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Review of chapter "The end of the first year" from borgrabbit
Fantastic story
Now reaching chapter fourteen
Kind Muse thou art keen

Looking forward to more! ☺
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meanwhile, back on Terra" from borgrabbit
Meanwhile, back at the ranch,...
Great chapter!

Buffered haiku:

Betwixt Kith and Kine
Set hope firmly on the line
To save mine and thine
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 3" from borgrabbit
Haiku fugue:

Storm on horizon
Mouse fingers stooping eagle
Good day not to die

Great chapter!
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The dead planet - part 2" from borgrabbit
Haiku fu:

Save the downtrodden
I cry at the injustice
Save winter's children
Great story!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review borgrabbit.

I fear to be a lousy poet.
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The end of the first year" from Aenea
Cool chapter, yes the time skip is needed, otherwise you can't snyc up events in SG1 to your story. and the 3lypH fold drive cruise speed makes sense, early in SG1 a Hatak's top speed was about 1 LYpH. The Sokar and Anubis refits raised this to about 135 LYpH, which is what the Prometheus drive originally was. The Asgard introduced the 7000 LYpH drive (Earth to Pegasus in 2 weeks) and the lovely ZPM powered 31,250 LYpH drive (Earth to Pegasus in 4 days). I worked most of these out a while ago based on stated distance and stated time in series.

So while the fleet is moving faster then the average Goa'uld Hatak of the time period. If your fleet hits Sokar or Anubis it better have bigger guns or it will be run into the ground. Though I'm sure Joyce see everything as the journey rather then the destination. There is no way she'll raise the fleets drive rating herself. Letting others build the tech though...
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Aenea,

Thanks also for the numbers, I had only some of them.

However, I would also point out that fold drive has another advantage: (lack of) traceability.

We have seen pursuits happen in hyperspace in SG-1 (like the Replicators going after an Asgard ship if I remember well).

With fold space, you have the same 'issues' than the FTL jump in Galactica. The ship has jumped, but where?
Review By [Aenea] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The end of the first year" from yog
Great chapter. No, really. Really good, solid chapter which covers several things, and all of them are good.

It is interesting to see the city from the perspective of a child, especially the one who has been changed by the consequences of the transformation of the city. DId they just beat an Alteran plague? This is huge. No, really. This is terrifyingly overwhelmingly huge. To the point of OMGWTF!!! There are several Ancients in the galaxy that could be saved by it. Though I doubt they would be - the fleet is nowhere near where they are. But it also shows them surpassing Alterans in some fields. Which is great. And terrifying.

If they made contact with Goa'uld and have some Jaffa on board, what did they do about the larval Goa'uld that Jaffa carry? Are they aware of Tok'ra and are Tok'ra aware of them? With their tech an ethical solution can be devised: clone some bodies, lobotomize them to prevent the spontaneous development of consciousness, then use those mindless bodies to house Goa'uld. Or just euthonize Goa'uld larva, if it impossible to cure them of their megalomania induced by genetic memory and sarcophagus overuse.

Randomly chosen officials don't work, in my humble opinion. Because while you may be a good worker, you could be a very BAD politician (in the sense of people resources manages, and social engineer). Plus, not everyone WANTS to vote. You can't really make them. I, for one, don't have time and energy to get enough information about all topics required to make an educated decision on things like taxes. Because I am a professional scientist, who spends tons of his time in his lab and contributes to the society. E-democracy is good, but professional managers who control day-to-day life and handle routine decisions are needed. Plus, Sunnydale has an effective Mayor with over a century of experince in running it. People love him, demons tolerate him, and he is smart. Given this background, he would likely still be in power, at least somewhat.

Non-human aliens! Yay! So, they are telepathic squids. Ala Hanar from Mass Effect, right? And contacts with other species. Interesting, in that it is good to see aliens freely interacting with Sunnydalers, and this would change the society back on Earth (well, change it more), when the contact with it is established. And it will be established, given that a) Goa'uld, at least some Goa'uld know theTauri gate address, b) Asgard certainly know and Goa'uld know about Asgard, c) FTL Radio contact with Prometheus is possible, when Earth builds it.

