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Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Blackett
Review:
What Roth said. That last scene almost brought tears in my eyes. Also, loved Jon and Giles on the phone....hilarious.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I did feel badly for Jessica. I had not imagined quite how depraved Tony demanded to be. And I must admit that Jon and Giles on the phone amused me too.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [Blackett] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Panaka
Review:
Nice comeback. In fact, awesome chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I just hope the next one will be as satisfying.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Panaka] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Roth
Review:
Depressing but needed I'd say. Looked at in one direction the life of Buffy, Xander, Willow et al in Sunnydale is a huge dark comedy. Looked at from another it's a group of people with PTSD cracking jokes so as to not start sobbing horribly and not stop.

You're managing to create something that's in the middle, in my opinion. You've saved a number of characters from fates worse that death (or did your best to), but you've also shown a wider, more horrible, more fantastic world that needs it's heroes.

Well done.
Comments from author:
Glad to see you're still reading.

Yes, that's a very good definition. I think the family will help with the PTSD. After 'Anne' and then Angel showed the evil in other places, I doubted Sunnydale would be a big enough playground. And it does need heroes, and it will get them.

Thank you and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Roth] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Zaz
Review:
<3
Comments from author:
Thank you. ;-)
Review By [Zaz] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from LordSchmodder
Review:
Good chapter, brings the story along nicely.
I like that Ampata relate to Joyce, and I liked your Nazi angle.
I am really interested what will happen to Roger and Tony.
Thanks!
Comments from author:
Yup, I suddenly felt the need for speed. Many answers in the next chapter.

Thanks for reading, reviewing and I hope you continue enjoying.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from traceyw
Review:
Well worth the wait. A brilliant story with another great chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you, much appreciated.

And thanks for reviewing
Review By [traceyw] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from AllenPitt
Review:
I like the connections you're forging --Machida is a good touch. Hannah Harris, a relative maybe? Is Brenda Walsh related to Professor Walsh? Why is Brenda a Pru lookalike? Wow, a story where Amata actually has a shot at coming out ok, that's different. Deserved, too.
Though I had to chuckle at the thought of Paige arriving at the Summers residence in the midst of all this. Suitable environment for kids? I wonder!
Nice scene at the police station, precautions + safe room. I think the whole 'Sunnydale Syndrome' is part of the magic the mayor has set up around Sunnydale, so it's a good feeding ground & nobody notices. Would make sense, otherwise the populace would have fled years ago, and there'd go his Ascension.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I thought he was much underused and noticed on the Wiki that some interesting lines were cut...

Much will be answered the coming chapters, though by no means all. And when Paige shows up, deary, deary me...

Part of it is indeed that, but part is also mankind's desire to deny the existence of the supernatural.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from Eureka
Review:
So we save Amata?? RIGHT?
What gonna happen to the "guys"?
Xander is Romany? Perhaps related to Janna/Jenny? I mean Jenny recognized her, and called her a Romany name, Jessia told her to tell Xander of his heritage and all.
We gonna see Hanna again?
Sorry if I seem awfully questiony and all.
Comments from author:
Do we? Possibly for a certain value of save.

All your questions will be answered, do not worry. Not a problem, but I think you'd prefer to read the next chapter rather than a spoilery (note Buffy-ism) answer.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Eureka] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from DofEire
Review:
"Lockhart is like a cockroach, he keeps turning up and is hard to kill." So..."Lockroach" wouldn't be a bad epithet for him, then? ;) He's soooo flipping creepy. Buuuuhhh.

Poor Amata.
Comments from author:
Lockroach. Heh. And yes, he is creepy. Far too goo a vilain to kill of. ;-)

And yes, poor Amata.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [DofEire] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from war
Review:
Poor Amata she must have some truly horrendous memories running through her head.

So Xander has some Roma blood in him. Interesting. I see he still speaks without thinking things through when he's upset. Understandable this time but I'm glad he realized he was in the wrong quickly this time. I feel sorry for Jessica so matter how bad she did by Xander she didn't deserve that.

Interesting that all the cops in Sunnydale aren't on the take. Nice to see that save his partner and hold the line.
Hanna interesting hope we see her again. Anyone who is willing to get that close to a suspected vamp just to be sure has the blood of heroes in her veins.

