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Review of chapter "The sorrows of chasing the Sun" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
This chapter is heartbreaking. I'm sorry Amata had to die, but realistically, there was no other way for the chapter to end. I'm glad they managed to set her free, but poor Xander is really taking a battering right now. Both his biological parents and his first real love all die seemingly at once. It's a very good thing that he's got Joyce and Simon, and the girls, to support him.

The developing romance between Clarice and Patrick is cute, and I like the Hill Cabin/Raven's Roost bit. Your remapping of Sunnydale is entertaining. Or maybe it's just fleshing it out, considering that the show was mostly The Bronze, the school, Buffy's house, Willy's, cemeteries, and warehouses. Well, and Angel's two residences. For a town of (supposedly) between 38,000 and 43,000 people, depending on what resource you're using, that's just not enough settings, but it was a television show, so their stage space was limited.

Somehow, I don't think Winters is going to be around for another two and a half years, so Cordy will be safe from HIM at least. *smirks* Poor Bren. And yes, there was a reason Lindsey asked Winters if Cordelia was going to be one of his 'long-term projects'. Breaking down young Hollywood hopefuls was a form of entertainment for him.
Comments from author:
It is rather sad, yes. Xander is indeed emotionally in a roller coaster.

You can't have a town that is just those places, though I never found the actual size of Sunnydale. I tend to go with Santa Barbara as the location, with no Santa Barbara in my AU.

I doubt it too. Winters will feel the wrath of Grams, Brenda's parents will get a talking to, and Winters' reputation will be ground into the dust.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [3 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The sorrows of chasing the Sun" from carikate
Review:
Lovely chapter, as I've come to expect from you! I always look forward to Saturdays for a new chapter.

One question from this chapter, though --

With the new information on the spell that was placed on Arlene - and possibly Jack as well - any possibility that her Jack's last name was O'Neill? ;))
Comments from author:
Thank you. Jack knows Arlene, and the relationship is hinted at in Children of a Greater God.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing

Edit: I meant chapter 48 of Lonely Souls...
Review By [carikate] • Date [3 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The sorrows of chasing the Sun" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
A sad chapter, but you can't save everyone. At least Sun-Chaser's soul is now free. It will be interesting to see if Harris and Prichett are still around after the curse-breaking, or if they need additional measures.

Interesting gift for Clarice to have.

Russell Winters was definitely a creep and would want to make anyone who dared report him suffer. It will be interesting to see how that storyline plays out. I'm guessing the drug Brenda was given was mystical, though I've seen a couple non-mystical TV shows that used the premise of a drug that causes "compliance"...
Comments from author:
Yes, I tried to find a way but just could not come up with one. Maybe in another story... The fate of Harris and Pritchett will be dealt with in 63.

Yeah, Letomo suggested it and it actually makes good sense with the character in mind, the way she connects to people.

I thought creep and Winters came up. No drugs that I know of have that sort of result, outside of fiction, it is actually a mix of Thrall and magic.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [3 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Purple Rain and Talent show try outs" from borgrabbit
Review:
Not trying to offend, but Anne McCaffrey's publisher screwed up the naming of a book, "Get of the Dragon", and sold few copies, until years later when it was reprinted as "Get Off the Dragon".
A really great story, though!

1. ‘Of’ is mostly used as a preposition, and therefore, should be used when a preposition is needed. ‘Off’ is usually used as an adverb, and should be used in cases where an adverb is needed.
2. ‘Of’ is more often used in sentences, while ‘off’ is used less frequently.
3. ‘Off’ is used in conjunction with verbs, which is not the case with ‘of’.

Edit:> OOPS! "Get Off the Unicorn". Been too many years since I read her stories. Still, it's a shame that McCaffrey et al take such a dim view of fanfiction. You're doing pretty damn good if English isn't your 'birth' language.
Ciao.



Read more: Difference Between Of and Off |

http://www.differencebetween.net/language/difference-between-of-and-off/
Comments from author:
I thought it was called Get off the unicorn? Otherwise I need to buy another McCaffrey. (May she rest in peace by the way.) But you are quite right, I do have an on-off problem with of/off. ;-)

It is a common problem with those not born to the English language I fear.

Glad you still like the story, thanks for reviewing.
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [24 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from tryingtobestine
Review:
Is Hannah Harris supposed to be someone I should recognize from somewhere? I just wondered...

