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Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from war
Review:
Planning for Thanksgiving and Christmas for that family will be like reenacting D Day. Good to see Jack and Jon with Evy.

If Paige only knew how close she is to her family. Well half of it anyway.

Great story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
An army marches on its stomach. I like Jon, Jack and Evy. I really can't wait to get Evy Sr in the mix...

Paige's father is a bit of a deadbeat dad. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [war] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from evilredknight
Review:
OK, you REALLY need to do something.
Do a family tree graph and post it as story art.
Showing all the bloody tie ins.
Because this is getting more then a little complicated.

But good chapter.
Comments from author:
I had a graph, it would not copy. (And I admit to not knowing how to upload it either) There is a written genealogy here:

http://waifsandstrays.freeforums.org/general-discussion-f2.html

Glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from WolfWriter
Review:
Holy mackerel! Talk about family lines!!!

Charles Emerson Winchester! HA! I just thank God it wasn't Frank Burns, I doubt he would have improved much with age.

Are you going to bring in Hawkeye, Hot Lips and BJ too? How about Radar? That would be fantastic.

Although Radar would have ten fits being on the Hellmouth as sensitive as he is.

If Simon REALLY feels the need to have kids, he can always have his vasectomy reversed. But with all of the kids he now has, it would be a moot point.

Excellent chapter.

I can't wait to see what you have in store for Luna et al, and how these two groups meet up with each other.
Comments from author:
Yes, the magical families tend to attract each other and intermarry. A lot. I like Charles. Larry Linville is a wonderful actor, but the part was ungrateful. (as they say on the stage) There will be some appearances by members of the MASH cast, yes. Mostly Cameos though.

Actually the longer a vasectomy has existed, the bigger the chance there has been permanent damage. After seven odd years the number of wholly succesful reversals is less than 20%. For older operations the percentage is even lower... But they have a bushelful of kids, yes.

Thank you and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Another great update

I can think of a couple of members of the extended Meier-Summer's family who may be very tempted to "strongly suggest" that Jack propose to Arlene on the spot.

I also suspect that given the horrific nature of the actions by Project Marigold, that there is going to be a lot of temptation to "get medieval" on them.
Comments from author:
Any members who do so will have to deal with Arlene, who will most surely object... If that happens, they will need to purge a great deal of anger and guilt.

Lets say that there will not be holes deep enough and places far enough for them to hide...


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [16 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
I am now thoroughly satisfied; it has been bothering me for *ages* that Xan was the only one of the adoptees not related to the Meier/Warren clans and who had apparently no mystical aspect. Thanks!

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Comments from author:
Xander is very distantly related to James, as I stated previously, but he does have a mystical aspect. It is much the same as James'... Oh dear.


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
The ducks were hilarious, as were the hillbilly crowd. and honestly, I don't think BTVS cannon is always that grounded in reality, anyway.

The mounting family/Marigold revelations are intriguing, and I can't wait to see what happens when the Stargate crowd finally comes to town. When Jon realizes Arlene's connected to his connections, and both he and Jack realize who's kid Evy is.

Sam and Daniel may soon discover the meaning of Hearts of Fire...
Comments from author:
Glad to hear you enjoyed them, they were fun to write. I hope you liked the revelation. ;-)

Sam and Daniel had a run in with a vamp, but scientists that they are, they were glad to find explanations for it. ;-)


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from sistercity
Review:
Typo query: Is Willow's nickname Catkin or Catking? You used both in this chapter.

Glad Xander is now related as well. I thought he was being left out.
Comments from author:
Catkin, as in Willow catkin, the other is a typo. I shall need to change it. Xander is related to many people, and probably distantly to James, but the relationship is even more distant than Willow and Simon. He does have kin who care now, even if they are not very good at being parents, or believe they aren't.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [sistercity] • Date [14 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from Mordare
Review:
Loved the chapter. Looking forward to more. So Jack gets to find out he has a daughter. That should be interesting. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Oh yes, he will be quite surprised...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Mordare] • Date [13 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from DofEire
Review:
The demonic duck brigade re-appears! That was just too much. =)

Hannah 'refused to not be related to Xander' was about what I figured was gonna happen. I like her; she makes me to giggle. ^_^

And...*Chief* Four Bears? Hmmmm!
Comments from author:
I did say they would return! They are now exterminated, however. Hannah was more fun to write than I thought. She's a nice down to earth demon hunter.

Yup, Chief Four Bears, Heyoka.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [DofEire] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from Blackett
Review:
Great chapter. You always seem to balance very well the sad and the funny aspects. SG-1 is back... yuppy!!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I felt a little humour was needed. And yes, SG-1 is back.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Blackett] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from aussiemel
Review:
This keeps getting better and better. Please tell me that Evy is Jack's Daughter. That would be awsome. I am totally in love with this story. There is so much going on but it is great. Can't wait for it to be more involved with the stargate universe. Also can't wait to see if any of the Harry Potter stuff gets in there too. You are a wonderfly talented writter and I can't wait to the next chapter. Keep up the great work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. NExt week a lot of things well be cleared up. Thanks for all the nice compliments and thanks for reviewing
Review By [aussiemel] • Date [11 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from Panaka
Review:
Jack's in trouble! No matter what he does the family is going to rip him a new one. If magic was used to make him leave Arlene he might get a break, right up until he gives her the activation papers. After that all bets are off.

