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Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from SpacedCadet
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“Holy cow. That... I mean that could be portrait of us, if we found Hazel...” Rowan whispered. “And like, we dressed like total skanky ho's.”

Any chance that there will be a portrait of the three...with more modest dress...when they are all corporeal ?
Comments from author:
Considering that getting your portrait done is a Meier family tradition, getting away with only one is probably unlikely. ;-)

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Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Homes and families" from fanreaderonetwo
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I was rereading chapter 88 where they discover that Harmony Kendall is a song mage, and where the family's musical instruments are mentioned.

I'm assuming that the earlier mention of Simon XIV's harp was a Chekov's musket.

Now I'm wondering what Harmony's songs could do if supported by _that_ harp's music.....
Comments from author:
Just chapter 88 or the whole thing?

The harp is indeed magical. But Harmony will be using a completely different instrument that's been in her family for a while.

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Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from djhardim
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Another possibility: the Meier Children appear dressed as the 1950's version of the Mouseketeers, with Simon assuming the role of Jimmie Dodd.
Comments from author:
Oh... Dear. I don't think Simon's choices of moral advice would really have gone over well in the fifties.

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Review By [djhardim] • Date [11 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from Eureka
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I would have thought the "Romulus" was from the fact that he played "Quark"...LOL
Loved the chapter and can't wait to see what you write next.
Comments from author:
No, from a really horrible mother...

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Review By [Eureka] • Date [10 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from (Current Donor)Sulien
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Very much enjoyed this chapter, thank you for the update!

One question: how on earth did you come up with Snyder's first and middle names? I can definitely see Cassius (vain and empty), but why Romulus?

Also, I love the idea of the base stones of the abluaria being selected based on each individual's needs and, I gather, personality. I'm curious to see who has which stone.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it and gladly done.

Well, he wasn't born this way. His parents named him. I just needed names that most people wouldn't like to admit to.

Not just the base stones, also the way they are cut. Some are faceted, others cabuchon cut.

It will come out in the story, eventually. Writing a whole scene where everyone got their stone would take too long and not add much at this time.

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Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [9 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from CubsKing
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Another excellent chapter. I always look forward to seeing this pop back into the "Most Recently Updated" list.

Keep up the great work!
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.

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Review By [CubsKing] • Date [9 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from kalahari
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In this chapter the use of a private jet is reasonable. With that sort of money, I would prefer a turboprop for the ability to land and start on short grass airstrips, but a jet would be usable for flying coast to coast.

Where does the desire for personal bathrooms come from, I often see in fanfiction? Bathrooms are quite often the most expensive rooms in homes. Sharing a bath by four girls shouldn't be an issue. You can have a bedroom sized room with a window and put in two sinks, a tub in addition to a shower and a bidet, instead of hotel sized mini baths.
Comments from author:
Simon owns both, or at least the Meier Family office does. In this case a larger plane was needed.

It's an American cultural thing, and growing steadily in Western Europe too. In a house as large as Hooghwater the en-suite bathrooms are larger than minibaths, being former bedrooms.

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Review By [kalahari] • Date [8 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from Cordyfan
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A nice long chapter, with a great deal going on.

Amusing reaction from Willow and Rowan on the paintings and the progress on the spell. Glad to see that they finally realised they were being a tad bratty, before the grounding was extended!

Looking forward to finding out more about the wards around Hooghwater and hopefully seeing some more of them being set at some point. Of course, Buffy hasn't encountered a werewolf yet.

Daphne is so far out of her depth at first acquaintance, it's easy to feel sorry for her.

I hope Joyce has some prank of her own, to pay the others back for their little Sound of Music trick.

Good to see that common sense is prevailing with Willow and Rowan and they're asking for help and advice on removing some of Rowan's memories.

Interesting scene at the Nexus, especially the images it gave each of them.

Snyder versus Simon's lawyers? That'll be very interesting, especially as the little troll probably isn't as valuable to Wilkins as he thinks and the latter won't stick his neck out to help much.

