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Review of chapter "Chapter One - I'm back?" from trongod
Review:
Excellent. You can do a lot with this, for as many chapters as you feel up to, since the flashbacks can be an entire chapter by themselves, unrelated to the Sunnydale events; sort of Interludes, if you will. How the rest of the Scoobies react to his return, and even whether or not they even knew he was missing, can be eye opening all around as well.
Come to that, how long was Xander in the Other Reality, and does time flow the same in both? You can get some neat play there as well - either Xander has been gone months/years and the resulting change in him and Sunnydale is shocking, or his months/years absence has only been for days or the summer, and Xander's new body and abilities has Buffy The paranoid trying to stake him when she's not trying to get Giles Jenny, and Willow to exorcise The Demon That Is Pretending To Be The Xander-Shaped Friend, as poor Xander is alternately running/fighting for his life and trying to get through her thick skull who he is and what happened to him.
Just a suggestion, since I'm a BIG Xander/Faith, Xander/Dawn, Xander/Faith/Dawn fan(atic): Have Dawn here when Xander gets back; he says nothing, since for all he knows, this Hottie Brunette ONE YEAR YOUNGER sister (subtle, aren't I?) has always existed but lived with Daddy Summers before being abandoned with Joyce while he was gone - further fuel for the 'I Hate Hank Summers' fire club - so he innocently flirts, having gotten over his Buffy lust long ago (well, long for HIM, anyway). They sell some of the jewels he had stashed in his Never Full Pack, gaining cash for the group; a call from the Council sets him off to Boston, where news of a Potential has alerted Giles' allies in the Council that something is wrong.
Xander Quests to Bean Town, meets Faith (either the hard, Marvel way, or a more amusing way - say a sauna Xander is in gets crashed into by a demon getting smacked around by Faith and Ms, Pryce = Faith gets an eyeful, Xander gets to whack a demon au naturel, and Ms, Pryce gets blackmail material on both ) and you set up an early meet and greet for the two teams in Sunnydale. Such an event allows the survival of Faith's Watcher, as they know where and who to get help from as soon as they find The Greek Geek is in town, and maybe you can allow the Buffy Treatment for Kendra, so now there are three Slayers in Sunnydale, only one of which the Council really knows about?
Think of the FUN you can have!!!
Review By [trongod] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - I'm back?" from Omegaprime
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Interesting, I like to see more.

But how the heck did Xander get there? What class was he? How will his friends take this? Will his new friends try to look for him? And if so, how will both groups react to each other?

Keep up the good work.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - I'm back?" from MathiasBlue
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Liking the look of it so far!
Just please be a fast updater ^-^ !!
Review By [MathiasBlue] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - I'm back?" from Vendoban
Review:
How did Xander still have his Hawaiian shirt if Liliana had burned it? Minor plot hole, not to major.
Comments from author:
Wow, can't believe I missed that. Any way thanks for pointing that out, all fixed now ^^.
Review By [Vendoban] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - I'm back?" from ConDaMon
Review:
definitely has potential I'm looking forward to more
Review By [ConDaMon] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - I'm back?" from Addlcove
Review:
tentatively this could be an awesome story, looking forward to seeing how you will proceed.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [24 Feb 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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