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Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from carikate
Review:
Wonderful chapter!

Good to see more of the social workers - Matt and Paige. Will be interested to see how Matt's life changes with his interaction with this family - I don't think anybody can spend time with the Summers/Meier household and *not* have their life change, at least a little.

*LOVED* seeing Jack get his long-awaited thwapping -- and I think that Evy's Great-Grandfather's going to be very good for her.

Nice to get confirmation of Xander's Native American heritage. Between that and his Gypsy background, I'd be surprised if he's not at least *mildly* talented in some form or fashion. I wonder how long it's been since James has had an apprentice? ;)

At some point, I'll be interested to see what happens when James and/or Xander interact with the Rock up at the Manor. Should make for some entertaining chaos.

Any possibility of seeing any Charles/Danielle sparks? The teens would probably get a real kick out of seeing Simon's "mother" and "father" get together...
Comments from author:
Thank you. Matt may remain entirely oblivious as to the real goings on in the world. Some people are lucky that way. Though he may be changed in other ways.

Jack deserved the thwapping, but he is also going to do his utmost to get to know Evy, and not just as a replacement for Charlie, but as her own person. Though he will probably watch the Simpsons with her... Jon is going to do the same.

Xander has certain talents. The way magic acts around him made me think of it... Xander and James at the Mana point... I shudder to think of it.
Charles and Danielle spark? We shall see how they react, shall we?

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [carikate] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from LordSchmodder
Review:
Awwww...
...seriously, a chapter without mayhem^^.
And it brought the story forward!

Very nice, thank you.
Comments from author:
Well, I do have a few of those. Unless you mean emotional upheavals?

Yeah, it was a bit stuck, so I wrote an extra long chapter to get things rolling again.

glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from Blackett
Review:
Great chapter. It was worth the waiting to see Jack face to face with his past/future :)
(not to say that I didn't enjoyed the rest of this chapter, 'cause I did....but by the time I get to write down my review I've already forgotten more then half of my ideas....maybe I should take notes *grins*).
Comments from author:
Jack faced his past with great fortitude. And then keeled over. he's going to be teased for years...

Please do take notes, as you may have noted, reviews inspire me to change and add to my AU. Though I doubt I can add more than cameos for any other verses, and am rather reluctant to do so too much, I need some Pop culture to refer to...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from AllenPitt
Review:
Nice merger. Can't wait for the Master's apology card & gift to arrive. Great idea on their part. Of course Buffy should send back something appropriate like some sunscreen or a bottle of hair-gro for the Master... Hm.. so at this point Paige has no idea of her kinship to the Halliwells. In the series it was never explained how she came to suspect they were, come to think of it. It's quite a leap from 'found at a church in the area' to that. NEXT --ok Grams hates whitelighters... the explanation for dumping Paige given in the series was to protect the rest from the wrath of the Elders. Really? Dump one to save the rest? That's kind of cold. I hope there's more to it, when it all comes out.
Comments from author:
Yes, that should make an impression. At this point Buffy has never seen the Master, though Angel might describe him and Giles probably has a description in his books.

Paige did some searching and thought they might be realted, but never forced the point. (The Halliwells came looking for her) Grams will question Bertram, her Whitelighter. As he hasn't shown up since her meeting Cecelia again, odds are Cece's version of things is correct...

In canon it would have resulted in the deaths of Patty, Sam, Paige and anybody who got in the way of the executions... Still harsh.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from DofEire
Review:
Dr Charles Emerson Winchester for the win! Huzzah for neatly dovetailed plotlines!
Comments from author:
Thank you. I always liked Charles. A much more likeable character than Frank Burns.

Thanks for the compliment, and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [DofEire] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from (Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Awesome chapter. Jon's version of the "shovel speech" was great.

Had to look back at Ch 24 since it was a while ago since I read it, but yes, Joyce does mention that Charles is coming over for Thanksgiving and possibly as early as Veteran's Day as some of his old army buddies lived out in Cali. Just wonder which of the old 4077th members may end up at the Revello Drive compound. Very great job of setting foundation all the way back then. (And one can see from the Portrait how Charles grows into being a father figure to Simon)

Wonder what the reaction to all of the "magic using folk" will be if/when they learn about the Stargate. Somehow, given how Marigold has gone after people with ties to both, I can't imagine that there won't be some cross-disclosure at some point.
Comments from author:
Jon has had lots of experience at the Shovel Speech. You should see Joyce's version...

I must admit when I wrote chapter 24 I thought Charles would show up a few chapters later. The tale grew in the telling, if you will forgive the theft of the phrase. And Simon needed a father figure.

Simon will probably be informed, as will Lilith. There will be much rejoicing. ;-)

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [(Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from shazamfan
Review:
Just my luck! Got all caught up on Lonely Souls and a new chapter posted. At least now I will have this tale marked to follow all future chapters! :)

Lots of fun with Jack at last meeting his daughter. Enjoyed that very much and look forward to seeing things shape up. The visit by Social Services was a hoot and a half.