Thanks for writing this.
Comments from author:
Willow and Rowan are growing up. It had to happen some day. ;-) It helps with a lot of things.

There's a weird mix of wards at Hooghwater. And wardsetting will be a lesson that comes up soon.

Daphne's resilient. She'll get used to it. ;-)

The problem is that there is only one Joyce and a lot of others to prank...

Snyder doesn't really stand a chance, no. Poor Romulus.


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Review By [Cordyfan] • Date [8 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
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So, Simon's father is easily accessible from the manor now? Cool.

Buffy is getting memories of a wish verse type world without Simon? Ouch. Marigold running unchecked... No charity houses... So many threads unraveled. Would be cool if one of the main vampires, like John Smith, took vampire Willow under his wing and helped her claim the Meier fortune...

Heh, thanks, now I'm reminded of how cataclysmic it would be for that world if the main storyline hadn't happened in The Secret Return of Alex Mack.

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Here's the method I found, hope it helps.

Copy your formatted text and paste it into http://www.textfixer.com/html/convert-word-to-html.php

This will give you the proper i and b tags, but it may also add extra floating groups of p and br tags, leading to excessive line spacing.

If you don't want to remove the excess line breaks by hand, copy and paste the converted text into http://www.textfixer.com/tools/remove-duplicate-lines.php

This will fix the line breaks so they are all nice single breaks, but also do some weird stuff such as eating your (identical to each other) hr section breaks, so you need to replace those and make sure it didn't rebreak any of the formatting. You might also need to cut the last of these extra long line breaks as it may still be intact at the end of the document.

Then copy and paste it all into the Add Chapter section. If clicking next leads to a Preview with errors, clicking Back will return you to the text entry section with all the p formatting TtH hides suppressed and some of the more broken stuff dropped completely so it's easier to work with.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [8 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from DofEire
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Some 'splainin', indeed! Thank you! I hope you continue to feel better. :)
Comments from author:
A lot more later. I hope so too...

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Review By [DofEire] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Witches and Confused mothers" from fanreaderonetwo
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No, she was burned out before she had her children. She wanted Willow untrained so she could take her over. She didn't any unconcious defences from, her children, or the risk that the three of them together would discover magic. So she made sure that two were dead and one was thereby damaged, if she knew it or not, from birth.

Sheila Rosenberg Moritz wasn't a nice woman before she got burned out. It didn't get better after. (This is the mental instability Simon is so leery of)

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So the evil bitch knew about and _cooperated_ with Marigold?

Wouldn't it have been easier to merely make sure she only carried one fetus?
If nothing else I suspect that carrying three fetuses is a
_major_ Pain in the Whatever, which the self-centered bitch wouldn't have liked.
I'm sure she knew about effective potions to induce abortions, tho making sure one healthy fetus survived might be a problem.
Comments from author:
I'm not saying anything about Marigold. But Wilkins had Rowan and Rack has Hazel and they are two very powerfulo souls to barter with, so bearing them to term was an 'economically sound decision...'

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Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from DieselDriver
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Very nice chapter. Lots of twists and turns and lots of fun stuff. Well told.
Comments from author:
Thank you, glad you liked it.

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Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches and Confused mothers" from fanreaderonetwo
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"Wondering what all _three_ triplets combined or merged would look like if they were together and healthy young adults (ie Marigold hadn't interfered).
OTOOH consider that trio (and any siblings) if their mother had not had her powers burned out and had raised and trained them, for good or ill.....

Comments from author:

Pretty darn scary, which is one reason why Sheila did what she did.

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By that, I assume that you meant that she realized how _dangerous_ her children could be if _she_ trained them, so what small bit of morality she retained was why she accepted being burned.
Alternatively, she might have seen her children as her weapons of revenge. But for some reason, such as only one daughter being live born, she abandoned or forgot her revenge plans.
Comments from author:
No, she was burned out before she had her children. She wanted Willow untrained so she could take her over. She didn't any unconcious defences from, her children, or the risk that the three of them together would discover magic. So she made sure that two were dead and one was thereby damaged, if she knew it or not, from birth.

