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Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from LadyFoxFire
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I love the idea of using the mirrors in the lobby! My Muse might need to borrow if she even writes a scene like that. Hmmmm won't the clerk have notice they had a reflection?
Comments from author:
There were a lot of people there. It would have been easy to miss one. And he wouldn't have been completely at ease until he saw them in Sunlight.
Review By [LadyFoxFire] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from VillageOrchid
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Thanks for a new chapter so soon. So are you basing the physiology of the water-dragony-snaky thing on a worm... a small part of its body can still hold its thoughts and regenerate or when they x-ray Xander will they find only the metal alloy remains and it is actually "magic" that is holding Jolinar's identity together, making it think it still has a form like a phantom limb? I don't expect you to answer that in the review, but as presented I am still a little confused.
Comments from author:
As far as I understand, a small part of the body can regenerate the rest. Genetic memory keeps their thoughts in storage until they are regenerated. Jolinar has actually regenerated. Mostly.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from DarthPayne
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Well now, ain't this a pickle. :)

Things will be getting interesting in SunnyD i think. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Malu
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Comments from author:
Cool. An invisible review.
Review By [Malu] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Malu
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I'm confused. Is Jolinar physically "there", inside Xander's head? Or is she a very strong Memory-imprint, like the Hyena and Soldier in some (fanfic)stories? And as Jolinar can't (easily) accept magick, how does she explain reforming (one way or the other...)?
Comments from author:
As far as I understand, a small part of the body can regenerate the rest. Genetic memory keeps their thoughts in storage until they are regenerated. Jolinar has actually regenerated. Mostly.
Review By [Malu] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Lilkitsu
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Like the story so far. The chapters are short, but flow nicely. I like how Jolinar can't accept magic as it is, and how the SGC sent a team out so quickly. I am looking forward to what happens when sg1 figures things out, or if they discover vampires, etc. So many places you could take this, I like it.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [Lilkitsu] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Vianca
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So Jol is back.

Now to inform Sam to tell her Boss to get those teams back, while pointing to the towns dead-rates.
If added a list of working weapons and defences plus some Hollywood ref. material names.....

I can tell that it's Xander by locking on the way he checked it was real, most logical way would be to test the tech (or check the earth-quick{?} rate near a certain mountain).
Another would be to visit aria-51 while using magic or checking in with Giles about a certain time periode for both books and artifacts.

So, when is Xander going to try and built a railgun-rifle that fires stakes inlayed with silver and a magnetic metal and either watered in holy-water or having a small fragile tank of it at the tip?
Comments from author:
Wow, your second sentence is almost dead on. Keep reading to see how it turns out.

No plans for a railgun-rifle. Remember this is a Tok'ra. Their tech is Goa'uld in origin. Goa'uld tech would be more likely then.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from ladiciusevol
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Thank you for sharing your story, and updating so quickly.
Comments from author:
People kept bugging me to update. I was happy to oblige.
Review By [ladiciusevol] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from pkoceres
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This is great, I'm really enjoying it!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [pkoceres] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from borgrabbit
Review:
An acknowledging haiku:

Fantastic story
Just now reaching chapter five
Story is alive
Comments from author:
LOL
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from xandersgirl
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Yet again another great chapter!

XG
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review. Also a Big Thank You for your Recommendation. That means a lot to me.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from xandersgirl
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Oh this story is great!

But just one thing, I was a little confused by the sudden time skip, I'd have loved to have seen the first meeting of Xander and SG1 and 2. Could that have been why you had so few reviews?

Anyway can't wait for more.

XG
Comments from author:
I struggled with that. So, I just skipped it and showed the result. Don't worry. They'll meet again.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from (Current Donor)vidicon
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Interesting. Xander is still Xander and yet not. The memories are overpowering but not completely defining. Well written as well. Thank you for writing.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from LostDragon
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It felt like something was missing between the chapters. Still I like the story and look forward to more.
Comments from author:
Could you be more specific?
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from (Past Donor)pinkhairedharry
Review:
awesome
i can totally see motel clerks in sunnydale reacting like that

great updates
Comments from author:
The smart ones anyway.
Review By [(Past Donor)pinkhairedharry] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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