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Review of chapter "SG-1, Sentinels and Guides, Uh Oh!" from Doraemax
First of all, thank you for this fic. It has potential.

Now, frankly this latest chapter doesn't really sit well with me. The reason, team SG-1 pull out too easily and too early. Yeah, Jack may have realized that Jon is in good hands... but really, Jon is too much 'a-person-of-interest' to be let go that easily. Steps have to be taken, peoples to be told, contingency plans made, NID people to be misled, etc... And just taking Blair's word about the sentinel like that? I can't see Capt/Lt Sam Carter accepting it that easily. And Daniel? no questions, interrogations on sentinels, nada...? I can't see it. At the very least, Team SG-1 should have called Janet Fraisier to verify Jon's conditions.

Perhaps it would have been more believable if it was decided for team Sentinel to stay a few days... while facts are checked and verified, Daniel and Blair networked, Jon and Xander further bond, ... etc.

thank you
Comments from author:
Heh. I know it broke off in a bad spot, but trust me, Jack is not just walking off into the sunset. He's backing off so that Sam can go start digging on her computer, and he can call George and go 'ok, weird shit ahoy, boss!' And no, Team Sentinel is not exactly going to be allowed to leave, either. Jack's just saying that so Jim doesn't do something stupid. There WILL be a rematch, within twelve hours or so. Probably with George in tow.

I WILL admit that Sam and Daniel are a bit out of character, but I had to make some sacrifices in this chapter ... I knew a 'fuller explanation' was going to come in a chapter or so, giving them their chance to geek out/question facts, and I also knew that them pushing Jim now would have escalated things, and I *really* didn't want things to get more antagonistic than they already were. Jim being hounded/pressured by people he doesn't trust as far as he can throw them when he's in full-on Overprotective Papa Bear mode is a real fast way for things to get ugly, and if that happened, patching relations would have been iffy at best. So I figured it was better to keep Sam and Daniel fairly quiet this round.
Review By [Doraemax] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "SG-1, Sentinels and Guides, Uh Oh!" from calikocat

XD That was hilarious. And I loved the way Xander diffused the situation.
Review By [calikocat] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "SG-1, Sentinels and Guides, Uh Oh!" from DebraN
I was happy to see an update to this story. The stand off between the two groups came off perfectly in character. I loved Xander's line "Oh for the love of little baby monkeys, will you two stow the testosterone please." I'm glad you found a way to break the stale mate without anyone getting maimed. I can't wait to see where you take this next.
Comments from author:
*laughs* Hey, Xander was just saying what he, Blair, and Jon were thinking (along with probably all my readers). Breaking the stalemate was tough to do without it seeming extremely stupid, and I'll admit, I probably went a wee bit out of character for somebody there ... but I HAD to, otherwise the lot of them would still be there, in each other's faces, a week later! Jack and Jim both are stubborn as hell.
Review By [DebraN] • Date [18 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "SG-1, Sentinels and Guides, Uh Oh!" from cannonfly
Yay! An update! Loved the chapter. Loved the fact that Xander was the only one able to keep his brand of weirdness completely off the radar of the new group even more (I hope that made as much sense to you as it did in my head).
Review By [cannonfly] • Date [18 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "SG-1, Sentinels and Guides, Uh Oh!" from VillageOrchid
Jack is used to the weird, and they go to different planets all of the time, but you'd think Jack would be more warry about crossing state lines and insist that they stay in Colorado Springs until their background checks check out. Good character moments and action. Thanks for continuing.
Comments from author:
*snicker* Who said Jack was just going to let them walk off uncontested? He didn't know who or what they were really dealing with, and were in an armed standoff. So he's backing off, calling the Mountain, and watching Jon's apartment like a hawk so he can follow them when they leave, whilst Sam does the background check.

Besides, I *had* to find a way to break that up, or theyd've been there all week. *eyeroll*. And that wouldn't have been fun.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [18 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from sekmarc
Excellent story. I'm eager to read how Xander and Jon handle their change in circumstances and how the people closest to him handle the same.
Review By [sekmarc] • Date [14 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from Yasuko
Meanie. Just leaving us there.
Review By [Yasuko] • Date [13 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Now that's a switch I was thinking Xander was the Sentinel and Jon the Guide but this works better, good plot twist!

Great story overall, thanks!

Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [13 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
"This is so freaky." Xander groused. "I mean, seriously. We're following ghost animals. Anyone ever finds out about this, we're going to be due for a long, long stay in a padded room."

That doesn't sound like a Scoob.
Comments from author:
It certainly doesn't sound like a Season 3 or 4 Xander, I'll grant you.

You just have to remember that this is just barely post-first-season Xander, who, while he's made the decision to fight the good fight, is still getting used to the weird shit that happens in the dark in Sunnydale, nevermind this new Sentinel twist, and hey, his dad's not who he thought it was! And his mom essentially said 'screw you kid, good riddance'. They may not be close, but it's his *mom* ... that's gonna leave a mark. Plus he'd still be grieving for Jessie, especially since he was the one to dust him. Not to mention the fact that not so long ago, he dragged a drowned-and-hal-drained Buffy back to life via CPR.

I've never really liked the fact that the emotional impacts of the Jessie and Buffy things were never really seen, other than Xander and Willow joining Buffy to wipe out vamps, and Xander's hate-on for vamps. So you're going to be seeing a bit more of the emotional and mental fallout of the things that happen in this fic. Killing your best friend, saving the life of another friend, and damn near getting killed yourself is *going* to screw with your head emotionally, and while Xander will never be a wailing, angsty woobie, he's not going to be brushing off/ignoring the personal impact of events that occur.

The comment he made also serves a double purpose. While he's expressing his own reaction to events, he's also commenting on a complete truth. From the eyes of the average person, the whole spirit animal thing IS freaky ... and if they told the average person that they were following spirit animals only they could see, they'd end up in a psych ward faster than you can say 'Scooby'.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [13 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from BlueEyedJedi
Kudos on the twist of the Sentenel being ///jon rather than Xander, that is definetely a new one. Ah, next chapterwho is the biggest Alpha Jim or Jack, Xander is too focused on helping Jon to get in that fight, and Teal'c is there to back up his friend.
Comments from author:
I like keeping Xander as close to normal in my fics, and Jack/Jon in SG-1 canon has rather ... odd ... genetics going on, so I had a brilliant reason for him being a Sentinel, and with Jon being a clone that got mucked with, a reason for why Jon's a Sentinel but Jack isn't and never will be. It was way too good an opportunity to pass up.

It's going to be an interesting chapter. Jack has an advantage in that his military training is still active and current, where Jim left the military years ago. Jack also has Teal'c. While Jim will know something VERY screwy is going on with Teal'c (even though he doesn't have Junior anymore, he still has the pouch and all those missing/moved organs, so his body sounds will be very different), he'll have NO idea just how much of a badass Teal'c is.

Unfortunately for Jack, not all the advantages are in his corner. 'cause he's facing off against a Sentinel who's protecting his injured son, who happens to be a Guide, as well as his own Guide (trust me, you do NOT touch Blair if you want to live. *snicker*), and Blair is going to be every bit as hostile, because he's got a distressed Sentinel and his own Sentinel to protect. And while Xander won't be able to do much physically, we all know his mouth can be as dangerous as his fists.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [13 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from Jaylynn
Oh that's going to go over well, Jon finally gets his senses somewhat controlled and they barge in making lots of noise. I can easily see that triggering a relaspe.
Comments from author:
*laughs* No kidding. I really don't envy SG-1, at all. The next chapter is going to be interesting as hell.
Review By [Jaylynn] • Date [12 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from calikocat
Argh! Cliffhanger! *pouts* Absolutely loved the chapter, Xander in protective guide mode was awesome.
Review By [calikocat] • Date [12 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from AkashaDrake
Oh, Teal'c and the guys just did the WRONG thing.

Only thing more protective than a Sentinel is a Guide whose Sentinel is having problems.

Add in the presence of another Sentinel, and another Guide, and you have a perfect recipe for Free For All Royal Rumble when someone knocks a door in
Comments from author:
*falls over laughing* Tell me about it. The only breaks SG-1 is getting is that while Xander and Jon have met, they haven't truly begun to bond yet as Sentinel and Guide, so while Xander will be pissed and protective, it won't be at the levels it could otherwise be at ... and the fact Xander's still injured, and thus physically incapable of doing much of anything at the moment.