New Camelot? And MERLIN! Freed from his eternal slumber! And with nanites healing him! Well, this would certainly shorten the journey back.

And Janus cosplaying as the Doctor. Is this Janus pre-ascension? He does have a time machine.

Anyway, MOAR!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, yog

Cathy was born on a relatively simple concept that I summarize with the sentences: "Hi, I'm Cathy. Wanna be friends?" She's the curious and cheerful child that just embraces everything coming her way like humanity manages to do when it shakes fear away. As she has no Halloween persona, she is also a good way for me to show the changes life as a Macrossian has on normal people.

For the plague, the evidence the fleet possess rather points in the direction of one of Nirrti's dirty tricks. As contact with the Goa'ulds was made and the fleet is a clear menace (and a technological treasure trove) for the System Lords, problems are bound to arise.

I inferred from the Asuran debacle in Stargate Atlantis that the Alterans' experience with nanotechnology and artificial intelligence is limited. On the other hand, the Macrossians consider infomorphs (sentient AI) as a species with full rights and duties in their society. It is not necessarily that Macrossian computers are better than Alteran ones, but the programming philosophy is completely different and allows for results that were impossible for the Ancients.

For the destiny of the Jaffa's symbionts, well... next chapter.

On the matter of the political system, you have valid points, but there are checks and balances I did not describe as I did not want to make that part too long.

a) We are used to think as citizenship equaling nationality, but that's not true in the Macrossian Republic. Nationality is the same as for our countries, but citizenship means obtaining a diploma. If you apply for it, that means you intend to take part in the political life. If you don't, you just stay a simple national.

b) The Macrossians started from the idea that a democracy is only as good as the average level of its citizens. Rather than optimizing the system by making it less of a democracy, they chose to better the citizens. The first step is the citizenship exam, but given their technology, that also means that transhumanist solutions are studied.

c) Day-to-day management is actually done by non-elected professionals (or bureaucrats) with the Aegis Council handling political decision. As the Councilors are chosen among volunteers (using a complex mathematical model to 'stack the odds' depending on competence) Richard Wilkins III is currently one of the seven Councilors. The main point for the Macrossians was to cut on resource spending during political campaigns, not putting totally randomly chosen people in place.

d) The legislative body is, on the other side, chosen randomly and composed of one chamber of 500 citizens. It is considered that 'non-competent' citizens give the layman's point of view in the preparation of laws. As a consequence, Macrossian law texts tend to remain simple.

e) e-democracy actually allows for a solution applied by the Macrossians for the vote: voters can change their mind as the debates progress. So non-informed voters will often start by casting a blank vote and (depending on time and interest) follow the debates that will allow them (or not) to change their vote.

On the matter of the non-human aliens... The Asg-Ushirs were inspired partly by the movie 'The Abyss' and partly by the series Venus Prime by A.C Clarke and Paul Preuss.

Finally, for Janus... you'll probably see more of him, particularly if he decided to cosplay as one the most famous meddlers in British television.
Review By [yog] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The end of the first year" from MageMan
did you just release Arthur Pendragon? all he need now is Excalibur and the Stone of Destiny (it had held the sword before it got turned into a throne) from Scotland and he'll rule all of England and maybe all of the British isles. If you want to keep it SF look up "The Last Starfighter" and the Excalibur test. 8D
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review MageMan,

Actually, not Arthur, but that's not far. There is someone else in Arthurian legend that ended up sealed in a cave (or a tree, or an invisible tower depending on the version).

As for a SF take on the Arthurian myth, I also remember an old comic called Camelot 3000
Review By [MageMan] • Date [10 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The end of the first year" from skynetgol
i have to say chapter by chapter this story is getting more and more awesome i love how you seem to got all the anime and tv shows to fit together nicely this must be the best work you ever done at the end each chapter i only hope that you can work your magic faster to i can read more!!!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, skynetgol
Review By [skynetgol] • Date [10 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The end of the first year" from CageFire
Wow, great new chapter. Quite a few odds and ends stuff here. We'll have to see what the next chapter brings. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, CageFire.

I'm working on it.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [10 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reactions" from draconis
Very much enjoying your smooshing of all these realities/verses/etc into one story.

