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Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from Grovtech
I don't have much to add to all the great comments that has already been made. This isn't just fanfic but like others have said you've greatly expanded on the source material. I'm so looking forward to more!

However, I did note that in the Cordy story the Asgardians did play mailman for our castaways so at some point an agreement has been reached after they failed to uphold the treaty.

Comments from author:
Many thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it. This is probably my favourite of the series, as I've given myself more free reign here.

The Tallurans and Asgard will partially mend fences, and this will be one of the favours owed by the latter...
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [18 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Counter-Strike" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Poor Faith, finally some men throw herself at her feet, and she can actually have some fun and they're the wrong race. I'm just surprised no one made an 'I've got crabs' joke.

At least the destruction on the archeological site wasn't wrought by the investigators. Curse you, Indiana Jones!

Ah, for the joys of insane Emperors... Insanity that was actually bred into the line. Makes one wonder about the sanity and asininity of the race as a whole.

A horrible and terrifying attack that will no doubt lead to a tough decision and painful consience for Drayana.

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Who said these Malhenthia were the male of the species? Actually, I missed a trick there. Exactly the sort of thing Faith would have said.

They might have to return there at some point, too.

This Emperor's insanity may yet have dire consequences for the whole extended family, when his troops finally rise...

Drayana is quite capable of making the toughest decisions - even in a context like this - but her conscience will weigh her down for a long time afterwards.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from (Recent Donor)draconin
Wow! Your portrayal of war on this scale is terrifyingly evocative. I really do love Drayana as a character and you're keeping her fresh and evolving. I think that she is NOT going to be impressed with the outcomes of the High Council's refusal to involve itself! Really looking forward to the next instalment.
One small typo (I presume): I went back to reread the previous chapter - in the paragraph where Joyce is taking 'holiday snaps' you say that she (Joyce) is looking forward to relating her experiences to Buffy and Joyce... I assume you mean Buffy and Cordelia. :-)
Comments from author:
The war is almost over, though there'll be a lot of mess to clear up. Glad you like my development of Drayana's character. She won't be happy with the Asgard at all...

I'll fix the typo - thanks for pointing it out.

Thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed it
Review By [(Recent Donor)draconin] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from (Current Donor)Sulien
ETA: I really wish the review area had a reply function! Anyway... Yes, Deterrence Theory is very valid in the real world and I have been cringing and literally face-palming and grinding my teeth at recent real world events. Dear Gods, I wish all real world leaders had to undergo the training you've had the Tallurans give Drayana!

While I'm at it, Drayana's reasons for not wearing her military uniform gave me all kinds of warm fuzzies. I really love that character!


I very nearly did Gollum's dance of joy when I saw the email notification of the posting of this chapter in my in-box this afternoon. Thank you!

Review. Wow. Holy crap. I have trouble wrapping my head around the casualties caused by various madmen in our own reality and this scale is downright incomprehensible. Okay, I admit it, I really don't WANT to wrap my head around this sort of thing. *forcibly dragging mind away from this line of thought and all that it entails...lalalalalala*

The thought that the Asgard were hanging back and could actually have intervened to stop such massive civilian casualties... Yeah, the Asgard High Council can count themselves lucky if Drayana doesn't tell them to exit the Vedda Galaxy and put her imperial boot up their collective backsides on the way out after she learns about this. I've a feeling Drayana, and the rest of the Tallurans, will know that they no longer need the Asgard baby sitters by the time all is said and done in this war. And if the Asgard are smart, they'll wait until the peace is well under way and everyone is in recovery mode before telling Drayana. She'll have had enough of conflict by that time that she'll likely not even plant her boot up their backsides.

Very much looking forward to the next chapter whenever you post it! And thank you for sharing this and making my day. :)
Comments from author:
The casualty figures were indeed eye-wateringly high. Unfortunately, if the Tallurans hadn't responded extremely harshly they'd have been leaving themselves wide open to similar attacks in future. The Empress will still have problems with her conscience for a while - in spite of her threats, she isn't her ancestor.

The Tallurans may find it hard to forget and forgive the Asgard's failure to intervene. While the former aren't quite ready to dispense with the Asgard, they will be sorely tempted, and as you say, if the Asgard are wise, they'll wait until things have calmed down somewhat.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.

