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Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from purrfus
Review:
Always happy to see the Keldara especially since that is something that doesn't happen nearly often enough in fan fiction.

Xan's retort is really well done. Great voice and I laughed hard enough to snort soda through my nose.
Comments from author:
Yeah, the Keldara would make a fantastic force multiplier in any story they're thrown into, which is why I'm surprised that we dont' see them showin gup more frequently.

Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [14 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
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"recall that what happened between Mike and his Keldar opponents in the contests being what you could call a "fight", instead they were demonstration of just how hopelessly outclassed the Keldar were against him. He was a SEAL unarmed combat _instructor_ doing a demonstration using a big, strong, fast brawler as a visual teaching aid.

Comments from author:

I really can't argue with that evaluation. It's more akin to the difference between a golden gloves or Olympic level boxer and professional boxer with nearly two decades of experience."

*****

Keep in mind the difference in the hand-to-hand techniques the Keldar used prior to Mike showing up and what Mike knew. Recall that he was an experienced SEAL unarmed combat _instructor_ who had been exposed to the fighting technique of multiple countries commandos and spec-ops troops.

It makes me recall reading in wiki about reportedly happened in the early mixed martial arts contests when _experienced_ boxers or wrestlers faced fighters who knew _both_ grappling and "pounding" fighting, and again when fighters first faced a fighter who knew "ground and pound" fighting. In short, severe ass-kickings occurred until they learned the new tricks.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mixed_martial_arts

ground and pound

"A term used to describe a fighting style or technic. To take one's opponent to the ground, establish a dominant position. Usually a top position(i.e., mount, side mount, half mount, etc. can also be used while in one's "guard"). Then reign down punches, elbows and forearm strikes to the downed fighter. This is used in MMA (Mixed Martial Arts) or any other NHB (no holds barred) fight."

So think of Mike as a combat veteran who is a trained combat mixed martial artist, who is facing some boxing brawlers who had _never_ faced a death fight.
Who will you bet on?
Comments from author:
I've never said that Mike and the others aren't superlative close combat fighters.

All I said was that Adams was expecting someone completely different than who he ended up scuffling with, and that is where he made his first, and last, mistake.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [30 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
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"Fights occurring during the Keldara's annual festivities typically take longer and are more intense on an emotional level than what one would believe is going to be a simple street fight."

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I don't recall that what happened between Mike and his Keldar opponents in the contests being what you could call a "fight", instead they were demonstration of just how hopelessly outclassed the Keldar were against him. He was a SEAL unarmed combat _instructor_ doing a demonstration using a big, strong, fast brawler as a visual teaching aid.
Comments from author:
I really can't argue with that evaluation. It's more akin to the difference between a golden gloves or Olympic level boxer and professional boxer with nearly two decades of experience.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [29 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Note that Adams was apparently using only boxing and brawling techniques. The fight sounded more like something in a L'Amour western novel or a bar brawl in an old detective story than a fight between an enraged SEAL and a Buffy trained demon hunter.

Note Mike's canon concern with the lethality of his (and Adam's) engrained combat training in the Keldara's yearly contest, even tho he would not have been angry. He was afraid that his training would make him severely injure or kill his opponent.

I find it unlikely that a SEAL trained _killer_ would stick to boxing when very angry and _not_ in a sparring match or controlled conflict like the Keldara contest. And would have expected less boxing and more Krav Maga and other "exotic" techniques.
Comments from author:
That's a very valid point, but despite what Mike thought, I don't see Adams as automatically going for lethal attacks at the beginning of a fight. Not unless his opponent pulled a weapon, at which point, they're basically begging for a beat-down. Fights occurring during the Keldara's annual festivities typically take longer and are more intense on an emotional level than what one would believe is going to be a simple street fight.

Adams thought he was fighting a regular guy without much training, and his mistake cost him the fight. Any second fight would be an entirely different matter, but still not weighted entirely in Adam's favor. Remember, Xander has survived a great many scuffles/fights/attacks by creatures intending to *eat* him, so he's not some shrinking violet when it comes to violence.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [29 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from CPTSkip
Review:
Oh joy! I am so loving your story. Making Sam Mike's sister was a burst of genius. The bantering is great and I can't wait for the meeting the Scoobies are going to have with the Keldara. But from Mother Lanka's comments, they already know something about the Slayers and their war against the Forces of Darkness. Please update quickly.
Comments from author:
Mother Lenka may not necessarily know about Slayers per se; she could simply be able to recognize those touched by supernatural forces.

But any sort of alliance between the Keldar and the Council could be a major benefit to both sides.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from yrfgd
Review:
Nice. I've always liked the Kidar series. And one of the Keldara as a slayer? Whoa!
Comments from author:
Yeah, a Keldar Slayer combines two very scary attributes into one potentially *very* nasty package. ;-)

And a Council-sponsored Slayer support team formed of Keldara warriors is another *very* scary idea. ;-)
Review By [yrfgd] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from war
Review:
Thanks for the Ringo fix til the 3rd of his zombie books comes on E arc hopefully very soon.

Business will pick up for the norse gods with Ghost and his crew hunting vamps and demons.

Good story looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
As far as the Scoobies' work is concerned, they're providing more populace for Hela's realm than for Asgard, since they're thinning the herds of vamps and demons - far more suitable as denizens of Hel than of Asgard.

Glad you're enjoying the story. ;-)
Review By [war] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Netchka
Review:
Cool start to the story. Can't wait for the next chapters to come.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed the story. New chapters show up at my muse's whims.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [2 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Wolflady
Review:
Do you think he will learned any better when he wakes up? Hope so. If necessary, Buffy could 'spar' with him for a while after she calms down.
Comments from author:
Even Adams would learn enough to not say something like that in front of the Summers sisters again. ;-)
Review By [Wolflady] • Date [18 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gladius
Review:
Well, that was inevitable!

Thanks, greywizard, well worth the wait! More, please!
Comments from author:
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. ;-)
Review By [Gladius] • Date [16 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from LordCorwin
Review:
Well done, and I look forward to reading more.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm waiting for my muse to dictate exactly what comes next in this one, since I've got a LOT of potential ideas as to how this could evolve. ;-)
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [15 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from war
Review:
Oh yeah thats the old Adams charm we've all come to love.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Yep. As I've mentioned previously, Adams didn't join the SEALS because he has great diplomatic skills. ;-)
Review By [war] • Date [15 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from AnimeRonin
Review:
Xander's the one who never gets to have any fun. He didn't even get to break out his battleaxe this time.
Comments from author:
Actually, for Xander, getting to beat up an ex-SEAL probably would count as fun, considering the type of opponents he usually has to deal with. ;-)
Review By [AnimeRonin] • Date [15 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from eriktheviking
Review:
That wasn't a pissing contest that was damage control.

Great fun update, thanks.
Comments from author:
As far as the Scoobies are concerned, it was a very minor annoyance, and barely that.

Pissing Buffy off would involve MAJOR damage control, of the type requiring the use of extensive medical personnel and lots of construction equipment. ;-)

Glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from LordSia
Review:
... O.O;
The mental picture of the poor sod's fate would not have looked out of place in Commoragh itself.
Comments from author:
Nasty thought, there. ;-)

I'm currently working on the next part of this story and should have it ready soon. ;-)

Thanks for reviewing. ;-)
Review By [LordSia] • Date [3 Jun 12] • Not Rated
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