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Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from Addlcove
Review:
Having just re-read this in it's entirety I am desperately hoping for new chapters soon ;)
Comments from author:
I'm glad you love it so much. I love hearing about when people reread it. New reviews always tug at my muse's attention.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [1 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from DieselDriver
Review:
Definitely going to track this one. Darn near as good as something by Diane Castle. That's very high praise by the way.
Comments from author:
Oh, I know. I love Diane's works too. That's very high praise. Thank you indeed. And for all your reviews. (Even the one's where you disagreed with me - I love a good debate)

EDIT: Also, thank you for the Rec.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [5 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 30" from DieselDriver
Review:
OK, if they don't have mamas (do they? and what about papas?), how do they propagate? Are they like the NPC's in Everquest and just pop up every so often from nothing?
Comments from author:
As I understand, most demons have parents of some type or another. Even if they hatch from eggs.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [5 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from DieselDriver
Review:
OMG!!! ROFL. Maybe now Faith can show up and take care of Angelus and Buffy can find a real boyfriend. Definitely not Riley though. Can't wait to see what happens with the doofus who was drugging Joyce.
Comments from author:
Ah, yes. The chipped Angelus is one of the ideas I'm prouder of. Thank you.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [5 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 26" from DieselDriver
Review:
So now that Kendra was dead when will Faith show up? Woo Hoo, Changes are coming quick and cool!

I still disagree for the reasons stated about the council. I see a lot of them being reminiscent of someone like George Soros but with group think. Very intent on power and making of money, in the sense that money is power. Hiding it would be de rigueur for them, intent on operating behind the scenes.
Comments from author:
I'm an accountant. And no organization can survive for long without income being greater than or equal to expenses. I see the expenses of the council. I don't see the income. And once the Potentials are called, many fics (and possibly the S8 comics) have the new slayers being paid. In canon, I understand there are about 2,000 new Slayers around the world. Even if their pay is only $20,000 per year, each; that's still $40million dollars PER YEAR. Just for Slayers. That doesn't include watchers, food, shelter, clothing, travel, taxes, or weapons. From an organization that's used to paying for the care and upkeep of... how many people? Even 100 Potentials is probably more than they ever cared for at once. The number is probably closer to 20. And they weren't paid of course.

And this was a stable organization too. Not a growing business where income had to exceed expenses. They had reserves, to be sure. And those reserves were likely in the millions. But in all likelihood, their income and expenses didn't change much from year to year and probably balanced out fairly nicely. I.E. Not a lot of money to spare for things that weren't in the budget.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [5 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 23" from DieselDriver
Review:
I disagree with your premise that the council would be "just getting by" as far as money goes. These guys may be hidebound and secretive but the thing is, that would lead to behind the scenes money making schemes and semi-illegal methods and accumulation and chances are that they would be miserly as well, hiding their true resources from mere "watchers" in the field, giving them only a barebones operating allowance. So while the premise is basically wrong (IMHO), they would have that appearance anyway. Which would allow the other stories to be correct and this one to be correct also. Giles et al, only finding out about the hidden assets after the council getting blown up.

So we are both right... Win Win if I ever saw one.
Comments from author:
Well, at least you didn't say 'They're old, of course they're rich'.

The watchers exist for the sole purpose of supporting ONE warrior (at a time) against the forces of darkness. They never needed to be super-rich in order to do that. And it's easy to say that they have 'behind the scenes money making schemes and semi-illegal methods' but those types of activities carry a great deal of risk to go along with their higher rewards. The types of organizations that last a long time avoid risk, since eventually your luck will run out.

Actually, it was the opposite. The council was trying to seem richer and more powerful than they actually were.

:-) This is one topic I just never get tired of debating. Mostly because eventually people go back and watch the scenes with the council and go, 'Huh. I remember them seeming more powerful.'
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [5 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 19" from DieselDriver
Review:
Just so you know, the only thing I know about Maggie Walsh is what I have read here and on other fan fiction sites. This is the best one that I know of. I've watched the Movie BtVS a couple of times and some of the episodes, saw her die the first time, saw her kill Angel. But I've missed a LOT of them so this is all good. Like before, good story telling and for me, the first insight into what made Maggie tick. Great idea.
Comments from author:
If you read much Buffy fiction with Maggie, she's usually portrayed as evil incarnate with a side-order of crazy. But rewatching the season in question showed me that just wasn't the case. There were facets of her character that most authors just weren't seeing/understanding.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18" from DieselDriver
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From dictionary dot com:

pau·ci·ty
[paw-si-tee] Show IPA
noun
1.
smallness of quantity; scarcity; scantiness: a country with a paucity of resources.
2.
smallness or insufficiency of number; fewness.

Always glad to help. I don't use it very often myself. It just popped into my head as a perfect fit. I like words. Semantics can be fun too since "Semantics" are "Antics with words".
Comments from author:
I figured it was something like that even before I Googled it. Though I would have gone with 'lack'. As in "the complete absence of any spelling errors". ;-)

or not.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "There is no Ch 13" from DieselDriver
Review:
Ok, I don't normally like to review before I've finished but darn this is good so far. I finally figured out that I might as well tell people that it's really hard to stop and take the time on this one since I want to keep reading. I AM really impressed with the paucity of simple word or spelling errors that I see in many other stories. Not only an interesting story but good proof reading as well. Good Job to all. Now can I get back to reading?
Comments from author:
Ooo! I learned a new word! :-) And thank you. It wasn't nearly as good when it was first posted but with the kind help of the reviewers here on TTH, it became a much better story and I became a much better writer.

