Another excellent chapter. You have to wonder just whose pay Dumbledore is in. He knows the Dark Lord has 2 spies in his midst and yet seems to have no problem with them passing information. I always wonder how big his ego was, now it seems to be apparent that it is phenomenally huge.
Review By [mendenbar] • Date [28 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
I'm enjoying this, but it really seems to me that Harry has virtually 0 in the way of stamina. He's done what, flown around, done 2 sorcerer spells and cast a patronus and that's exhausted him twice. He's coming off as a wimp.
Comments from author:
He's also shielded them and performed several wandless spells as well. I'm trying to make Harry a guy willing to do the job without making him a god. He's still young s far as magic user goes and is not in Strange's league just yet. Heck if i remember correctl with all the dimensional travels Strange has over 10,000 years experince in magical combat. I may have scaled his power back a little to much though. I'll consider what you've said.
Review By [BadVoodoo] • Date [28 Sep 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
While I like most of the story, I wouldn't had claimed ownership of that article even if it was yours. It doesn't match the style of anything we've ever seen of the Prophet ever. It sounds... well, like a sixteen-year-old girl writing for her school paper.
EDIT: Style? Vocabulary? Seriously, I was giving your story a high A to A+ up until that. That alone drops it to a B max. It makes me cringe. Hard.
Comments from author:
And this is different from how JKR writes them how?
Review By [JoeHundredaire] • Date [28 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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