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Review of chapter "Delinquent Fathers" from Eureka
1st off, someone needs to slap hank in the face and let him know that those girls DON'T need his dang money! They NEED his time and attention!
2nd, Good chapter. Yes, it may have been mostly information, but it was info that we can use for later chapters...RIGHT?
Comments from author:
1st, totally agreed. 2nd, yes every snippet of information will be used in later chapters. Some of it was to answer in canon questions asked in reviews (Mike's state) Practically eveyrthing I write can and will be used again in a future chapter ...;-)

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Eureka] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Delinquent Fathers" from Panaka
Not all that much happening here. Lot's of information, very little new story.
Comments from author:
True. All of the information was needed however, so I claim necessity. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Panaka] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Delinquent Fathers" from LordSchmodder
Very nice. So there will be trip to San Francisco in the future, right? And maybe some of the other elemental witches will pop out of the woodwork?

TY for posting!
Comments from author:
Yup, San Francisco here they come! As for elemental witches, patience...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Delinquent Fathers" from AllenPitt
Interesting developments. Now all we need is for Wyatt to show up. Or Chris, from the future, that'd be weird. Any chance you'll splice in a few more series? "Sanctuary" might be fun, Helen Magnus / Sam Carter.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Wyatt and Chris will not arrive for a while yet, they are not even a blink in their Father's and Mother's eyes. I doubt any more series will make an appearance, I have enough trouble giving people screen time as it is. ;-)

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from AllenPitt
Finally caught up with this story. Had my doubts about it at first (worried about Gary Stu-ish-ness) but you won me over quickly. I hope you can keep on juggling so many characters.
Ok, so many relatives. One interesting possibility--Drusilla is a Seer, very powerful. Did she belong to one of the major families? Come to think of it, she had 2 sisters; did people at the time hope they'd be the Charmed Ones?ie could she be of the Warren line? Just a thought.
I like that the Master isn't stupid, and realizes that sending 3 vamps after the Slayer isn't going to work, and realizes he needed to up his game to match what was going on.
Hm. Any chance of (eventually) a Wish-verse episode? With vampire Willow showing up? Or a Buffy from the show-verse of S2/S3-- a lot harder & colder than the one developing in this story, for sure...
Comments from author:
Thank you. I worried about it myself. However Simon happily has many flaws and quirks. And juggling the characters can be a bit difficult at times. It's one reason for the many seperate stories, to give some of them extra screen time.

As for Dru, she has a part to play, and as for her'll find out. ;-) ( I answer slightly more in private reviews)

Yes, for a Vamp as supposedly old pwoerful and smart as The Master he really wasn't much danger except in hand to hand combat.

As for Wish verse, that is years in the future...I make no promises, but I close no doors.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [7 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from CaptainMal
So I have, finally, caught up with everything in this series, and I've thoroughly enjoyed nearly all of it (the occasional near rape scenes were considerably less fun, but that's just a personal aversion to rape in general, the story otherwise was great). Obviously the story is far too long for me to give a comprehesive review of everything that happened in one go, but I didn't know about this little gem you've created until a few days ago, so I'll just have to do a general review and maybe do more specific ones later on as you update.

Like I said, definately enjoyed it, and Simon, while rich, doesn't strike me as all that Gary Stu-ish. Most of his Stu tendencies come from being really rich, and that's nothing to do with his character, so there's no issue there. Seems like a genuinely nice guy too, perfect for Joyce.

Anyway it's 3am so I'm gonna head to bed. I'm not much of a reviewer to be honest, so I probably won't be reviewing every chapter (I never have anything to say), but since I only review on the really good stories, take the fact I'm reviewing at all as a compliment. ;) Looking forward to the next update.

Knowing me I've forgotten something I was going to say, but if I stay up to remember it I'll fall asleep on the keyboard, so nevermind.
Comments from author:
Good to hear you enjoyed it. I agree with you on the rape, its about the worst thing one person can do to another but I fear it happens all too frequently, even to children.

Also good to hear Simon still manages to remain out of Stu territory. Simon has issues, but is fundamentally a very nice person, yes.

The occasional review will be fine and I'm proud that you chose to review my work. Can I be so bold as to ask your opinion about The Devil of Sunnydale Elementary? I'm rather proud of that one.

I have but one remark left: 'Little gem?' With my word count? ;-) Hope you slept well.

Thanks for reviewing, vid
Review By [CaptainMal] • Date [4 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from Eureka
So Jack and Co. are taking a side trip?
I just had to laugh at the girls' reaction to their Mom and Dad's kisses... Sounds like Mike may end up with sensory over load there..So Mike and Buffy????
Comments from author:
Jack and Granddad are, Daniel and Sam are headed straight for Sunnydale. Well, Mike did save her life, hust like angel, and he's got wings. Then again, almost every female in the house has been feeling the poor boy up...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [3 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from Senko
I'm not sure whether to feel sorry or amused about Mike's treatment.

As for pairings don't forget you can always leave people unattached.

Finally the idea of Paige showing up scares me a little since the show had multiple episodes showing the power of 3 was only that due to numbers and could be increased with other appropriate people. Add her and we get the power of four not so bad as I think the show went up to the power if five. However if like the show we get a temporary alliance with their allies from the evil dimension that makes the power of eight. If for some reason e.g. Glory or the Titans they allied with the triad. Possible since the charmed demons seemed more interested in ruling the world than destroying it you could wind up with the power of eleven or even fourteen if you get the evil dimensions triad. Short term sure but you'd have the power of four along with its passive and active benefits full time.
Comments from author:
A bit of both, possibly. He is getting a lot of attention, even if it's more tactile than he was expecting and he has been rather lonely.

