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Review of chapter "For the world is hollow and I have touched the sky" from trongod
Review:
Nice to see Kendra is safe, although her fellow prisoners are not. And Rowan is quickly - from our sense of time - getting better... Excellent!!

Now, Simon is standing just about on top of the Hellmouth, and now his eyes have gone black....

Can you say, 'Oh, shit!!'? I knew you could!!
Comments from author:
The fate of her fellow prisoners will be addressed next chapter. Rowan is getting better. Then again, she's in a constant 'Joyce Hug', even if it is electronic.

Oh shit? YEs, I can. Why? ;-)


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Review By [trongod] • Date [21 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "For the world is hollow and I have touched the sky" from Eureka
Review:
OK so Simon has went Darth Simon (Better get him away from the Hellmouth!), Kendra has made it there and was out of it (Now awake and prolly pissed!), Wills has found the soul of her sister Rowan (Needs to find a body to be put in of course.), and you left us with a cliffie! Did I really leave anything important out?
Please update soonish Vid. I really love this series of stories!
Comments from author:
The problem is that ley lines come together to form places of magical strength, like Hellmouths. And Simon is quite good with Leylines... Kendra might be pissed, but she's not yet a Slayer, just a frightened girl thrust into situation and place she has no real understanding of. But Willow has found her sister. What will follow from there...You'll need to wait.

Several things have been updated since this, I hope you enjoyed them. NExt update should go up as scheduled.

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Review By [Eureka] • Date [21 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "For the world is hollow and I have touched the sky" from RebeccaAshling
Review:
Wow! That was a wham chapter! Poor Rowan! Now I'm wondering what's become of Hazel. Poor Faith! :( And now Simon has gone Dark Willow, directly over the Hellmouth! Cliffhanger or what? BTW, nice recycliing of a Star Trek: TOS episode title. Definitely put to better use as a chapter title ;) A great chapter, please update as soon as it's feasible for you :)
Comments from author:
Thank you. You'll have to keep reading to find out what happened to Hazel I fear. ;-) Well Faith's story is told in Forever is too long. But yeah, it's pretty grim in places. Yes, Simon has gone Darth Willow. It's probably going to be a warning to his daughters/sister/niece/apprentices. Well, we can hope.

I love that title, and the concept, if not the entire execution of the episode. The next update is written and should be up on schedule.

Glad you're enjoying it, thanks for reviewing
Review By [RebeccaAshling] • Date [21 Jan 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "For the world is hollow and I have touched the sky" from war
Review:
Guess they just figured out where the hellmouth is.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
They got a pretty good idea, yes...


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [war] • Date [21 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from RebeccaAshling
Review:
Hey vidicon,

I've just finished reading your novel (and weighing in at a whopping 417,972 words it most certainly is one! At least a thousand pages if it were a paperback.) and really enjoyed it. I love Joyce when she's all Mommy Sue :) Look forward to the next update. I do hope Willow and Tara end up together because DEY R LIK SOLMATEZ 4 EVAH! If Willow can't have Tara, can you pair her with Buffy please?

I thank you,
Rebecca

PS: I'm unfamiliar with "Charmed" but your story has piqued my interest and I've added the show to my long list of wannahaves.

PPS: Oh no! Poor Willow! *reviewer wrings her hands in anxiety over her favourite character's fate*
Comments from author:
Hello Rebecca,

yes I fear it ran rather out of control, length wise. Have you read any of the side stories? I do hope you took the break to read the Devil of Sunnydale Elementary in the proper place. {Puppy Eyes} Joyce as Ubermom is quite fun. She has a protective streak as wide as the Atlantic.

Hey, I already have Buffy with Willow in The Autumn leaves are turning. ;-) (next chapter is getting there.)

I think Charmed is better in the earlier than the later seasons. (Looks around furtively) But I think the same is true of Buffy.

Yes, Poor Willow. Chapter 66 will reveal somethings.

