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Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from SpacedCadet
With all of the attention focused on the children, I'm a bit surprised that Willow's situation in regards to her biological parents hasn't come to public attention.

Even if the records are sealed, an enterprising reporter just asking questions in Sunnydale would probably be able to get a fair amount of information.
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Enterprising reporters might get eaten... Also the Mayor isn't one to like people digging into the faults of his administration.

And Simon's lawyers are very, very good indeed.

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Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from Meneldur
An excellent chapter, with many things beginning o move. I really enoyed this one...

Amusing stuff with the portraits. I especially enjoyed Rowan and Willow's mortification at the paintings of Julia, it was hilarious. A nice bit of family history I liked well.

What does Laura want, I have to wonder. Well, it looks like we'll find out next chapter.

I really like what we;ve seen of Daphne so far. She's obviously not used to the wealth and power now surrounding her, and started out as very nervous and uncertain, but in mentoring Buffy, she seems to have come into her own, becoming confident and sure, keeping control of the situation and Buffy's learning.
Nice practical joke played, I thught it was quite amusing.

Good to see Willow already learning sense, and knowing they need to talk with people rather than attempt it on their own. Also good to see her use logic in approaching other people first, even if some of it came from healthy fear. After all, the burnt hand (or welted bottom) teaches best.

I though Evy and Arlene weren't comng originally? What changed?

Ruth was a very nice touch. It's good to see Penelope forcing Cecilia to confront the people she left behind, and the guilt over it.

Pentaphyllon, eh? So, Th Charmed Ones, Paige and Brenda... that is a scarily powerful idea... one wonders how strong the enemies they'll face are, if they have that to contend with...

Good reactions from everyone regarding the idea, especially Joyce. It was good that she spoke openly about it with them - both of Simon's fears, how they've been acting, and how they're right. They're growing up at a rapid pace, and while they are not yet adults, they'll be there sooner than later, especially with the experiences they're going through.

I loved the description of power all of them exuded, based on color and strength and landscape. It was wonderful, clear as well as poetic. Do you have an accurate power rating for them all? Or do we simply have what you've described, with Willow being individually the most powerful, and the 4/5 combined dwarfing even her?

So, Simon the elder wasn't completely evil, and had a reason for what he did. I like that a lot, especially that he chose to talk through Willow, and how she knew she didn't have good control of her power, so she ceded it to Buffy. It's that kind of attitude that builds a stronger team more able to fight greater foes, and that shows that Willow is really changed from show Willow, who was determined she could do everything alone.

The fight with the Polgara Demons was both amusing and a good demonstration of Buffy and Kendra's skills.

Abularia for everyone? Nice. I can't wait to find out what each on got...

The last conversation was very amusing, and then quickly took a turn towards the dark. Wonderful chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it, it was quite fun to write.

That whole magically induced family resemblance thing is really biting the Triplets on the ass. Though they’re not the only ones.

Laura wants help in tracking down the killers of her Pack.

Daphne will still have her moments, but she’s realizing that the Family all put on their trousers one leg at a time. ;-)

Joyce is not ever going to live down that dream scene.

Willow is learning. She’s got decent parental guidance and she knows they won’t think less of her. ( I always thought a lot of her problems came from very deep seated self esteem issues)

Simply put, I needed them to be away from Colorado Springs, so Hammond allowed it after all.

Ruth understands why she ran. She’s still not happy about it.

The pentaphyllon will be quite scary yes…

Yes, growth as a family and as persons is a central theme as you probably noticed. ;-)

I do actually have power ratings, but I’d prefer not to publish them until we get to the right chapter. (Some W&H observers) Willow and her triplets would be scary as hell.

Simon XIV wasn’t born evil, but he died as evil as Voldemort ever was. He did know what love was, however. Part of what’s driving him now is vengeance. Another part is remorse, now that his body is gone, the blood curse is a lot less powerful.

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Review By [Meneldur] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from AriaDragoncrest
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Review By [AriaDragoncrest] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from traveller
Good update. I think there's an editing or upload error here ...

"And hovering at the outer edges, there lay a vast and deep reservoir of power a deep-blue green ocean, the colour of the Arctic seas. A river of power ran to Buffy, but it was clear who was now Alley's primary connection to the world. A much greater force ran up, towards

He smiled slightly as the power rocked him, the vast strength incongruous with the tiny tap that felt as if a kitten was trying to play. He could feel interest and a hesitant little sliver of love and care, and fear. The fear was strange. It, like many things he had felt so far, needed thinking about. He wondered if he would remember it after the ritual. "

I don't think ending at "towards" can be what you intended.
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Indeed there is. There should be a bit about Kendra. I hate thse upload problems...

