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Review of chapter "Jagged cries and Computer games" from Panaka
Review:
Good to see a new chapter.

I do still think you've bitten off more than you can chew with adding all the different fandoms currently in this series.
Comments from author:
You may be right. The fandoms that will be in use, as more than irregular cameos, are Charmed, StarGate, Hghlander and Potter (upto a point) with the focus moving ffrom the one to the other on occasion. All the others are merely cameos, with the exception of Clarice/Hannibal verse. On the other hand, I do like a challenge...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Panaka] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jagged cries and Computer games" from Eureka
Review:
More please. I have so many questions and almost no answers.
Comments from author:
There will be answers given. Quite e few even, in the next few chapters. Not all the answers may be liked, however...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Jagged cries and Computer games" from (Current Donor)ayg
Review:
So Jack and Arlene are going to meet again? And old Jon will find out about the Stargate being opened? Poor Jack is going to get yelled at by both of them. If he doesn't get killed first, of course. Who is this Director person? NID? Something worse? Sounds like there's a very old conspiracy behind this person.

I noticed during the conversation about Arlene that Daniel says she was a Captain, then suddenly Hammond calls her a Major. I know she got promoted, but how does Hammond know that? Did you misplace a comment by one of the others about it?

Dave knows the flying vampkiller? At first I read it as being Willow's thoughts and that Dave was the flying vampkiller, then I realized that it had to be Dave thinking about someone else. Who? One of their classmates? Or one of Dave's relatives? Can Chelia fly?

Willow still hasn't learned not to hack into government places? Her backside is really going to hurt, soon.

And all these hackers, from lots of different fandoms, being collected by the Meier organization, to find out who almost kidnapped Evy? Sounds like they're going to have lots of fun.

I'm assuming that the Director is the one behind the kidnap attempt and Carol's problems (in the story "Children of a Greater God"). Does he know that Jack is Evy's father? You said (in answer to my review of another story) that Jack's name isn't on the birth certificate, but surely Arlene's name would be and it would be easy to count the months backwards and see who she was involved with at time of conception. Was Evy targeted only because of her own abilities or because of who her parents are?
Comments from author:
Jack and Arlene will meet again...oh yes. The Director...Lets say I've found some very nasty inspiration in real life for certain characters.

I made a mistake, in the first draft Jack tells them Arlene got promoted, but he actually doesn't know that yet, it was too recent. So corrected.

Dave does know the flying vamp killer. His idientity will be revealed pretty soon, so don't worry. (And I apologize for not saying more...)

As I stated in another answer, not even Willow's woe begone doe eyes will save her from Joyce's wrath.

The hackers will have fun, the opponents...not so much. Mostly cameo appearances, for several years at least. The Cadre is not really needed all that often.

The Director does not really care for Evy's parentage, her talents and her abilities are what drew his attention.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jagged cries and Computer games" from grd
Review:
This tale has become a classic and favorite with the surprising crossovers. Almost feel bad for Willow, but she is doing an awesome thing. Just needs guidance. Love Jack's surprise revelations to the team. I can see Daniel begging to meet his family now.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I try. Willow...Willow will not be able to woe begone doe eye herself out of this bit of trouble with Joyce. But she will be loved. Daniel begging to meet Jack's family...yes, that ought to be amusing...
Review By [grd] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Jagged cries and Computer games" from Alastor
Review:
Once again the way you are able to seamlessly mold multiples shows and genres into a single entity is simply astounding. I've got a feeling that the addition of spirit witches and possible government allies who actually help instead of trying to kill Buffy or make a Frakenstein's monster is going to throw a serious curve ball in regards to Mayor Wilkins and even the Master will most likely be much easier to deal with since Buffy has a very large support base. Although just guessing here but I think you're still going to have Buffy drown and get revived or temporarily die somehow just cause having two slayers is way too good of a plot point to pass up. Looking forward to more! Update soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you, a very nice compliment. Buffy most certainly will be better supported throughout her adventures. The (proper) Government will keep far away from her, for reasons that will be divulged later.

And who can pass up on two Slayers? Raise hands, any Fan fic author?

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Alastor] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jagged cries and Computer games" from joshlamont
Review:
Oh. Oh, dear. Putting Willow on *that*? With help?