You are most welcome and thanks for reviewing
Review By [RebeccaAshling] • Date [16 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from borgrabbit
Review:
Great chapter!

Mos Parvulus ex Aparatus!
Bring the Willow out of the machine!

Edit:>
Willtronic, Willowtron, or Treetron. Heh heh... ☺
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Save Willectronic! Thanks for reviewing
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [14 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from Darksidhe
Review:
Noooooooooooo! The dreaded cliffhanger!!!!!!!!!!!!! Is it really Willow? If so, who's been living with Joyce and Simon? ?..........................
Comments from author:
I fear so. The next chapter will go up on Saturday.... Tension mounts...roll drums.

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Review By [Darksidhe] • Date [14 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from Jezzibel
Review:
Awesome chapter, terrible cliffhanger. I will blame you for any hair loss from pulling it over worry for cyberWillow!

Seeing new updates for this, Shaggy Dog, and all the other parts, is always the highlight of my day.
Comments from author:
Heh, for that one you can balme Letomo, he convinced me this was the place to stop. A nice dramatic point. And I fear that due to illness I will not be able to update 66 tonight... My apologies for that.

Thank you, a few of the other stories and a new one are up, hope that makes up for 66 a bit.


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Review By [Jezzibel] • Date [11 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from grd
Review:
You and your dang cliffys.
Comments from author:
Hey, I don't do it that often, jsut all my stories seem to have them right now...

Thank you and thanks for reviewing
Review By [grd] • Date [9 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from DofEire
Review:
Aaaagh! Vid, you vicious beast! Evil purveyor of cliffhangers! I'm chewing my nails now! (Great chapter though, LOL!)
Comments from author:
Thank you, it seems Letomo was right, this was good place to stop. (There were five more pages sent out to beta...) Sorry it will take another week, stupid flu...

Thank you and thanks for reviewing
Review By [DofEire] • Date [8 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
Well, you're certainly not refuting my theory that Moloch uploaded a copy of Willow, or a piece of her, to the net... yet, anyway. I imagine I'll know for sure in an update or two. If I'm right, I'm assuming she thinks the team at the sealed room in CRD and the virus Willow and Dave unleashed are Moloch?

I don't like the suggestion of what may have happened to Xeno in Shaggy Dog.

I like Brian Kirby, and the revelations of the Chelia's history with Angelus was intriguing on many levels. so the Church and Watchers had something more against the Chelia than vampires at one point in time? Makes one wonder what's happening behine the scenes...

The London's trips shaping up to be eventful. Was that Luna in Buffy's dream?
Comments from author:
I deny nothing! THen again, Id o not admit to anything either... ;-) I don;t like ti either. Sometimes my muse is plain nasty.

I like Brian too. I never intended for the in-laws to get much screen time, I understand why they did that in canon, (it cuts in on the time of the main cast) The Cheila are demons who can appear like humans, but the reasons the council had will be revealed later...

Don't tell anybody... checks... Yes, that was Luna. ;-)
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Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [8 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from Meneldur
Review:
Oh, amazing chapter. Can't wait to see what happens.
So, we learn who is Voldemort's Secundus, and who attacked Xenophilius. Somehow, I suspect this will tie in pretty quickly with Simon and his mission over to England, and I can't wait to see it.
So, the Cheila have a feud with Angelus. Interesting, but I don't see it as very important yet. It may cause a few complications, though.
So, it seems a few binding were lifted. Well, I'm sure the added firepower will be useful, once it's properly taught and trained.
So, that's the thesis. Of course Simon could help. And even more tie-ins with HP. I really can't wait.
I liked all the little background details and happenings as well.
Willow and Dave - that was hilarious. So, they've found Lebannen. Can't wait to see who it really is, and what they did to him/her?
Okay, that's odd. Has Willow's attack on Lebannen caused whatever just happened? Who does Joyce think this is? Why is this... thing calling itself Willow and asking for help from Joyce? What's going on here? I really can't wait to find out. Update now!
Comments from author:
Thank you, I fear you will have to wait another week. Illness. Urgh. The tie in proper will start pretty soon, yes.

