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Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from shazamfan
Review:
Just my luck! Got all caught up on Lonely Souls and a new chapter posted. At least now I will have this tale marked to follow all future chapters! :)

Lots of fun with Jack at last meeting his daughter. Enjoyed that very much and look forward to seeing things shape up. The visit by Social Services was a hoot and a half.

-J-
Comments from author:
Heh, I hope you got some sleep in between, it is getting fairly long...

Jack was certainly surprised. And Social Services will never be the same again.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [shazamfan] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from Glenisland
Review:
I have been reading the story and the series and I love it. the characters are portrayed brilliantly, the pacing is a bit slow but otherwise it is going okay. Will Hawk-eye and BJ be appearing in Portrait of the Philantropist as a young man, I can see Charles talking to them when Simon go over to Veitnam( is this the right spelling?). Will Joyce have Simon's baby's later on in the series? will she die of the same thing canon Joyce dies of? Is Dawn still the Key?

please keep it up, reading your story's are the best thing on this site.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm trying to pick up the pace a bit, but the problem with character driven stories is that you need to write the reactions for them to be real, if you get my drift.

Will Charles' old army buddies show up? Yes. As for your other questions, I fear you will have to continue reading. Hope you can live with that...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Glenisland] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Here I sit feeling sorry for poor Jack's much-abused person (roflmao)

Hilarious piece - thanks so much! Now eagerly awaiting Paige discovering/being discovered...
Comments from author:
Jack's much abused person was lucky Cecelia did not get to him first...

As for Paige, well the P's have returned home to San Fran....

Thanks for revieiwing
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
*grins* Looks like the grandma brigade is getting some proper competition from the male half now. Those kids needed more grandfatherly types around. I think Jack's reception was spot on... especially once Jon realised that Evy was Jack's child.

So how long is it going to take before Paige learns that she shares a mother with Pru, Piper, and Phoebe, and that she's got FOUR big sisters...? *smirks*

Definitely looking forward to the next installment. This was your longest chapter to date ,but there's just so MUCH that got covered in it... Wonderful read.
Comments from author:
The Grandma brigade might get their own reinforcements... Glad you liked the way Jack was received. On the plus side, they are only bruised, not detached...

You will notice I very carefully kept her out of the place where her sisters and grandmother were...Will she be happy with four big sisters, that is the question.

Yeas, it was pretty long, the next one is going to cover a lot of ground as well. Glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from war
Review:
Planning for Thanksgiving and Christmas for that family will be like reenacting D Day. Good to see Jack and Jon with Evy.

If Paige only knew how close she is to her family. Well half of it anyway.

Great story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
An army marches on its stomach. I like Jon, Jack and Evy. I really can't wait to get Evy Sr in the mix...

Paige's father is a bit of a deadbeat dad. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [war] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from evilredknight
Review:
OK, you REALLY need to do something.
Do a family tree graph and post it as story art.
Showing all the bloody tie ins.
Because this is getting more then a little complicated.

But good chapter.
Comments from author:
I had a graph, it would not copy. (And I admit to not knowing how to upload it either) There is a written genealogy here:

http://waifsandstrays.freeforums.org/general-discussion-f2.html

Glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from WolfWriter
Review:
Holy mackerel! Talk about family lines!!!

Charles Emerson Winchester! HA! I just thank God it wasn't Frank Burns, I doubt he would have improved much with age.

Are you going to bring in Hawkeye, Hot Lips and BJ too? How about Radar? That would be fantastic.

Although Radar would have ten fits being on the Hellmouth as sensitive as he is.

If Simon REALLY feels the need to have kids, he can always have his vasectomy reversed. But with all of the kids he now has, it would be a moot point.

Excellent chapter.

I can't wait to see what you have in store for Luna et al, and how these two groups meet up with each other.
Comments from author:
Yes, the magical families tend to attract each other and intermarry. A lot. I like Charles. Larry Linville is a wonderful actor, but the part was ungrateful. (as they say on the stage) There will be some appearances by members of the MASH cast, yes. Mostly Cameos though.

Actually the longer a vasectomy has existed, the bigger the chance there has been permanent damage. After seven odd years the number of wholly succesful reversals is less than 20%. For older operations the percentage is even lower... But they have a bushelful of kids, yes.

Thank you and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Another great update

I can think of a couple of members of the extended Meier-Summer's family who may be very tempted to "strongly suggest" that Jack propose to Arlene on the spot.

I also suspect that given the horrific nature of the actions by Project Marigold, that there is going to be a lot of temptation to "get medieval" on them.
Comments from author:
Any members who do so will have to deal with Arlene, who will most surely object... If that happens, they will need to purge a great deal of anger and guilt.

Lets say that there will not be holes deep enough and places far enough for them to hide...


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [16 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
I am now thoroughly satisfied; it has been bothering me for *ages* that Xan was the only one of the adoptees not related to the Meier/Warren clans and who had apparently no mystical aspect. Thanks!

.
Comments from author:
Xander is very distantly related to James, as I stated previously, but he does have a mystical aspect. It is much the same as James'... Oh dear.


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
The ducks were hilarious, as were the hillbilly crowd. and honestly, I don't think BTVS cannon is always that grounded in reality, anyway.

The mounting family/Marigold revelations are intriguing, and I can't wait to see what happens when the Stargate crowd finally comes to town. When Jon realizes Arlene's connected to his connections, and both he and Jack realize who's kid Evy is.

Sam and Daniel may soon discover the meaning of Hearts of Fire...
Comments from author:
Glad to hear you enjoyed them, they were fun to write. I hope you liked the revelation. ;-)

Sam and Daniel had a run in with a vamp, but scientists that they are, they were glad to find explanations for it. ;-)


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from sistercity
Review:
Typo query: Is Willow's nickname Catkin or Catking? You used both in this chapter.

Glad Xander is now related as well. I thought he was being left out.
Comments from author:
Catkin, as in Willow catkin, the other is a typo. I shall need to change it. Xander is related to many people, and probably distantly to James, but the relationship is even more distant than Willow and Simon. He does have kin who care now, even if they are not very good at being parents, or believe they aren't.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [sistercity] • Date [14 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from Mordare
Review:
Loved the chapter. Looking forward to more. So Jack gets to find out he has a daughter. That should be interesting. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Oh yes, he will be quite surprised...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Mordare] • Date [13 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from DofEire
Review:
The demonic duck brigade re-appears! That was just too much. =)

Hannah 'refused to not be related to Xander' was about what I figured was gonna happen. I like her; she makes me to giggle. ^_^

And...*Chief* Four Bears? Hmmmm!
Comments from author:
I did say they would return! They are now exterminated, however. Hannah was more fun to write than I thought. She's a nice down to earth demon hunter.

Yup, Chief Four Bears, Heyoka.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [DofEire] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from Blackett
Review:
Great chapter. You always seem to balance very well the sad and the funny aspects. SG-1 is back... yuppy!!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I felt a little humour was needed. And yes, SG-1 is back.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Blackett] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from aussiemel
Review:
This keeps getting better and better. Please tell me that Evy is Jack's Daughter. That would be awsome. I am totally in love with this story. There is so much going on but it is great. Can't wait for it to be more involved with the stargate universe. Also can't wait to see if any of the Harry Potter stuff gets in there too. You are a wonderfly talented writter and I can't wait to the next chapter. Keep up the great work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. NExt week a lot of things well be cleared up. Thanks for all the nice compliments and thanks for reviewing
Review By [aussiemel] • Date [11 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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