Edit: Feel free to drop me an e-mail via the site at any time. Too many people in today's world only associate deterrence theory with the Cold War, but it's timeless for a very good reason. Drayana had multiple reasons for not wearing the uniform, all of them valid. Glad you like the character - I've spent a lot of time thinking about how to portray her in the most convincing way possible.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from maxthehobbit
I had expected a lot of interaction with Faith, Dawn and the polar bear creatures, but all the action with Dryanna was good and very entertaining. I guess what I thought will come up in the next chapter, a long three month wait. Hopefully I'll live that long ... had a heart attack near the end of March ... payment for smoking 2 packs a day for 38 years. The Asgard acting like the PTB is a new development. Still enjoying this story and looking forward to the big fight with Glory ... maybe about Christmas time?
Comments from author:
The interaction with the Imshai will start in the next chapter, which I hope to post in under 3 months this time.
The Asgard aren't exactly acting like the PTB, more wanting the Tallurans to reassume their position as one of the Four Races (being the remaining physical presence of the Alterans) and also to take some of the pressure off them for maintaining various Protected Planets Treaties. The Tallurans aren't going to like their non-intervention, however.

I do indeed hope to have FLP2 finished around Christmas, if not before.

Hope your health improves and thanks for the review.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from NorthernOil
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review - hope you enjoyed it!
Review By [NorthernOil] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from RevDorothyL
I hope the Asgard High Council haven't made a serious miscalculation in their treatment of the Tallurans (even if they couldn't possibly have miscalculated as badly as mad emperor Kharillon).

Great and exciting chapter!
Comments from author:
Drayana may have calmed down somewhat by the time she talks to the Asgard and finds out that they decided not to intervene. She won't forgive or forget easily, however.

Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from JinaSolo
Please have the SGC contingent talk both parties out of invading Pegasus and the Milky Way...

I think Dawn and Faith would be great for chewing them both out. If the Asgard had stepped in and let the biological and nuclear attacks happen in space them the Empress would have still been mad and still ordered the Star Empire beaten, but she would not have had to order the deaths of so many...

In other words, if the Asgard want to help Earth them they can give Earth the technology to help themselves rather then sending in others to meddle... While Earth and the Milky Way might like to open trade relations with them, nobody in either galaxy would like interference...

Besides, in the SG1 TV show we get the Asgard Tech anyway...
Comments from author:
Earth doesn't even know about Pegasus at this point. In any case, it's more of the Tallurans' responsibility. They're an offshoot of the Alterans, who made the mess in the first place. If the Alterans hadn't Ascended, the Tallurans would have been the ones (as the warrior offshoot) who returned to Pegasus in force. Only their own disasters prevented that from happening, but it's still on the agenda. If I do write a Pegasus section, the SGA team will only be there as allies of a force better able to deal with the situation there. SGA in canon merely made matters worse in all sorts of ways.

Dawn and Faith are hardly likely to be asked to talk to important allies of the Talluran Empire and Earth. The Asgard will, however, be chewed out.

Earth was lucky to come out on top against the Goa'uld and in part only thanks to Replicator attacks, the Jaffa rebellion, and Anubis destroying the power of the individual system lords. The Protected Planets Treaty is a big bluff on the part of the Asgard for the most part and they probably view the Tallurans as better able to carry out that function. The Asgard have known the Tau'ri for all of 2 minutes in galactic terms and are hardly likely to suddenly share everything with them. Even if they did, the technological gulf is massive. Prometheus hasn't even been launched yet in this story and Earth hasn't got the resources to build a significant fleet (nor did it in canon). In canon, Asgard tech arrived in tiny amounts and initially with limited capabilities.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from Orion
Great! I was really pleased to see that this has been updated. I've very much enjoyed reading this and continue to feel that way about this one.

Thanks for writing and sharing it with us.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review - glad you're still enjoying the story.
Review By [Orion] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from HMaxMarius
Oh dear... has the Asgard High Council stepped on the old crank?

