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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
Really great story. I like the characterizations. I like that Buffy got to be wrong without being demonized... That you didn't turn Riley into either a paragon or some kind of cardboard cut out. None of your OC's (I'm assuming they were OC's since I don't recognize 'doublewide or Mrs. B or Scream, etc.) were 'over the top' either. It's so easy to create Mary Sues from OCs.

Faith. You made her strong, caring and believable as someone playing to the earlier strengths without being subject to all of her failings. Yet, she remained recognizable, likable and someone I want to learn more about and spend more time with.

If you decide to do a sequel, I will read it. If you don't, this will be my favorite Faith portrayal this year so far, and one of my favorite, period.

btw, your description said 'other adventure shows'. I don't recognize this one. Did I miss something? I just went back to the summary and realized that it's something called 'Over There'. Not aware of it... shrug. Great story anyway.


EDIT: Just looked up Over There, and discovered Erik Palladino is in it... he's one of my favorite actors. I actually used him as one as the 'actor' for one of my OCs in my story "A New Heart". He's a Brachen demon. I am sorry I assumed your characters were OC's... still, they were well drawn, and I suspect I'll recognize them once I finally get to see the show. I don't have cable, so that's prolly why I wasn't aware of it. Steven Bochco used to be a favorite tv director of mine.

Peace,

Blue
Comments from author:
Thank-you, you say such nice things.

I really didn't think this story would be that popular and I really only wrote it for my own amusement, imagine my surprise...

All the military characters are from the show 'Over There', which were quite well developed even though the show only lasted one 13 episode season. Personally I think 'Over There' was one of the best examples of recent US TV, a great pity it was canned.

To be honest Riley is easy to write because he was a bit of a cardboard cutout in the show. It really doesn't take too much effort to write him better than he was portrayed.

Oddly I hated the Faith character when she first turned up on the show, but as I saw more of her in later episodes and ATS my opinion of her changed, now she is one of my favs.

I try not to bash characters. I love Buffy but I'm also aware of her faults (as with all the main characters). Buffy is a hero and she usually gets it right in the end.

Anyway, glad you enjoyed the fic, a sequel, maybe two will be a long but it'll be a few months before anything gets posted.

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [17 Feb 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from RafMereC
Review:
Great ending
Raf
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

Dave.
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [16 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from lunalurker
Review:
I'd also like to throw in a vote for a sequel. This has been one of my favorite ongoing stories since it started, showing a unique version of Faith's second chance and a new life. The ending was a nice suprise as well, showing hope for her one day reconnecting with her old life in a positive way, even if it's just through Xander.
Comments from author:
Thank-you very much.

I think Faith will reconnect with her past, but not before she has more adventures!

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [16 Feb 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from Oranda
Review:
So sad to see it over. I really loved this Faith and I hope you do more with this story line. Also, loved seeing Xander in the story. He really capped off the ending. Thank you for sharing.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

I think I've been convinced to write a sequel, but I'm not going to rush it.

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [Oranda] • Date [16 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from mackiechandler
Review:
This has been an incredible story. You are a wonderful writer. You took a great idea of a Faith with no memory, and you gave her the personality that we know as Faith, and made her into an interesting and wonderful hero, with great new characters around her. Throwing in Riley and then Buffy changing her mind and the final story with Xander, this was exceptional. Just so well crafted. thank you for an excellent story.
Comments from author:
Thank-you so much for the praise, if this was the Oscars I'm be bursting into tears about now!

Dave.
Review By [mackiechandler] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from ShayneT
Review:
I really liked this...the whole story and the last two chapters. I've never seen the show this is a cross with, but this worked in a fundamentally touching way. Faith, for all her bravado might very well be the kind of person that would thrive in the military. Not just because of her enhancements; slayer versus gun isn't all that great a fight on the face of it. With supersonic bullet speeds, by the time the sound reaches enhanced hearing, you are already dead. However, Faith is brave and lonely, and the sense of family created by the military might be exactly what she needed.

Or if not...you did a brilliant job of making us believe it, which is the very definition of a talented writer. Bravo.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I always thought Faith needed a 'home' to latch onto which the Scoobies never gave her (for whatever reason and I'm not blaming them). the Army gave her a home, a purpose and friends.

If you ever get a chance to see 'Over There', do so, it was good TV.

