a while. I'm glad to see this fic still alive. Keep up the excellent work. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review CageFire.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 2" from cjcold
Review:
NIce update.

A little short. The exploration of the colony was very interesting. I like the way you are weaving the sci-fi and fantasy elements together into a comprehensive whole.

Interesting idea to have the first vampires be the plague that swept the Ancients away. Thoug if that is the case then they can safely get supplies as it is unlikely the Turok-han spread far from the cities and the safety during daylight hours.

I look forward to what data they are able to pull from the memory cores. I do have to wonder if there is a stargate on the planet. Though it might have been disabled to prevent spread of the vampires.

More soon please.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review cjcold.

About the plague, you are correct, but the missing link will appear in the next chapter (if I'm not delayed, I'll upload it this week-end).
Review By [cjcold] • Date [4 Feb 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 2" from Robby
Review:
“And so,” he read, “the Alterans created vat-beings to fight for them. They named them Asurans.”

I can see the paralles between the two but....well.....yeah. They'll learn theres a difference between the two.

Great chapter, liked how you conneced those plot points togther there.XD
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, Robby.

I must say I love playing with unreliable narrators...
Review By [Robby] • Date [4 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from sajuuk
Review:
HELLO lol
is this story dead or what ????
have you lose idea or don t want to write the next chapter ???
please write a new chapter for this story
and don t hesitate to creat new teechnology, have the fleet discovere wreck of ship, civilation and others stuff that can help them to improve and creat new mech, ship, armor, shield and weapons
by
Comments from author:
Thank you for the Review Sajuuk

I have been delayed, but I'm back. I hope you will enjoy the new chapter.
Review By [sajuuk] • Date [3 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from Robby
Review:
This is really AWESOME!!!

Great story idea, I look forward to seeing where this goes.

Keep up the great work and good luck!!
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review, Robby.
Review By [Robby] • Date [30 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from AlphaBeta
Review:
Please update this awsome story soon!
Comments from author:
This is now done.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [2 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, Morgomir
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [18 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
panem et circenses--Fittingly the Latin for "Bread and Circuses".

As far as the bas-relief goes, the thought that this whole mess might have transported Washuu and her charges to a place left over from her and her sisters' time as overgoddesses, well, the implications are somewhat frightening..
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, CrystalBlaze and... indeed.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [13 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from Bobboky
Review:
very good work
Comments from author:
Thank you Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from Vianca
Review:
Aia, Washuu has traveled into the past?
What for, collecting data copies of certain data memories that otherwise would be destroyed?
Heck, it could even be to stop Ba´al.

Atlantis her experimental wormhole drive was based on the stargate it´s inner workings.
But if you want to put that gate in a secure place, call in Ryo-oki, she might even thank you for the snack. ;)

As for side plots, will you bring in the elemental principles from other shows/series?
Like Eezo from Mass Effect, Q40 from Babylon-5, Dilithium Crystals from Star Trek to name a few?
Because your setting seems to make it all possible pads to have been taken, thus the underlying materials (and principles) should exist at the minium.
Would also give you some change to make things go boom or so.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, Vianca.

Well, if time travel is a possibility, considering Washu's real age it could also means something else...

Concerning the FTL means, I am merely skirting on the limits of what's presented in the Stargate continuity.

Fold Drive: variant of wormhole technology, pinnacle being, as you mentioned, Atlantis wormhole propulsion. This also covers the jump drives from Tenchi Muyo (Tenchi Muyo GXP has the best representation about this) as well as the dimensional drives from the Leijiverse. This is the standard FTL propulsion for the Macross fleet.

Hyperdrive: standard propulsion means in the Stargate universe, but not used by the fleet so far.

Warp drive: If I understood the description of the Destiny in Stargate Universe correctly, it's a 'lost' Ancient technology. So far, the warp drive used by the Omega Confederacy ships (called hyperspace in the cartoon, but behaves like Star Trek warp) does not work due to differences between the hyperspace in both dimensions. As it was cheaper in time and resources to equip those ships with working fold drives, warp has been abandoned by the fleet so far.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from CageFire
Review:
Great new chapter, I'm guessing this is starting to get to the point where the stargate comes into play, well, either that or there'll be more hinting at it. They said they closed it, that either means they disabled it, or buried it I assume. And who is that woman I wonder. The hairstyle seems familiar, but how could she be in two places at once, unless I'm misunderstanding, which I probably am.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Cagefire.

The question is rather: is it Joyce or Washu?
Review By [CageFire] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 1" from cjcold
Review:
Great chapter.

I like your showing of the Mayor and explaining the difference between mages and witches and sorcerers. It really does sound like alot of people in the underworld would not want teh Macrosses return to Earth. Especially as it would expose magic and demons on Earth.

Interesting method for getting Wesley in SunnyD during Halloween. I like his character and am glad he was included.

The discussion of Infomorphs was also rather interesting. Though I had to roll my eyes at the politiking to make droids a racial slur.

The planet they found was a nice touch. A small colony of the Alteran/Ancients most probably. I liked how Wesley was able to ID the language instead of relying on AI support to translate. The mosaic of Washu, the Goddess of Knowledge was a nice touch. Look forward to what they will find when they start exploring more of the City and outlying villages.

