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Review of chapter "Inner Conflicts" from burmafrdnow
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One of the dumbest parts of Stargate was the whole Kinsey/NID story line. In anything like the Real World Kinsey would not have near that much political clout. One senator just does not. As regards the NID, that was so funny at times if not for how stupid it was. Any agency acting like that would make so many enemies so fast that in a very short time it would be toast. Not to mention those outside of the country. The idea that a president could not demand a shut down and full investigation of any part of the federal government is also idiotic.
Comments from author:
I agree but it isn't so far fetched because the President doesn't have the full powers. However you are right i think it would have shut down sooner in the real world.

Thanks for reading!!
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Inner Conflicts" from immortalbliss
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Ooohh.. Can't wait to hear what Hayes has in store for Buffy and how Buffy would react. Also, how would the Scoobies/Slayers play a part in this, if any.
Comments from author:
chapter 4 ;p

And the slayers will definitivement be there!!

thanks for reading!!
Review By [immortalbliss] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Inner Conflicts" from AllenPitt
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Glad to see Willow make the effort. There's a lot of patching up of relationships needed. And how sad is it that she's broke? Saved the world on multiple occasions, and renting a car to meet the president will be the last of her money.
It's also weird to think the Initiative in some form has been around since at least 1943 (Angel getting recruited at that time in "Why We Fight" episode).
She definitely should get a budget from the gov. Very interesting that Willow couldn't sense her, but could sense Faith.
The SGC will be very skeptical of her when she shows up -she doesn't look at all impressive, never finished college, all that.
Hm. Full briefing. Maybe outside the scope of the story but the Pres. would also likely be informed of Angel's group in LA...
Comments from author:
Yes I was thinking about the Initiative being so old since I re-watched the Angel episode, but it was actually a branch of the gov about the supernatural so I was thinking of linking the NID with it for now and the initiative being some sort of experimental rogue branch. I read this a few times and liked it. Because the NID is as secret as the SGC and even the President cannot shut it down at first, so maybe it is because it was instated for more the fifty years. But i am not sure yet how I am gonna put it.

The SGC will be really skeptical yes most likely, but I think she knows what she is talking about, she is really intelligent and can help bring down the NID. What will the president know will depend on what Riley has told him and what Buffy will say. I doubt that he will know of the LA group because Riley briefed him about Buffy and her group only. Besides I think the acquisition of Wolfram and Hart by Angel and his attempt at infiltrating the circle of black thorns will be likely to happen if the President know that Angel is a fighter of the light. The law firm has surely the mean to know these sort of thing even if it is a need to know thing lol.

Thanks for reading!!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Inner Conflicts" from serenityselena
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oh my.... surprising developments....
can`t wait for the next chapter... their father`s reaction will surely be interesting to read about ^_^
Comments from author:
Yes yes I look forward to write about how Buffy and Dawn will track down the sperm donor lol! I am gonna have fun with this ;p. It is going to be a longer chapter.

Thanks for reading!!!
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from burmafrdnow
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good so far. If you can chase down a beta do so; the mistakes in spelling are annoying.
Comments from author:
I am in the process of finding one lol.

I corrected as much as I could for now but i'll reread it again.

Thanks for reading!!
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Inner Conflicts" from Gideon
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Glad to see Willow has also expressed her regret for how things went back in Sunnydale. It looks like it is the start of healing their relationship. I hope Xander can do the same before Buffy leaves for New York, otherwise it might not be good for the mini slayers with him in a bad mood. Faith and Andrew would find it hard to take up the slack in training the minis by themselves!
I have seen many stories that assume Buffy has some kind of authority over all law enforcement branches but I don't think I have ever read a story where she actually discusses this with the President. I look forward to reading your take on this.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I actually look forward to writing the discussion with the president. And there will be Giles and Riley with her. I thought since SGC has a close relationship with the president, why not the supernatural world. He knows every details of their offworld reports and all... I am not saying it is going to be same, no.

We'll see!

Thanks for reading!!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
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Cool start. It is not surprising that Buffy is a bit sad and needing a break at this time. She has just lost a bunch of mini slayers and also the only person who stood by her over the past few days. I'm glad she has reached out to Dawn though, family is important. We didn't hear from Willow in this chapter, I wonder what she thinks of the situation after having the Scythe's magic flow through her?
And poor Riley, arriving too late again :)
Comments from author:
Lol chapter 2! And we'll see the changes in Buffy and Willow in chapter 4 mostly. I think that those changes will go unnoticed while they confront each other. They are too preoccupied.

That's how I see it. And I don't want to rush into giving them a lot of powers at once. It should be a slow process.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [2 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from thegirlinquestion
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Your story definitely has potential. Not too many stories with Buffy wanting to take off immediately after the collapse of Sunnydale, so I can see some interesting conversations happening. However, it does need a bit of fleshing out character wise. Also, over use of exclamation points! One is fine, multiple makes it hard to take the story seriously. Interesting start so far, would like to see where you take this.
Comments from author:
Yep you are right! I am gonna reread the whole thing before posting chapter 3! And It'll help that I am gonna have a Beta reader soon (maybe).

Thanks for reading!!
Review By [thegirlinquestion] • Date [1 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AllenPitt
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Something needed to be said, they all pretended the big breakup never happened once she came back with the Scythe. But it did. They all need some time off, her particularly. So maybe Riley is going to try to bring her into the SGC? Or maybe the Asgard know about slayers?
Comments from author:
I think that they pretended there were no problems because of the urgency of the situation but Buffy has not yet said every thing she has to say. It is still to come. And as for SGC, yes Riley is going to inform her of SGC and the NID...

You'll have to see :)

Thanks for reading!!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [1 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from serenityselena
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poor Buffy... she really needs a break... in fact, they all do...
very nice speech... well said.... though it seems it cannot penetrate Xander`s thick skull...
Riley?... what`s he doing here? how did he find out?.... though they arrived kind of late...
hope to read more soon ^_^
Comments from author:
You'll see in chapter 2 and 3!! ;p

Thanks for reading!
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [1 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from aidensmom
Review:
It'd be nice if Buffy really laid into them. But its your story and it was good so far.
Comments from author:
Yep Buffy is going to explode soon if she does not say what is on her mind!! Its in next chapter mostly! Thank you for reading!!
Review By [aidensmom] • Date [1 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)mmooch
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Even though I'm not a fan of Riley's, having him there helps ease into the Stargate part a bit easier. Soooo...were you not sure of how to write Willow's response or was she just smart enough to keep her mouth shut after Giles gave his blessing?
Comments from author:
I am not a fan of Riley either but I think he plays an important part in what happens next with SG1. Ans Yes, Willow was interrupted by Giles.

The reaction of the rest of the Scooby's is more detailed in chapter 2 and 3!

Hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Thanks for reading!

PS: I love your stories!
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [1 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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