-J-
Comments from author:
Heh, I hope you got some sleep in between, it is getting fairly long...

Jack was certainly surprised. And Social Services will never be the same again.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [shazamfan] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from Glenisland
Review:
I have been reading the story and the series and I love it. the characters are portrayed brilliantly, the pacing is a bit slow but otherwise it is going okay. Will Hawk-eye and BJ be appearing in Portrait of the Philantropist as a young man, I can see Charles talking to them when Simon go over to Veitnam( is this the right spelling?). Will Joyce have Simon's baby's later on in the series? will she die of the same thing canon Joyce dies of? Is Dawn still the Key?

please keep it up, reading your story's are the best thing on this site.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm trying to pick up the pace a bit, but the problem with character driven stories is that you need to write the reactions for them to be real, if you get my drift.

Will Charles' old army buddies show up? Yes. As for your other questions, I fear you will have to continue reading. Hope you can live with that...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Glenisland] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Here I sit feeling sorry for poor Jack's much-abused person (roflmao)

Hilarious piece - thanks so much! Now eagerly awaiting Paige discovering/being discovered...
Comments from author:
Jack's much abused person was lucky Cecelia did not get to him first...

As for Paige, well the P's have returned home to San Fran....

Thanks for revieiwing
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
*grins* Looks like the grandma brigade is getting some proper competition from the male half now. Those kids needed more grandfatherly types around. I think Jack's reception was spot on... especially once Jon realised that Evy was Jack's child.

So how long is it going to take before Paige learns that she shares a mother with Pru, Piper, and Phoebe, and that she's got FOUR big sisters...? *smirks*

Definitely looking forward to the next installment. This was your longest chapter to date ,but there's just so MUCH that got covered in it... Wonderful read.
Comments from author:
The Grandma brigade might get their own reinforcements... Glad you liked the way Jack was received. On the plus side, they are only bruised, not detached...

You will notice I very carefully kept her out of the place where her sisters and grandmother were...Will she be happy with four big sisters, that is the question.

Yeas, it was pretty long, the next one is going to cover a lot of ground as well. Glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from war
Review:
Planning for Thanksgiving and Christmas for that family will be like reenacting D Day. Good to see Jack and Jon with Evy.

If Paige only knew how close she is to her family. Well half of it anyway.

Great story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
An army marches on its stomach. I like Jon, Jack and Evy. I really can't wait to get Evy Sr in the mix...

Paige's father is a bit of a deadbeat dad. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [war] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from evilredknight
Review:
OK, you REALLY need to do something.
Do a family tree graph and post it as story art.
Showing all the bloody tie ins.
Because this is getting more then a little complicated.

But good chapter.
Comments from author:
I had a graph, it would not copy. (And I admit to not knowing how to upload it either) There is a written genealogy here:

http://waifsandstrays.freeforums.org/general-discussion-f2.html

Glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Social workers and interior decorating" from WolfWriter
Review:
Holy mackerel! Talk about family lines!!!

Charles Emerson Winchester! HA! I just thank God it wasn't Frank Burns, I doubt he would have improved much with age.

Are you going to bring in Hawkeye, Hot Lips and BJ too? How about Radar? That would be fantastic.

Although Radar would have ten fits being on the Hellmouth as sensitive as he is.

If Simon REALLY feels the need to have kids, he can always have his vasectomy reversed. But with all of the kids he now has, it would be a moot point.

Excellent chapter.

I can't wait to see what you have in store for Luna et al, and how these two groups meet up with each other.
Comments from author:
Yes, the magical families tend to attract each other and intermarry. A lot. I like Charles. Larry Linville is a wonderful actor, but the part was ungrateful. (as they say on the stage) There will be some appearances by members of the MASH cast, yes. Mostly Cameos though.

Actually the longer a vasectomy has existed, the bigger the chance there has been permanent damage. After seven odd years the number of wholly succesful reversals is less than 20%. For older operations the percentage is even lower... But they have a bushelful of kids, yes.

Thank you and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Another great update

I can think of a couple of members of the extended Meier-Summer's family who may be very tempted to "strongly suggest" that Jack propose to Arlene on the spot.

I also suspect that given the horrific nature of the actions by Project Marigold, that there is going to be a lot of temptation to "get medieval" on them.
Comments from author:
Any members who do so will have to deal with Arlene, who will most surely object... If that happens, they will need to purge a great deal of anger and guilt.

Lets say that there will not be holes deep enough and places far enough for them to hide...


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [16 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Seers, Hunters and Shamans" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
I am now thoroughly satisfied; it has been bothering me for *ages* that Xan was the only one of the adoptees not related to the Meier/Warren clans and who had apparently no mystical aspect. Thanks!

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Comments from author:
Xander is very distantly related to James, as I stated previously, but he does have a mystical aspect. It is much the same as James'... Oh dear.


Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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