I have to wonder if the Macross will take the gate with them when they leave. It would give them a second way to explore and collect resources. Both through the fleet and through the gate network.

More soon please.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, cjcold.

Concerning the 'politiking'... well robots with minds based on human ones have the right to be jerks.
Review By [cjcold] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "School day" from sajuuk
Review:
hello
I like your history so far
but I think that you you are limited too much on the costumes
therefore I am going to ask some questions on the holes of your history, to ask for the additions, to give some ideas and to put some references (other stories)

first: the holes

what did the demons become???
did they get their souls? and if yes go them to sell the mayor??
they were change for human, alien, cyborg or robot?
when will we see the croissement with stargate (sg1, atlantis, universe)????
will the convoy meet the nox, tok'ra, asgard or tollans???
does the convoy go t it to find an old data base???
have you see on internet the disguise of halloween?
because you would see more choice than what you wrote: costumes of marvel (spiderman, the black cat, dardevil, ironman, captain america, the avengers, x-men, thor...), costume of dc comic (superman, green lantern, batman, robin, catwoman, wonderwoman...), sherlock holmes, doctor who, robocop, star trek, star war, andromeda, the experts, gundam, sonic, super mario bros, father noel, einstein...

second: the additions

I believe to speak already of costumes of marvel (spiderman, the black pussy, dardevil, ironman, captain america, the avengers, x-men, thor...), costume of dc comic (superman, green lantern, batman, robin, catwoman, wonderwoman...), sherlock holmes, doctor who, robocop, star trek, star war, andromeda, the experts, gundam, sonic, terrific mario, father noel, einstein...
but could add you to it of the halo costumes, supreme commander, starcraft, command & conquer (tiberium and red alert), fable, homeworld, section 8, legacy of kain, crysis, mass effect, time shift, metroid, naruto, bleach, devil may cry, warhammer 40 000 and others movie, series or games videos

go to see to wikipedia if you don't know but go see Homeworld (1, cataclysm and 2) for the large type of weapon and starship

third: the ideas

joyce go to other fiction realities to search ( to remove, to steal, to copy ) weapon, technologies and blueprint
some of the people and fiction cross the reality in the fiction realm
some planet and story are real

fourth: the references

Multiple Crossings • Xander-Centered:

Worthless by GandalfTG
Xander Harris: The Iron Tau'ri by Gunsmith3000
In Spark Genius of by michaelsuave
Slade by TheLaughingMan

the serie Emerald Flame by Cyclone

written by WraithRune:

Dungeon Monk Xander
The Halloween Spell
Master of the Forbidden Seals
Green Lantern's Journey: Xander Style

on fanfiction.net:
White Knight! by Joshua the Evil Guy
In New Dawn by AlexanderD

if you can respond, write to sajuuk21@hotmail.fr

a french reviewer
sajuuk21
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Sajuuk21,

The fact is I voluntarily limited the series used to the current list and would have shrunk it further during my rewrite if I did not need what I currently have plot-wise.

The fact is that I hate handvawing. Every universe has been carefully chosen, among other things for its capacity to fit in the multiverse of this story without slaughtering (too much) canon. Other facts, like the fact the show existed in 1997 have also been checked (deliberately ignored for Full Metal Panic, for reasons that are guessable from the story). For example, during my rewrite, I dumped Lost Universe from the list of fandoms as I had difficulties to make the 'gods' from the Slayers multiverse work seamlessly with the remainder.

I also wanted to use series that were rarely used, if used at all. Things about Marvel and DC have already been done to death by people who know a lot more than me about those. Old-school anime like Harlock, Space Adventure Cobra or Once Upon a Time... Space!, on the other hand, that's new and I took care to take only universes I know in depth.

I then prefer creating OC originating from the fandom I have, like the Cassiopeian Lieutenant persona of Gwen Ditchik, than adding new fandoms. It is also easier for me to create a story that can be read and enjoyed even if you don't know jack about any fandom in it. People who know only get a bonus.

Plot-wise, if Ethan's spell had remained untouched, more costumes would have been seen. But, Tokimi and, most of all, Washu, tampered with the spell. The latter was not calling her own alterations 'normalization' by chance.

Regarding the 'holes' you cited:

Some things, like who they will meet in their journey, will be addressed in the following chapters, so it's just a matter of patience and suspense. What I can say is that this is effectively the Stargate galaxy.

On the matter of the demons effectively got their souls, see what happened to Spike and Drusilla. In chapter 2, Washu thinks something about the fact she targeted them first. In this story, a soul is a form of energy, a fact proven by the Ascended Ones. Washu had more than enough to create some brand-new souls for the demons.

A Swiss author
Kedrann
Review By [sajuuk] • Date [9 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "School day" from Morgomir
Review:
Great story so far. My complete lack of knowledge concerning anime and manga are not keeping me from enjoying the fic. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you Morgomir.

Writing my stories so that it can be enjoyable even if you know nothing of the fandoms is something I always try to do.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "School day" from deathgeonous
Review:
Nice new chapter, not much action, but very interesting developments instead. With things like that, who needs action? Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
Thank you, Deathgeonous.

As you know, constructing the universe is very important for me.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [7 Nov 11] • Not Rated
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