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Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from DarthPayne
Review:
Well now, ain't this a pickle. :)

Things will be getting interesting in SunnyD i think. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Malu
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Comments from author:
Cool. An invisible review.
Review By [Malu] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Malu
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I'm confused. Is Jolinar physically "there", inside Xander's head? Or is she a very strong Memory-imprint, like the Hyena and Soldier in some (fanfic)stories? And as Jolinar can't (easily) accept magick, how does she explain reforming (one way or the other...)?
Comments from author:
As far as I understand, a small part of the body can regenerate the rest. Genetic memory keeps their thoughts in storage until they are regenerated. Jolinar has actually regenerated. Mostly.
Review By [Malu] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Lilkitsu
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Like the story so far. The chapters are short, but flow nicely. I like how Jolinar can't accept magic as it is, and how the SGC sent a team out so quickly. I am looking forward to what happens when sg1 figures things out, or if they discover vampires, etc. So many places you could take this, I like it.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [Lilkitsu] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Vianca
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So Jol is back.

Now to inform Sam to tell her Boss to get those teams back, while pointing to the towns dead-rates.
If added a list of working weapons and defences plus some Hollywood ref. material names.....

I can tell that it's Xander by locking on the way he checked it was real, most logical way would be to test the tech (or check the earth-quick{?} rate near a certain mountain).
Another would be to visit aria-51 while using magic or checking in with Giles about a certain time periode for both books and artifacts.

So, when is Xander going to try and built a railgun-rifle that fires stakes inlayed with silver and a magnetic metal and either watered in holy-water or having a small fragile tank of it at the tip?
Comments from author:
Wow, your second sentence is almost dead on. Keep reading to see how it turns out.

No plans for a railgun-rifle. Remember this is a Tok'ra. Their tech is Goa'uld in origin. Goa'uld tech would be more likely then.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from ladiciusevol
Review:
Thank you for sharing your story, and updating so quickly.
Comments from author:
People kept bugging me to update. I was happy to oblige.
Review By [ladiciusevol] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from pkoceres
Review:
This is great, I'm really enjoying it!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [pkoceres] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from borgrabbit
Review:
An acknowledging haiku:

Fantastic story
Just now reaching chapter five
Story is alive
Comments from author:
LOL
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from xandersgirl
Review:
Yet again another great chapter!

XG
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review. Also a Big Thank You for your Recommendation. That means a lot to me.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from xandersgirl
Review:
Oh this story is great!

But just one thing, I was a little confused by the sudden time skip, I'd have loved to have seen the first meeting of Xander and SG1 and 2. Could that have been why you had so few reviews?

Anyway can't wait for more.

XG
Comments from author:
I struggled with that. So, I just skipped it and showed the result. Don't worry. They'll meet again.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Interesting. Xander is still Xander and yet not. The memories are overpowering but not completely defining. Well written as well. Thank you for writing.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from LostDragon
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It felt like something was missing between the chapters. Still I like the story and look forward to more.
Comments from author:
Could you be more specific?
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from (Recent Donor)pinkhairedharry
Review:
awesome
i can totally see motel clerks in sunnydale reacting like that

great updates
Comments from author:
The smart ones anyway.
Review By [(Recent Donor)pinkhairedharry] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from oldgirllost
Review:
I don't know if I've reviewed the rest of the story at all, but I've been very busy with classes, but I can certainly take a few minutes to write that this is shaping up to be one of the better written stories about a BTVS character and a Tokra.
You're doing good things with Angel/Xander sparring, and Xander keeping all the nitty gritty from the rest of the gang, and your spelling and grammar are excellent (I know that seems petty-- but sometimes I get so irritated with spelling and grammar that I stop reading so you're definitely not in danger of that!) I like how the relationship with Jolinar is shapping up and I like seeing Teal'c getting out of Stargate Base as well, (Will there be time for him to see the Grand Canyon and Disneyland on the way back? -- The rental car thing was nice of Hammond).

Just generally good. (Now back to the regularly scheduled homework!)
Comments from author:
Wonderful review. I love getting this kind of feedback.

He's trying. It's not going to work now. SG-1 throws the proverbial monkey wrench into his first plans.

On spelling: I feel the same way. You can only read how "Their going to they're doohicky" so many times before you get a headache and give up reading. Please point out any mistakes you do find though. I'm still only human.

I hadn't thought of Disney Land, but certainly the Grand Canyon is on the menu.

Thank you for your review.
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Kalliza
Review:
I think I misses where Jolinar talked to SG1. But I'm looking forward to seeing Jolinar's personality fleshed out. Especially considering its history in "hell".
Comments from author:
Yeah, I skipped the actual conversation. We get to see the results more than the conversation this time.
Review By [Kalliza] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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