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Review of chapter "...PLANNING FOR THE FUTURE..." from mithrilandtj
Review:
Love it
Do More
Comments from author:
Thank you. More will come. Promise.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [1 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...PLANNING FOR THE FUTURE..." from Kirallie
Review:
Good chapter. So cute to see them so shy around each other.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. And yeah, they are shy and cute.
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [31 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "...PLANNING FOR THE FUTURE..." from kayron
Review:
It's sweet how shy they are around each other. I can see that spark of 'I like him, does he like me?' But it seems like neither is sure of how to proceed. But at least they are not running away from each other! Good update!
Comments from author:
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. And they are kinda shy in a sweet dorky way.
Review By [kayron] • Date [31 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...PLANNING FOR THE FUTURE..." from DennSedai
Review:
*grins* Oh yeah, more please.... poor boys, both dancing around the other, neither willing to make the first move...
Comments from author:
*giggle* They are too cute, arn't they? It almost makes ya wanna lock 'em in a closet until they figure it out.
Review By [DennSedai] • Date [31 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...STRIPPERS, EMAILS, & DECISIONS..." from Elleria
Review:
Looking forward to the next bit.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [25 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...STRIPPERS, EMAILS, & DECISIONS..." from Neverwillmini
Review:
Glad to see more of this. I'm still trying to figure out if your Xander is a pre-immortal. Richie is probably too young to sense if he is, so that could be an interesting future plot twist. I do like their interaction; they seem to be able to each lighten up the other (is this one of the times Richie left because Mac was being evil or judgemental?).

I never thought of it, but if Xander does keep in touch with the others by e-mail and is away for longer than canon, it might actually allow everyone to heal a bit from their shut him out/fluke/normal Xander stressed friendships during their senior year of school. Having him gone may also make the Scoobies appreciate what he did do all the more. Maybe he can return when Buffy tells him Joyce is sick?

I can see Richie deciding that if he is going to be able to survive the Game as long as Mac, Amanda, and Methos, he has to start seriously learning about just what dangers are out there that could affect him. Being that he was a street kid, I'm sure he'd appreciate knowing about dangers and how to avoid/escape/kill whatever is coming after him - especially knowing how bad immortals have no morals and would possibly team up with demons at some point to cheat in a challenge.

I hope Richie talks Xander into a bike instead of a new(ish) car. Some of the touring bikes do allow for quite a bit of storage, and if he had a Witch able to do some Harry Potter-style shrinking/enlarging charms on his weapons/belongings he could carry even more than expected.
Review By [Neverwillmini] • Date [21 Jan 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...STRIPPERS, EMAILS, & DECISIONS..." from SilentInquisition
Review:
Okay, so re-reading my review and checking out the second chapter out of curiosity, I find myself in the unfortunate position of having to apologize. I was unnecessarily harsh in my first review to you. While I hold my initial points about the rapier and about the fact that the Xander/Richie secret life bosom buddies thing was rushed, reading through the second chapter I did find myself liking your Xander voice and your descriptions of the strip club were amusing and detailed. Additionally the storyline to e-mail transition was much less distracting when it was kept to a single scene break. I would commend you for improvement, but I find that it's entirely possible that this is the way you intended the second chapter to be all along and I merely judged too quickly. You responded quite civilly to my review and I'm glad you're the type of author that can take criticism and keep on trucking in a professional manner. If you intend to write in a forum that isn't just meant for fun it will be skill that serves you well.
Review By [SilentInquisition] • Date [20 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "...STRIPPERS, EMAILS, & DECISIONS..." from msdarque
Review:
Poor Xander is now without a car.. I suppose Richie could drive him. LOL
Congrats! Wonderful chapter, loved reading it! Cannot wait for more.
Review By [msdarque] • Date [20 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...SO IT BEGINS..." from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
Review:
A slash warning in the Sumary would be nice, i always overlook those damn tag thingies. Like your writing style , but the slash doesn't make this a fic for me.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [20 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "...STRIPPERS, EMAILS, & DECISIONS..." from Kirallie
Review:
Poor Xander. Hope his luck starts improving! Yay RIchie.
Comments from author:
*snicker* Yeah...Xander always seems to end up in strange situations. *shakes head* Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [19 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...SO IT BEGINS..." from SunshineDust
Review:
Oh GOD! I can't wait for the next update! lol You have me sitting on the edge of my chair, waiting for more! I Love IT!

SD
Comments from author:
I'm sorry that it's been so long since the first chapter. I know it was a long wait. Still, chapter two is now up. I hope you enjoy that one as much as the first.
Review By [SunshineDust] • Date [31 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...SO IT BEGINS..." from SlowMercury
Review:
This is a good start. I like that you have Xander separated from the other Scoobies and, I'm guessing, heading off to a new Fate involving Immortals with swords, but I'm glad that he hasn't *fought* with his friends. Anyway, I hope to see more soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. :) And yeah, Xander's going to be gone a while. As for the Scoobs, one of the things I like abou them is that even when they argue & annoy each other, they still are friends and pull together in the end. So...email with Willow. :) Oh, chapter two is now up.
Review By [SlowMercury] • Date [30 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "...SO IT BEGINS..." from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
SWEET!
Comments from author:
:) Thank you!
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [30 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "...SO IT BEGINS..." from msdarque
Review:
Quite an interesting and amusing chapter!
I'd love to read more and see how and where things go. :D
Congrats!
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it so far. Chapter two is now up. :)
Review By [msdarque] • Date [30 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "...SO IT BEGINS..." from Elleria
Review:
Looking forward to the next bit.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Chapter two is up.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [29 Dec 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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