~/o Somebody's going to getting ***-****ed... o/~
Comments from author:
Oh yes. Oh yes indeed. And they deserve it. Trust me on this.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [joshlamont] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pink Bicycles and mothers commiserating" from FireWolfe
Review:
LMAO Normal and the Summers family ah huh like that will happen. Love it. I do hope you keep Harmony from being vamped or at least let her keep her soul. She was ok even as a vampire until Joss messed it up in season 8.
Fire
Comments from author:
Normal on the Hellmouth... Graduation is a long way away...I disregard all the comic seasons. Too depressing.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [23 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pink Bicycles and mothers commiserating" from PATM
Review:
So much to love about this story, it never disappoints or leaves me hangin'. Buffy bike riding to go slaying, I wish JW did that. The flying vamp snatcher , Cordy with uniform envy. I call that looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I always wondered why cars and walking were the only modes of transport when a well maintained bike is quiet and fast. The vamp snatcher, I urge patience. The uniform envy is based upon the infamous 'Will you be my deputy' scene and Cordyfan's excellent series about Cordelia in the Army.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [PATM] • Date [20 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pink Bicycles and mothers commiserating" from Eureka
Review:
LOVED the chapter Vic! Buffy gets ambushed, Grandma saves her. What is that white thing that pulled up the head vamp?
Joyce gets to start doing things that are non-hellmouthy!
Comments from author:
Ah, the white thing. We'll be getting to that. Be patient. As for non-hellmouthy...what do you think the chances are of that?

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [20 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pink Bicycles and mothers commiserating" from (Recent Donor)pinkhairedharry
Review:
*Willowosity*

awesome

can't wait for more
Comments from author:
Ayup. I shall use it again, I think.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [(Recent Donor)pinkhairedharry] • Date [20 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pink Bicycles and mothers commiserating" from war
Review:
someone set up a very good ambush on Buffy. they knew what she looked like, her patrol route and how she'd react to a fleeing couple. wonder if they have someone watching her house waiting for her to leave to phone it in? to bad Buffy couldn't take one prisoner for interragation.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
All good questions, and they all will be answered. Actually, Buffy and her grandmother should have taken the lead vamp prisoner, but maybe they will think of that next time...

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [war] • Date [20 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Insults and Insights" from Alastor
Review:
Freaking awesome story so far and barely even half way through the first season. Other than the occasional spelling and grammatical error, and you see plenty of those even in published works, the story is very well written. I am curious as too the ages of the Halliwells in this story, since it is pre series I would take a guess at late teens for Phoebe and early to mid twenties for the other two, but that's just a guess. I am very curious as to when and if you are going to tie in all the crossovers that you have mentioned in this story as more than just passing references. I've almost lost count of how many that I've recognized. The only other really curious thing that's peaked my interest is what they timeline in the 'wand wanker's' world is going to be since if you follow canon then the series is almost over already. Regardless I am very with how quickly and well done you are putting this out and I definitely look forward to more! Keep up the good work! Update soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you very much. The early part (first 40 odd chapters) are unbeta'd, though djhardim was kind enough to dig out numerous errors from later chapters. The ages of the Halliwells can be calculated from the birthdates in the Family tree. (Can be found on the Waifs forum) and they are taken from the Charmed Wikia.

Do read the side stories, they allow a better grasp of the whole. The main crossovers are Charmed, StarGate, Highlander and 'Lecter-verse'. They all have more or less improtant rolse to play in the central story, and the Buffy cast will visit the anicillary story lines.

The Wand Wankers start one year later than in HP canon. WHen the two will meet...that will be a surprise.

Thank you for your compliments and your review, Vid
Review By [Alastor] • Date [20 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Insults and Insights" from (Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Looks like Willow still doesn't quite get the message yet regarding her hacking.

Another great chapter.
Comments from author:
She's getting there...But it gets worse...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [14 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Insults and Insights" from Garmorn
Review:
This reads so realistically that it is hard to remember that this is the fanfic and the original is the "professionally written one." The sense are great and non of it seems forced at all.

PS. Once this is done I am saving to my Kindle files.
Comments from author:
Thank you that is a great compliment. I hope it is easier to read on the Kindle than on here, the distance between the paragraphs is tiresome, I wish I knew how to correct that.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Garmorn] • Date [14 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Insults and Insights" from Eureka
Review:
This was a great chapter Vic! Quid Pro Quo/tit for tat, is quite a good concept especially when dealing with guys and girls together. I was surprised to see that you put the guys as the last then Giles and Jenny as first runners up with Harm as the winner. I pretty much guessed that Harm would be the winner, but didn't think that you would have them written in as the runners up. Was very surprised that you had the family talk to Snider about what he planned on doing to Giles and Jenny after forcing them to act in the talent show.
Basically I loved the chapter and can't wait for the next one.
Comments from author:
Heh. Well, I have found that many pupils will vote for a pretty teacher in scanty clothing...The family may be a bit annoyed with Giles and Jenny about the Hrackesh, but they do not like Snyder and, well they do think they look good together...

And of course there are two more talent shows, the school plays, the Christmas pageant and oh so much more places and times where the children can distinguish themsleves.
Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Eureka] • Date [14 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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