On my last flight I remember I got 8 peanuts. And some peanut dust. The airline also damaged my luggage and then refused to replace either bag. I used to love flying, even on C-130s. Not any more. I do continue to enjoy your story.
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I remember on my first flight, I got 9 peanuts. I started a journal and wrote down the number of peanuts on each flight. I lost it a while ago, but I believe it ran from a low of 6 to a high of 13.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
I enjoyed the chapter. To compare you to another excellent writer on this site, I would compare you to "Methos."
I liked the idea that Xander was really just trying to go as a generic team-member, or what if he were the team-member - but Chaos had a hand i the results.
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I figure he was probably thinking he was the Colonel but the spell decided otherwise.
Thank you for the comparison. Methos is quite an excellent writer. I hope to live up to your expectations.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Great story, but I would like to see more about insight into the female mind by Xander... Even if Sam is not that big on being feminine, she is still female, so is Jolinar, doesn't?
Comments from author:
That's coming later. Right now, Xander and his male brain are in almost total control. He's focused on other things right now and trying very, very hard not to think of what it was like for Sam or Jolinar to have sex. And that might not be the 'insight' you were looking for, but remember than Xander is a 17 year old boy right now.
Good peg on the time/date stamp with peanuts served on the flight; most people apply the current status quo in their fics and miss the little details. Also, you're doing well in what I feel is the most prevalent trap of crossover writing: favoring one source material over another.
Three brains, no waiting - plus a potential for hyena influence! I don't think I've seen a writer take that on before (except a Ranma 1/2 fic ages ago...). I'm looking forward to your continuation of this fic very much. Thanks for posting!
SD
Comments from author:
I am trying very hard to balance them right now. Thank you for noticing. Though I'm afraid that Xander and/or Jolinar will have to make a choice soon.
Review By [Oakheart] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
That would just in case Jack has to kill someone and have plausible deniability for where he buries the bodies in the desert. Good stuff. Thanks for continuing so soon.
The only "fudge" on the timeline would be if it is second season SG1 it would have been too early to have rescued the aliens who wrote the show... and have it on the air. However, since this is a crossover, you can have another reason why the show was launched and just have those aliens come over for creative reasons later on when they are rescued.
EDIT: Oh, you mean Jack and Teal'c are driving back together. I thought you meant just Jack. 'Cause you know he has done the black ops.
EDIT TOO: Yeah, because we are all wondering what the production company "double secret" means, it is either a mind f*ck, or what we're seeing is our world's version of Worm-hole extreme!
Comments from author:
Umm... no. A little violent there aren't we? The General wants Jack to show Teal'c around the planet a bit after the mission is done. Remember, he hasn't been off the base yet at this point. Apparently I didn't write that very well. I'll see if I can clean that up.
Yeah, in my reality, the Airforce actually wrote and produced the show for "Plausible Deniability" The rescued aliens came later.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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