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Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from Eureka
Review:
So they (Faith and Tara) decided to take the chance and tell Joyce...IS Joyce going to wise up and realize that they are telling the truth and help them to find the spell?
Review By [Eureka] • Date [6 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from AnFan
Review:
Wonderful to see a new chapter!

I'm guessing that Dru isn't thinking of Angelus anymore because he's been replaced by Xander in all ways now. Especially as one to look up to and desire as well as the 'placeholder' of her sire, given the spell cast on him. I wonder if this impacts on how powerful a vampire Xander is? :)

I look forward to your next chapter. Thanks for the update.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [5 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from CageFire
Review:
Great new chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [5 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
Review:
Hm.
A few reviewers have already pointed out a few nagging flaws, which you answered, so I won't belabor the points further.

But one thing you really, really need to do is get a beta, preferably one from the U.S., mainly to catch differences in terminology from the UK vs. US, as well as other errors.

Some things I've noticed so far that seemed a bit glaring:

"his layer": Should be "lair".
"no elusions": Should be "illusions".
"her arse": Good example of UK vs US, should be "ass".
A couple instances of "quite" when it should be "quiet"...and one instance of "Angle" and not "Angel".

In spite of these, it's not badly written, just needs some polishing. I don't have any real issue with the OOC bits; it's an AU, after all...if they were all the same, it wouldn't be AU, and it would just be BtVS, which I've already seen on TV.

I'll keep following; I'm looking forward to seeing how it plays out.
Comments from author:
hmm I fixed a few of the 'quiet', arse and Angle errors, but I couldn't find the other two. I went trough every chapter but didn't see those. Tx for pointing those out. (Hawklan)
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [26 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from kayron
Review:
I hope that Faith and Tara find some kind of concrete proof against Buffy and Amy. Willow too I guess since she is such good friends with the other two women. I wonder...IS Willow in on the 'evil' side of Buffy and Amy or do they have a spell on her like they do with Giles?! It seems to me that the focus seems to be on Buffy as the 'evil overlord' and Amy as her 'evil henchman' or enforcer. Could Willow be under a spell? I would like to see Giles freed and on Xander's side. It seems that Angel is an ass whether he is an ensouled vampire, insane vampire, or immoral human. Buffy deserves what she got. She lost a true friend and gained a cheating bastard.
Review By [kayron] • Date [25 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from proofreader
Review:
It'll be FUN to see the leeches faces when the girl soon-to-be-dead-againboy slept with shows up DEMANDING her money (especially if she tells him to get a few tests done, or her pimp shows up saying she died of an STD from HIM and is demanding restitution for lost revenue). Especially if Buffy the Vampire Layer is there at the time. Even better if EVERYONE is there. If he's sleeping around as much as you implied, there's very little chance he hasn't caught something by now. I always did despise the Angel character.
Review By [proofreader] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Pup
Review:
One part of agrees with your depiction of Angel. I mean 'Angel', instead of going back to Liam or picking a new name he chooses to use a name 2 letters off from the one he used as one of the most vicious and sadistic vampires in history. that says something about his mentality. Another part keeps thinking of the good things he's done like helping Faith in her time of need and his quest for redemption. The final part yells at the other two to shut up so it can finish reading the story.

Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
Review By [Pup] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from CageFire
Review:
Great new chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from DarthPayne
Review:
I do hope that Angel, Amy and Buffy get whats coming to them...and soon.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from Eureka
Review:
I have to agree with the last review. Although I know Xander had to not tell the whole truth and nothing but the truth to get close to Tara, but he really needs to come clean to her now.
Keep up the good story and hopefully the next chapter won't take so long. ;)
Review By [Eureka] • Date [11 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from AnFan
Review:
Hmm, interesting. I guess that if the vamps take out the Initiative before Walsh builds Adam it will prevent a very large mess from developing. Probably a good thing. I'm wondering if you'll choose to chip Spike or not :)

I think that having Tara confront Xander is a very good thing for their relationship. Mainly because I don't see him actually lying to her, and I think the connection you've said they share in the story should be able to weather the conflict that would develop. If the lying by omission had continued longer it would have hurt their relationship more.

I find myself curious as to how you will have the details play out. Will you have the Initiative capture Tara? Will this prompt Xander to get Biblical on them? Is there any way to reverse the damage that's been done to Giles, and if so will any of his memories return to him? I look forward to your next chapter.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [10 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from mendal
Review:
If the people that xander turns still have their soul why on earth would they do anything but try to kill him?
Review By [mendal] • Date [9 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from kayron
Review:
HMM. Interesting. I wonder if Faith will become an ally. I can understand the conflict, no matter how it happened or the state of his soul, Xander IS a vampire now. Of course Angel has his (stolen) humanity back, and he's a bastard! So there is no reason why Xander can't be 'good'. If he wants to. Of course, I am definitely looking forward to his plans!
Review By [kayron] • Date [29 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Frardowin
Review:
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Comments from author:
and your problem with this fic? cause your ... don't says much....(Hawklan)
Review By [Frardowin] • Date [28 May 11] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from cptquinn
Review:
Love it, more please. =D
Review By [cptquinn] • Date [27 May 11] • Not Rated
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