Great story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Indeed she does. I have a list of fourteen Nazi's here...

Yup, Xander is part Roma. As for speakinbg without thinking, he only just turned sixteen, he's still allowed some leeway. No one deserved that. Tony Harris in my story really is a nasty piece of work.

Most of the cops shown in the series are actually good people. Only clueless as to the supernatural, except for Munroe, who knows and is on the take.

Hannah has certain advantages we'll be getting to later.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [war] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Memories of things not done" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
This is a very interesting chapter. It brings together a lot of unique elements, and makes the Inca Mummy Girl plot much more complex. Poor child.

So Roger got his comeuppance after all. *grins* Very nice.

And hey look! Giles learned that he's been talking directly with someone who he admires... Giles being star-struck by Jon Carnahan was cute. *grins*

The Romany twist on Jessica Harris was very intriguing. I'm sorry she died.
Comments from author:
In canon Amata apparently learned English from listening to people at exhibitions. I somehow doubted that would work, so the taking of memories was born. It also opened the door to some truly horrible memories.

Yup, Roger is going to get everything he deserves, and so will Tony.

Star-struck Giles was fun to write as well. After vilifying Jessica and then this, I feel sorry about it too.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from (Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Looks like angry Joyce and real angry and scary Simon are going to get to come out to play-I can definitely see both of them going Beatrix Kiddo on anyone even remotely involved in harming family.
Comments from author:
Oh heavens no. Nothing as restrained as that.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [(Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [17 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
Well, I never expecting ingesting vampires would resurrect Amata's victims. I wonder if the effect's limited to just the two? Unfortunately, it seems that fair or not, Amata can't be allowed to survive.

Either there's spellwork involved in the Brenda mix-up, or the pre-Charmed Haliwell sisters had drifted further apart than suggested. And somehow I thing the young Miss Walsh is going to become a Hellmouth victim...
Comments from author:
Heh, you're never allowed to guess again. It's also the influence of the Hellmouth, at least a bit. As for Amata, more will be made clear in chapter 60.

As for Brenda Walsh, I hope that chapter 60 explains that for you too...

Thanks for reviewing and reading carefully.
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [17 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Meneldur
Review:
And, we finally start to see the dark side.
This is scary, like, really scary. Prue's getting sexually assaulted (and maybe raped), The Master is trying to gather an army of evil dudes to kill everybody, the witches can't help because they're fighting Marigold, at the same time Lilac is about to start individually, Evil undead directors of the CIA are trying to gather souls and fight the witches, psychopathic mummy are wandering the town, killing people, we still have no idea what the Mayor or Sheila are doing... It's just scary. With so many threats surrounding them, how can they win? And there are also the regular things going on, like Cordelia's abuse.
But, I do like the characters and their relationships. And the witches seem to think they know what they're doing. Interesting that Lockhart is in the states, but just insures he won't escape vengeance. I'm surprised he still wants girl - I thought Snape castrated him.
Otherwise, I don't see very many problems. Simon is actually training Willow and Amy. If they manage to get rid of the current threats, it may even calm down and allow the plot to move a bit more in whatever direction it needs to go. Unless that direction is where it's going now.
As usual, my only problem is that Willow and Dave are too much into each other, and that means Willow/Tara isn't happening. And the way the plot will move, I'm afraid that if they become too invested, they won't move from the partners they find. And as nice as Dave is, he's just that... nice. Uninteresting to me. II can see the relationship between Tara and Willow taking time, but I just don't know if they have that time.
I don't know about how you plan to do it, but you're right that as of recent chapters, the plot has slowed down. I think it's because of the multiplicity of events and threats, as well as characters. If they get rid of the Master, the Scoobies can concentrate on Sunnydale, The Witches on Marigold, the Charmed Ones on San Francisco, etc. Of course, you may not want that... but as I see it, as long as they keep having family problems, crisises and threats, they're not going anywhere. And the plot won't move. I mean, we haven't even handled the Stargate thing, or what Janet is going to do, or Arlene, or Eileen's judgement, not to mention 'minor' things like Jenny and Giles, to say nothing of the major threats already mentioned.
Don't get me wrong, I love this work - but at this point I start to get the feeling it's unraveling in too many characters and directions. I mean, we haven't even seriously entered Highlander or Harry Potter, which is a completely separate world on the other side of the world, not to mention that other major characters like Faith haven't appeared yet either.
I love this work, I think it's brilliant, and I'll keep reading and reviewing. I just think that we may be having an overload of characters, events and information. It's not a problem that the extended family comes by on weekends... but it becomes a problem when each time there's some problem that requires everybody staying and many chapters devote to one weekend.
In any case, can't wait for replies to my reviews and more chapters, Meneldur.

