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Review of chapter "Prologue" from trongod
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From this, I'd have to say that Xander is either long dead or long vanished from the new Watchers' surveillance abilities; can't see Dawn being as desperate and disgusted with her humanity otherwise, and those morons around her sure don't seem to be helping.
I get the sense that everyone around Dawn has an inflated sense of self; probably act as condescendingly to Dawn as they did to Xander in canon, hence the desolated Dawnster. Which in turn bodes ill for the future of Willow and Co., as they are on the road of the old Watchers Council, but worse: they already have seen the result of such attitudes and responses...
Hopefully these issues will be brought up and explained as you progress.

Until the next thrilling chapter!!
Review By [trongod] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Dawnsmorning
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I like it so far. It sounds good and I like the thought of Dawn wanting to find more of herself. Can't wait for more.
Review By [Dawnsmorning] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from CrystalBlaze
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The Powers will screw her, is doubtless Dawn's fear.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Orion
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A great teaser, certainly. I always like Dawn as a main character.

Also as it's an HP crossover, but nothing HP is here at all, you've left us wondering what form of crossover it might be.

Will Dawn's lack of magical abilities in areas Willow uses turn out to mean she's good with wand-magic? If so will she be going to Hogwarts? Probably not as a traditional student given her age, but still . . .

Or maybe that's not the point, and Dawn won't be going anywhere near Hogwarts, at least at first? Maybe she'll end up in some field that uses her linguistic skills and just happen to have a wand-waving colleague? Maybe they won't even know anything about the others' abilities? I can't wait to find out!

As a side note I'm partial to Harry/Dawn, if there is a romantic cross-pairing here, or at least as a friendship. Or canon pairings with just friendship between the two casts. That's just my preference though, and regardless of pairings or friendships or otherwise, I look forward to reading this.

Thanks for writing.
Review By [Orion] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from LeaFairy
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Very original start! I really like your take on Dawn and her feeling out of place with the rest of the Scoobies and their destinies. I don't know about her not being the Key anymore though, I always kinda thought she was the Key no matter what? I can't wait to see how you crossover Dawn with the HP world and what her purpose there is going to be...

Thanks for writing, I look forward to reading more!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from CPTSkip
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I am guessing, since this is a cross with Harry Potter, that Dawn needs a wand to focus her magic. But since she is 22 in your story, if she goes to Hogwarts, she is still going to be an outsider. If she does go to Hogwarts with Harry and his gang I imagine Dawn will change the course of Harry's life. I would find such a story interesting and I say go for it!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from mariposa
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its a pretty interesting start. I'd like to see what you have in mind for Dawn.
Review By [mariposa] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from AllenPitt
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I'm not so sure about 'not being the Key anymore'. Remember the 'spell to see spells' Buffy did? In it, Dawn would fade in & out. She IS the Key, made flesh. Just can't tap into it. But--Harry Potter world is a neat idea. With a wand, she could tap into her 'magical core' and odds are it's a lot more powerful than a typical wand wizard's core.
* I've always thought that maybe if she could learn to manipulate the 'Dawn spell' she could become a shapeshifter, modifying things like "change height/hair color" etc at will. Maybe that could translate into her becoming a Metamorphamagus like Tonks?
Let's see... beyond that I've got nothing. Well, 'green energy' maybe that relates to the Avada Kedavra spell somehow?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Alastor
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Hmm... interesting start, given her age I'm making a guess that you might be planning on transporting her to the HP universe since magic in Buffyverse is waayyy more powerful. If that were to be the case to give Dawn a fresh start so to speak then that would certainly be an interesting story in a place where semi ancient words, Dawn's specialty, are the basis for magic. Unless you were planning on de-aging her which would almost defeat the purpose of her having prior experience then for a pairing I would have to say that she'd go great with Sirius given their personalities. Just some thoughts and ideas thrown out there. Incidently is there a chance of you making another chapter of the Key to Pegasus series? Looking forward to more! Update soon!
Review By [Alastor] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from cloudleonsgurl
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This is stricking contrast to the all powerful Dawn fics. I like that Dawn has trouble with these things, because if she does ever become stronger, she'll appreciate it more. Anyways, can't wait read more. Love to see where you decide to take this fic.
Review By [cloudleonsgurl] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from jimk
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The idea of Dawn not have any above normal ability and feeling frustrated is interesting. Of course the implication is she has something and the summary says Harry Potter related. So sort of that's cool but not sure how you can really expect any relevant feedback to speak of since the Prologue doesn't really say anything about what direction you'll take this. I think the general idea has a lot of potential but really it all depends on what your specific idea is. You could have something really cool or really stupid but kind of hard to say at this time.

The Prologue, for what it is worth, is nicely written but I wouldn't have really reviewed something this vague except you asked for feedback and my point is well, feedback on what? :)
Review By [jimk] • Date [31 Mar 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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