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Review of chapter "Tricksters and treatments" from grd
Review:
I hope the Summers kids get to meet the Haliwell kids too. This tale has become a favorite. Please keep up the excellent writing.
Comments from author:
The Halliwell's make an appearance in the next chapter. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for the compliment and I'll certainly try!
Review By [grd] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Tricksters and treatments" from (Current Donor)ayg
Review:
Thank you for all the answers.

So, Simon was a bit suicidal even before becoming Grand Magister? Was it because of a personal experience/trauma or because he wanted to make an end to the Meier family? Both Simon and Danielle really need lots of therapy, I think.

Is it this MoNY/SoS person who is restoring things on the Internet? I'm glad that you aren't making him and Simon the same person. Actually, the thing that made me think they were the same person was the way the names sort of fit "MoNY is now SoS" could very easily be read as "Meier of New York is now Simon of Sunnydale". Was that a deliberate thing to get people on the wrong track? Or is it just my mind that is too paranoid? Hmmm... Did you, as the author, actually say MoNY was a man? I know Jenny thought so, but that doesn't mean she's right.

Looks like Penelope is going to live a bit longer. It was a few years since I watched Charmed, so I can't remember what she died from. Maybe having her around will make it easier for her granddaughters to adjust to being witches.

I did think the coincidences were getting a bit too extreme, but you at least have a reasonable explanation for them. I'm not entirely certain what a Mother Witch is, but I can guess a lot from the visible effects.
Comments from author:
Simon was unhappy as a child...it got worse as a teen...we'll get to some of his reasons later.

And the acronyms are indeed to tease and they do have to do with Simon...but he's not them...and might even be a little upset to find out about their meaning...MoNY/SoS is a man, yes.

Penelope died of a heart attack six months or more before the start of the series. Just as she was about to permanently strip them of their powers.

Mother With powers will be explained in the next chapter. And yes, it's very coincidental...but Joyce's power is pulling the strings here. I hope it will make more sense after reading what the power does.
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Tricksters and treatments" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
A mother witch? That´s oneway to explain away the unlikelyhood of that many coincidences. Is it an original concept or from one of the crossover verses?

Of course the fact that actual powers seem interested in assembling this group could play a part too...
Comments from author:
Its an original concept based on a number of characters from a number of verses. All coincidences revolve around Joyce and those she loves or cares for.

And the Powers that Be...well...we shall see.

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Tricksters and treatments" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Its up! Hope you enjoy this one as well.
Review By [war] • Date [18 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A coven at breakfast" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
Interesting that the Summers women turned out to be related to the Charmed ladies. Can't say I'm that familiar with the series as others you referenced, but I have seen some of the eps in reruns...

I think did well with Willow discovering her grandmother's survival, and Moloch as the last straw in deciding to make a break from them. I can't help but wonder at the Rosenberg's reactions to that--you've dropped some interesting hints about Shelia. And the potential Dave romance sounds fun.

The whole Grand Magister business sounds nasty, and Simon's father grows nastier. Interesting that tapping into leylines is so dangerous in your world when so many others have it as the natural way of doing magic--or is it just dangerous for someone with little innate magic?
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading and the compliments. Willow did need a little push, I think she tends to be more forgiving of her parents, at least in my opinion.

Charmed is quite fun, or at least I find it so. I always rather liked Penelope Halliwell.


There will be a lot revealed about Sheila Rosenberg née Moritz quite soon.

We'll also go into the why's and hows of the Grand Magistracy in later chapters, when we encounter the new one... Leylines will be covered in later chapters, your questions will be answered there.
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [16 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A coven at breakfast" from (Current Donor)ayg
Review:
Thank you for the explanation. Of course, now I've got more questions.

"supposedly elected" - ooookay. From the same family, all the time (with ONE exception).

"may not resign without permission from the Grand Coven" - that explains why Simon couldn't get out of the position. What made the Grand Coven change their minds? Or did he deliberately lose a duel?

"can only be forced to resign after losing a duel" - hmmm... Did this, historically, lead to lots of duels between family members?

Who was the woman who held the position of Grand Magister between Simon's grandfather and father? Surely not the person who made Simon's grandfather a paraplegic? I can't believe Simon's father would simply have allowed her to retire quietly in that case.

If it takes that much money to run the Concordat, I'm surprised the Meier family still has any money left. Or did they loot from the defeated enemies?

Well. at least the part about the identity-hiding spells explains why Giles doesn't know. But why can Simon tell people? Is it because he was the Grand Magister? Or because he only talks about former holders of the position and doesn't try to say the name of the current one? Oh, in chapter 20 Penelope said that "it will take a week or two to get messages to all the members for the election". Does that mean the election hasn't been held yet? Is no one holding the position at the moment?

