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Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from ReadsaLot
Review:
you have an intriguing story starting here. i'll have to track it.

nitpick: Buffy introduces herself with only her first name, just a few paragraphs later Sandaime addresses her by her last. no mention is made elsewise.
Comments from author:
I initially had it as Summers, Buffy. But I changed it right after I uploaded it. You most likely read the story as I was editing.

Thank you for the nitpick though - I need more people pointing out strange happenings in my story.

-Jay
Review By [ReadsaLot] • Date [20 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from AlphaBeta
Review:
Good, but need to be longer still. And a timeline would be nice.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [19 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written emotional review and decision.
Comments from author:
Never got around to thanking you, it was much appreciated.

-Jay
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [19 Dec 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from AlphaBeta
Review:
You got my attention. The next chapter though better be WWWAAAAYYYYYY longer though.
Comments from author:
The brevity of the piece, it really does something. For me at least.

I'm debating with myself over how I want to proceed with this past the prologue - should I be writing longer scenes or continue in such a manner?

I'm most familiar with the Naruto-Verse, so what you're asking for isn't out of reach. It'll just be a bit more difficult and will take longer to produce.

Anyway, your input was most appreciated; makes an author feel that their work actually means something.

-Jay
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [18 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from justapiranha
Review:
This reads as a oneshot, but please continue.
Comments from author:
I'll be updating every other day, if not everyday. Maybe. Probably.
Review By [justapiranha] • Date [18 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Very nice.

If Buffy is immortal, this could be her.

And if it is, I expect that Konohagakure hasn't a clue what lies in store..
Comments from author:
Everybody's pretty much clueless to the Force-That-Is-Buffy.

-Jay
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [18 Dec 10] • Not Rated
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