Ok, Brenda being a clone would explaine the doppelganger thing with Prue. Does that mean there are 2 backups for the Charmed Ones? Brenda and Paige?

good chapter.
Really want to get to the Jack/Arlene part and the trip to SFC.

I actually have a question concerning Xander. How are you going to develop him as far as his roll in the group goes? The heart thing probably won't change, but with all the encouragement and tutors available he can pick up a lot of things. He turned out to be good with his hands late series and more then a few authors make him turn into a good shot with guns. gun/weaponsmith/designated marksman?
Last thing about Xander: Any plans to develop that "The one who sees" thing more then 'He just gets a bit more insightfull'?
Comments from author:
Ayup. Brenda cannot access her magic, so she cannot, for now, serve as a back up.

Jack and Arlene next chapter...

Xander is currently being trained as a mechanic, and no doubt Joyce and Simon will guide him to work with his hands and into mechanical or applied engineering. As for 'The One who Sees', I fear you will have to wait a bit longer...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Panaka] • Date [11 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from Eureka
Review:
Hmm so Brenda is a clone...So means Brandon is her clone too then?
(And for the reviewer who asked about that...A clone can be made from the eggs of the original and an egg can split to make 2 as seen every day by the identical and fraternal twins that are born.) Hopefully Jack can keep himself in line for ONCE and not get teh WHOLE family up in arms about what he did (Even if he doesn't realize it YET!) to Arliene and hence to Evy. I don't think they are gonna like what the family would do if he walks in there demanding that they leave everyone and everything to go back with him. I don't think he will like what Simon would do to him!!!
Comments from author:
Nope, Brandon is a true born Walsh. Jack only needs to get one person riled up, as long as it is the wrong person...

Jack is not enjoying this mission. It's gonna get worse before it gets better...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Eureka] • Date [11 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Past Donor)Glendon
Review:
Talk about a lot to process, both for the family, and for the readers. Poor SG1 are going to show up at pretty much the worst possible time. The loss of Amata still has the whole family grieving the girl that become one of their own in the short time she was with them. Then you have Willow just beginning to process the loss of sisters she never knew. And you can't forget the revelations that were just dropped on Brenda and Pru. Prue especially I have to assume has some trauma she never had a chance to deal with. Finally you add in Evie's insecurities and everyone's experience with Marigold so far, and this meeting could go very badly. Ya, a black project going to go over well with most of these people at the moment. If anyone can keep things from blowing up, I'm guessing it's probobly going to have to be Jon and Four Bears.

The SGC could be an ally to the family, but if Jack gets it into his head that taking Arline and Evie with him is the right choice and tries to use regs to force the issue, this could get nasty. Though this story rarely follows the obvious path.

On another note, I get the feeling that what happened to Pru when she was little is going to end up being just as strong of a first hand example of the damage Marigold's practices can do to people. She was what, 3, 4, when Piper was born? At that time, even with magical help, I doubt we are talking a simple blood sample for cloning. If she had a repressed or even simply forgotten memory come back, the poor women may have some trouble for awhile. Though given that it is Prue, she may just channel those emotions into something constructive.

And oh yes, demon waterfowl? *gigglesnort* just about covers it. :) Great idea. And so very necessary to this chapter!
Comments from author:
Yeah, but that is not unlike the series. PTSD aroudn the corner, beckoning. They could pick a better time, but how are they to know?

Jon keeping things from blowing up? Err...

Jack probably has more sense than to use regulations, but Arlene has had a few days to get used to the notion of being activated.

Prue will channel her anger and anguish into the highly construcitve deconstruction of Marigold...

Just you wait and see what Tucker Wells has planned next...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Past Donor)Glendon] • Date [11 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from BlazeVein
Review:
Hi, thanks for the chapter , it put a very wide smile on my face :)

Mm... I thought that ducks don't have claws... that was odd. Maybe they were mutant zombie ducks or something XD.

GO MIKE!! Go MIKE! Yes. (Team Mike here heh)

quote: "...and a reject from the Village People if they’d needed an Emo, doing in this cemetery?” LOL. Yes, totally brood-gay! ::Chuckle::

Well, if Brenda is a clone... what about his twin brother?? (the stupid who don't believe in her, talking about the holier-than-you people). And her parents didn't know?

I am so expecting to see the Jack/Arlene reunion.

Chao, and happy holidays .
Comments from author:
Good to hear. These are demon ducks, their toenails have grown much longer and nastier... Mike seems to be quite popular. Heh.

We'll get to the Walshes and what they did and did not know, but it is not as bad as it may seem.

If everything goes well, Jack/Arlene next chapter...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [BlazeVein] • Date [11 Dec 11] • Not Rated
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