Earth is in for a HUGE tech and social shock when these folks return. Seems to me it won't be too long at all before these people would give even the Asgard a shock (their tech clearly could already save the Asgard race from extinction).
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Draconis

Keeping that coherent is not easy, but it's also the kind of challenge I love.

As for the shock, the chapter I just uploaded should give you some ideas.
Review By [draconis] • Date [3 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Reactions" from Vianca
In Robotech you have the Cyclone-bike/power-armor, in Macross-7 you have the Ex-Gear.
Both sound usefull, very usefull.
What about combinning them?

One of their main problems is now the different lvl´s of technology in the fleet.
They need to design new ship classes that combine all the different tech´s into one tech-tree.
Motoko her world it´s tech-tree must be very intresting for those Info-Morp´s.
The best way I can see to get one base-line tech tree is for Ryo-Oki to eat samples of them and then to intergrate them in her ship-form.
That would tell them how they would interact with each other and how to best intergrate them all togeter.
It basicaly gives them a base-line to aim for.
Wonders about what would happen to her ship it´s shape if she would eat a SDF-class gunship.

Ever thought about Starcom? (hint, check youtube)
Their so called Starmax Bomber would be something I think they might like, even if they only use them for SAR-work (Search And Resque) and other support jobs.

One of the problems of the SDF-1 was that the canons mounted on shoulders of the arms were Earth made and thus in-effective.
Perhaps a refitting with canons based on the Arcadia her guns?
Anyway, the SDF-1 was just a gunship, designed for frontal attacks, this means that her other sides are not as well defended, the designation Battlestar is quite wrong in the new-BSG definition, yet O so right by TOS-BSG it´s definition.
Why am I bringing this up?
It gives you some plot and them something to overcome.

About that New Macross class, you talk about improvements on both the Island and BATTLE sections.
Does that mean they will make another gunship or maybe a true warship?
I mean, I would have though the easiest way would be to make the SDF-1 into the Battle section of such a ship.
Give it some docks for more SDF´s and.....

Now, who would they meet first?
And why am I thinking Atlantis lies in their future?
Hope they can save the Tollans.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review and ideas, Vianca.

I cannot promise you I will integrate them, but they're always food for my inspiration.

The standard powered armor used by the Mobile Infantry in this story is mostly based on the landmates from Appleseed, including now thermo-optic camouflage from Ghost in the Shell and energy weapons.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [3 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reactions" from CageFire
Love to see a new chapter. This is pretty good. I really can't imagine what will happen next. I'll have to wait and find out. Hopefully not too long though. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, Cagefire.

Well, the next chapter is uploaded.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [3 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reactions" from Alastor
Very nice and it will be very interesting to see what new techologies that add to the new ship. If I'm remembering my stargate correctly then their current speed is right at if not slightly above that of the goa'uld before Apophis made his upgrades to the hyperdrive anyway. I can definitely see the fleet scientist and Joyce especially bring a captured goa'uld hyperdrive up to original specks, like what was done by Jack when he had the ancient repository, but it might be a bit difficult to integrate since I'm pretty sure most of the ships in the fleet use space-fold style FTL as opposed to hyperspace. I did catch one spelling where you put menaced when I think you meant to managed in regards to Joyce crashing the agora network but beyond that a great job usual. Looking forward to more!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review Alastor

Goa'uld FTL drive has a top speed of 32000 c or 3.65 light-year per hour. Standard fold engine is 10 light-year per hour, but has other limitations.

I corrected the 'menaced' thing. Sometimes, I'm still victim of the fact French is my native language.
Review By [Alastor] • Date [2 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meanwhile, back on Terra" from blazblaz
Great chapter to a great series I can not wait to see the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review blazblaz
Review By [blazblaz] • Date [28 Feb 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Meanwhile, back on Terra" from AlphaBeta
Really loving you your story. Can't get enough of it. Do you think you can put a vehicle/mecha list together and where they come from? Can't wait to see the Gould get there butts kicked!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, AlphaBeta,

I will try to do that, but it may take some time
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [26 Feb 12] • Not Rated
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