Sounds like Simon's father was a real piece of... something one shouldn't say in public. But you mentioned in chapter 9 that it was his grandfather who started teaching him when he was very young, not his father. So, was it the grandfather who forced him to "activate" the latent abilities? Considering how dissapointed Simon's father was, I'm actually surprised he didn't try to produce more children.
Comments from author:
Cool, questions. Well let me see...some of these will be answered, some have been, though obliquely. You'll find the answers to some in the Author's notes of the next chapter. And some will be revealed in later chapters.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [16 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A coven at breakfast" from raven
Review:
"Good thing that children are out of the question then..."

Did I miss the part where you said one or both of them cannot have kids anymore? They are both certainly young enough (and practicing enough)!
Comments from author:
You didn't miss it, it seems I edited that out somewhere...happily it comes up in future conversation so I'll not explain here...

And they're not just practicing...they're competing in the Olympics...

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [raven] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A coven at breakfast" from war
Review:
sounds like the Wizards and witches of Europe and the American Covens don't get along. Glad to see someone stands up to the Watchers excesses.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Actually the Concordat has no real problems with the covens of other nations, just the Watchers' Council. They also are unfond of the Wand wavers, but we'll get to the reasons for that later.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [war] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Grandmothers, sons and mothers" from (Current Donor)ayg
Review:
In chapter 22 Jenny mentioned the "Fall of the Grand Magister". Sounded a bit ominous, until one reads chapter 23. So, what sort of story is circulating among the technopagans about why the Grand Magister retired? Conspiracy theories? Do Grand Magisters usually stay in power until forced out or dying? And how many years are there supposed to be between elections? I noticed on a reread of chapter 21 that Simon never told Jenny his name. Would she know who he is, if she heard the name? And why doesn't Giles know about the connection? Don't the Watchers keep track of that sort of thing?
Comments from author:
Ah...we'll let Jenny tell that one a bit later.

I'll give out some facts in the Author's note for chapter 24, or maybe write an infill to give a bit more background...it might be time for another history lesson...

Thanks for reading with such attention!
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Corrupting robots and Maternal comforting" from (Current Donor)ayg
Review:
So, who is this MoNY guy? I hope you aren't making this Simon. Please? He had problems with modern technology in the first story. Sure, he could have been pretending, but I think he needs some weaknesses.

Is it Dave who left the rose for Willow?
Comments from author:
Simon is not MoNY. This can be divined from a simple fact in the story, so I'm not revealing anything here...;-)

Simon is busy with Dave at the time of the Circle goes online. MoNY/SoS is linked to Simon however and has been mentioned. Simon is not completely computer illiterate, if someone sets up a chat program he can work with it, hence his chats with Joyce.

And yes, Dave is leaving the roses. I actually thought I was being quite obvious with that..

Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grandmothers, sons and mothers" from PATM
Review:
Expectations exceeded once again with love and affection deserved and applied. Well done!
Comments from author:
Thank you. As I stated in the Author's note, the reason for the physicality with WIllow will be revealed later.
Review By [PATM] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches and Confused mothers" from Beech
Review:
I am loving the whole story, and really enjoying how all the characters are pulling together. Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [Beech] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Corrupting robots and Maternal comforting" from Blackett
Review:
I love your long chapters and fast updates...Charmed...lovely


Edit: It is a great story. Long chapters are just an added bonus.
Comments from author:
Charmed indeed. I fear that the fast updates are due to 'Here's one I prepared earlier' And as we're nearing the end of that, updates will slow down... Thanks for reading and I hope its more than just the long chapters that lure you here...
Review By [Blackett] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grandmothers, sons and mothers" from war
Review:
nice reunion.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, glad I got the tone of it right.
Review By [war] • Date [14 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Corrupting robots and Maternal comforting" from PATM
Review:
I've read fan fiction stories with a original character added that was too rigidly adhered to canon to be interesting enough to read all the way to where the author wants the story to end. That is a lot of to's so I hope that previous sentence makes sense. This is a good ending for this segment so the Willow back story can add more fun meetings and reveal Willow's parents hidden motive for such callous behavior toward their daughter. I want the revived Mrs Moritz to come to Sunny Dale. Besides who is the flower giver?
Comments from author:
The sentence made sense, do not worry.

A great deal will be revealed in the following chapters.As to the flower giver...I suggest you reread the Moloch chapters...or the next few, whichever you prefer...
Review By [PATM] • Date [13 Jun 11] • Not Rated
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