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Review of chapter "Cheaper by the dozen" from Meneldur
Finally got to a sort of stopping point. And I've got only one thing to say: THIS IS AWESOMELY AMAZING!
Seriously, the way you seamlessly wove so many characters and fandoms together, not only patching worlds together, but also making them plausibly related and with the actual realistic effects that such separation would cause? Brilliant. There are no other words for it. I don't think I've got much to say, because I love everything you've done so far. Well, except for the Dave/Willow romance, but I only object to that because Willow/Tara is my OTP if there's a world where they're both alive. And since we've got at least some time before Tara arrives, hopefully it'll be alright.
Now, a few questions (even though I know they might be answered in future chapters): What is wrong with Arlene, and why does she care about foster children?
Do the Harry Potter characters know about this mess? Probably not, but I mean, Amy is related to Minerva and to Sirius, and so forth. Does Minerva at least know her (daughter?) relative Catherine lived in the States?
Now that Simon has a half-sister, is Willow still his heir? Or would Clarice not want to be, and so Willow would remain heir anyway?
Lastly, power. We know the Charmed Ones are powerful, and we know how much more powerful (for now) their older generation is. But do we have power ratings? Sheila was supposedly incredibly powerful. Willow is even more. How powerful is Willow (or how powerful will she be) in comparison with all the other witches here? Moreover, what is their power compared to Wand Wavers? Willow could resurrect the dead, which Simon says (heh, it's a game) is practically impossible. The Wand Wavers (even their most powerful, such as Albus) say the same. Does that make Willow even more powerful than then, or any other witch more powerful than those wand wavers?
Lastly, is there a family tree? That is, I understand the relationships fine, but it'd be nice to see it clarified so we can figure out exactly how they're related, and how many overlapping relations they have. and if you're doing that, could you do a power ranking (it would need to be a future power rating, I guess) for the witches?
I really really like this, and will continue onwards with much pleasure. Can't wait for replies, Meneldur.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I'm flattered by your compliments. I find the interrelationships of the characters to be a very interesting and if the worlds are not blended together properly, it jars. I''m glad you like it.

Quite a few people want to see Willow with Tara. But considering my writing speed, it will take years to get there...College is several seasons away.

I will let you find out about 1)
2)Amy is related to Minerva, the woman who possesed her is a long ago ancestor of Sirius. The Wand Wizards are aware that many of their numbers left, but assume they have turned muggle or are otherwise uninteresting.
3) The heir is whoever Simon names heir, it's an interesting little Meier foible. THe first generation gets an annuity, but everyone after that must fend for themselves. (It is actually prety rare for the Meiers to have more than one child/son, Gabriel was the last.)

As for power, Willow has the most potential, as she has both Spirit and Earth. The Charmed Ones are more powerful in Spirit, but can barely channel, their combined power is very considerable however. A good deal of power is experience. All the elder witches have that in spades. But to put it bluntly, Sheila required a full Circle of Thirteen to hold her, and the witches in that were amongst the most powerful in the Concordat, led by a fully leyed up Simon. That gives you an idea.

The respective power levels of Wand and channeling magic users will be dealt with in a later chapter of Shaggy dog, so I hope you'll forgive me not explaining that here.

There is a family tree, it can be found at the Waifs and Strays forum. It's not in tree form, it won't upload. I'd advise not looking at it yet, as it is up to date and contains spoilers.

Thanks for the compliments, glad you''re enjoying it and I hope the replies satisfy somewhat. Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Breakfasts and basements" from Meneldur
So, got up to here. Not much to say. Really like everything you've been doing. Well developed characters, good detail on the visual. Simon isn't a Gary Stu yet, and even if he gets superpowers, eh has such a plethora of issues it wouldn't matter much. The relationship with Joyce and their reactions (as well as Dawn's and Buffy's) were believable, which is impressive, considering the whirlwind aspect of it. I actually really liked the date at the ballet, especially all the luxurious touches. I also love jewels, and loved your inclusion of famous jewelry.
Main idea so far seems to be the Scoobies having a normal family life, which will no doubt help them greatly. After all, it seems most of their major future problems come from them being teenagers without enough parental influence. Even when they're dealing with outside threats which are not their fault, a steadying and guiding hand heavier (and more practical) than Rupert's would have benefited them greater. So I'm 100% behind you on that.
Lastly, does Willow even know she's basically the girl Simon was planning to pick as his heir? I love how you connected between them, in any case. But it may give her another much-needed self-esteem boost. And by showing her (and everyone's) weakness, you reveal how much help they all need, and how many problems (which festered) they had. Is it even relevant that Willow is Simon's 6th or whatever cousin, now that he seems to be adopting all the Scoobies as his family anyway? Does it come with some magical inheritance, or headship of the family? Because even if (when) he marries Joyce, such an old line may have blood stipulations, especially regarding magic.
Pairings... I'll wait for the future. There's still much to read. If I can reach chapter 32 tomorrow, I'll probably stop and review there, and go on to the next fics in order of reading. Most likely I'll raise some real questions then.
That's all for now, I think. I'm for sleep; perchance to dream. Hope this helps, and can't wait to get back to it.
Comments from author:
Quite far already, I;d say. Thank you. I do hope to keep Simon from going Gary Stu. I considered lenghtening the courtship, but neither of them seemed to listen. Joyce is quite a forward little minx. ;-) The ballet date is one of my favourites, it''s the first time it really was brought home to Joyce just how rich Simon really is... I''m only sad that so many of the Jewels I''d loved to have seen were broken up.