We know Kharillon did. Heh... serve him right if he is caught sneaking out the back door of his palace disguised as a beggar-woman... =D

Ya know... I think standing orders for the home fleet should be to immediately beam up the Astria Porta as soon as the Faceless One appears on a world. Thus trapping it in a single location for destruction at the leisure of the ship's commander.
Comments from author:
It may have somewhat. The Tallurans aren't going to be happy, anyhow.

Kharrillion is a dead man - just haven't decided on the method yet....

Nice idea, the problem is that the Faceless One may be about to spawn.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from DarthTenebrus
This has been long and patiently awaited, and with an equal measure of gratitude is it received. Your mastery of the narrative and the emotional aspects of a good story is once again well demonstrated.

With but the minimum of verbiage you paint a very vivid picture of an Empress's great sorrow and terrible wrath, such that I have questioned why Drayana did not opt to increase the measure of her Empire's retribution to the extinction of the Khkerikk race.

To imagine such a holocaust makes my blood run cold as it would anyone's blood, I expect. In the matter of the Faceless One, the creation of Illyria before her choice to side with the Tau'Ri and help protect them, though it seems that space-based heavy plasma weapons may harm it, I can envision a strategy forming in the near future that will entice that foul unbeing to arrive on a desolate world where a hundred thermonuclear devices will be waiting to deliver the only sure means of its complete destruction.

The limited interference policy of the Asgard has its good points as well as its bad ones. With their inability to evince emotional responses or to empathize with others, they are limited to only logical justifications for their decision to stand by as billions of Tallurans and Khkerrikk combined suffer the ravages of total war. One would hope that Asgard logic has taken the response of the Tallurans into account.

Let not the next installment in this opus of yours come quite so late.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the enthusiastic review.

Angry though she was, Drayana wasn't yet ready to resort to genocide. Another similar attack, however...

The main problem with luring the Faceless One anywhere is its habit of popping up unexpectedly in different places, all over the galaxy. It may also be about to spawn...

The Tallurans won't be happy, but Drayana might have calmed down a bit by that time. They've been allies of the Tallurans for millennia (as opposed to minutes in galactic terms with the Tau'ri).

Glad you enjoyed it - I'll try not be so long next time.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from Rich
Let's see, where to start....WOW.

You haven't created a new character, or a new story; you've created an entire universe, with multiple species, nations, and histories. The character of Drayana alone is worthy of her own fandom (I want a tee shirt !), and I look forward to the eventual "concise history of the Talluran Empire" in three volumes.

The military action is clear and concise, the strategic aspects are easy to understand, and the characters are completely believable. And in this chapter, you also achieved something that I'd hesitate to attempt - you wrote an inspiring political speech which was actually inspiring.

I'd say keep up the good work, but it would be superfluous, because I know you will anyway.
Comments from author:
Creating the Vedda Galaxy and its characters and races is actually the most enjoyable part of this.

Glad you think the characters are believable, even in a different context. I had some help from my beta, Vidicon, with the speech.

I will indeed keep up with this. Thanks for the review and glad you're enjoying it.
Review By [Rich] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from Dragan
Drat was hoping to see the Tauri's reaction to Polar Bears as Sentient.

Great Story
Comments from author:
Oh, you will... Especially Faith's - she might make some good friends there.

Thanks for the review, glad you're enjoying it.
Review By [Dragan] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old City, New Friends, New Enemies." from (Current Donor)Sulien
Could have sworn I'd recommended this story long ago, but found out I hadn't when I was going through to make sure this entire series was recced after talking to a friend of mine about it. Oversight corrected. :)

Edited to reply: generally speaking, I'm allergic to WIPs, but you're one of those authors whose stories I love so much I'm willing to wait however long it takes (you're in the top three on my list for this). This whole series has been awesome (yes, that word is vastly over used, but it applies here) and this is my favorite story in it, just because I love your world building and the original characters you've fleshed out so well. You're an amazing story teller and if you're not published, you should be. If you ARE published, please email me with the titles of some of your books so I can buy them! I may nit pick a few things here and there in private reviews, but I love your writing. /fangirling
Comments from author:
Thanks for the rec - glad you're sticking with it!
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [10 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Counter-Strike" from Alkeni
Another excellently written chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks - glad you're still enjoying it.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Not Rated
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