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Review By [traveller] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches and Confused mothers" from fanreaderonetwo
"Oh, Kendra's getting touchy due to her boyfriend being on the verge of death... I do wonder where this will lead.'


I've wondered about taking her boyfriend to the Halliwell Mansion in SF do a Healing on him right on or next to the Nexus might allow him to survive the magical drain of the Healing.

minor notes

IIRC West Point grads can choose to become US Marine officers rather than US Army, in addition to the Annapolis grads who "go Marine". Its uncommon but its happened.

I was ROFL at the bit of Daphne's freaking out when she realized the sheer magical _power_ (NTM the wealth) of the family she was dealing with, in particular when she was told that she was told that the Dream Walker she was to train was of the Great Spirit Line of Warren. Image of a (metaphorical) squirrel told that she would be living among a _family_ of 800 lb gorillas and was to train young King Kong.......

The relative power of the various people is interesting, particularly Willow's alone and Rowan's vs the Charmed Four, soon to be Five. Wondering what all _three_ triplets combined or merged would look like if they were together and healthy young adults (ie Marigold hadn't interfered).
OTOOH consider that trio (and any siblings) if their mother had not had her powers burned out and had raised and trained them, for good or ill.....

Wondering if using Soccer Team names as substitutes for vulgarisms is a standard "British-ism" or merely a unique "Daphne-ism"? grin
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Regrettably he doesn't have enough innate magic for the Nexus to latch onto.

Yes, I read that.

Have you ever seen that cartoon with Crazy squirrel and the big dog? They will hug her and pet her and, well you get it. Poor little Daphne.

Pretty darn scary, which is one reason why Sheila did what she did.

No, that's unique Daphne's response to Joyce and Simon not allowing swearing int he house or in front of the Children. Of course the only one who realises that they're all rivals of Manchester United is Simon.

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Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from Sunhawk
Very nice chapter indeed, and glad to see that you will be catching Faith up to the main story soon, can't wait! I also wonder what old man Chase is up to now that he's presumably sacrificed his wife to Machida. Might he not use his position with the school board to do something nefarious to get his grubby paws back on his daughter?

The scene with the ritual was very well done, raises a few questions (like, for example, what will happen when/if the three little Rosenberg's wind up back together... just how powerful IS Sineya... will Simon XIV be hanging about still...)

Also interesting to see the fallout from Mike now attending school, perhaps a certain slayer will be making all the other girls VERY jealous soon, hrmmm? Would like to see who Xander winds up with, might it possibly be Cordelia? Or maybe Anyanka makes an appearance and gets de-demonified and turned into Anya? I mean, with Heyoka training, I'm sure Xander is even MORE of a viking in the sack, yes?

And the most important question of all, will Buffy ever manage to not think of pink rhinos?
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I can hardly wait myself. That will be one series of shorts less to worry about. ;-)

Chase indeed sacrificed his wife. And he's working hard to get his daughter back, and to get a new, younger model wife. Read 'submissive little trophy'.

Three little Rosenbergs? Well, there is a hint earlier in the story. (That's not very helpful, considering the length of it ;-) )

Cordelia currently has other plans, but Buffy will have to watch out. As for the rest, I make no statements either way.

Eventually she might progress to not thinking about pink antelopes. ;-)

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Review By [Sunhawk] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from musumenosuoh
As always, awesome chapter! Looking forward to more!
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Glad you liked it.

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Review By [musumenosuoh] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from unicornzvi
Very nice chapter, I liked the way Willow and Rowan ended up dealing with the memory issue and Kendra & Buffy on patrol was amusing.

I don't suppose you have a geneological tree for the character made? I'm loosing track of who's related to whom and how.
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Thansk. I wanted to show that Willow (and Rowan) are learning. There will be more Kendra and Buffy patrolling, of course.

There's a first one for the Meiers under cast of characters. Another one for the Warrens and the Jones family will follow and I'm also working on one that shows the interrelations between the various close family members.

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Review By [unicornzvi] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from RedCalypso
Heheh, poor Daphne. Talk about being thrown in the deep end! I wonder if she should try teaching Billy also?

Love the thought of the mirror portrait almost being Willow, Rowan and Hazel. Nice touch!

I hope the ceremony helps Lucy and Simon. Will we be seeing more of Simon 14?

Yes! Xander is now immune to tickle attacks! Take that, sisters!
Comments from author:
Yes, even her usually unflappable mind must be reeling right now. She will be teaching Billy as well. Untrained dream walkers are not a good thing.

