I'm liking the idea of this fic. Not sure if things are moving a little too quickly, with Xander already being force sensitive and needing to be trained... But I'm interested in where you're taking this.

Please though, just one thing, please don't put author notes smack dab in the middle of the chapter. It's just wrong on so many levels.

EDIT: In response to you asking where you put an author note in the middle of the chapter:

“Quite a story,” Xander said after a few moments of thinking it all over. “And I would say your rebellion worked even if you weren’t there in the end to see it, because I never heard of those worm things before.”

Note: A big thank you again to Inachis for fixing this chapter up.

They spent a few minutes in silence while finishing the rest of the army rations Xander had taken out of his bag. “So where did you hide your ship?” Xander finally asked.


Although when I went back to copy/paste that, I noticed the same author note at the top of the page, so I guess it was just a mistake :P

tx for the review and so far he is only sensitive and not a fully trained jedi :)

Hmm I may be blind here but where the heck did I put AN's in the middle of the chapter? Can't find any.

Edit: Damn no clue how that got there :) Tx for pointing it out and it's gone now.

Awesome, been waiting for an update on this one. Love it so far, cant wait for more.

I would like to mention this just because its kind of important. In canon Revan is male and the Exhile was female. I have no idea why everyone seems to make poor Revan a girl.

because in the game its your decision what Revan is, male or female. And because I like to look at the likeness of a woman more than that of a male for hours of gameplay I choose the female variation. And so my Revan here is female, but didn''t I already explain that in chapter 1?

the same would go if I would write a Mass Effect fic ;) Shepard would be female as well and so I don't really see how this is important.

It's fiction.....

Cool

Good. I think a lot of stuff written about Xander is fanon. Most of Xander's problems with magic in my opinion can be attributed to trying something without training.

Doing magic with out proper training is like giving a seven year old the keys to the family car. Neither will end well.

indeed and where that leads we have seen with willow in the series......

Wow, great chapter. I'll bet that magic and the Force don't mix, which would explain why Xander has problems with magic. As a potential Force user he warps magic/spells so magic always goes "wonky" around him.

Great story, thanks!

It's building nicely and I really won't object to a female Revan. Honest. More please!

and another favorite sees an update.

think you could expand on the physical description on revan a bit?

like how old is she physically, what race if she's near human or human like, etc.

Oh good. I was hoping you would continue this story; looks to off to a great start. I suppose it will be some time before certain US Air Force personnel make an appearance. :-D

Excellent. I love it.

Perfect chapter. Everything is starting to come together.

Very nice update. :)

Interesting, has lots of potential. I like the fact that Xander recognizes the droid from games so he will have some clue about what is going on.

I am looking forward to new chapters.

update soon

Happy to see a new chapter, was afraid this story had been abandoned.

Looking forward to more.

Nice update keep up the good work thanks and bye.