Aagh! Assuming Faith arrives in time (and I'm GOING to assume that, just for my peace of mind), I have a feeling that neither Joyce nor Faith will be allowing Dawn to go as far as the next room by herself for quite a while to come.

On the other hand, it's been a while since Faith got to beat the snot out of anything that was intent on making a meal of humans, so I expect she'll find this a semi-cathartic experience, so long as Dawn survives. And those reptilians are about to bite off a whole lot more than their entire species can chew, if they somehow manage to kidnap Dawn in broad daylight and get off-world.

Another thrilling chapter (and I particularly enjoyed the young Empress getting Imperial on her proconsuls and NOT doing what old Ilarius expected, or at least not in the vulnerable way that he expected).

Dawn might not want to go too far from her mother after this - assuming that she doesn't become a snack... ;-)
As you say, Faith hasn't had a chance to beat the crap out of anything not-human in a while, though the Ch'Hanis are a tough proposition (wait and see). I toyed with the idea of a full-blooded off-world kidnapping, but it's too early in the story for that. Then, of course, it wouldn't be a Slayer the aliens had to worry about, but one angry Empress with a battle fleet.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.

great chapter!

Thanks - glad you enjoyed it.

Hope Dawn learned something from this experience. Arghhh! What a cliffhanger. Ty

She might... But we're talking about Dawn.

Thanks for the review.

Dawn lives where every day is Tuesday. Perhaps a switch blade across the gizzard whenever works best for the story. This Aelina's Tavern doesn't have a bathroom and they let Dawn walk two miles and staying safe from this bathroom less tavern? And back again? I am not buying it. Horses and barn doors I know but come on!

The Tavern does have a bathroom, it's just a long way from the main part (pretty sure we've all been in places like that). As for the "two miles" that was Faith's exaggeration. It's a little contrived, I admit, but I had to find some way to put Dawn in danger and separate her from her guards.

Thanks for the review.

I'm pleased you decided to split off Dawn and co. adventures into a separate story. Since your stories, to my obvious delight, are long and detailed, it quickly becomes a bit difficult to keep track of the numerous plot lines.

I look forward to reading more chapters and other stories from you in the future.

I couldn't logically keep this as part of the main story, else it would have been very much abridged.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.

Hmm, the professional bodyguard types really should have known better than to break protocol.

I do look forward to more.

They really should have. SG-15, Aquiliani and Faith are all likely to have their arses collectively and individually kicked.

Thanks for the review.

I really like it that you created an extra arc for this.

This should make it easier for me to follow all subplots.
So contiue your great work.

I will have fun reading it :-)

It made sense to separate this arc from the earthbound ones. Glad you enjoyed it - thanks for the review.

I like it! I mean, Dawn's story arc is pretty much independent of the ongoing battle against Glory and the Goa'uld back home on Earth, since there's no communication back and forth. It makes sense to let this part of the story have its own title and chapters, from this point onward.

Nice work! (And Daniel may actually die of a geek-gasm, if Joyce succeeds in bringing that 50-volume post-Alteran history back to the SGC!)

Glad you enjoyed it. By the end of Fate's Little Plaything, Vol1, I was beginning to feel that this arc couldn't really stay with the main part. It may actually be harder to write than volume 2, however, with the need to invent a reasonably satisfying and detailed setting.

Daniel will, indeed, thoroughly enjoy his volumes.

Thanks for the review.

There is the second story you promised and I am well honed for more. Now you're working twice as hard. Hee.

Thanks for this - glad you enjoyed it. This is a little different from my previous writing, so I wasn't sure how it would be received. :-)

Lots of backroom intrigue and backstabbing! I can already see this is gonna get very involved! This is gonna be good! :)

Glad you enjoyed it. In the short run, this will probably be more about plotting and counter-plotting, but there will be a lot of action as the story proceeds. It may take a little longer to produce chapters than Fate's Little Plaything - I'm simply playing in the SG-1 and Buffy worlds with that one. Here, however, I'm building much of the world as I go along and I'm not fully sure where the Muse will take me.

Thanks for the review.

I am really enjoying all the detail you invest into this Dawn arc. Very 'Epic Sci-Fi'! ::grin::

~Innogen

Thanks for the review. I felt a lot of detail was essential here, as I'm putting Dawn and the others into an entirely new world and, aside from some background references to the Ancients in various incarnations of Stargate, I didn't really have a basis for a story. A basic "Dawn, Joyce and Faith have generic-type adventures, on some vaguely described planet", simply wasn't going to work - and my readers deserve better than that. Hence the "Epic Sci-Fi" attempt - hope you enjoy the rest. :-)

Thank you for this tale
Really did not expect this
An excellent start

Politics, intrigue
Dawn's excellent adventures
Loved the first chapter!

Thanks for the rhyming review (I won't even try to answer in kind) - glad you enjoyed it. I'm still not exactly sure where the Muse will take me with this one, but probably a lot more politics and intrigue before the action starts.

I totally suck
At rhyming,
So haiku it is.

A wonderful plot.
By itself,
It really quite shines.

Thanks for the haiku review - glad you enjoyed it.

I'm not even gonna try to Rhyme
I just aint got the thyme

so lets spice things up
and Just get on with the review.

Great chapter.Keep up the good work.

Thanks for the rhyming review
Though the chapter is just a preview...

(I can't rhyme either) - glad you enjoyed it.

Still enjoying this series immensely! You've got so many fascinating story lines in play that I'm going back and re-reading quite regularly.

Small suggestion: "A Terran, by the Ancestors? The first contact for a million years and more..."

Given that the culture is clearly based on the Romans, this can't really be correct. Can I suggest perhaps "for a thousand years and more..."?

Who says that this culture is based on the Romans and not the other way around...? I'll explain this part in the next chapter.

(Ed. You're right about the time period - a million years is significant, but the last contact would have been around 2500 years, placing it in the early years of the Roman Republic)

Thanks for the review.