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Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Eureka
Review:
Holy hand grenades batman! So MORE soul sucking mummies were made, Brenda is out and Pru is being manhandled by a butch... Hopefully the others will see/figure out what is going on soon so that Pru is NOT raped and nobody else is hurt by those soul sucking mummies. Also hope that Ampata is helped in the process.
Comments from author:
Yup, more soul sucking mummies. Gotta love soul sucking mummies. And yes, things are pretty dark right now.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [13 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Panaka
Review:
Not bad, but I couldn't suspend my disbelief at the family at least not being able to tell the two jail birds apart. It, and fem|Bubba, broke the chapter for me.
Comments from author:
Actually the family figured it out pretty soon, as will be told next chapter. Fem-Bubba? Heh. That will be explained next chapter as well.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Panaka] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Blackett
Review:
Ooh come on! Can't those bas..rds just stay dead?!!! Also....poor Prue!! Great update as always.
Comments from author:
Nope, the scum rises to the top. Poor Prue, indeed.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from LordSchmodder
Review:
I am very interested in discovering what's up with Tony and Roger. Nice touch.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I've never seen it before.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from AllenPitt
Review:
Brenda & Pru just have no luck. Brenda likely to get murdered by Roger, meanwhile poor Pru. On the other hand, imagine the ginormous lawsuit resulting from this. First the police release the wrong prisoner, then the one who should have been released gets attacked in her cell with a guard standing by smirking? that'll work for the ordinary prisoner, but one that has wealthy & powerful relatives, heads will roll...
And of course Brenda gets blamed by the Halliwells. Ouch. Considering it was a 250g bond, and she had no money, I can't blame her for jumping at the chance to leave the jail. Meanwhile--she has just got to be a relative of some sort, exact twins like that only happen on tv shows! .
Meanwhile--Ampata's victims rise as similar soul-sucking mummy types? Ouch. And there's not even a sire bond like with a vamp, so they're out after Ampata or at least tony h is? yikes.
This is really putting a spoke in the wheel of the Master's plans. Just saying. And damn, he's actually a very good planner. One of the only vampires to manage to put together a large vamp organization; he's very charismatic, and ...considering he's trapped in that dimensional prison, managing to maintain control like that is just amazing, really. Turning 150-200 vamps for a storming of the house is a good idea, too.
Comments from author:
A ginormous lawsuit to be paid by the Sunnydale PD, yup. Brenda had her reasons, and she did do wrong.

No sire bond, though that seems to function pretty badly in some cases. Yes, the attack on Ampata will not go exactly as she had hoped.

I never understood why the Master was such a useless opponent. Besides the fact that the loose episodes were more fun, but hey.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from DarkTopaz
Review:
I am starting to hate your cliff hangers you get us wound up then don't deliver.
Comments from author:
I fear that is the nature of Cliffhangers. And the serial publication of most fanfics. I do hope you''ll continue to read.
Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [DarkTopaz] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
Okay, wow...

Lots of things happening here. First off, I feel so bad for Xander. His father's dead, and his mom doesn't care if he lives or dies. Foster parents who want to adopt him is an awesome thing, but that has still got to hurt. I'm glad he already had a solid foundation in his new family before it happened, though. It could have been so much worse.

Willow's thoughts, feelings and reactions were so touching, and believable. Joyce is pretty good at the mom thing. *grins*

The Halliwells... Yeowch! Okay, first thing, the insert of Paige was sneaky and clever and entertaining, coming from the side like it did. Prue's experiences in the jail look like they're going to open a massive can of worms. I felt sorry for Brenda, although I actually had to read that whole sequence a couple times before it clicked what was going on. It was a little muddled, but that might just be me. Oh, point of interest - something I noticed in the last chapter but forgot to say something about, just because it's a small, stupid thing, but Brenda Walsh's twin from 90210's name is Brandon, not Brendan. *flushes* I watched that show when I was in high school. I though Jason Priestley was cute.

One thing I'm a bit confused about though... although you'll probably explain it later, so I can wait to see later chapters, but... what's with the mummy's victims rising? I don't remember that happening in the episode. What's the point? *grins* It's a puzzle to look forward to figuring out...
Comments from author:
Xander hurts a lot. It will take time for him and WIllow to recover from the neglect and abuse.

Joyce is indeed pretty good at the mom thing, I think.

Prue's fate will have to wiat until the next installment. Brandon Walsh. I avoided it in High school (the equivalent) ;-) Check. I will alter that later. And for the Mummy victims, that will be explained.


Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from war
Review:
Nice to see Xander get a good family. Poor Ampata, wants to do the right thing but the only choices she sees are bad ones. hope for Brenda's sake they arrive in time to save Prue or things could get ugly for her.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Yup, Xander will officially get different parents. If anything happens to Prue, Brenda is going to be in deep kimchee.


Thanks and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [war] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from trongod
Review:
OK, /that/ was totally different! Why didn't this effect occur from Ampata before, or is it Hellmouth driven? And is Prue going to be saved by the timely intervention of a bail bondsman showing up or is her magic going to flare and protect her - or is she going to be raped off screen and the clan have to deal with the event?