I'm still loving this story, series...'verse... whatever it might be called :)
Comments from author:
No, Hannah is a complete OC. Thanks, and thanks for reviewing
Review By [tryingtobestine] • Date [22 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Christy
Review:
I actually think Amata getting rid of those bastards (I'm of Jewish heritage myself) was a good sight better...make them suffer heh But still having a blast with this story....keep up the fabulous work
Comments from author:
Well, it was certainly better than to have them hanging around. like so many of them did in real life.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [Christy] • Date [21 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from dawnkey
Review:
Great Story just wondering is Dawn the Key in this and is she going to learn magic as well as the series she could and one of the demons she met in series 5 said she had a lot of magical potential from her family and just wondering if you are going to do any think with it. Anyway please keep updating as this is one of best pieces of fanfiction I have read in the last several years so good on you.
Comments from author:
Heh. Well, season 5 is many, many chapters away... So I fear you will have to have patience and keep reading. And yes, I do intend on keeping the series going.

Thanks very much and thanks for reviewing
Review By [dawnkey] • Date [21 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Meneldur
Review:
Powerful. Amazingly powerful, and disturbing. But excellent.
So, Hannah is actually a demon hunter. Why is she 'rogue'? And is she connected somehow to Xander - long-lost aunt or something? It seems likely, since Xander's parents knew about vamps and demons.
Poor Brenda. But, she's already feeling better, and no doubt Joyce's mother power helps. And Simon will get justice for her, so that's settled.
And we learn what fun John and Jack have been getting up to. Can't wait to see how they handled that.
The truth about Amata is revealed, and she tells it as well. She has Mengele's memories... that must have been as bad as the torment she suffered. Still, it seems like they might be able to help her. Too late for a few people, but Roger's been caught and so has Tony. So damage is minimized, at the least.
So, Jessica is dead. And she was a Romani. i always suspected something of the sort, and have seen it done in a few other fics. But it's interesting. I wonder if we'll get the full story of why she married Tony and what exactly estranged her from her family and caused her to hate Xander. We shall have to see, I suppose. Until then.

"It's betrayed me, its hardly going to be better for him." - Um, I think it should be 'It betrayed me, and it's going to betray him'.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Actually, Rogue Demon hunter is a line that Wesley utters when he first makes his appearance in Angel.

I'm going to put up a vote to ask if people want to read a separate story about Jon and Jack and Billy the Kid...

Might I ask in what stories you read about Jessica as a Romani? I'd like to read them and see how the author's handled it.
Jenny will no doubt make a grand reveal.

I have to think about that suggestion. I considered it actually, but I need to think about it. Interesting you thought the same though.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [21 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
Interesting twist on the fem-Bubba... I can´t help but think she might be able to shed some light on Xander´s heritage.

You really make the reader feel sympathy for Amata here. The storyline is so much more fleshed out. And the addition of a certain snake demon. With two season two elements making an appearance (and possibly meeting defeat), I wonder how long before your verse veers completely away from Buffy canon.

The phone call between Giles and Carnahan was hilarious.
Comments from author:
I thought it might surprise people. ;-)

I always felt rather sorry for Amata, but this plot jumped straight into my mind. As for canon/AU, some enemies will be faced earlier, and there will be changes, but it will hopefully still be recognizable to attentive watchers of Buffy.

Yes, I can't wait for them to meet face to face.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [21 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Blackett
Review:
What Roth said. That last scene almost brought tears in my eyes. Also, loved Jon and Giles on the phone....hilarious.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I did feel badly for Jessica. I had not imagined quite how depraved Tony demanded to be. And I must admit that Jon and Giles on the phone amused me too.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [Blackett] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Panaka
Review:
Nice comeback. In fact, awesome chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I just hope the next one will be as satisfying.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Panaka] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Roth
Review:
Depressing but needed I'd say. Looked at in one direction the life of Buffy, Xander, Willow et al in Sunnydale is a huge dark comedy. Looked at from another it's a group of people with PTSD cracking jokes so as to not start sobbing horribly and not stop.

You're managing to create something that's in the middle, in my opinion. You've saved a number of characters from fates worse that death (or did your best to), but you've also shown a wider, more horrible, more fantastic world that needs it's heroes.

Well done.
Comments from author:
Glad to see you're still reading.

Yes, that's a very good definition. I think the family will help with the PTSD. After 'Anne' and then Angel showed the evil in other places, I doubted Sunnydale would be a big enough playground. And it does need heroes, and it will get them.

Thank you and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Roth] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Zaz
Review:
<3
Comments from author:
Thank you. ;-)
Review By [Zaz] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from LordSchmodder
Review:
Good chapter, brings the story along nicely.
I like that Ampata relate to Joyce, and I liked your Nazi angle.
I am really interested what will happen to Roger and Tony.
Thanks!
Comments from author:
Yup, I suddenly felt the need for speed. Many answers in the next chapter.

Thanks for reading, reviewing and I hope you continue enjoying.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from traceyw
Review:
Well worth the wait. A brilliant story with another great chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you, much appreciated.

And thanks for reviewing
Review By [traceyw] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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