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Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from pkoceres
Review:
This is great, I'm really enjoying it!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [pkoceres] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from borgrabbit
Review:
An acknowledging haiku:

Fantastic story
Just now reaching chapter five
Story is alive
Comments from author:
LOL
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from xandersgirl
Review:
Yet again another great chapter!

XG
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review. Also a Big Thank You for your Recommendation. That means a lot to me.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from xandersgirl
Review:
Oh this story is great!

But just one thing, I was a little confused by the sudden time skip, I'd have loved to have seen the first meeting of Xander and SG1 and 2. Could that have been why you had so few reviews?

Anyway can't wait for more.

XG
Comments from author:
I struggled with that. So, I just skipped it and showed the result. Don't worry. They'll meet again.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Interesting. Xander is still Xander and yet not. The memories are overpowering but not completely defining. Well written as well. Thank you for writing.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from dabraning
Review:
It felt like something was missing between the chapters. Still I like the story and look forward to more.
Comments from author:
Could you be more specific?
Review By [dabraning] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from (Recent Donor)pinkhairedharry
Review:
awesome
i can totally see motel clerks in sunnydale reacting like that

great updates
Comments from author:
The smart ones anyway.
Review By [(Recent Donor)pinkhairedharry] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from oldgirllost
Review:
I don't know if I've reviewed the rest of the story at all, but I've been very busy with classes, but I can certainly take a few minutes to write that this is shaping up to be one of the better written stories about a BTVS character and a Tokra.
You're doing good things with Angel/Xander sparring, and Xander keeping all the nitty gritty from the rest of the gang, and your spelling and grammar are excellent (I know that seems petty-- but sometimes I get so irritated with spelling and grammar that I stop reading so you're definitely not in danger of that!) I like how the relationship with Jolinar is shapping up and I like seeing Teal'c getting out of Stargate Base as well, (Will there be time for him to see the Grand Canyon and Disneyland on the way back? -- The rental car thing was nice of Hammond).

Just generally good. (Now back to the regularly scheduled homework!)
Comments from author:
Wonderful review. I love getting this kind of feedback.

He's trying. It's not going to work now. SG-1 throws the proverbial monkey wrench into his first plans.

On spelling: I feel the same way. You can only read how "Their going to they're doohicky" so many times before you get a headache and give up reading. Please point out any mistakes you do find though. I'm still only human.

I hadn't thought of Disney Land, but certainly the Grand Canyon is on the menu.

Thank you for your review.
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Kalliza
Review:
I think I misses where Jolinar talked to SG1. But I'm looking forward to seeing Jolinar's personality fleshed out. Especially considering its history in "hell".
Comments from author:
Yeah, I skipped the actual conversation. We get to see the results more than the conversation this time.
Review By [Kalliza] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from (Recent Donor)zima
Review:
Liked the Angel / Xander fight club thing and I am guessing that the snake is helping him heal faster.
Fun chapter but I am looking forward to the meet and great with Xander and Sg1
Comments from author:
Ok, I re-ordered the chapter to make it more clear that Xander and SG-1 just met. Sorry about the confusion.
Review By [(Recent Donor)zima] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from PhilH
Review:
This was good for the most part, but I'm a bit confused. Did Xander meet with them and then get away from them right away? Was he the boy who called them Sir? If the scene of them meeting was in there I missed it.

Phil
Comments from author:
Ok, I re-ordered the chapter to make it more clear that Xander and SG-1 just met. Sorry about the confusion.
Review By [PhilH] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from dabraning
Review:
I like the set up for the meat of the story, however when does the To'Kra start talking to Xander????? Looking forward to more chapters.
Comments from author:
Soon.
Review By [dabraning] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from burn
Review:
Keep it coming! I will admit that I wish you didn't mesh the 'verses but it's no biggie. Thanks.

Response: Duh, it's a fricken' crossover, Sherlock. I meant that you had BTVS and Stargate occupy the same planet. You could have used an alternate universe or had Xander stuck as the lone Tok'ra in the BVTS verse.
Comments from author:
Well, it is crossover fiction. If you're looking for stories that don't cross universes, I guess I would look on another site.

www.fanfiction.net has a large selection of non-crossover stories.

Hope you keep reading though.

Response to the Response: Ahh. That was mostly dictated by the Challenge. AU might have been difficult but possible, but lone Tok'ra would have violated the rules.
Review By [burn] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from VillageOrchid
Review:
That was fun and exciting with just enough of a cliffhanger to want more, but not so much that I'm going "Aaarg!" before talk like a pirate day.
Comments from author:
Stay tuned for our next episode. Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Irda
Review:
Great story so far, very promising. I love Teal'c's observations, and I am really looking forward to Xander's reactions to Sam's more 'personal' memories, let alone Sam's response when she finds out.
Comments from author:
I think Sam's response to knowing that some one else had those memories, let alone a 17 year old boy... priceless.
Review By [Irda] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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