Glad you liked the portrait scene (And the portraits too, I hope?)

The Ceremony was succesfully concluded, but both will still need time to recover.

He assumes so. However, sisters are sneaky...

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Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from djhardim
There was a tromping of feet and Joyce’s mouth fell open. Jenny came down the steps, in a green and black check skirt, white shirt, black jacket with green beading and Mary Janes with green socks. Behind her came Xander, dressed in a black suit with a tie, then Buffy, dressed like Jenny, then Willow, then Kendra and then Kit and Dawn. They lined up perfectly and stood stock-still.

Simon took a whistle out of his pocket and blew on it. Jenny stepped forward. “Jenny, Miss Moon.’

Daphne gulped.

The whistle rang out and Xander stepped forward. “Alexander, Miss Moon,”

The gulps became more and more audible as the others repeated the actions, all the way down to Dawn. The loudest gulp
was reserved for Rowan, however, who popped on a large screen in the hallway dressed just like her sister.

Joyce crossed her arms and glared at Simon. “Was this your idea?”

There was a snigger. Jenny stepped forward. “No, it was all of us. Miller provided the whistle.”

Coming soon to a theater near you, the story of the Meier Family Singers.
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I had to do it. After Joyce's dream and all. And the kids aren't done yet either.

A question, do you have a preference for a first name for the nurse character named after you in Queens' Gambits? Or some character traits you wish to have included?

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Review By [djhardim] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from Misty
Thank you for another fab chapter & a couple of questions: Are Buffy & Xander ever going to get partners? & if yes, have we met them? (notice I did simple yes/no/kinda questions ;-)
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it. Buffy has just dumped Angel, so she's still a bit mopey. I do intend for her having less angst in her love life than in canon. (And no Angel)

As for Xander, recovering from Amata, and yes. ;-)

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Review By [Misty] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from wonderbee
Heh, loved that name for Snyder, and will wonder whom might end up helping him out, as I wager certain folk would like to keep the status quo ongoing. That and looking forward to the kids getting more training, as well as what will happen when the next big bad makes a move against them.
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I almost felt sorry for him when I gave it. Almost... He'll might some nice lawyers to help him, but well, there are other school principals in the know.

The kids' training is advancing apace. Next chapter will have a scene or two about it.

The big bads are moving, just under the surface. (Quite literally in some cases.)

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Review By [wonderbee] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from starwolf
well some stuff accomplished some stuff in motion. all in all a great long chapter. glad to see Willow and Rowan using some common sence. thanks
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There will be more developments but I need to get the Faith story up to date before I can really get into those.

Yes, Willow and Rowan are maturing. As they should.

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Review By [starwolf] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Some 'splainin'" from SilverWave

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Review By [SilverWave] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Old Time Traditions" from RedCalypso
Back again with a few more questions.

I don't understand the Blood Curse at all, or how in the world Simon Elder became Trueheart. I was wondering though if Cordelia will be drawn into the family now that her heritage is known or if she will reject them outright. It's ironic that in some ways she has a better claim to the family than Simon, since her grandfather was his older brother.

I'm a tad worried about Xander. I got the impression from the letter that he was supposed to figure out the clues, but Willow is the one who found the answer. Will he end up being shunned?

Edit: Born in wedlock, hm? Heheh, Simon and Joyce better pick up the pace on their wedding, especially if Joyce wants to do it before she shows too much.
Comments from author:
The Blood curse was first placed on the family when Andrew Chase, Simon XIV's son by Constance Chase killed his mother in a ritual to Machida. (The ritual gave him power, but the Shadow/Richard Wilkins had made sure that this act of kinslaying reverberated firmly in the bloodline) So it was a double ritual, but Andrew and Charles Chase didn't know they were also activating the blood curse. As to what a blood curse can do, that will be explained later.

Marigold started experimenting with 'harvesting' souls in 1945, but it wasn't until 1969 (after SG-1 returned to their own time and SXIV antagonised the Secretary of Defence) that Operation Harvest Darkness was initiated to specifically see if they could gain control of the strongest magical soul they then had knowledge of. The exact how will be (should be) related in a short story in the Portrait of the philanthropist. It might interest you that father and son died on exactly the same day though...

The Great Instruction lays down who can inherit and how the line of descent will run. Basically, the eldest son born in wedlock trumps anything. Had Constance married SXIV, Cordelia's father would be the Meier. Simon will certainly take an interest in his great-niece however.

All the verbiage was just part of hiding the message. (Oddly enough I got the vibe that SXIV rather liked Xander. No Idea how that happened.)

Hope that clears things up a little. Let me know if it doesn't.

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Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
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