Yes, the premisse of the story is to give the Scoobies a stable and loving and supportive homelife. Rupert is very nice and all, but he only really started to take an interest around season two.

Willow does not know yet at this point. Willow is the youngest of Simon's living relatives. Sheila is unsuitable. A lot of your questions you''ve caught up with by now, so I won''t answer them.

Hope you had a good night's rest, glad you''re enjoying this and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [13 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Eureka
Holy hand grenades batman! So MORE soul sucking mummies were made, Brenda is out and Pru is being manhandled by a butch... Hopefully the others will see/figure out what is going on soon so that Pru is NOT raped and nobody else is hurt by those soul sucking mummies. Also hope that Ampata is helped in the process.
Comments from author:
Yup, more soul sucking mummies. Gotta love soul sucking mummies. And yes, things are pretty dark right now.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [13 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Panaka
Not bad, but I couldn't suspend my disbelief at the family at least not being able to tell the two jail birds apart. It, and fem|Bubba, broke the chapter for me.
Comments from author:
Actually the family figured it out pretty soon, as will be told next chapter. Fem-Bubba? Heh. That will be explained next chapter as well.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Panaka] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from Blackett
Ooh come on! Can't those bas..rds just stay dead?!!! Also....poor Prue!! Great update as always.
Comments from author:
Nope, the scum rises to the top. Poor Prue, indeed.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from LordSchmodder
I am very interested in discovering what's up with Tony and Roger. Nice touch.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I've never seen it before.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from AllenPitt
Brenda & Pru just have no luck. Brenda likely to get murdered by Roger, meanwhile poor Pru. On the other hand, imagine the ginormous lawsuit resulting from this. First the police release the wrong prisoner, then the one who should have been released gets attacked in her cell with a guard standing by smirking? that'll work for the ordinary prisoner, but one that has wealthy & powerful relatives, heads will roll...
And of course Brenda gets blamed by the Halliwells. Ouch. Considering it was a 250g bond, and she had no money, I can't blame her for jumping at the chance to leave the jail. Meanwhile--she has just got to be a relative of some sort, exact twins like that only happen on tv shows! .
Meanwhile--Ampata's victims rise as similar soul-sucking mummy types? Ouch. And there's not even a sire bond like with a vamp, so they're out after Ampata or at least tony h is? yikes.
This is really putting a spoke in the wheel of the Master's plans. Just saying. And damn, he's actually a very good planner. One of the only vampires to manage to put together a large vamp organization; he's very charismatic, and ...considering he's trapped in that dimensional prison, managing to maintain control like that is just amazing, really. Turning 150-200 vamps for a storming of the house is a good idea, too.
Comments from author:
A ginormous lawsuit to be paid by the Sunnydale PD, yup. Brenda had her reasons, and she did do wrong.

No sire bond, though that seems to function pretty badly in some cases. Yes, the attack on Ampata will not go exactly as she had hoped.

I never understood why the Master was such a useless opponent. Besides the fact that the loose episodes were more fun, but hey.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from DarkTopaz
I am starting to hate your cliff hangers you get us wound up then don't deliver.
Comments from author:
I fear that is the nature of Cliffhangers. And the serial publication of most fanfics. I do hope you''ll continue to read.
Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [DarkTopaz] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from EllandrahSylver
Okay, wow...