And come on, Ampata!! Gotta save the girl here, O Authorish One!!
Comments from author:
I thought it might surprise people. The hows and such will be described, of course, in future chapters, quite near future even.
Same I fear goes for Prue's situaion, but interesting guesses.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [trongod] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from Eureka
Review:
I STILL say that Ampata did the right thing! I mean how many did she have to drain in Cannon? And she has already had what 2-3? So except Walsh and Prue going to jail (Not that they will stay there though..) Ampata did a GOOD thing! Kinda wondering though will Xander be able to date her or will the others decide that she is too dangerous for him to be with? I mean there is NO way that she will be able to hide what she is from them forever. I am pretty sure that Joyce will take her in and perhaps Simon and Lillith can fix it to where she doesn't have to drain anybody else.
Comments from author:
I'm not entirely certain Ampata's words weren't more wishful thinking than anything else. (In canon) In AU, Amata can't be held responsible for the actions of the SDPD.

We shall see how it develops, shan't we? Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Eureka] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from darkmoon
Review:
great chapter a little short but good, love to see Simon kick ted ass for trying to mess with his lady, thereĀ“s a lot of twins in Sunnydale, i remember that in some back chapters Buffy and co talked about a lot of magic families living in the hellmouth and Simon said something about it but he was sad.
willow really needs a spanking.
Comments from author:
I went to a new format and I'm still getting used to how long the chapters have to be. 59 is supposed to be a monster though... As for Ted, wait and see.

There are indeed a lot of twins in Sunnydale. Simon's remark was about the large number of magical families in Sunnydale, i think. The reasons for his sadness will be addressed.

As for Willow, well she is still expecting one.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [darkmoon] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from Blackett
Review:
Weird sex game....lol. With their opinion on whitelighters.....poor Leo. I miss Sg-1...they will be back soon right?
Comments from author:
Yes, well, this is the Sunnydale PD's great chief. Leo is in for an uphill battle, yes. SG-1 will be back on Monday, that is the Waif's and strays verse Monday. So it shouldn't take too long...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Blackett] • Date [7 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches and Confused mothers" from (Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Another entertaining chapter.

Something tells me that we have not seen the last of Xander's bastard of a father-it would be true justice if Xander gets to stake the vamped Tony Harris.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Well, Amata did suck him dry. It would be difficult for a vamp to stake him.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [6 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from joshlamont
Review:
*snrks* Goodness. You'd think the Elders would learn.
Comments from author:
Why ever would they? I mean, it's worked for thousands of years... I mean they only tortured one of their Whitelighters for daring to love a woman...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [joshlamont] • Date [5 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from trongod
Review:
Review Take 2!! (stupid internet)...

Hoping to see the Sunnydale P.D. get hammered from every direction possible soon; ditto the Whitelighters and their leash holders, the Elders. The Powers That Be and them just ... /really/ tick me off, ya know? If they just /happen/ to get the fudge pounded out them at nearly every opportunity... Well, that's OK by me...

Willow needs some serious help, and I'm hoping that the folks get awakened to that by David before she gets too deep again.

Ampata - really, truly, sincerely hoping that you can write her a happier ending in this than all the other stories she's in - the follow canon, so you almost couldn't help but write a better ending. As so many others said in the reviews, she got a raw deal, and this could be a way to (a) give her redemption; (b) stick one in the eye of the P.T.Bs that set her up - always a plus; (c) save Xander major trauma from offering his life in place of Willow's and seeing the girl he was having major feelings for chose to die again rather than harm him - gutsy chose she made, all honor to her. (c.1) keep Xander from having to deal with that memory every time he tries to date and the girls bring up his past history of getting involved with deadly, beautiful, and dangerous women.

Speaking of which, has anyone ever thought about the fact that despite the women he dates, most chose to do everything they can to keep from haring him? Drusilla offered to turn him, IIRC, but never made a serious try, despite her long history of craziness; Anya had plenty of opportunity to harm him personally or by proxie, but didn't; Cordelia - yeah, I include her, wouldn't you? - could have done so much with her looks, position, and Daddy's money (while he had it) that there's little she couldn't have done. And the ladies of Oxnard that we never got to hear about - damn it anyway! - would be an intriguing addition to the Xander Zany Harem Of Doom And Beauty.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I know the feeling.

The Sunnydale PD had a few good dedicated officers, and they were led by the Mayor's stooge. As for the Elders and the PTB, they have managed to tick off the older generation and no doubt the younger generation will be highly sceptical towards them.

Ampata/Amata. Well, I'll let you be the eventual judge of that. Tell me when the arc is finished. All good points though.

Xander the redeemer of women who manages to keep them somewhat from killing him seems to be a common theme. But what ever happens, a harem is not going to happen for Xander in this AU. Joyce would not approve.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [trongod] • Date [5 Nov 11] • Not Rated
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