EDIT: Really? Well, it's comforting to know that it will happen, at the least. Still, many seasons is relative. I'm assuming you mean TV Seasons. But already we're (technically) is season 2, even though Buffy hasn't fought the Master at all. So... I'm hopeful. I hope it'll happen somewhere is season 4-5, or so, and probably before they really integrate with the Potterverse. So, wait and see, as always.
Comments from author:
Yes, quite dark. This is a set up for a number of chapters and occurences, of course. They have a great deal of firepower and a great many pwoerful enemies. Lockhart is like a cockroach, he keeps turning up and is hard to kill. The problem is that the largest sexual organ a human has is the brain. Regrettably Lockhart wasn't lobotomized.

Simon has been training the girls in the basics for a while, its just not very exciting. As for Tara and Willow, I fear that is many seasons ahead yet.

I do hope to speed up the story pretty soon.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardian Angels" from Meneldur
Review:
And, another stopping point, hopefully last before the end.
It's great to see how the entire family is getting back together, and is even healing past wounds. Eileen Beckforth is apparently coming to Sunnydale, and it seems she has a young daughter with mother powers, named Tara. For some reason Janet is as well, because of a family crisis - Eileen, perhaps? I wonder if they can heal her, and what punishment would be levied on her.
Moreover, another one of the Five might be coming. Dawn mentioned a new student, family name of Juarez, no? I guess we shall see.
I loved the Willow hacking segments. Those were awesome. Nerdanel is an excellent handle. But I want a poster of her as well! I never saw any in all my art searches of the web. I do wonder who Witchqueen is, though.
Stargate and Mummy are also coming to Sunnydale, and great fun is going to be had by all. At this point, they'll have enough power to beat all their enemies. But things are wrong beneath the surface. Since when was Willow a triplet? What killed her sisters? Was it an accident? Or some ritual by Sheila, either to empower her or Willow? After all, if 3 had been born... they could have been the Charmed ones, no? And maybe if two were dead at birth, their power would transfer to the last? Which would be very scary. Because it would mean that as a spirit witch, Willow would have the power of the Charmed Ones... without even factoring her earth witch powers, which would be more powerful than Sheila's.
Where's the Mayor in all this mess? I doubt he's ignorant of it. And who knows what other enemies exist? I don't count Marigold as much of a threat, because they're already up on it.
Speaking of Willow's powers, I find it weird she and Amy aren't getting more training. Maybe it's all taking place off-screen, but we should be told of it at least. Sure, lots of stuff has been going on, but as we've seen, it's dangerous to leave Willow alone. Look what happened just with hacking. One traumatic death, and she may try a resurrection. And that would not be of the good.
I like the way all other storylines are progressing meanwhile. Wonder when Tara will come in, and how long she'll stay. Also regarding Harry Potter, but you already told me it'd be mentioned in LL and the Shaggy Dog, so I trust you on that. Sad thing is, Luna (and her father) will probably be the only wand wavers to treat them regularly.
Think that's all I've got to say. Love this, and going back for more!
Comments from author:
Heh, A pity, I'm enjoying these reviews. I don't have a Nerdanel poster either. I would like one too. But regrettably there none to be had....

Actually I hope to get things moving fairly soon, Amata is going to be a catalyst. Marigold is a great threat until they can deal with it.

Most of Amy and Willow's training isn't being mentioned, but it is taking place. It just takes time and the real magic will not start until they have abluaria.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing and glad you're enjoying it.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Not Rated
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