Lots of things happening here. First off, I feel so bad for Xander. His father's dead, and his mom doesn't care if he lives or dies. Foster parents who want to adopt him is an awesome thing, but that has still got to hurt. I'm glad he already had a solid foundation in his new family before it happened, though. It could have been so much worse.

Willow's thoughts, feelings and reactions were so touching, and believable. Joyce is pretty good at the mom thing. *grins*

The Halliwells... Yeowch! Okay, first thing, the insert of Paige was sneaky and clever and entertaining, coming from the side like it did. Prue's experiences in the jail look like they're going to open a massive can of worms. I felt sorry for Brenda, although I actually had to read that whole sequence a couple times before it clicked what was going on. It was a little muddled, but that might just be me. Oh, point of interest - something I noticed in the last chapter but forgot to say something about, just because it's a small, stupid thing, but Brenda Walsh's twin from 90210's name is Brandon, not Brendan. *flushes* I watched that show when I was in high school. I though Jason Priestley was cute.

One thing I'm a bit confused about though... although you'll probably explain it later, so I can wait to see later chapters, but... what's with the mummy's victims rising? I don't remember that happening in the episode. What's the point? *grins* It's a puzzle to look forward to figuring out...
Comments from author:
Xander hurts a lot. It will take time for him and WIllow to recover from the neglect and abuse.

Joyce is indeed pretty good at the mom thing, I think.

Prue's fate will have to wiat until the next installment. Brandon Walsh. I avoided it in High school (the equivalent) ;-) Check. I will alter that later. And for the Mummy victims, that will be explained.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from war
Nice to see Xander get a good family. Poor Ampata, wants to do the right thing but the only choices she sees are bad ones. hope for Brenda's sake they arrive in time to save Prue or things could get ugly for her.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Yup, Xander will officially get different parents. If anything happens to Prue, Brenda is going to be in deep kimchee.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing.
Review By [war] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Silver linings" from trongod
OK, /that/ was totally different! Why didn't this effect occur from Ampata before, or is it Hellmouth driven? And is Prue going to be saved by the timely intervention of a bail bondsman showing up or is her magic going to flare and protect her - or is she going to be raped off screen and the clan have to deal with the event?

And come on, Ampata!! Gotta save the girl here, O Authorish One!!
Comments from author:
I thought it might surprise people. The hows and such will be described, of course, in future chapters, quite near future even.
Same I fear goes for Prue's situaion, but interesting guesses.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [trongod] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from Eureka
I STILL say that Ampata did the right thing! I mean how many did she have to drain in Cannon? And she has already had what 2-3? So except Walsh and Prue going to jail (Not that they will stay there though..) Ampata did a GOOD thing! Kinda wondering though will Xander be able to date her or will the others decide that she is too dangerous for him to be with? I mean there is NO way that she will be able to hide what she is from them forever. I am pretty sure that Joyce will take her in and perhaps Simon and Lillith can fix it to where she doesn't have to drain anybody else.
Comments from author:
I'm not entirely certain Ampata's words weren't more wishful thinking than anything else. (In canon) In AU, Amata can't be held responsible for the actions of the SDPD.

We shall see how it develops, shan't we? Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Eureka] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from darkmoon
great chapter a little short but good, love to see Simon kick ted ass for trying to mess with his lady, thereĀ“s a lot of twins in Sunnydale, i remember that in some back chapters Buffy and co talked about a lot of magic families living in the hellmouth and Simon said something about it but he was sad.
willow really needs a spanking.
Comments from author:
I went to a new format and I'm still getting used to how long the chapters have to be. 59 is supposed to be a monster though... As for Ted, wait and see.

There are indeed a lot of twins in Sunnydale. Simon's remark was about the large number of magical families in Sunnydale, i think. The reasons for his sadness will be addressed.

As for Willow, well she is still expecting one.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [darkmoon] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches, Mummies and mommies" from Blackett
Weird sex With their opinion on whitelighters.....poor Leo. I miss Sg-1...they will be back soon right?
Comments from author:
Yes, well, this is the Sunnydale PD's great chief. Leo is in for an uphill battle, yes. SG-1 will be back on Monday, that is the Waif's and strays verse Monday. So it shouldn't take too long...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [Blackett] • Date [7 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches and Confused mothers" from (Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Another entertaining chapter.

Something tells me that we have not seen the last of Xander's bastard of a father-it would be true justice if Xander gets to stake the vamped Tony Harris.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Well, Amata did suck him dry. It would be difficult for a vamp to stake him.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [(Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [6 Nov 11] • Not Rated
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