The Cheila have a great desire to dust Angel/Angelus. Only his reformation as the ensouled Vampire has allowed him to live. Yes, that should make for some interesting additions. The older generations will have their hands full teaching for a while.

Sorry again, the illness excuse once more...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [8 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from (Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Mmmm, very interesting ending. Based on this and prior chapters, it sounds like Moloch the Corrupter is "not dead yet", and he would certainly have the ability to mimic Willow in order to try to get help to be free. Moloch would certainly have been able to get enough information and insight to be able to play on Joyce's fears, and the "enemies" at the door sure sounds like the attack on the sealed door at the lab. Of course, I could be completely wrong.

Another great chapter.
Comments from author:
Does anything on the itnernet ever truly die? ;-)

We shall see how right you are. Or how wrong...

Thank you and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [8 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from kalahari
Review:
Your story is still good, but it becomes unwieldy.
You may have taken in to may people from different universes at once.
If you ever complete you main story arc, you may have to sit back, and decide how to split your one big story into several smaller ones, or which side story you safely can cut of, and still keep the primary story arc intact.

A similar problem has been creeping into published books. There are to many novels of 800 to 1000 pages, where it would be much better to have several books of 300 to 400 pages. Note that just splitting a book into two halves does not help; each book needs its own story arc.


On the story details:
Making a stopover in New York on the way from the West coast of the US to London is a recurring theme in fanfiction, but it really is a roundabout way, like going from LA to New York with a stopover in Texas.
There is at least one daily Boeing 747 from each of LAX and SFA to London Heathrow, and it has been for at least 25 years; with the exception of September 2001.
Using a private plane to cross the Atlantic ocean is a recurring theme in fanfiction, too; but again that is usually not a good idea to get to London, fast.
Using an executive jet can help to reduce your travel time if you are flying from X to Y inside of North America, because you can go the direct route, and do not have to switch planes.
To cross the Atlantic ocean, you need a long range executive jet. To be allowed to fly the short routes, you need a four engine jet. There are executive jets with these features, but most of them are luxury versions of commercial airliners. They are to large for the Sunnydale airport. So Simon needs to use LAX or another large airport anyway. Getting a slot on a busy airport will be a problem, too. LAX, SFA and the New York and London airports are often fully booked.
On the other side first class passenger service is where the money is for commercial airlines. They always have first class seats available. They might delay a flight, especially for a frequent first class customer who is willing to pay for that delay.

So using an executive jet would make sense if Simon is flying inside North America, or if he is flying inside of Europe. He still might be better off going commercial, if he wants to go from one major hub to another like LAX to New York or London to Frankfurt. Using an executive jet to cross a major ocean Simon would look like a peacock, trying to impress with his overly full self importance.
Comments from author:
I agree on the unwieldy. It grew and grew, and I fear will continue growing as the development of the characters and the relationships between them takes up a lot of space. I don't know if I'll ever do such a massive edit. It may be years before this is wholly finished and there are otehr stories, ideas, not to mention my original work to consider. The Novel, and its sequels, should be about 400-450 pages, so that's good, but those are closed, none-developing tales if you get my drift.

I know a stopover between LA and London is unnecesary, but they intend to celebrate Christmas in NY (so stay a couple of days) and then fly to London later. The private jet for that is for other reasons. I may use the just buying first class tickets to London thing though, (it might even make a very nice interlude...hmmm.) it would still be cheaper than fueling up the private intercontinental jet. Simon does tend to use that only for the worst of emergencies.

Thanks for the thought out review, Vid
Review By [kalahari] • Date [8 Jan 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Playing with Bindings and herding worms" from DesitaniaF
Review:
Evil Cliffy... bad vid, very very bad. no cookie for you
Comments from author:
Yes, I agree. In my defence, Letomo had to convice me... I shall nibble on a rice wafer instead, probably better for me after the flu anyway. ;-)

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [7 Jan 12] • Not Rated
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