Dave.
Review By [ShayneT] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from PATM
Review:
This far exceeded any expectation I harbored for this story . You could add another story to this and I will read it with interest. Well done
Comments from author:
Thanks a lot,

People harbour expectations? GULP!

What about two stories?

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [PATM] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from Ignotus
Review:
I've never seen the show this is supposed to crossover with but I really liked this story. It's certainly a different take on Faith waking up, her as a soldier. It fits her very well. This is definitely an enjoyable read.
Comments from author:
Thank-you very much indeed.

Dave.
Review By [Ignotus] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from Kremer
Review:
Great story (and great writing, too).

I, too, think that her memory loss was more due to biology than any mystical/supernatural purpose. Her Slayer-ness healed her brain damage correctly, back to its original state - a blank slate.

I'd rather see her join the military's demon hunter team rather than the SGC. A different story direction than SGC-meets-slayer(s)/Council. Plus, at the SGC her enhanced abilities/strength *would* be quickly noted, and then it becomes a question of whether she becomes "Faith - Lab Rat", rather than "Faith - Kicker of Goa'uld Ass".

If they haven't run across each other, yet (unlikely as it seems), the military squad encountering a Slayer team in the field might be an interesting plot point.
Comments from author:
Thanks.

Some of the points you make mirror some of the ideas I've had. It would be too easy to fall into the same old plot of slayer+SGC and it ends up as yet another snake kicking fic.

I think I might have come up with a better idea, we'll see how it developes.

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [Kremer] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from slmncpm
Review:
i did love this. thank you for that. *smiles*
Comments from author:
And thank-you for that :-)

Dave.
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from (Current Donor)Sulien
Review:
Thanks for this ending. I was seriously worried that Buffy was going to go in and force a confrontation by telling Faith all about her sordid past and making her remember what is most definitely best left buried. Faith really did become someone else over the time she's spent in the Army and it's good to see her making her way to a much better life than what she left back in that hospital room in Sunnydale.

Great story all the way around; thank you for sharing it. Like most other folks, I'm definitely up for the sequel if you ever decide to write it; though I definitely have to say my preference is for Faith to take Sam up on her offer. I dearly love the idea of so many kick ass women in the SGC and Faith really would fit right into the family there!
Comments from author:
Thanks muchly.

I think I've come up with a better idea than an SGC fic....but theres no reason why they shouldn't meet Faith again at some point. I'm planning on writing any sequel like I did the original; a number of interconnected stories so who knows who will turn up!?

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from CPTSkip
Review:
Thank you for a great story. I look forward to seeing a sequel but only when you think it is good enough. Great job with Faith and I would love to see Faith and Xander get together again. If it fits the story, of course. I look forward to reading another of your great stories, whether it is a sequel to this one or not.
Comments from author:
Thanks Cpt, I'll be picking your brain again...soon!

Dave.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from MountainWilliam
Review:
A well written tale, and most thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you for writing it.

I hope you will decide to do a sequel.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

I think I've been persuaded to do a sequel, might take awhile but we'll get there.

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [MountainWilliam] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from Mcspender
Review:
At least Buffy found out that redemption is real, and it's not only limited to the PTB "champions club".
Unlike other reviewers, I like to believe that the reason behind Faith's amnesia are organic, not a PTB plot; I mean, brain damage from such a big fall is a very serious risk, slayer or not.
And weell, Xander showed a good time to a soldier , and Faith enjoyed the night on town ; ).
Congratulations for such a cool series =).

See ya!.
Comments from author:
I don't know if anyone else has used the idea of a 'reset' for Faith or not, it just seemed like a good idea at the time! Whatever the reason I think soldier Faith is here to stay (for a while at least).

Cheers.
Dave.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen." from JoeDineen
Review:
Aw Shucks! that was so sweet, I wonder what the powers are planning, maybe dragging the slayers into the SGC in time for the Ori war?

I can just see it; Faith join the SGC and some Ancient device takes over her mind and when the Asgard fix her her memories return.

One odd thing, is that she seemed to have some dreams about the fight with Buffy but no recognition from when they met.

Good one though.
Comments from author:
I think if you look back I described the Buffy character in the fight as a 'faceless woman'. I had to go back and change it when I decided that Faith and Buffy would have to meet! Thank the gods for not posting until you've finished writing!

Cheers,
Dave.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [15 Feb 11] • Not Rated
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