Please do, please do. And thank you for your review.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Just reread this and it is even better than I remembered. Please continue it if you can!

Tom.
Comments from author:
I've never forgotten this one. Pushed my muse too hard to get it to this point so she's a bit gun-shy still. Trying to let her come back to it in her own time. In the mean time, she's putting out lots of other ideas.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [18 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from MarcusTrax
Review:
Great story. Hope your muse will help you write more chapters.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Me too.
Review By [MarcusTrax] • Date [22 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 26" from wiltryit
Review:
Since for some reason can't reply to your comment on my review, will put it here...

If I had noticed it then would have commented. Somehow I didn't. As far as stopping using the the disintegration feature eventually, I wouldn't know about that, because it continued working until I stopped watching the show when Jack left it. And it was definitely working during the episodes you are mentioning in your story. You changing the way the zat works, still stinks of "but it CAN'T work that way". Suck it up, it does.

And on that note, you could have done everything you wanted to do here in chapter 26, with two shots with the zat, then have to MacGyver a shock to get her heart working. Which would have been another crossover for your story ;)
Comments from author:
I could say the same thing to you. Suck it up, it doesn't work like that.

It worked like that in the show because they said it did. It doesn't work like that in my world because I say it doesn't. There are physics reasons but the gist of it is that I didn't like it.
Review By [wiltryit] • Date [21 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 25" from wiltryit
Review:
Okay, haven't read the chapter yet, but just your intro "Just a reminder: in my world, the laws of conservation of energy apply here. So the Zats work like Tasers on steroids. One shot disables, two may kill, three or more will almost certainly kill, but additional shocks after death can sometimes revive dead people (like shock paddles). Three never, ever disintegrates." sounds too much like how Carter is written when it comes to magic and is annoying a nails on a chalkboard. I don't care if you are an engineer with a physics degree or whatever, get over it, third shot disintegrates. And don't give me that old 'writer's prerogative' stuff either, if you are going to change a basic fundamental principle like that you need to state in the first chapter, not 'oh another thing that works different in my universe'.
Comments from author:
I first mentioned it back in Chapter 5. Twenty chapters before this. So this isn't sudden at all.

As far as the disintegrations go: They stopped using the disintegration feature eventually anyway. I think fans wrote in saying that it didn't make any sense.

It was even alluded to in the WHX episode:: MARTIN: So, three shots disintegrates them! DIRECTOR: OK, you know what? I'm going to pretend you didn't say that, because that is quite possibly the stupidest thing I've ever heard you say.
Review By [wiltryit] • Date [21 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from jgoodman
Review:
Love this story and can't wait to read more, please update
Comments from author:
My muse is working on other things at the moment. But please let me know if you like the rest of my stories as well.
Review By [jgoodman] • Date [31 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from FallenGods
Review:
There were a lot of good bits and some that I really didn't like. Chipped Angelus was amusing and not something I've seen before, as was respect for Dalton and compassion for Ford. Stakes to the head came out of nowhere and changing ring transporters to work like Star Trek ones with coordinates was lazy writing. As for Zats I can understand changing what even the show writers wished they could, but I'm not sure it's a science issue so much as a plot convenience as transporters and stargates are equally unlikely. You were very good at pointing out references and nods to cannon so it may have been an oversight on your part that the Tok'ra don't use subspace communicators at all. I'm not sure that makes sense for a galactic espionage/sabotage network but that is what they said.
Well I hope you found something helpful in this.
FG

EDIT> This is in response to your comment on this review, I can agree with 3 out of 4 points no problem, Vampires have so many differing accounts from old folklore to Lestat to Twilight, you can pretty much do anything with them, plus stakes to the brain is new and interesting. Tok'ra subspace tech again makes sense and I'd forgotten they had it in later episodes despite them saying that having it proved Cordesh was a traitor in "The Tok'ra, Part 2". However Ring Transporters working like asgard transporters is a Bugbear of mine sorry if this seems like a rabid geek rant but they are a more limited and interesting version of the transporter tech because they need a second platform. In the example you cite they use an internal set and then emerge from another set mounted outside the ship. More info can be found here Http://stargate.wikia.com/wiki/Transportation_rings if you were interested. Finally thank you for your praise of my challenge it's just something i'd like to see more of. Hopefully one day you'll have all the time you'd want to write.
Comments from author:
Let me address some of these issues one at a time.

Stakes to the head - This is my own idea. Short explanation: Stakes to the heart work and beheadings work. Why do they both work? There's some sort of magic between the head and the heart that animates vampires. And if wood to the heart stops the magic, I would logically assume that wood to the brain would do so too.

Ring transporters - Ring transporters do not have to have a landing platform to work. SG-1 landed on an asteroid using a ring transporter. The coordinates are just a way of explaining how they know where to send you without a ring platform.

Zats - lazy writing from SG-1. Just always bugged me.

Tok'ra subspace communicators - They had tracking devices that communicated back to the Tok'ra base via a subspace network and they had communication devices. It's not canon, but it's a reasonable extension of canon.


And for you, The A Good Goa'uld Challenge. - I love the idea and I would love to write this if only I had time.



EDIT: Yes, the rings from the bottom of the ship are how I intended them to work in and around Sunnydale. I must not have made that clear enough. When the muse comes back to this one, I'll have to make that clearer.
Review By [FallenGods] • Date [13 Apr 13] • Not Rated
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