The leaving people unattached had indeed occured to me. It may even work for some.

You're correct in worrying, though the Power of Three/Four will in this verse only work for Patty's offspring at this time, at least at that level of power. The Power of five is mentioned, but only when Prue creates doubles and I doubt it would be healthy to do so too often. A 'sisterly or love' bond is needed, so the Johnson/Ellis offspring and Clarice might manage that, and yes, love will connect them with their various offspring. All of these would get/gain/net a significant boost in power. We'll be getting more into that as the Charmed Ones become active.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Senko] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from LordSchmodder
...and thanks for writing!

And "eeewwwing" about old people sex never gets old!^^
Comments from author:
Gladly done. And doesn't it just?

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from Traveler
No deep thoughts, just thank you for sharing this entertaining story with us.
Comments from author:
No deep thoughts are needed, appreciation is enough. I replied to this before, but it seems to have get lost. THanks for reviewing
Review By [Traveler] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from Panaka
Good chapter. The pace is still a bit slow, but with everything you're juggling in the story it can't be helped.

I'm not going to register on a forum just for this story, so here are my ideas for the pairings.

Buffy/Mike. I never liked actual Angel/Buffy fics. Doomed to fail.
Wilow/Dave. Good couple with shared interests. Seems to know how to shut her up and control her. Keep Tara out of it unless plot demands Dave's demise.
Xander/? . Always a tough one. Faith has potential and when done right Xander/Cordy can be awesome. Finally there are Kendra and Tara (assuming one doesn't die and you make the other bi). Never liked Anya. The immediate age appropriate females of the family are out for just that reason, they are now family in his mind. If in doubt, go Harem.
Kit and Dawn don't need a boyfriend at this point and Evy isn't ready for that.
Their are no males left for the charmed ones.
Amy/? Some problem. Unless you pair her with Xander. You could pull in Andrew and consorts.

Joyce/Simon. The story revolves around those two.
Cecelia is married.
Arlene/? Don't use Jack, unless you can't make it work between him and Carter. I'm a fan of Jack/Samantha.
Penny/O'Connor. This I can see with the old scoundrel.
Jack/Samantha Carter. Accept no substitute. Does need to bond with his daughter and work things out with Arlene.

Did I miss anybody?
Comments from author:
Yeah, I hope to pick it up after Halloween until christmas and then some more detailed Christmas holidays stuff and then an end run to Prophecy Girl via Nightmares and unto season two.

Thanks for the pairing ideas, I'll copy them into an appropriate file. Regrettably one can't have this sort of discussion on the TtHM forums, otherwise I'd have chosen that.

Glad you like the Willow/Dave Buffy/Mike dynamics.

I think you mean Jon Carnahan for Penny? Now that is a pairing that had not yet occured to me. hmmm.

If you missed anybody, we'll get back to it later.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Panaka] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from (Current Donor)ayg
So Mike can't change back to human form at all? That must make it rather difficult to get a job in the normal world. How do other Chelia deal with this sort of problem? Do they all live in places like Sunnydale, where people seem to have see-nothing-odd-syndrome, or do they have hidden Chelia enclaves where they can fly around? And how is Willow going to deal with having a boyfriend she can't go out with in public, if Dave becomes like his brother? Is her love for him strong enough for that? I know canon Willow handled a Werewolf boyfriend quite well, but Oz was only a problem during the full moon.

Did Jenny's former boyfriend steal her powers? Is this someone who will turn up later in the story or a sidestory?

So the fourth Halliwell sister may be turning up earlier than in canon? Hmmm... Could that solve the possible conflict of one sister not wanting her powers unblocked? She did take over the empty spot when one of the sisters died in canon, so it should be possible for her to be one of the Charmed Ones from the beginning. Right?

Secret sons? What secret sons? I was really confused by this part of the chapter header. Then I read one of the reviews for the chapter and saw something about Angel's last name. So I went back a few chapters to find it. Oh, dear. I totally missed that, before. But he's too old to be Jon's son. Are you making him Jon's father?
Comments from author:
Mike can't change back yet, just like Dave can't change to Cheila form yet. A Cheila born in Cheila form is called a Phrang. It's the reason he's been home schooled and hardly anyone ever came to their house. Mike can go man once he reaches a certain level of maturity, and Dave can go Cheila. THis change is deliberate, so not triggered by lunar conditions.

And yes, Jenny's first (only) boyfriend stole her powers and he will appear later in the main story.

There's a very good chance that Paige will show up earlier, yes. What effect that will have on the ohter three, who can tell.

The Secret son is Mike, whose very existence was unknown to even Dave's friends/classmates/girlfriend.

Angel/Liam is related to Rick (ancestor) but not to Jon.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from DarkTopaz
I like this series alot the only complaint I have is you have so many characters its hard to keep track.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I agree. There's a partial list of characters, soon te be updated, on the Waifs and Strays forum, under general discussion. I may eventually just put it under a seperate heading here.
Review By [DarkTopaz] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from war
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks, and thanks for reviewing
Review By [war] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Secret Projects and secret sons" from etienneofthewestwind
Poor Mike. So, is he unable to assume human form?

I like the lighthearted moments of this chapter, but it's obvious dark things are ahead. That Shaszat obviously won't go down easily.

And it appears that the current council of thirteen may be composed primarily of overconfident twits.
Comments from author:
And yet another review to which the answer was lost...

Mike will be able to change once his demon form reaches adulthood, but so far he's been unable to, yes. The Shaszat is going to be a problem, yes. The current Council of Thirteen could go for the title of Council of Morosn +1 other

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [1 Oct 11] • Not Rated
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