Jim and Blair, however, have no such problems. *evil snicker*. And to be completely honest, I have no idea which of the two's scarier. On one hand, pissed off Sentinel protecting his son, who happens to be an injured Guide. On the other ... pissed off Guide protecting not only his own Sentinel but a second Sentinel who's in trouble.

Place your bets, folks. *laughs*. Jack and Teal'c are going to have their hands full and then some.
Review By [AkashaDrake] • Date [12 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from Oxnate
Even though they changed flights, you still have them landing in Denver. (The minute they landed in Colorado Springs)

And I would have made Jon's animal a fox. Cunning and mischievous. If that doesn't describe O'Neill, I don't know what does. (BTW, it's not too late to go back and change it if you want) ;-)

Other than that. I'm liking where this is going. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Ack! Thanks for catching that. Snuck by me. Grrrr.

While cunning and mischief is definitely a part of Jack's makeup, it's not all of it. His strength, stealth, and ability to lead are also major factors, and the Leopard covers all four of the five qualities, only missing out mischief.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [12 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sentinel, Meet Guide" from AnFan
Hey we've got a Turkey! And not in a bad way *smirk*. More of in a Bowling way. Three strikes you've knocked down all the pins. The story has interesting crossovers that have recently seen some very good works done with them. Ok, thought of some more good, you're heading for a 300 game :) You've got decent enough action, though I don't look for that first in a story. The character interactions have so far been very good. The tension level has been peaking at times nicely and you haven't fallen in to angst and fake looking plot developments. The conflicts that have occurred don't fall into the kind that can be explained away in a five minute talk, yet dragged over months. They actually deal with trust and the conflict that has occurred. I can't imagine that Jack is going to be all happy with anything that happens anytime soon no matter what he is told or who on his team is happy with the explanation or how much authority the "rifraf" have :) Plus you've been giving us updates at a very quick pace! Probably because it's the start of summer, but it is a big plus for a story that has short chapters. At least they are short in comparison to what I like to plow through.

Now, on to some speculation. I was kind of surprised when I realized that Xander wouldn't be the Sentinel, but not in a bad way. I at first thought that Jon would be sent to Sunnydale to investigate Xander's case for the police given all the unexplained and the lack of details from the town. I thought he might be called in as a favor to Xander's father. I did think he would make a very good romance interest for Buffy. Can't wait to see that. Didn't know that a Sentinel needed a Guide. Thought that he could share, so wasn't trying to find one for him. Though I did think that Willow would work. With her pairing with Xander, it might just foil the Red Witch plot. Or put a twist on it.

I'm really looking forward to more. Didn't think you would introduce SG1 so soon, but not unhappy with it. It probably makes a lot of sense for them to face off right away rather than get suspicious and then hunt Jon down, the tension in that case would be off the charts.

Looking forward to more. Thanks
Comments from author:
Glad you like it so far.

The fun part of this is that the action's going to pick up soon ... the chapters thus far have all been about getting the players in the same room, which has finally been accomplished, so the actual plot can start happening.

No, Jack is not going to be a happy man. Especially when he realizes it could very well have been HIM that became a Sentinel. *evil grin*. Sam, Daniel and Blair are going to have a mutual geekfest at some point, though not anytime soon (there is no way in hell Jack is going to tell these yahoos about the Gate. Just ... no way in hell). For now it will largely be a one-way geekfest.

Jon never would have been sent in. A mystery police case would never become military jurisdiction unless military personell is the victim or the accused, and that's not the case here. Jim also is very unhappy with the military (has to do with events in Sentinel canon), and due to his being a Sentinel, VERY leery of getting anywhere near military types for fear they'll figure out about the senses and abduct him for experimentation or forcibly reenlist him or something. Hence, he doesn't really muck with them if he has a choice.

Unfortunately, I don't write romance or pairings. I just ... fail ... at writing it, so I don't go there. On top of that, Jon is going to be, and will remain, VERY resistant to forming a romantic attachment to anyone. He may look sixteen, but he's got the mind of a man in his fifties, and dating someone who's underage is VERY squicky for him. And since his body is underage, any adults trying to get cuddly would be equally as squicky.

Yeah, it does make a lot of sense introducing the two groups now. I *really* don't wanna know what Jack'd try to do to Jim and co if they got Jon to Cascade or the 'dale and Jack had to track them down. Yikes!
Review By [AnFan] • Date [12 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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