Sheila Rosenberg Moritz wasn't a nice woman before she got burned out. It didn't get better after. (This is the mental instability Simon is so leery of)
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from SpacedCadet
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With all of the attention focused on the children, I'm a bit surprised that Willow's situation in regards to her biological parents hasn't come to public attention.

Even if the records are sealed, an enterprising reporter just asking questions in Sunnydale would probably be able to get a fair amount of information.
Comments from author:
Enterprising reporters might get eaten... Also the Mayor isn't one to like people digging into the faults of his administration.

And Simon's lawyers are very, very good indeed.

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Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from Meneldur
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An excellent chapter, with many things beginning o move. I really enoyed this one...

Amusing stuff with the portraits. I especially enjoyed Rowan and Willow's mortification at the paintings of Julia, it was hilarious. A nice bit of family history I liked well.

What does Laura want, I have to wonder. Well, it looks like we'll find out next chapter.

I really like what we;ve seen of Daphne so far. She's obviously not used to the wealth and power now surrounding her, and started out as very nervous and uncertain, but in mentoring Buffy, she seems to have come into her own, becoming confident and sure, keeping control of the situation and Buffy's learning.
Nice practical joke played, I thught it was quite amusing.

Good to see Willow already learning sense, and knowing they need to talk with people rather than attempt it on their own. Also good to see her use logic in approaching other people first, even if some of it came from healthy fear. After all, the burnt hand (or welted bottom) teaches best.

I though Evy and Arlene weren't comng originally? What changed?

Ruth was a very nice touch. It's good to see Penelope forcing Cecilia to confront the people she left behind, and the guilt over it.

Pentaphyllon, eh? So, Th Charmed Ones, Paige and Brenda... that is a scarily powerful idea... one wonders how strong the enemies they'll face are, if they have that to contend with...

Good reactions from everyone regarding the idea, especially Joyce. It was good that she spoke openly about it with them - both of Simon's fears, how they've been acting, and how they're right. They're growing up at a rapid pace, and while they are not yet adults, they'll be there sooner than later, especially with the experiences they're going through.

I loved the description of power all of them exuded, based on color and strength and landscape. It was wonderful, clear as well as poetic. Do you have an accurate power rating for them all? Or do we simply have what you've described, with Willow being individually the most powerful, and the 4/5 combined dwarfing even her?

So, Simon the elder wasn't completely evil, and had a reason for what he did. I like that a lot, especially that he chose to talk through Willow, and how she knew she didn't have good control of her power, so she ceded it to Buffy. It's that kind of attitude that builds a stronger team more able to fight greater foes, and that shows that Willow is really changed from show Willow, who was determined she could do everything alone.

The fight with the Polgara Demons was both amusing and a good demonstration of Buffy and Kendra's skills.

Abularia for everyone? Nice. I can't wait to find out what each on got...

The last conversation was very amusing, and then quickly took a turn towards the dark. Wonderful chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it, it was quite fun to write.

That whole magically induced family resemblance thing is really biting the Triplets on the ass. Though they’re not the only ones.

Laura wants help in tracking down the killers of her Pack.

Daphne will still have her moments, but she’s realizing that the Family all put on their trousers one leg at a time. ;-)

Joyce is not ever going to live down that dream scene.

Willow is learning. She’s got decent parental guidance and she knows they won’t think less of her. ( I always thought a lot of her problems came from very deep seated self esteem issues)

Simply put, I needed them to be away from Colorado Springs, so Hammond allowed it after all.

Ruth understands why she ran. She’s still not happy about it.

The pentaphyllon will be quite scary yes…

Yes, growth as a family and as persons is a central theme as you probably noticed. ;-)

I do actually have power ratings, but I’d prefer not to publish them until we get to the right chapter. (Some W&H observers) Willow and her triplets would be scary as hell.

Simon XIV wasn’t born evil, but he died as evil as Voldemort ever was. He did know what love was, however. Part of what’s driving him now is vengeance. Another part is remorse, now that his body is gone, the blood curse is a lot less powerful.

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Review By [Meneldur] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
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