I started tracking the first story as I had never seen one with that dark an overtone and I have to admit that I was really excited about it. I reread the first chapter after the changes, and its still good but so different from your original version that it might take me a while to get my head around whether I like it :S I guess I'm a fan of darker stories.

I really hope you pick up the old version at some point as I really think it had a lot of potential :)

You changed so much that this is a completely different story! I like it though, it's funny and it has future. But I still like the idea you had for the last one, I agree with the people that said that you should write them both =D Well, goo luck with the rest ;*

Hmm, it's a different approach than the first try. It sounds promising allthough ýou might want to change the summary of the story to better reflect the new plot. The scoobies are more supportive this time around after all.

I look forward to reading more.

Great chapter. I hope you will write next chapter soon.

Interesting changes, still a good story but it really doesn't have the flavor of the first version. I personally kinda liked the potential for both versions. I think it all depends on how you want the interactions between the Scoobies and Buffy's new group to be. In this version you have the potential for good relations between the two groups, while the other version will start out bad but potentially change depending on the Scoobies growing up a little.

It all depends on how you want the story to go, either way it should be interesting to see how it develops.

If they ever get each others' stories straight, Jack (being Jack) will probably tell Buffy Willow actually is that good with a side of fries.

I can tell you what happened in one kind of long sentence.

Willow, now whitehaired again and recuperating, had teleported Buffy to meet her new team; as SG-1 was offplanet at the time, she went where they were.

QED.

I agree with Xovervore. I think you should make them separate stories. The first had a darker tone; while the second's first chapter was so sweet it gave me a toothache. It probably says something about me that I preferred the first version, despite the fact that it was a bit rushed.

The changes you have made are so different to original that this is a new story. I agree with the criticisms of your original, especially the paragraph where she was spewing forth all the secrets of the scoobies including that Dawn was the key.
This new version is better written, but now the summary is inaccurate as it doesn't accurately reflect how she left as regards her and the scoobies.
You should continue with this new version, but I think you should also go back to original story and as a separate story do a redo of it that is basically similar, simply correcting obvious too fast reveals. In your original you had her being a neighbour of Sam - one can make that her connecting point to SG1; develop the relationship with Sam before she ever has contact with SGC; as there are not many stories like that.

I like this new version of your story. It's a good start of story. (Sorry for the bad english, I'm still learning.)

Good start. I didn't read the first version, so I can't comment on the differences, but this version works. I could see the Scoobies agreeing to back off, especially considering the tension between them at the end of season 7. I wonder how long it will take Willow to realize that Buffy's missing and panic. Would she be able to find her on another planet? Or will Buffy be in Colorado Springs for real before Willow finds out that something went wrong?

Is this the same Sateda as the planet in the Pegasus Galaxy that Ronon is from in Stargate Atlantis?

I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

umm... sorry to tell you this but i like how she had a clean break from them in you first version.... sorry...

and it's a bit TOO sappy, the scoobies are all control freaks when it comes to Buffy so it's not really believeable that they're just letting her go....

sorry again but the first version was better, not as fleshed out but even that short story line was more interesting....

I can't wait to see where you take this.

Great summary at the end there of all 7 or 8 years of Buffy's life as the Slayer. I'm a bit leary of Buffy telling virtual strangers all of that deeply personal info straight away, especially that her sister is the Key. That is highly dangerous info. It does allow us to get it out of the way and move on with the story though so I look forward to seeing what you come up with.
- just one thing, Xander used a lot of fertilizer/ fuel bombs to blow up the school. C4 is a lot harder to get hold of and more expensive and would not have required the large barrels we saw in the episode.

was an interesting start. looking forward to further updates.

Interesting start, to what could be a good story. I am interested in seeing how you play out the pairing. I see from your note that you are going to change some of the things that the other reviewers commented on, which are some of the problems I had so I'm not going to give you another comment in regards to those.
I do see a slight problem with your reasoning for why she left though, it seems a little against her established character. I could understand her being stressed out and needing some time away from that life, but to have her pissed off over them wanting her to lead and not giving Faith a chance seems a little out of character. Especially since that's the reason that she got kicked out in season 7, because she wouldn't allow another to lead. I like that you have her seeing that she treated Faith wrong by not giving her a chance but it seems kinda off when she's complaining about the Scoobies doing exactly what she wanted them to do for so long.

A possible method to keep the same kind of idea would be to have it that they as a group decided to have Faith lead for awhile and let Buffy have a break from it. And then Buffy getting pissed because despite that decision they still kept turning to Buffy rather than Faith. It would keep the same general flavor while making it not look so bad for Buffy. The way you have it, it kinda puts Buffy in a bad light by making it look like yet again Buffy is running from a responsibility that she demanded. If you make the slight change that it was an agreement by the entire group to give Buffy the break and let Faith lead, then the Scoobies look bad because they're going back on the decision.