Review of chapter "Balance Disrupted" from HeatherSin
Review:
I think the old problems with "timing" aren't nearly as important anymore given how far we are from canon. I wouldn't worry too much about it.
Nice chapter length, nice characterizations. The plot has a good possibility of going epic since I haven't seen a really good Witchblade cross before. Most of the are just rehash of canon episodes which was old and cliche a decade ago. Now you just need a decent Grammar Nazi to look it over.
Good luck with future chapters.
Review By [HeatherSin] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Interesting start to a potentially very interesting story, especially since it looks like you're avoiding the usual gender switch route (thank you).
As for cell phones, mobiles were, if not wide spread then known at least in that time and so standard models for voice and text would not be out there at all. Camera phones and other more modern contrivances would not be all that out there (2004) and since this is fanfiction after all, you do have a great deal of latitude to alter the world as you see fit. Adding hover cars and computers in the brain might be pushing things a bit but for most they probably wouldn't realise that certain technologies weren't prevalent at the time of Buffy.
